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sandipsinh   
Feb 8, 2014
Writing Feedback / Agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face Communication is better? [4]

Today world is whirling with the fast and easy modes of communication available and why not? Currently every sector of the world is depended on communication from families to news channel.

Communication has made the connection easy for the people of the world, also it spreads awareness and keeps populace aware of happening around them. Although various mode of communication is used by people as per their convenient but face to face method of conversation is much effective and efficient.

Old fashion way of communication was very time -consuming, imagine - how would business operate if they have to wait for several days to exchange messages for their deals? Everything would be slow, resulting into low progress. But with Invention of Graham bell, offered telephone to the world that facilitate people to connect with each other in fraction of seconds. Similarly many other methods of communication are used by people of 20th century such as web and internet. But face to face conversation has shoved past all other modes of communication with its benefits of active and expressive conversation such as when people are talking face to face - they can express their view with their body gesture and facial expression that make even most worst matter easy to resolve for example - my mother used to stroke her hand on my head while suggesting me to not waste my time watching T.v and use that time resourcefully rather than scolding on me.

Cell phone and internet conversation are also useful in a scenario when we do not want to face somebody. This method help to keep two people connected despite holding grudges against each other. On the flip side face to face conversation sometimes spoil the skirmish more as it is easy to attack a person ,you are furious on. Certain profession and need of business sternly relies on face to face conversation such psychologist need to attend his patient to counsel him and provide him desired services, same demand is mandate by the corporates to present their presentation to their client as face to face conversation make their lengthy explanation easy as well more appealing, with that it also helps them to resolve queries generated by their traders. In today's technology world also many industry and professions depend on face to face conversation.

People choose every method of communication in their daily life to make their work and life relaxed. It is difficult to compare modes of communication although traditional way of conversation -face to face conversation, is preferred by people, families and business to convey most basic as well critical messages.
sandipsinh   
Feb 12, 2014
Writing Feedback / "to teach or understand the concept of the topic" - purpose of teaching and learning is same [7]

It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts

In today's technological world myriad options are available of gaining information such as internet and iBook's. Also many schools and universities prefer to use modern devices for teaching these data but purpose of teaching and learning is same -"to teach or understand the concept of the topic". As such it is important for students to understand the subject well rather than merely getting acquainted with topic. My explanation for the same is based on personal and education benefits.

From educational viewpoint, fact cannot be denied that practical learning method has out - maneuver theoretical learning technique, similar concept is emphasized by many researcher accumulating the fact that understanding the concept of the subject helps people to store information in their memory for long. On the other hand fact can be studied but without better recognition of that fact, one cannot remember it prolong. For example, I mugged up topic, gravity of force in my 10th grade to score good marks in examination and in 11 grade I took commerce that disable me to ever refresh it due to which I forgot the basic fundamental of gravity of force. If I would have understood the rationale of gravity of force then I might have remembered it. Learning should be done in appropriate way as we do it to gain knowledge and not to complete the education.

Adding to the topic, it also help individuals in their day to day life, as it is said anything learned would never go in vein, like after consuming knowledge of basic fundamentals of subjects, school student steps ahead to do their graduation for detail studies, student whose basic fundamental would be strong, will easily able to cope with the harder stage of studies for instance Mathematics need to be understood. Learning the facts with the depth understanding will help student to score attractive marks that will further help them to secure lucrative job for themselves. Also this would help them to do well in any competitive exams. Collectively, better understanding of facts and details is proven to be beneficial globally for operating any sector of the world impeccably.

Every discovery and invention is an authenticity of fact that understanding of fact is much imperative then merely knowing the fact. Even animals understand the concept of prying to feed themselves. Therefor all living being should fallow ideal method for learning.
sandipsinh   
Feb 13, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Advertising can tell you a lot about a country [7]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Advertisements is used for marketing any products and services, it's a wide - spread marketing concept diligently fallowed by global market. This method of preluding products also reflects the various trend prevailing in a local market of the country, thusly advertisement contribute to acknowledge populace about any country.

Every country has different format and pattern liked by their local public as such companies are bound to consider various aspect while designing advertisement. Seller consider aspects like taste, fashion, current trend, preference, demand, and financial capability of their consumers that precipitates an easy expectancy of their product in the market. On the bases of content and design of advertisement at least one can have idea about the preference of people, glimpse of their culture, mentality of people and language prevailed in the country.

I was viewing an India channel, I have perceived their facial cream product add claiming themselves best for whitening the skin. By viewing the model in the advertisement and by whitening feature, I analyzed that people of India probably has warmer skin tone. Likewise in the America, I have noticed almost all edibles add promoting myriad range of non- vegetarian food item, consolidating that I concluded that American people are more inclined towards non - vegetarian food. Advertisement did helped one to have an idea about countries.

Geographically the advertisements methods and its substance differ reflecting the prevailing style and like and dislike of people as well highlighting superficial knowledge about any country.
sandipsinh   
Feb 14, 2014
Graduate / market development and export; reverse engineering (abstract) [4]

do not mention senior manager can use senior officer or officials.
recent years, issues such as market development and export included the greatest concern to senior managers of engineering and manufacturing
sandipsinh   
Feb 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl-Government's attention should be on ICT development or Meeting basic needs of people [4]

Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

Globally technology is ruling world by making tasks much easier and faster. Although technology has great impact in development of the countries, yet many people believes that fulfilling basic necessity is of prime importance. I discern that acceleration of computer technology can satisfy various basic need of the people as such government must invest money in developing or purchasing computer technology .Furthermore my essay will reflect explanation for money spent on computer technology or on basic needs.

Education is an investment that give certain returns. Use of computer technology will make education more prolific. Today many government colleges and schools are provided with the computer lab for the education which make the teaching process smoother and effective. If government will build computer engineering or relevant colleges than student will be motivated to study subject of computer technology. For example Gujarat government has made compute classes mandatory in all schools from 4th grade. By taking steps forward for providing education relevant to computers will build educated and affluent country with least problems.Education resolve almost all problems as such use of computer technologies for education sector will be advantageous for government and residence of all countries.

Secondly, Administrative task cannot be avoided in any sector from government to corporate. If computer will have highly developed software or high tech devices that will reduce the paper -consumption. By avoiding use of trees for making paper, government is providing better living environment to the people. As well storage of data, international meetings through laptop or computers, corporate deals, and order for import and export can be done without any hazels and wasting time. Use of computer technology will collectively accelerate the revenue of the countries. Purchase of peculiarly designed computer relevant technology helps government of several countries to provide safety to their populace like currently, govt of all countries have announced computer hacking or data seizing an unlawful action to provide safe use of computers.Use of computers technology will aid in operating administrative work with all security.

Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of the countries are enable to satisfy their basic needs. But if government make alliance with international companies than many people will get opportunity to conquer their employment issues. Also by preluding new computer - technological companies and bringing outsourcing work to them can be tremendously helpful for highly - educated unemployed citizens Outsourcing work will able to offer them attractive salary. Inventing specific computer technology, country would have edge over all other countries in the world. It would be considered powerful.

People do not like change ,yet that change only make difference as such government should not be demotivated to take any move to invest money for development of computer technology or avoid any better opportunities to purchase copacetic and helpful computer technology, as implicitly it is helping beings of their nations to meet way more than their basic requirements.
sandipsinh   
Feb 14, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Government should spend money for developing ICT or meeting basic needs of people? [5]

Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

Globally technology is ruling world by making tasks much easier and faster. Although technology has great impact in development of the countries, yet many people believes that fulfilling basic necessity is of prime importance. I discern that acceleration of computer technology can satisfy various basic need of the people as such government must invest money in developing or purchasing computer technology .Furthermore my essay will reflect explanation for money spent on computer technology or on basic needs.

Education is an investment that give certain returns. Use of computer technology will make education more prolific. Today many government colleges and schools are provided with the computer lab for the education which make the teaching process smoother and effective. If government will build computer engineering or relevant colleges than student will be motivated to study subject of computer technology. For example Gujarat government has made compute classes mandatory in all schools from 4th grade. By taking steps forward for providing education relevant to computers will build educated and affluent country with least problems.Education resolve almost all problems as such use of computer technologies for education sector will be advantageous for government and residence of all countries.

Secondly, Administrative task cannot be avoided in any sector from government to corporate. If computer will have highly developed software or high tech devices that will reduce the paper -consumption. By avoiding use of trees for making paper, government is providing better living environment to the people. As well storage of data, international meetings through laptop or computers, corporate deals, and order for import and export can be done without any hazels and wasting time. Use of computer technology will collectively accelerate the revenue of the countries. Purchase of peculiarly designed computer relevant technology helps government of several countries to provide safety to their populace like currently, govt of all countries have announced computer hacking or data seizing an unlawful action to provide safe use of computers.Use of computers technology will aid in operating administrative work with all security.

Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of the countries are enable to satisfy their basic needs. But if government make alliance with international companies than many people will get opportunity to conquer their employment issues. Also by preluding new computer - technological companies and bringing outsourcing work to them can be tremendously helpful for highly - educated unemployed citizens Outsourcing work will able to offer them attractive salary. Inventing specific computer technology, country would have edge over all other countries in the world. It would be considered powerful.

People do not like change ,yet that change only make difference as such government should not be demotivated to take any move to invest money for development of computer technology or avoid any better opportunities to purchase copacetic and helpful computer technology, as implicitly it is helping beings of their nations to meet way more than their basic requirements.
sandipsinh   
Feb 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING SKILL 1 : Global water use by sector and in 2 different country [11]

In second paragraph
At the beginning of the century, the amount of water use placed in its lower level during this period. Although, the most amount of water use allocated to agriculture and the rate of industry and domestic stayed approximately in the same level, this trend had always been additive.so, by the year 2000, the amount of agriculture was over 3000 km ,which is more than sixfold.However, the usage in industry and domestic was still lower than agriculture, they had a gently upward trend.

-very confusing - due to uneven use of past and present tense.
-At the beginning of the century, the amount of water used was placed in its lower level.( ARE YOU TRYING TO SAY THIS ),
as your sentence has - use - present tense.
-Most water can be replaced with maximum water.
-The maximum amount of water usage was/is allocated to agriculture industry.
- I do not understand your this phrase - agriculture and the rate of industry.
-Improve tenses in your writing.
sandipsinh   
Feb 17, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Reasons of choosing dangerous sports or activity. [9]

Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Globally enormous games are played so as various tournaments are organized to give recognition to best players. Well, today people are immensely enthusiastic to play beyond unexceptional games and engross in several dangerous sports and other activities, however the motives of people for choosing dangerous games differ from one to another. Furthermore, my essay will be explaining the reasons of people's preferring dangerous games and activity.

Firstly, it is undeniable that dangerous sports cannot be deemed easy, therefore only limited number of people are noticed to perform them. Women skiing is announced an official sports in 2014. This year many women's would be competing to get rewards for their skiing skills. Skiing is very challenging sports and when performed by sensitive idol "women" makes it a peculiar sports. As it is said "more risk, more profit", people who perform dangerous sports are motivated to do such sports to get fat income and prestige in the world. They get opportunity to link with many industries like television industry, they are signed by many companies as an ambassador for various product lines. Luxurious life and chance of travelling the world for various competition and many similar benefits attracts people to go beyond their lines and build their safe arena to perform riskier but splendor activities..

Secondly, Many people enjoy tackling challenging task and their potential is unduly competitive. Which makes them master of managing uncertainty. As it is said "practice makes men perfect"- people practice a lot to build exquisite skills for performing dangerous sports whether they like to do it as hobby or profession. I have seen many friends of mine performing breath - stopping bike stunts and also noticed them improving it. Likewise many people do it for fun and entertainment - Mark Zuckerberg ,one of the co- founder of Facebook, in his childhood used to make minor games by referring his folks drawing while playing with them .These hobby of Mr. Zuckerberg made him a prodigy of networking.

Thirdly, for many people, dangerous activity is their profession - Magician. They earn their bread and butter by performing various tricks with fire or with dangerous animals in their shows.That satisfy their need as well as their desire of remain attached with their unsafe art.

Learning is never enough and no time is wrong for it. Few beings are born with potential of playing with dangers, so other possess the zeal of trying uncommon dangerous sports for monetary gains, fame, and amusement.
sandipsinh   
Feb 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Reasons of choosing dangerous sports or activity. [9]

Thanks Dumi - for sparing time to reply.
I'll try to use understandable word.
And about well even i felt the same as you but took a chance to confirm my doubt.

I used unexceptional games for common games. is there any suggestion.
sandipsinh   
Feb 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task I : Male and Female Fitness Membership [5]

Hi,
I would be assisting you. Few suggestions

Furthermore, both trends fluctuated in the onward. In 1975 men membership rose dramatically to 4000 then fluctuated under 3000 member before reach

Do not mention onward if you meant to say -both trends constantly fluctuated further.
sandipsinh   
Feb 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / ESSAY EVALUTION - TOEFL - FALLOW YOUR CUSTOM OR OTHER COUNTRY'S. [3]

When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.

Our traditions and customs keep's us connected with our ancestral roots. People in the rapidly developing country are multicultural. To not restrict their growth, human moves from one place to another. While living in a different place many choose to fallow custom of new country and others stick to their own custom. Due to certain circumstances human tend to do so. My essay will narrate the light and bright sides of not fallowing your own customs.

Several year ago, many north Asian people had been caught and packed in the container to export to United States of America, this forceful migration made them suffered starvation, unemployment and child violence. Government's announcement of giving them rights of minor and accepting them as citizen of America, gave them a new home country to start their life form scratch. In this scenario many converted into Christian, and fallowed the custom of American christian to make their life smooth. Fallowing the custom of a local place help people to easily connect with the local populace of the region. Process of adaptability become easy. Living in the new place would be convenient and other activity such as food, fashion, tradition and language barrier can be eliminated voluntarily. Although beforemention benefits can be enjoyed, but at the cost of your own custom.

On the other hand, many people like me, fallow their own custom despite staying away from home country. I purchased a house in America, for that I kept house - warming ceremony. I was easily able to perform all the custom and ritual that is required in Hinduism to conduct, before shifting to a new house. Connection to my custom gives me spiritual and emotional satisfaction. I feel near to my family and its value. Also my parents can come and stay with me anytime without any worry of how they are going to adjust in new country and culture? Our roots are somewhere our identity as well, changing them would not be so pleasurable

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Preference of people differ due to their own rationales. Every religion, custom and tradition is valued in current era to avoid any biases and prejudice. People organize party on their birthday, marriages and other special occasion in India also with performing their own rituals of their custom. So it does not matter whether one fallow their own custom or others, as far as it keeps human being united.
sandipsinh   
Feb 18, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: SCIENTISTS VS POLITICIANS - Who have the greatest influence on our lives? [5]

Hey hi,

Overall fair construction of essay, but little carefulness can make it better,

if it were not for them - is obscure.
SUBJECT IS MISSING - ur sentence confuse whom are you referring by stating them.

if they (politician) were not for the populace,It would be difficult....

Tip - if you are confused with your pronouns - use noun at least it won't make your message/meaning perplex.
Good luck
sandipsinh   
Feb 19, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are most selfless well-wisher of children - IMPORTANT QUALITIES OF A GOOD SON OR DAUGHTER [5]

What are the important qualities of a good son or daughter? Have these qualities changed or remained the same over time in your culture? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Parents are next to all divines, they endure lot of predicament to nurture their kids because they consider their children their only prize. Similarly children must be sensible enough to return love, respect and support to their parents. But development of world has brought many changes in human kind, in their living behavior and humanity. Thrust of reaching on the top keep today's youth so occupied with their work that they ignore their family life and obligation toward their parents. My view would shower light on the ideal children and effect of contemporary world on children's inclination toward their parents.

Firstly, a good daughters or sons must respect and love their parents. As parents do not hesitate to shower their lavish love on their any aged children, children must return the same. It is understood that today competitive world required them to thrive to make their life better, however, they can still manage to make their parents feel that they are very precious to them like they can get their mother flowers while coming back from office, Girls can prepare their parents favorite food on weekend and enjoy meal with them. Also they can discuss plans and happening of their life with their parents so that they will feel connected to their children's life. This minor contribution of children would give immense satisfaction and willingness of living life to their parents

Secondly, Children must support their parent in their old - age, off- late joint family system was followed by many families due to that old parents used to have somebody to look after them. On the contrary, today parents are sent to old - age home. Busy working children meet their parents at their convenient. I have a friend, her husband and she are working due to which they cannot get much leave to visit their home country to see their parents whenever their parents need them. To resolve this problem, they have called their parents to stay with them. This step has solved their problem of not getting leave as well as parents complain of not visiting them. Busy life must not take you away from your parents. They are the one who bought us in this beautiful world.

Parents are most selfless well-wisher of children, they does not expect any monetary gain, a piece of your luxurious life or any asset except children's affection, admiration, time and backing to live their rest of life as such children must deliver it for their parents and to achieve a title of ideal daughter or son of their parents.
sandipsinh   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Parents are most selfless well-wisher of children - IMPORTANT QUALITIES OF A GOOD SON OR DAUGHTER [5]

Hey Shafani,

Your suggestion is indeed helpful. I prefer to make little change in it.
Good child quality,either son or daughter, nowadays has been changing to another one. Probably, this change is due to the developing world. Although some discern this quality has been changing,so opponent believes that there are many good children who held their good qualities in their culture.

i have a question i am having problem with building good intro of essay - pour in some suggestions. Is it good to mention the subject of essay upfront? as few suggestion i got suggested to not unveil subject directly. I am in great quandary.
sandipsinh   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Traditional methods of cooking is likely to be extinct - IELTS writing [7]

Hello,

Try emphasis on conveying the message of your substance rather puzzling sentence or vocabulary, i even had the same problem but now i concluded it is always better to right simple and understandable content then writing fancy words.

VIEW CORRECTION BELOW

This essay raises the issue related to traditional foods, which are currently being hardly needed as non-traditional meals (fast food restaurant products). As ready to eat meals have already dominated the busy lives of human being. Although traditional method and convenient meals both has their pros and cons, still the it is incomprehensible that whether this notion is agreeable or not, I think this opinion is not completely incorrect, I discern that most people now would most probably prefer to have convenient meals over meals that take long time to prepare. I will expand my view in further paragraphs of the essay.

Good luck
sandipsinh   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl: "To err is human" - listening to the advice of family and friends [9]

Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference .

Personal experience can be deemed as a teacher who gives us practical experience, so family members and friend's advice can be great support or a guide to resolve the quandaries. Advice from family members can be considered most wise notion as they come through parents self - experience, on the other hand life will be full of trials if we determine to learn through our experiences, living lessons of not repeating the mistakes and continuing the good efforts. Both has their own exquisite merits as such it is difficult to comprehend that whether life becomes easy by our experience or with the help of family and folks advice. I would be presenting elucidation about whether to lead life on personal experience or by seeking family and friend advice.

Firstly, Family and friends are selfless well - wisher and advisers of ours. They have no meanness to acquire anything form us in return of any favor. Parents already walked through the land strips that children would be walking on in future. They have better views, solutions for predicaments and self - experienced lessons to share with children's. That's why probably they can easily forecast the result of our action and choices beforehand. Children's those who focus on parent's guidance and suggestion have to face least difficulties in their life. Also they get aid from their parents to make critical decision of their life that results into less fatal results of their efforts. Parent's advice increase that chances of good result or success. Form my personal experience - My father suggested me to take medical stream after my 10th grade but I stubborn to study accounts and now after marriage and shifting to USA, I remorse to not listen to him as medical professional earn abundant in America.

Self- experience introduced us with our potential and capabilities, but we would tend to commit several errors. It might also delay our progress. Although there are being that are born genius and efficiently handle their lives and make choices relevant to it but other humans has to seek their way out to make their lives hassle free. Personal - experience would also be time consuming but it will teach us to not choose a path that will demotivate us and offer complex outcome. I took independent decision to study diploma course of management, However i observed lot of knowledge but after doing it i realized that Master of business management would have granted me enormous opportunities to make prospective career. I learnt a lesson that shortcut to success lengthens the way to the destination.

As it is said "To err is human", we inadvertently commit certain mistakes in return gets familiar with various ways to tackle hurdles of life. But I was wondering if we can download a readily available content for our academic examination, why we cannot make maximum use of available resource - our parents and friend to decisions of our lives. Obstacles are not less even with the guidance but directions indeed prepare us to face challenges of life.
sandipsinh   
Feb 20, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl - Work in GROUP or Work independently? [4]

Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people on a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Working independently sharps our skills, on the other hand ability of working with team give us opportunities to learn many other skills. Both of these concept has their specific pros and cons. It's important for an individual to have ability to work with the team as well possess the capability of handling task at their own. I would be expressing my elucidation on the importance of working independently and with the team.

Firstly, Today all the top most corporates and companies prefer candidate that has ability of working with team. It confirm that they are ready to help their subordinates and to learn from them. Since team would have more number of people to achieve one goal which provides various idea and perception to drive the task. Team member also get each other's support by sharing their knowledge. Goal can be achieved in less - time while using similar number of resources. The incumbent of reaching the target or goal becomes every team member's equal responsibility. Best merit of working with team is the blame or credit of outcome is shared equally among the team members. Also candidates working in team learn management of personal, public relation and many can build leadership skills. But working in team require lot of patience, understanding of team mates and cooperation to avoid any altercations and disputes.

On the other hand, Professionals working independently have to deal with all the task involve to reach to goal by themselves. They become responsible for all the effort required. They sometime have to spend extra time and money to seek aid for their task. On the flip side it has several advantages like - you get flexibility to do your task, No pressure of cooperating and distracting of team- mates. Freedom to take all the decisions. However the consequences of any positive and negative result of their effort has to be borne by them.
sandipsinh   
Feb 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl: "To err is human" - listening to the advice of family and friends [9]

Hey montegrappa,

Great help folk.

Thank form bringing those basic mistakes which i must to not make.
But i have an question, The advice form families and those from friend. isn't this fragment is rare. as subject gets missing after and That of friend - (what) that????

i am not smart enough to understand the concept but need help to make my grammar better.
sandipsinh   
Feb 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / BENEFITS AND DRAWBACKS OF CREDIT CARDS [4]

very well drafted.
Here and there correction makes it perfect.

1.Do not attached another point in continuing sentence. REFER - .HOWEVER
There is no doubt that the process of financial transaction is currently simplified via the advent of credit cards. They have performed many essential roles in daily people's basics.

However, containing the threat of substantial debt due to the improper uses of this tool. As far as I am concerned, whereby the number of people utilizing credit cards is gradually increasing, the benefits would outweigh the cons.

2. SUBJECT AND VERB SHOULD NEVER BE MISSING IN ANY SENTENCE
On the other hand, CREDIT CARDS MAKES access OF money highly CONVENIENT for the people. Credit cards are able to help people arrange the remote payment of goods and products online, hence, FACILITATE IN MAKING VARIOUS COMPUTER BASED FINANCIAL TRANSACTION. Furthermore, with the small and portable appearance, it would be a SAFE option rather than having lot of money in the wallet. Moreover, credit cards will allow users to acknowledge accurately the location and the amount of money already spent in order to adjust their finances. Hence, many financial transactions would be easily completed VIA CREDIT card.

you have got good English writing skill.
sandipsinh   
Feb 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / Many people oppose changes, yet those changes make's big differences; moving or? [3]

Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

Many people oppose changes, yet those changes make's big differences like the genetic difference between apes and human is barely 3% but human welcomed changes and shaped a speculating planet earth. Changes are imperative for growth as such few set of people do not hesitate to move from one place to another so other several people avoid this change of sites.

Earth have many countries, cities and continents, open terrain for human to reside and rule. Although there are myriad advantage of cities, people prefer to stay in outskirt or in villages. This preference of people refrain them form competitive skills, developing world and its exposure. People who prefer to stick to one place limit their growth and limits opportunities of learning. I have a friend who had studied in small town from kindergarten to colleges but now it is difficult for to seek job in city near to her town due to unawareness of English language and computers skills. Although villages are developing around the globe still comparatively prospective platforms of improving oneself are better in cities.

On the contrary, my cousin moved from India to Australia to study CPA, with the zeal of making his career in International corporate industry. However he has to go through several predicament such as inferiority complex of coming from small country, hesitation to participate in any workshop due to the less exposure of city, and Indian - English accent was a big problem. Since he was mentally prepared for all such challenges, he improved herself and today she has a degree with lucrative job. Moving from one place to another location indeed gives us distinct exposure of new environment, phenomenal experiences, opportunity to get acquainted with different people, their culture and tradition, and chance of educating ourselves. Collectively it will provide us fair vision of widely spread world. All- embracing experiences and knowledge will helps us in our further life.

Everything has bad and good impact, change could offer you what you have desired or at least give you some experience of new venture. But certainly change will take you to another by level developing you and your life.
sandipsinh   
Feb 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / Toefl evalution - Impact of television on children [4]

Impact of television on children. State your opinion and choices.

Among all the entertainment option television has earned enormous vote of the public. The major factor after this preference is; currently television can be easily availed in even small towns at economic cost. Although it is adored by populace but effect of television on growing children is major concern although it differ from children to children. Further in my essay I would be explaining by views on effect of television on children.

Invention of television has truly brought different vision in the field of easy entertainment. The information around the globe reaches to people in fraction of second. Many growing children are able to increase their knowledge by watching myriad education channels like national geography, History channel. They get awareness about personal security as today many channels are screening advertisement explaining which people can be helpful in urgency such as policemen, ambulance for fire emergency. Adding to it, many animated series and movies helps kids to learn about culture, tradition and mythology as it is imperative for growing generation to be acquainted with their roots.

On the other hand, Television also has negative impact on kids. As it is said overdose of anything result into consequences - My friend has to allow her son to view the television to feed him every day. This habit can damage his eye- site at very young age as such excess television entertainment can be threat to children. Children starts imitating many characters seen in television and harm themselves - Shaktiman was very loved series by children and many children used to imitate this character's whirling and flying gestures that caused serious injuries to many kids. Seemingly this series was banned by many state governments of India.

If seen with some decorum television is most convenient and efficient tool of entertainment as well as of knowledge.

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