Holt Educational Consultant
Oct 27, 2016
Scholarship / Chevening is going to help me expand my network and relations with people who stick with their goals [8]
Liseth, you were able to revise your essay to enter into a more relevant mode of presentation. However, something got lost in the translation. While you explained how living abroad helped you learn how to network, the actual act of networking, in relation to the scholarship application disappeared. You concentrated so much on the project background that you accidentally mentioned the name of the doctor in charge of the project as the project head. Then promptly forgot to explain how you developed your networking skills as a member of this project.
You mentioned the goals of the project, excellent. So how was it executed? Who came up with the idea to network using the people and offices you mentioned? What was your part in it? How did you cultivate this contact and were you able to sustain it for future use? Do you continue to create networks today? How can you use it in the future?
I realize I offer a lot of questions for you to answer, but that is because you are expected to be able to present at least a framework of your past network as the basis of your future network that can help you and the other scholars if and when the time comes for you to need them.
Good revision though. Just keep on adjusting the content until you get it right. We will help you with that.
Liseth, you were able to revise your essay to enter into a more relevant mode of presentation. However, something got lost in the translation. While you explained how living abroad helped you learn how to network, the actual act of networking, in relation to the scholarship application disappeared. You concentrated so much on the project background that you accidentally mentioned the name of the doctor in charge of the project as the project head. Then promptly forgot to explain how you developed your networking skills as a member of this project.
You mentioned the goals of the project, excellent. So how was it executed? Who came up with the idea to network using the people and offices you mentioned? What was your part in it? How did you cultivate this contact and were you able to sustain it for future use? Do you continue to create networks today? How can you use it in the future?
I realize I offer a lot of questions for you to answer, but that is because you are expected to be able to present at least a framework of your past network as the basis of your future network that can help you and the other scholars if and when the time comes for you to need them.
Good revision though. Just keep on adjusting the content until you get it right. We will help you with that.