Jennyflower81
Nov 17, 2012
Undergraduate / Too much Diversity to describe in 500 words- CU boulder essay [3]
I really enjoyed reading your essay, it is impressive. I think your story is very interesting and it is perfect for the college app prompt. I just found a few words that should be changed. Otherwise, your essay is just fine. Good luck in school, I think the school would be lucky to have you as a student :)
...learned and interacted with people with rather diverse backgrounds.
I have learned to appreciate the diversity of people...
It taught me how to be adaptable and become a more diverse person...
I really enjoyed reading your essay, it is impressive. I think your story is very interesting and it is perfect for the college app prompt. I just found a few words that should be changed. Otherwise, your essay is just fine. Good luck in school, I think the school would be lucky to have you as a student :)
...learned and interacted with people with rather diverse backgrounds.
I have learned to appreciate the diversity of people...
It taught me how to be adaptable and become a more diverse person...