Writing Feedback / The Graduation Day... (the best day of my life) [7]

write about the best day in your life.

It such a regular day, but it has a different taste. You see people crying or laughing
on this day. Actually, that is what is happening in Jordan during the Graduation Day,
which we call the Result Day.

The Result Day is when the government announces the names of students who have
passed the standardized test, by posting them on the bulletin board of each school or
putting them on the websites.

In the summer of 2007, I was anxious to see my name among those who passed.
The night before that day, I hadn't slept well. I was worried a lot about the results.
Around 7 o'clock in the morning, I heard some fireworks, so I realized that the results
had been announced. I jumped from my bed and headed to the school without even
washing my face. After I reached it, the students were gathering at the bulletin board
looking up their names. I couldn't wait anymore, so I jumped over them to reach the
board and I saw my name. At that moment, I was overjoyed and my parents were too.

I really thank them for every thing they have done for me. I will never forget that
day when I saw my father's tears of happiness rolling on his cheeks. That day was the
best day in my life.

Writing Feedback / compare between your childhood and right now. [16]

prompt: write an essay about your childhood and right now.

pleas criticize the essay as much as you can....

Two days before Thanksgiving, my mother asked me to bring the roaster pan from the basement. I took a small candle with me because there was no light in the basement. When I found the roaster pan, I saw an album on the top of it; at first, I ignored it. I took the roaster pan up stairs to my mother, but I forgot the candle, so I had to go back. When I picked it up I noticed the picture that was on the cover of the album. It was of me as a child.

I sat on a dusty chair and looked at the pictures in the album. First picture I saw, it was for my classmates and me, in the third grads. At that time, I was short and fat, compared to the others in my class. All of my classmates used to make fun of me. I remembered one of them called me a barrel. I couldn’t stand it any more, so I hit him on his face and broke his tooth. After this incident, no one dared to make fun of me any more. I wish I had done this long ago. Right now, I’m one of the tallest students in my class, therefore, my teacher asked me to be a member of the school basketball team.

In the second page of the album, there were two pictures of me while I was playing alone in the park. At that time, I was selfish and stubborn. I didn’t like to share anything with anybody. I had never shared my toys with other children. I used to love being isolated. On the other hand, right now I’m interested in team work, and being with a lot of people make me feel good Sometimes I even don’t like to go out by myself, and I’m a very easy going person now.

I have liked to watch the news since I was a little child. At that time, I used to know everything that was going around us, so some of my friends used to call me “the encyclopedia”. This name is the only thing I still have from my childhood. For example, during the last election, our history teacher asked some questions about the election; while everybody was silent, a student stood up and said, ”Ask “the encyclopedia”, he must know about it hh..”.

I turned the album to the third page. My tears started rolling on my cheeks. I got shocked, after seeing that picture. I think we had this picture taken at the airport, before my father left to America. Since that day, I have not heard anything about him. My father was the most important one in my childhood, but he has disappeared from my life. He left me in the middle of the jungle. I didn’t know how to cope with these situations. I have to protect my brothers from the gangs out there in the streets, and to cover the life expenses; therefore, I started selling candies in the streets from very early in the morning till the mid of the night, for just a few bucks. I barely could buy a loaf of bread and a gallon of milk with those bucks.

In conclusion, I don’t see any big difference in my life except the one I just mentioned. God wants me to be the breadwinner in my family; this is my destiny and I have to accept it.

Undergraduate / Advice about the course - Writing 100 or 100ESL [3]

WRITE AN ESSAY.
WHAT ADVICE ABOUT THE COURSE OR INFORMATION ABOUT WRITING WOULD YOU GIVE TO A STUDENT ENTERING ENGLISH 100 OR 100ESL.
be harsh please.
I'll be glad to see your FEEDBACK,COMMENTS,AND CRITICIZES.

Taking English 100 or 100ESL will definitely improve your writing skills; however, some students are hesitating to take this class because they thought they are wasting their time. After taking English 100ESL, I would like to share my experience that I have had in this great class.

Before I took English 100ESL, I was thinking about taking English 101, but the fact I was not ready for 101, and many of my friends advised me to take 100ESL. On the other hand, a few students told me that you will waste your time by taking 100ESL, but I did not listen to them. It's such a great class. I improve my writing skills, start to write more clearly and avoid many grammatical and spelling mistakes. Therefore, I encourage every student to take this class.

Writing is a very important skill. Everyone must have it, and to be a good writer you should practice writing, not just in the class, but in your home too. Whenever you feel that you have some extra time, pick a topic from the newspaper or magazines and write about it. I do this every other day. I read the newspaper, then I pick a topic and write about it. After that, I send it to my English teacher, then he sends me the feedback.

Whenever you write, you have to have a good atmosphere for writing. Before you write, try to listen to English news or music, not to your native songs or news; also, if you are a nonnative speaker, do not use a bilingual dictionary by itself, you should have English-English one beside it. I remember one time I came into my home and saw my brother writing an essay, while he was listening to an Arabian song and using a bilingual dictionary at the same time. After he finished writing, he asked me to proofread it for him. After I proofread it, I found many translation mistakes in his essay, so I told him not to use a bilingual dictionary by itself, and not listen to foreign music whenever you write in English. Because when you write you have to concentrate on your writing, otherwise you will have many mistakes in your essay.

Many students think that is just taking English 100 or 100ESL without doing the all work will make them a good writers, that's totally wrong. If you want to be a good writer you have to work hard; have good attendance and have your assignment done on the time.

In conclusion, it is not impossible to be a good writer. All you need is just take English 100 or 100ESL and follow your instructor's instructions. I think that would be more than enough to put you on the way to be a professional at writing.