Undergraduate / He played the violin; The sound of music [11]

Psychologist Howard Gardner has identified nine types of intelligences: linguistic, logical-mathematical, interpersonal, intrapersonal, musical, spatial, bodily-kinesthetic, naturalist, and existential. Choose one that you identify with and discuss a few personal experiences that show your strength and/or weakness in this area of intelligence. (500 Word Limit)

My essay is 475 words as of now.
I don't think I like the second paragraph... do you?? I really like my first and third though.

I thought I fell in love with a boy at the age of eight when in actuality I fell in love with music. He played the violin. His small fingertips prancing on the fingerboard, his sharp chin leaning softly on the chinrest, his curved hand swiftly brushing the bow against the string. How can one make such a beautiful string of harmonic resonance only through simple taps on metallic lines and repetitious sawing of the horse-haired bow? How can one dedicate so many hours, tapping and sawing away? How can one possibly practice to play twenty different notes in one beat or play twenty beats in one bowing? My young love inspired to me to too prance my fingers away on the fingerboard and brush a bow against the string, and surprisingly, his inspiration has led to make me the violinist I am today. I became the perfectionist of intonation, the conquistador of emotion, and the pioneer of the power to manipulate the aura of atmosphere through music.

I stand under the spotlight in front of a crowd whose eyes shine through the pitch black. As I breathe in a gulp of vitality, the violin is suddenly a piece of me, transforming into a mouth of a different language. I soon forget the many eyes focusing on me; rather I duelve into a world of expressions via sounds. It's the rich, fat fortes of passion and yearnings; the effervescent, zesty staccato of young at heart; the lethargic, ethereal legato of peace that travels as imperceptible wind of spirit, swimming through the thin air, diving into the ear, and burying into the heart of every listeners. Music is life that has immense power bigger than that of a man - a power to heal, to worship, to fulfill, to enlighten, to encourage, and even to annoy. I can only imagine the silent staleness of life without music.

Music: the articulated ring of each note together dancing in harmony. A language of no speakable words yet heard the most. Notes, the letters of another world and of another realm, existent only through our ears. Can you hear it? Listen. It's a symphony of life, carrying a soul, a spirit, a strength to swipe us away into a moving river of melody. Can you feel it? Listen. Music is my inertia of life. It is that that keeps me running at a hundred miles an hour, consistently flowing and swaying. It's the Lady Gaga's "Paparazzi" booming on the radio in the car next to me on the highway; it's the famous Beethoven's 5th Symphony playing in the concert hall; it's the crunch of foots in the snow on a crispy, white winter morning.

Undergraduate / our legal justice system is faulty!! [13]

Prompt: If you could explore whatever you wanted for one year using methods of your choice, how would you direct your efforts and what would you hope to accomplish? (500 Word Limit)

It was the summer of 2007, when Kim&Woo, LLC law firm took me in as a student intern that I discovered my previously dormant passion for law and a desire to explore the rules by which we distinguish our behaviors. During my three-month internship, I encountered many concerns, some of which I was petrified to discover yet so fascinated to extract from many cases. While the public, lawyers, and politicians are primarily concerned about the legal procedures of the many cases that continue to infest our daily newspapers, a close inspection of the pattern of legal actions taken in courtrooms proves that the audience should also note the flaws in our judicial system today. Both heedless and unintended inaccuracies in the infrastructure of the system can produce significant dangers in the lives of innocent people, and the United States should take immediate action in discovering a more secure system to avoid any mishaps.

I want to devise an improved legal system in which all citizens can obtain the most competent representation and prosecutorial procedure regardless of income, race, sex, or any other identification wherein a method will offer sufficient and legitimate proof before any executions are made. Too often, innocents have been convicted with amateur evidences and authentications due to careless mistakes of geneticists, lawyers, and judges. Geneticists have previously made clerical errors in DNA handling and interpretation, and lawyers have been sleeping during trials. The first step in improving our legal system is by controlling these malpractices, whether it is through legislation or stronger sanctions to encourage higher performances. Additionally, while technology demonstrates capacity to discover a more judicious method, the government is only recapitulating history. Such a study would require me to analyze an ample amount of cases of various subjects that would adequately represent the many prevailing cases, and that I collaborate with crime scene investigators and the like to formulate a new approach. Through the process of the experiment, I hope to explore the history of our legal system including the explanation and the foundations for the design of today's legal system and to examine the many laws and processes that have been eradicated in the past.

While the majority of the public is not aware of (or perhaps rather ignorant of) the erroneousness of the American legal system, others have made equivocal efforts in resolving this serious issue. President Bush signed a Justice for All Act on October 20, 2004 - an imperative legislation that was designed in hopes of ultimately bringing an end to miscarriages of justice by guaranteeing access to DNA testing, competency requirements of defense attorneys, quality legal representation for vagrant defendants, and increased compensation for wrongfully imprisoned defendants. Actions such as these help ensure that American citizens are well-protected by law, and I am determined to induce new processes in our legal system as a step towards an advancement in American lives.

Undergraduate / Art of mind; Nine types of intelligences [4]

Psychologist Howard Gardner has identified nine types of intelligences: linguistic, logical-mathematical, interpersonal, intrapersonal, musical, spatial, bodily-kinesthethic, naturalist, and existential. Choose one that you identify with and discuss a few personal experiences that show your strength and/or weakness in this area of intelligence. Please limit your response to 500 words.

I sincerely thought I exceeded the average artistic abilities of my age group in fifth grade. Little did I know I was artistically challenged until my art teacher insisted that I quit art classes because my mother's money was going down the drain. Ever since this dream-crushing, discouraging, heartbreaking teacher revealed the truth of my abilities, I vowed to never hold a paintbrush in my hand and to never study a bowl of fruits. It was then that I had an epiphany: I found art all too simple. Art is a one-dimensional approach in every way. An artist can only recreate such a bowl of grapes reflecting only one light through one perspective on a flat canvas in hopes of magically generating a three dimensional perspective with multiple lightings all in an allusion of presenting this bowl three dimensionally. I redirected my creativity from one of a physical visual on a limited canvas to another of a mental design on a vacuum of infinity. I discovered a significant interest in (and ultimately a habit of) mentally constructing three dimensional compositions out of simple, everyday concepts and behaviors.

I insert my clinking key into the ignition of the car and begin to mentally sketch a map from point A to point B. First, I model the house, replicating its every design and selecting the precise hues of color. I then outline my driveway out of the neighborhood and onto the highway. As I move farther out from my initial position, I can feel the road exponentially augmenting in width. When the road becomes wide enough at some point, I can freely adjust my vision to any degree that I feel is most competent to mentally lead me to my destination. I trace familiar roads from the perspective of a passenger looking out onto the street from the front window glass. When anticipating a right or left turn, I scribble the road from a perpendicular angle as if I were a pedestrian staring across the roadway. When coursing through a less familiar street, I zoom out from bird's eye view to study my relative location, verifying that I'm not deviating from the direction of my destination. The magnitude of my zoom application is very flexible. I can soar just barely over the rooftops or hover over the entire country from the stratosphere. Such is my imaginary road trip with only a simple glance at my destination on Mapquest.

While art is an in-depth concentration of one specific perspective, I prefer studying a subject through multiple perspectives and then logically reasoning the best perspective to approach the certain situation. On a greater scale, this spatial, multi-perspective capability has enabled me to develop resilience, like a willow tree, like water, like a field of grass swaying in the wind. My capacity to adapt and embrace all that life brings has allowed me to savor the taste of every valued experience.

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Faq, Help / Why are some people getting suspended? [45]

Why are some people getting suspended? Not that I have, but I've seen many suspended users here. I just want to avoid being suspended myself and I'm just wondering why they got suspended.