zul2805_es
Sep 30, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary : Scramble to rescue tourists on slopes of Lombok volcano (source : The Times) [6]
Hi Sasariri, in my perspective you have good writing, however there are still several mistake. Let me give you some suggestions:
... as Barujari Mount, started the eruption ... Pay attention to the punctuation because the subject is Sub-crater of Mount Rinjani in Lombok Island whereas well-known as Barujari Mount is adverb.
It made people who were stillaround in that areathere in panic situations. After "who/which" you have to put verb or be.
It was noticeable that is no one injured. Still, after "that/who/which" you must to put verb or be.
AnA breathtaking scenery is the most ... Using article A/an is grammatically error.
Keep writing as it can make your skill improve.
Hi Sasariri, in my perspective you have good writing, however there are still several mistake. Let me give you some suggestions:
... as Barujari Mount, started the eruption ... Pay attention to the punctuation because the subject is Sub-crater of Mount Rinjani in Lombok Island whereas well-known as Barujari Mount is adverb.
It made people who were still
It was noticeable that is no one injured. Still, after "that/who/which" you must to put verb or be.
AnA breathtaking scenery is the most ... Using article A/an is grammatically error.
Keep writing as it can make your skill improve.