Writing Feedback / The value of plans. Toefl exam. [6]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? As modern life becomes more complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Our teachers instilled the value of plans into us since the first day we sit in a classroom. We are asked to use specific notebooks to plan daily life. It could be a plan about as simple as the order to do homework tonight, or as complex as the way we spend a period of time, like a holiday. With a plan, my life is in order and some vague goals turn out to be divided into a few practical procedures step by step. Having experienced the benefits of a plan, I would always make a plan for an event in my life.

A practical plan comes from a serious assessment of yourself objectively. In other word, making a valid plan is a process to realize who you are and what you really want. You are supposed to analyze your advantage and disadvantage in an assignment and find out what is need to reach your goal, and based on that assessment, you can make a clever plan before you start a project. As students, I am familiar with this situation. Before a exam, I would like to make a plan leading our revision. I would ask myself which subject I am not good at and which chapter is estimated obviously by my professors. I would also make a time schedule reminding me where I am in a revision. This is important, because we am familiar with ourselves much better than anyone else. With a delicate and detailed plan, we just make clear what is our weakness and build a solution to that. This solution makes us focus on our goal, the exam. Distraction such us computer games or football are more likely to be avoided since what you should do could simply depend on your schedule.

Admittedly, a spontaneous decision seems much easier than a boring and exhausting plan sometimes. I would say that depends. If you are going to relax, then there is no problem to make a spontaneous decision at the moment. In fact, decision basing on your emotion at the moment is a good part of a relax. However, in cases we are facing a serious problem or project, a plan always helps.

Young people are facing with a lot of huge challenges in this complex world, and a exam seems not a big deal sometimes. Plan is a good tool for us solving these troubles and shines the way to a solution. I don't want to live in a lazy life whole life, so I believe it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

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Writing Feedback / I believe the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime [4]

Do you agree or disagree with following statement: the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime

My grandmother always says to us at dinner table that, she would never imagine one day, there is no need to worry about food any more, a huge problem to their generation when she was young. Hunger and poverty are the most important problems for her generation and it seems totally solved today. This story makes me feel confident about problems we are facing today.

Admittedly,some problem are hard to solve. Confidence to solve a problem often loses before temptation fails. However, the truth is a lifetime is quite a long time and we can make a difference.It is a shame that after a lifetime we are still troubled by the same problems we faced with when we were young and didn't even give it a try to solve it. After a special period in China, people like my grandmother suffering deeply from poverty and hunger, but at the meantime, instead of blaming everything to societies and governments, they struggled to conquer the difficulties. Modern techniques were imported to modernize relatively primitive agriculture, farmers were trained using machines and experts were encouraged to do researches in agriculture refining skills. Patience is not a easy thing, but after a generation-time, my grandmother can proudly tells me her story about hunger and, more importantly, the way they change the situation and the fact the happy life we have today contributes to the efforts of their generation.

There are some problems troubling our society nowadays. Inequity, corruption, disease, etc. Losing faith seems make sense sometimes. However, the truth is, there are always some people struggling in that problems and making things right. Say corruption. After Pres. Xi comes into power, many actions of anti-corruption are adopted and many cases about participation in illegal activities are revealed and punished. People are surprised by the big change, after all, 2 years ago, they were complaining about the abusing privileges by administrative staff. This seems the same story as my grandmother's, just different version in different time.

Considering either stories happened in the past or the events we are experiencing nowadays, we can see problems are being solved or solved. Yes, I believe a lifetime is long enough to witness a huge miracle happens; I believe the human is creative and wise enough to make difference; I believe we are young enough to contribute to our society; So I believe the most important problems affecting our society today can be solved within our lifetime.

Writing Feedback / Honesty is always the most important consideration in any relationship - statement essay [9]

Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship.

We are educated by our parents and schools about the value of honesty since we understand the meaning of the words "yes" and "no". However, we can always see some cases from a film or in our daily life, that a person really benefits more or less from lies. I guess, this is the reason why people lies in a relationship nowadays. As for me, I always want to be an honest person and make friends with honest people.

While I would admit that a person lying has certain reasons and may benefit from it for a time. However, for most cases, the reason a person lying to another is he considering more about himself even if that means hurting the feeling of the person who trusts him. If so, I can barely see any reasons for the person who are hurt to continue the relationship basing on no respect or kindness. Furthermore, A lie always follows with another lie until the liar even forgets what the truth looks like. Comparing to live in lies and guilty, he'd better confess his dishonesty to his friend and beg for forgiveness. Whether the apology is accepted or not, your friend thus can realize your sincerity and respect for the relationship and you can relieve from the infinite lies.

Because of lies, a person may lose the trust from our friends, suffering from the guilty of continuous lies and eventual losing the foundation of a relationship. I want to be a honest person and treat my relationships honestly. At the same time I expect honesty from my friends, families and even country just as a proper society expect honesty from us. Yes, telling the truth is always the most important consideration in any relationship.

Writing Feedback / Talking about "gap-year" - traveling or working [6]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: student should take at least one year to work or travel before they go to university.

After graduating from my high school, i went to university directly. I had worked very hard to prepare the Chinese college entrance exam, where is full of ambitious competitors. I was more than happy to accept the offer from the university I expected, and studying in the college, I have equipped with lots of knowledge and skills. So, I take going to the university after high school for granted. However,one day, a friend of mine, spending one year traveling all over the world instead of going to university, told me that what he saw and what he learned from the travel would benefit him a whole life. With the precious experience he knew exactly which area he wanted to specialized in. Many students all over the world having the same experience, the so-called "gap year" becomes a very popular topic these days. This makes me wonder, should a student take at least one year to work or travel before they go to university? As for me, although there are many benefits for the "gap-year", traveling or working a year before going to university is not suitable for most students.

I admit that traveling and working can make our experience abundant and thus may, to some extent, help us realize what we really want in a further career. However, the "gap-year" is not safe for the students who have little experience about society. Since we are protected by schools and parents in high schools and we concentrate mostly on our study tasks, we care little about the way the world runs. Countless terrible cases and bad guys in every dark corners nowadays, I can imagine the innocent and pure students turn out to be the targets, especially when they are short of money to sustain their travel or survival.

Some people would say that, the shortage of social experience makes the "gap-year" seem even more valuable and necessary just as a weak sick person should exercise to be strong. Only after getting involved in the society can students really understand where they truly want to specialize. However, the "gap year" doesn't necessarily contribute to our further development. We have to admit that, with little specialized knowledge, the work we get cannot be very good. How can a job as a waitress in coffee shop contributes to the dream of being a great astronomer or a engineer? Traveling around world always means spending money, which in most cases, from our parents. How can spending money on fun, enjoying sunshine in the beaches or shopping sumptuously in a exotic country helps us understand the whole story of life? Before learning how to earn money, we spend money traveling for a whole year! That is really ridiculous.

Going to the university directly from high school doesn't mean students don't have chances to relax, to experience a different life, or change our direction of our life. My university always providing opportunities of internship, I have worked in one of the lab doing research on WiPi, a advanced project about internet. Instead of serving coffee, I am supervised by professors and graduates, both of whom are very smart guys and the experience working with them is very helpful for my further study and career. Plus, lots of information fulfilling the campus, each piece of news challenge your recognition and shape your awareness. In the university, you tend to gradually realize who you are, and who you want to be. You can change your majors at any time as long as you see the direction you want to step to clearly.

Thanks to a smaller world, we can choose a life-style we appreciate instead of always obeying the old boring tradition. However, the tradition of going to the university directly is not over time, since it protects us from the negative side of the society and also, provide us with a space to perfect ourselves. Considering all factors listed above, I believe that most students should go to universities directly after high schools.

Writing Feedback / Factory treats the workers as machines and workers are suffering from the single and boring everyday [5]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks during their workday than doing the same task.

I have always admired the advance of society in such a extent that, everyone in the factory or workplace charges a specific area,instead of doing different types of tasks at the same time.Thanks to this division of labor, our society runs in order efficiently. However,we can always see a film or a novel satirize this feature of modern society.It seems that the factory treats the workers as machines and workers are suffering from the single and boring everyday life.After all,if I study maths since the time we get up,that will drive me crazy. This makes me wonder, if the workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks during their workday than doing the same task?

Admittedly,working in a single work is kind of boring. But we have to realize that working itself is not full of fun considering it means responsibility. Even a single task already makes most of the workers tired and exhausted, I can barely imagine we can provide more tasks to them.

Some people may argue,if students can study several subjects in a school day,then workers can handle several tasks in a workday.First,I have to point out that not every student can get a good grade at the end of the semester facing so many subjects just as most workers do not equip with enough skills to do many tasks in a workday. Plus,our parents pay the university to educate us,instead,workers use their labor to earn a life.There is a difference between workers and students.The way workers work depends on the way benefits the factory most and that depends on the boss.If workers are happier to go to work than losing their job,then I think it is better for them listening to their boss.

Some people would argue, factory depends on workers just as workers depend on the factory.The status of worker's emotion strongly affect the production of the factories, hence,doesn't the factory should care more about his workers instead of treating them like machines. I strongly agree with the idea that, workers and factories depend on each other and one should consider the other's feeling. But instead of hurt the benefits and sophisticated running system of the factories,we can see there are many other ways to make workers happier.For instance,many factories provide "weisure time" to the workers nowadays,which means the workers can have a rest in their work time at a specific time playing their phones, answering emails,browsing the web. This action makes the life in a factory not so boring for workers, and instead of hurting the benefits of the factories,the happy workers are energetic to continue their task after the rest. The factory benefits from this action since after all they can depend more on happy workers instead of boring ones.

Considering all factors listed above, I do not agree with argument that Workers would be much happier if they are doing different types of tasks during their workday than doing the same task.

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Writing Feedback / Topic: Modern agriculture. Toefl exam！ [4]

Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.

I am educated by schools and the media about the importance and urgency on protecting environment. I think it is stupid to sacrifice environment in exchange for anything,even if it is for the sake of benefits of agriculture or economy. However,a talk with my illiterate grandma makes my doubt myself. She told me that,she is the generation deeply suffering from hunger and poverty. When she is young,a full meal is all her and her generation's dream and purpose,not to mention a delicious and tasty one with meat. Compared to them,she points out,we are in a good time. Thanks to the development of agriculture and economy,we are no longer suffer from empty stomach. We do not know any skills or knowledge on growing barley or wheat,but that doesn't affect the fact that we enjoy our three meals on time and enjoy snacks in leisure time for granted. I also notice that, even though we are so-called "developed", we can still read news about many people still suffering from hunger and poverty in certain regions. This makes wonder if providing food for the growing population is more important than protecting environment?

Altering the environment without deeply research can cause destructive and unrecoverable consequences. I have read a case about Florida,the citric industry there famous all over the word. Drawn by economic benefits farmers alter the wetlands into farmland to grow more oranges. At first,it works not bad. With more lands,they grow more orange trees,and thus they product more commodities,bringing them more economic benefits. However,that does not last for a long period. Wetlands have the effects to adjust the environment,in general,they make the local climate warmer. With less wetlands, the temperature in Florida declines. Although the degree of the decline is not obvious to human,it is fatal to the citric industry. Hundreds of thousands of orange trees died in Florida,causing a huge lost in economy. Ecosystems are damaged as the organisms tend to live in wetlands environments died or migrated to other habitats and this in return makes it difficult or even impossible to reverse the process. This lesson makes me realize,before modern agriculture alters the environment we should do some careful researches. Otherwise, the action without deep consideration often turns out not only the damage of environment but also the suffering of agriculture and thus human.

I also wonders,as a part of the Earth, if human has to damage environment to develop agriculture. Learning from the failure cases,human realize the importance of protecting environment. Biology is a required course in secondary schools and ecosystem are very really popular research field nowadays which makes the importance of protecting environment as a common sense. By realizing the connection between human and nature, we are now trying to figure out a better way to survive and thrive in a more environmental friendly way.

There are better ways to solute the problem of poverty and hunger instead of damaging the environment. We developed technique and studied data and cases to make our nowadays agriculture more modern and environmental friendly. Many organizations and governments from all over the world would like to seat together to discuss the problem of hunger and poverty and provide resources and techniques to the regions suffering in that . Considering all factors list above,I do not agree with the idea--providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.

Writing Feedback / With the humble attitude, we can earn the respect from others and relieve ourselves.; Toefl exam! [7]

Do you agree or disagree:the world is busy and crowded,we should not expect people to be polite to others.

I was alarmed up by my phone,cleaned my face and rushed out of my house.I reached the bus station without a relief.There are already a lot of people waiting in there.Here came the bus.It was already overcrowded,but we try our best to get into the bus.We all knew the condition would not better even if we wait the next bus.I waited and waited and waited for my terminus.It was a long way to go,and i even go back to my dream,standing and tired.Suddenly,OOOOch! Someone step on my feet.It so hurt that barely can i hold my tears.Without showing a little regret,the guy get through the overcrowded car,and rush out without apology.

This case makes me wonder,as the world is busy and crowded,do we need to be polite to others?should we expect people to be polite to others? As for me,we should always be polite to others and forgive others impolite behaviors.

First,being polite makes our life simple and comfort. When you are consulting a person with some problems,you point out your question with a mild smile,look in his eyes and sometimes nod approvingly.He would appreciate your well-educated behavior and explain the problem clearly and concretely..Because of your respect to him ,he would be in good mood and thus you can have a good time talking with him.Respect is mutual. If you want people treat you nicely then you'd better treat people nicely.We can hardly imagine when we smile to a person and in return he insult you. We can never live alone in this busy and crowded city,so it is smart to be polite to others.

Second,forgiveness can relieve us.Don't trap in the plot that he step on your feet without apology. Sometimes people are just so busy that he doesn't even notice he hurts you.Forgiveness is an attitude to our life which can free us from blaming on other's faults to embrace the day we have. We have much better things to do in a day than cursing on other's mistakes. You can easily say sorry to your toe for the guy who hurt you then start your work and enjoy your day.

Taking into account of all factors listed above,I prefer to be polite to others and forgive others impolite behaviors.With this humble attitude, we can earn the respect from others and relieve ourselves.

Actually i do not think this is a valid issue.
I don't think i describe the busy morning vividly and accurately
I don't think my reasons are strong and concrete
there must be some improper sentences even though i try my hard to avoid
Thank you for your suggestions!

Writing Feedback / A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam. [12]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: A leader should admit if they made a bad decision. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is significant to discuss about the controversy on the issue that what a leader should do after they made a bad decision.A fair proportion of people asserts that a leader shouldn't admit the bad decision he made cause that is weak and shame.Other people,nevertheless,advocate that a leader should admit if they made a bad decision.As far as i am concerned i side with the latter,because it is more advisable.Of the countless reasons that strengthen my viewpoint,i will provide the most concrete reasons as follows.

The first reason i'm presenting is that admitting the bad decision is the first step for a leader to correct it.For example,Chinese government once made a very bad decision to build a belt of forest in the northwest with only a single species of tree.Because this action violate the principle of diversity in biology,the project failed and the government lost millions of dollars.Instead of blaming the consequence on other reasons,the government admitted the mistake and asked scholars to make in-depth research on the failure case.Thanks to the humble and honest attitude of our government,there is a dense forest in the northwest today.The forest successfully prevents the storm and thrives the local economy.I learnt a lot from this lesson,the bad decision is not ultimately terrible as long as we have the courage to admit it,to correct it.

Another reason why i would like to vote for the latter is that admitting the mistake can earn the respect and forgiveness. For instance,the Japanese government revises the history about the 2nd World War and even tries to revise its Constitution. This action stimulates the emotion of the Chinese and makes the relationship between the countries embarrassing which harms the benefits of both country. Compared to Japanese government,German government treat the history with sincerity and honesty and thus they earn the forgiveness and respect from all over the world.

Admittedly,a leader always needs a face of strengthen and decision,and sometimes even an undoubted one.However admitting the bad decision is not an action of weakness.It depends on the courage to face our shortage,the sincerity to the people you lead,the decision to explore a better future.

Taking into account of all factors listed above,we can easily draw the conclusion that a leader should admit if they made a bad decision.