mea505
Sep 21, 2010
Undergraduate / "A place for the ambitious learners" - Why Brown University? 1000 characters. [8]
No no -- your essay is far from just "OK!" And if you got that impression from what I said, then I apologize. You did a good job.
Using the word awesome sounds good to me. I would probably leave the second sentence alone, however. After thinking about it again, it probably is best.
So -- the only part I would change is this part: I saw Brown for the first time, and wow, it was awesome! Other than that, leave it alone. It looks and reads great!
Mark
No no -- your essay is far from just "OK!" And if you got that impression from what I said, then I apologize. You did a good job.
Using the word awesome sounds good to me. I would probably leave the second sentence alone, however. After thinking about it again, it probably is best.
So -- the only part I would change is this part: I saw Brown for the first time, and wow, it was awesome! Other than that, leave it alone. It looks and reads great!
Mark