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Jaggi7921   
Oct 13, 2015
Writing Feedback / Smoking is injurious for human health and the cause of a number of dangerous diseases [2]

Topic- smoking is bad for health. do you agree or disagree?

It is certainly true to say that smoking is injurious for human health. I completely agree with the given statement and discuss my view points in the following paragraph's, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

Typically, smoking causes a number of health issues such as asthma, lung cancer and many others. That is to say the person who smoke cigarette regularly would have more chances of heart attack. For instance, in 2013 The Time of India reported that 46% human beings died because of heart disease and from which 32% are those who are active smokers. Furthermore, the diseases are often very expensive and incurable. An obvious example of this is lung cancer, which is very costly in treatment and also causes 87% death in the world than other diseases.

Another drawbacks of smoking is it put bad impact on passive smokers. Non-smokers are those who don't smoke cigarettes but inhale smoke through breathing somehow. They also suffer from some type of illness such as eye and noise irritations. If pregnant women inhale smoke then it might be hinder the growth of the foetus and may result in death. There is also an evidence to suggest that passive smoking would result in lung cancer. However, for some who always like to smoke said that smoking doesn't have any bad consequences.

In conclusion, i would like to say that smoking is really a bad habit for both whether it is active smoker or passive.
Jaggi7921   
Oct 3, 2015
Writing Feedback / Is smoking bad? Nicotine Addiction essay. [2]

Put the staement frst-
In scnd paragraph HEALTH not healthy
People using to tobacco have higher gravity cancer than other WHO not CONSUME tobacco.
IT is better if u frSt complete the idea of burning tabacco ad then start ur second point like smoking.
Dnt mix it bcz it make poor clarity essay.

The third paragraph is off topic bzoz statement said is smoking bad or not?
Jaggi7921   
Oct 3, 2015
Writing Feedback / Cleaning up the environment essay - I WRITE it again give me your opinion and score IELTS [4]

First thing make the structure is more clear to understand ur essay easily.
Now, I think u have ideas but lack of explanation and unrelated examples.
In second paragraph the category of SPECIALISTS is not clear categoru means they are environment specialists or any other.
Next,use some linking connectors bcoz ur 2nd and 3rd paragraph not linked.
Jaggi7921   
Oct 3, 2015
Writing Feedback / Unethical methods of advertising - unacceptable in a society [3]

Let I try it -
A one strategy of advertising that considered unethical is the way to encourage people to buy the products Which might be unuseful and not affordable.Young people as well as children in particular, who are immature attract towards these products such as latest toy, music and any other and this can put stress on parents to fulfill their children needs. For example, my cousin who actually demand for those toys or things that he watch in television advert no matter what the cost is.
Jaggi7921   
Oct 3, 2015
Writing Feedback / Unethical methods of advertising - unacceptable in a society [3]

Topic - Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in society.To what extent do you agree with this view?

It is certainly true to say that the strategies used for advertising by some organisations are considered immoral and not acceptable in today's community. The essay is fully agreed with this statement and talk about why people think so along with some method in the following paras with a reasoned conclusion.

The first strategy that's unacceptable in these present days is misrepresentation of products. To be more precise, sometimes advertisers attach a slogan such as this product available for a limited amount of time, which consequently put impacts on people to buy the product within given time to take advantage of it without a consideration. For example, a TV channel Shop CJ, where always one time limit is displayed with all products in order to increase the sales.

A second approach for advertising that most of the Internet users use is pop up of websites. Actually, it is totally irritate the dwellers, because what data they want, open after a several pop-up sites. For instance, the Techmahindra.com, where for every click one pop up site is open. Another adverts of this kind is related to those companies which hire famous personalities to promote and to encourage people to buy their products. A best known example of this is Varun Dhawan, who promote fairness cream which is often has some negative consequences.

In conclusion, I would like to point out that many advertisers use different approaches to advert their products and most of these methods are not appreciated by the citizens,because it's just encourage them to buy the certain things.
Jaggi7921   
Oct 1, 2015
Writing Feedback / International exchange program - is it advantageous for the secondary level students? [2]

Topic - some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think it's advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued by some tutors that students exchange program advantageous for secondary level students. This essay will discuss that the benefits such as cultural exchange as well as learning soft skills currently outweigh it's drawback of homesickness.

Most of the teachers believes that through these exchange service teenage students become aware about the history and tradition of others countries. That is to say that students could become more innivative and creative, when they interact with overseas student and gain something new while travelling in these countries. Many countries also provides student exchange schemes such as NSE by the UK government, for young students in order to expand their horizon. Another compelling,or related, benefit is that students obtain a new method of teaching and skills. They can also sometimes receive opportunity to do work there. For instance, one of my friend who did study under this scheme,now get a good job in Canada.

On the other hand, some students often face the difficulty while living far away from their home. This might be because of their closeness to parents and may be due to parents love towards their children. However, this is not a great problem, because after spending some time with the foreign students they started forgetting this sickness. A recent survey be The Times reported that only 2% students have this problem,which is as compared to its advantages very less.

In conclusion,no doubts for some it is difficult to live far away from home,but, when we look at its pros then most of students not consider this problem as acute.
Jaggi7921   
Sep 29, 2015
Writing Feedback / Selecting an employees based on age - how this development is seen? [NEW]

Topic- in some countries it is illegal for company to reject job applicants for their age.
Is this a positive or a negative development?


It is certainly true that hiring an employee's based on their age is against of law in some nations. This essay will firstly, discuss about this negative development and then submit a other factors which company should keep in mind while hiring.

In my opinion, if organisations selected an employee according to their age then might be some experienced worker's not applied to that job. Which as a result, is a great loss for company and for nation, because these senior workers are well talented and helps in increasing firms production as well as boost the country economy. For example, in 2014 The Times reported that the company which have more senior employees could succeed in market very fast than others.

There is also,however,some other characteristics of a job applicant that one company should taken into account. First and foremost,employee should has a adequate qualification for the job in which they would applied. Last but not least,some senior workers leave their job due to some problems,but these employee's have a good work experience. So,it is better for the organisation if they give chance to them and this is also the second feature which company wants in workers.

In conclusion,age discrimination while hiring employees is not a legally acceptable in some countries.thus it is better for these countries look other qualities in employees during hiring process.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 10, 2015
Writing Feedback / Whatever lead our dreams for better life to become a reality, is our experience. [3]

Well written Linda.
I just find one or two error in ur writing such as
1.First, people all around the word make a decision and act based(ON) their interpretation about events
2.(BOOK) authors describe some theoretical issues without explain how to fulfil some exercises successfully.
Keep it up.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / Governments must support financially major cities because it preserve national tradition. [3]

Junisha i Point out some errors in ur essay such as-
1.it is total contrary that focusing in the major city could preserve the nation heritage because mainly heritage of nation preserved in the rural areas.

My comment is 'this is very confusing sentence' i dnt understand what u explained thorugh this line.
2.They are forgetting their root, such as now a days, people are meeting online from different country and getting married, in that way one person has different tradition and another has different.

My comment on this line is first its nowadays or now-a-days not now a days.Secondly u write one person has different tradition and another has differnt-its best to u if u also write what its effects to culture.

3.Youth are taught to follow own tradition such as marry in traditional way, native language, festival, worship of God.
Let i write this sentence-youth should be taught to follow their own tradition such as marry in traditional way,utilized their native language and celebrate festivals in their native ways etc.

4.In the give(n) two contrasts,

Hope its help u.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / 'Money can't Buy Happiness'. Being rich gives an opportunity to give back. [3]

Some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that it gives you the opportunity to give back.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Someone rightly said,'Money can't Buy Happiness',it is just fulfill our needs not contentment.Some people argue that giving financial helps to others as a rich has a crucial importance in today's world.I partially agree with this thinking of inhabitants because of the following reasons.

It is just simple to understand the causes behind why some people assert with 'giving back' option for the richest person's.First and most significant is that they think once our basic needs have been met then money could be contribute very little to our overall happiness and well-being.In addition,providing assitance in terms of money ot in some other forms to poor people not only brings prosperity but also helps the nation to remove poverty.Takes an example of Apple chief executive,Time Cook,who certaily donated his estimated $785 million fortune to charity.Such types of investments assist a needy people's to fulfill their demands and needs like shelter for house,food for eating and clothes for wearing etc.

In contrast,there is only one major argument on the other side of the debate.This is that some rich human being utilized all their money for thier own purpose like to adopt the extravagent lifestyle.They have got all the luxury in the world,with not an ounce of financial worry which obviously all the needy as well as poor people face.Apart form that,they can buy fantastic memories that they enjoyed and imagined with their relavtive and friends.So all in all wealth provides opportunity to find greater fulfillment in life.

In summary,we can see that this is clearly a complex issue as their both views have equally supporting ideas,So I think being rich its our responsibilty to donate some wealth to assist needy person but we can also use this money for our happiness and satisfication.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Young offenders should be equally treated as adults one's. [2]

Some people think that teenagers who commit crimes should be treated the same way as adults criminals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The juvenile delinquency is on the rise at an alarming rate has drawn much social concern.Some people think that young offenders also punished as same as adults one's.I partially agree with the idea of equal sentences and in this essay I will discuss why this policy should not be implemented.

Perhaps the principal reason behind the former view is that people think children are more likely to suffer from pschological problems than adults do.It is universally accepted that they are still in adolescence and immature stage,so they can be fully unaware about the criminal pursuits that they done and how it has hurt other's.Apart from that,nowadays television program are full of crime violence,pornography and bloody contents;they are often glorified and polished to attract youngster eyes and to be conveniently imitated.

Numerous studies consistently found that teenagers mental energy is ih the back of brain,whereas adults do their processing in the front.So the ability to taking decision among children are very low as compared to their counterpart.Nowadays this is also evident that bothe parent spend more time at workpace and have less time to supervise their kids.This is one of the main causes behind increasing the social problems between children.Although,it is scientifically proved that only parents can give the right direction to their children and kids happily imitate their action without any doubts.

Equally there are strong argument to treated adolescent in the same as adults do.Some people believe that we should be lenient with teenagers and give them easier sentences for their offences.However,the crime they are commiting are every bit as heinous as adults crimes,so this is very ridiculous idea to treated hiveniles different than adults.In addition,a crime is a crime,no matter who commits this crime the victim's family still suffer either crime commited by youngsters or adults.Many people assert that most of the youngster have personal problems but that does not mean they have to commit a crime to feel better,they just need to search for help.

In summary,we can see that this is clearly a complex issue as both views have equally supporting points.I think children who commit serious crime like murder,rape etc. should be equally punished,it really does not matter the age of the criminals.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 2, 2015
Book Reports / 'Emily as a victim of change' - critical analysis essay of "A Rose for Emily" [3]

I read it but i find the name of Faulkner is so many times,here u can also use he said that,his thinking about emily is that and also utilize some linking words which make ur story more attractive.like-

the most interesting thing about emily is that,
there are,of course,some people who think about,
it is fairly easy to understand the concept behind of emily, etc.
Hope its help u.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 2, 2015
Writing Feedback / Technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing; IELTS essay [3]

Hello jojoman,
essay is quite good but its not gain a effective marke until u dnt achieve tha task statement.in statement like cellphone tracking or CCTV both are stated and u need to covere these both which i dnt find in ur essay.

Another thing that i noted is that repetition like home,public sites etc.
Last i would recommend u put down some real life examples.
Hopes its help u.
Jaggi7921   
Jul 2, 2015
Writing Feedback / Affects of media on people lives. Danger of losing nation identity, negative influences on kids. [2]

At present the media affects people's lives significantly. What impact does this have on society?

It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives due to myraid reasons such as keep up-to-date us,broaden our horizons etc.Media also is a double-edges sword which means that there are positive as well as negavtive influences of media.In this essay I will emphasize on how it affects the people lives.

By now,we are all aware that media has had a termendous impact on our culture,behaviour,on the world-at-large.Perhaps the most significant affect on people lives is a weak relationship among family memebers,relatives etc.Take an example of Internet,rather than individual people interacting with their local community people they are instead interested in their online world.Consequently,society as a whole is becoming gradually disjointed and fragmented as people spend more time online.

There are also good grounds for arguing that in adopting the luminuos lifestyle of the developed countries,as telecasted on television,man has come to an extent that he had completely discarded his own culture.There are some obvious examples of explaining this like marriages is no longer a lifelong relationships,cohabitation has become a usual thing,and children no longer respect their parents and went to live on their own terms and conditions.The all would result in loss of particular nation identity.

Another compelling,or related,affect is that on younger ones like on television or youtube there are lots of dangerous stunt videos uploaded daily.Most of the teenagers imitates all these harmful stunts and perfomrs on roads,grounds etc. as we usually seen on highways.As a result,sometimes they badly injured and in some cases fracture of bones is evident.There are,of course,some dreaful or cheap news presented in newspaper,which put a bad affects on children the news such as divorce between celebrities,adult stuffs etc.

To conclude,I would like to point out that no doubts media helpful somehow but there affects on people lives is significantly more than its benfits.There are danger of losing nation identity,children lifes etc. which needs more attention.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 26, 2015
Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Books and Internet, which one is better to use to research? [9]

I think its perfect but some correction is needed
like in ur both body paragraph i find the same information,in the first para u explain the benefit of internet with the example of information,access.although in the second para u agan start with same thing but later u change.

So my sugestion is that try to put different idea in different paragaraph.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 25, 2015
Writing Feedback / It is quite common presently for younger people to have a break from studying after graduating [3]

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year after finishing high school and starting university studies.

It is quite common these days for younger people in man countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school to gain some real life experience by visting or working in different countries.There would seem to be clear benefits and drawbacks of this trend.

There are multifarious reasons to support the notion of gap year before entering into university education.Perhaps the major advantage in terms of personal life is that youngsters become self-confident when they travel away from their home,because in this situations they would need to takes all their decisions on their own ability.Other significant reason is that when they visit different countries they will get a chance to broaden their horizons and knowledge about culture and traditions of other places.

Another compelling cause is that while get admitted into university,students need a knowledge about specific field in which they starts their study.So take off year after high school fulfil this demand because it gives the opportunity to candidates to explore their surroundings while working in corporations.This would be a win-win situation from all perspectives.Academically,it is widely believed that the student who enroled in any works before university education may obtains good score than others.

There are,of course,negative aspects of this long-year break.The greatest drawback of this is that student would finds a difficulty to readapting the university study.Another possible problem os that when any younger one enlisted in any jobs then their curiosity about earning more money is increase and they leave the study.As a result,they may be lose the chance of gainng high salaries which paricularly only possible with higher university education.

In summary,we can see that this is clearly a complex issue as there are significant pros and cons to this proposal.But to gain sense of discipline,knowledge etc. this yar off would be beneficial for adolescents.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 25, 2015
Writing Feedback / The web let us have an easy access to the latest information and let us easily bond with each other. [3]

Overall its good points,u just need to short ur explanation and use some complex sentences.
Like in third paragraph u write-
information update quickest on the internet.newspaper,tv program and magazine do not as quickle have the latest information.
Lets i write-
another significant anvantage of the internet is that latest information is available of every second expect those which deliver the news of one day older such as newspaper,tv channel etc.

Hope this is helpful for u.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 22, 2015
Writing Feedback / The students should do part-time job to look at how different the real world is. [4]

Nowadays,many students doing part time jobs because in university working alongsides with study would be beneficial from many perspectives.
I still believe that there are lots of reasons(positive or negative)?
Working would helps student 'TO'
it is better if u short ur explanation and provide some clear examples.
May be it helps you.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / Family closeness is not so tight nowadays as it used to be in the past. The root cause of it is... [2]

Nowadays,families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this.why is this happening?Do the advantages of the trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Over the last half of the century,it is widely seen that families are become less close to each other than they were in the past and thie situation unbelieveably accepted in societies.This essay will discuss the reasons for this trend and also examine the pros and cons of this development.

One of the most common reasons for a decline in a family closeness is that luxurious lifestyle.Most of the family members are do works long time to obtains all modern facilities for their comfort but as a result they do not find a suffiecient time to spend within family as were in the past.Apart from this,modern technology another concern which is responsible for this isolation.For example,there are multiple online websites for chatting and people's are connected through this with each other.Moreover,they are interested in thier online life instead of interacting with their family in their free time.

However,there is ample eveidence that if people are not so close with their family,they could pursue their own dreams and may fulfil their aspirations.In addition,they easily could focus on improving their own lofestyle because of less interference from other's family members.Probing further,it might be the case that the family who less close to each other usually has less financial burden due to nuclear family.

Nevertheless.it should not be forgotten that due to less involvement,families often have less security.It is difficult world we live in and we need a support of people close to us to cope with modern life.Another drawback of this is that isolation,while person come back home after work they mostly need a family members,whom with they can share his feelings and could release all the tension.

To conclude,I would like to say that modern lifestyle,technology are the root cause of this happening.But,generally person can fulfil their dreams easily than in family.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 15, 2015
Writing Feedback / Health services should accessible for every person. [3]

Topic-advanced medical treatment are generally expensive. People's access to proper health care should not depend on their level of income.All people have the right to access the best medicine available. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Numerous studies have consistently found that modern health care treatments are unreasonably high in price and most of the people's still away from taking its advantages.Apart from this,access to possible medicines and treatments should not vary according to solary packages of individuals and governments should made it accessible for every person.I strongly agree with this opinion and put my supporting ideas below.

To begin with,since the technology comes in human's life,we seen a enormous changes in every line such as engineering,manufacturing etc.From this one is medical line,where multiple researches are conducted and have result in development of new equipment as well as treatments.But these treatments are so expensives that it is not a cup of tea for every person.As a result,people's who do not have a effective salary packages are still not access these services.This is proved by taking an example of Laproscopic surgery,which is advanced and heals quickle but the price of that is not afforadable by ordinary people's and also it not easily available at public hospitals.

Probing further,with the immense assistance of scientists,medicines for all diseases become available in market.But the problem of cost remains there,for instance,Chemotherapy medicine,which is the best cure for cancer.Because of high price of this medicine pooe people do not have the ability to buy this and thats why ordinary people suffer from cancer not rich one who easily buy all these medicine.

There is ample evidence to suggest that governments should take initiatives ad provides subsidies as well as funds to endorse the medical hospitals and make treatments and medicine accesible for every person.A well known example of this Canada,where authorities helps the health care services through general tax revenues.Furthermore,not only councils,but if rich people come forward for humanity sake to support and provide some help to lower level people then the problem of inequaitly is completely diminish.

To cap it all,no doubts advancement increase the price of treatments and medicines,But by providing proper funds this problem is reduce to some extent and normal people easily takes the benefits to save the precious life.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Celebrities get invited to international aid events. [3]

Topic-sometimes celebrities get invited to international aid events.Do you think such events deviate from their main purpose by inviting famous people?

Collecting money through big star studded charity show is always cosidered a effictive technique.There is a both sides of this,sometimes this method is beneficial but in some cases this deviate the main purpose of aid projects.In this essay I will outline the both arguments-its benefits and also drawbacks.

The most common advantage of this,celebs have used their fame to draw public attention to a range of humantarian and philanthropic activities.Take the Pulse Polio example of India,where a famous star Amitabh Bachan plays a crucial role to promote as well as to save the child's from acute diseases.As a result,their fans now come forward on highways and give the drops to all the children by stopping the vehicles.

In addition,not only numbers of people increase but also charity fun reached at the climax.An obvious example of this,Taylor Swift,the immensly popluar sonstress from the USA,has donated the profits from their charity concert in 2014 to Asian public school.What is more,as funds and numbers of human's escalate,then automatically event acheives higher amount of things from public for example,Blood donation camp,where event organiser collect a large amount of blood with the assistance of philothropies.

On the other hande,some celebrity takes the helps of this ais project for their pwn purpose even though the main goal of such events to emphasize addresing an issues directly related to helping people out with unpleasant situations.For example,Bob Geldof's live aid and live 8 campain,which promote their own brand with the name of charity.

To conclude,i would like to say that involving celebrities in such events would certainly have postive effects.But in some events it go worse.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / Reducing the walking distance. [8]

Topic - some people are reducing their walks.however many health experts say that walking is the best exercise to maintain health.why do people wal less? what might encourage people to walk longer distances?

It is universally acknowledged that health is wealth.Presently,walking is supposed to be a huge privilege for health of mankind.According to health professional,strolling daiy is effective for maintaining the health.But the interest of people toward walking is plunging day by day.In this essay i will analyze the leadind causes of the as well as its solution.,

Commencing with the first reason to justify my point is availability of transportation either it is public or private.People have lack of time in this busiest world and therefore,they want to cover distance by using transport modes in order to save their valuable time.Weather is also one of the factor for reducing the walking distance.For instance,people find it hard to walk in hot,humid and in extreme cold conditions.Furthermore,due to increased rate in street crime people shortened their strolling or quit it completely.

In addition,the access to fitness centre also contribute towards the reducing walk yards.For example,all fitness centre have equipment and machinery for people to have walk or jog.Apart from this,due to sacrce of land and space in most of the indeveloped and incipient countries do not have enough footpath for pedestrian.

On the other hand,Government should take initiative to encourage the people for walking,Firstly,they need to put the CCTV cameras or streets to reduce the crime.Secondly,they should provide pavements across the roads for walking,Lastly,they shoul spent some part of the tax in order to build the gardens and parks,whereppeople walk easily.However,here health and all medical checkup institution come forward and maske aware people about the benefits of walking.As a result,people know about all the pros and adopt this beneficial exercise.

To conclude,i would like to say that due to multiple reasons people are afraid to walk on street and reduce their foot walk.But for encouraging people to walk more authorities and health centre need to take some steps to aware about the benefits of this.

Plz band it.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / People are not satisfied with their lives any more - #TOEFL my reasoning logic and language usage? [3]

Overall it is good essay,some correction is needed for example,
1.Dnt put the question in the introduction.
2.2nd paragraph is quite effective one.
3.3rd paragraph is preplexing i dnt understand it clearly u need to clear explanation here.
4.4th one also good.

3rd paragraph,let i try
moreover,economic barriers also create a difficulty for the residents.for example,if we talk about past then all people got a same salary whether they are senior or younger one.But today older person face a problem in term of renumeration.

All the best.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 5, 2015
Book Reports / Lack of Civilization Essay based on the Lord of the Flies [3]

Well ur essay is too long can u tell me for which purpose u write this?
And the good thing is that all the paragraph are connected sophisticaley.
But in last paragraph u need some clarity like when u write about death of simon and piggy.
All the best.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / The increase of advance technology over the years is resonating around us, students. [5]

Firstly,introduction is too long,you need to write it in 40-50 words.
Secondly,u add one of the idea in the introduction like PAPERWORK MORE EASIER,i recommend u dnt add idea like this which later beneficial for our essay body structure.

Lastly,sentence formation,2-3 high vocab word also require.
Tnx.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Freedom to work and live anywhere. [6]

Spelling mistakes and capital letter are due to my typing.
But other ones i find important for me.
Tnx for ur contribution.
Jaggi7921   
Jun 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Freedom to work and live anywhere. [6]

But it dnt address the question properly.
I understand what u say but question is different there is live and work anywhere with the assistance of communication and transporation.
And where u stand in this question i bit confused.
Can u explain more?
Jaggi7921   
Jun 4, 2015
Writing Feedback / Freedom to work and live anywhere. [6]

Recently the freedom to work and live anywhere has become the main trend due to the development of communication technology and transportation.Do the advantages of these development outweigh the disadvantages?discuss.

The irreversible proliferation of technological advancement in the field of telecommunication and travel paves the way for modern man to enjoy the luxury of working and living in any parts of the globe.due to this unprecedented development the merits automatically surpassed its demerits that i will outline below.

To begin with,technology has changed the way of work and live that we have adopt before.nowadays,many scientific research in the field of communication brings the new revolution in our life.an obvious example of this is Internet.today we can perform our work at any place with the assistance of this tool.furthermore,all organisation put their presentation ad well as data online to give the opportunity to theri employees to work anywhere.Moreover,it proviedes ease in connecting with our beloved ones and freinds no matter where they are.

In addition,advancement in transportation also brings happiness on the citizens face.in past,for instance,in corporation when people did not have the effictive way of traveling then they need to stay where their company is located.But today the huge advancement in transportation make this process so easy now people commute daily and live anywhere like whether in family or in company areas.

In contrast,we all know that if one thing has the advantage the it always has some disadvantages.same in the case of communication and transportation field i also have some demerits.firstly,all the traditional way of communicaion is dwindled like face to face communication,letter writing etc. because of the development in this field.secondly,transporatation not only brings happiness but also the pollution which is responsible for people health problems.lastly,there is need to comprise with the utilization of such advancement to survive longer in life.

To conclude,i would like to say that no doubts communication as well as transporatation make the eople life so easier and happiest but here cons also present in today's life.so,people should need to aware about such problems and used this tools under limitations.

Plzz score it also.
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