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'The death of my father' - UF Essay - A narrative of a meaningful event in my life

5 - i agree with acat6332. expand a little more in ur last paragraph. but other than that this is well...

Undergraduatekdizzle - Sep 26, 2009surfskateskim - Sep 27, 2009
FSu Essay "Vires Artes Mores" and how they reflect your life

7 - Thanks for the advice. I live in Florida too, and I doubt I'm going to FSU... I'm just applying...

Undergraduatepianogirl246 - Sep 19, 2009pianogirl246 - Sep 27, 2009
"Remember, life was not created sweet." - UF application essay

4 - After I state that I want to be happy, I'm starting a new paragraph. I'm majoring in pre-dental....

Undergraduatestaycold - Sep 27, 2009staycold - Sep 27, 2009
"Why essay" for help.

4 - Your story from childhood is compelling and well told, with exquisite imagery. Just augment it with some more material...

UndergraduateSeriousStudent - Sep 27, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 27, 2009
Michigan Engineering Essay (the field of aerospace engineering)

2 - This is fine, though a bit dull. It's OK for engineering essays to be dull, but you still might...

Undergraduatelonelysnakr - Sep 27, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 27, 2009
"What do you do for the pleasure of it?" MIT Short Answer

6 - I liked the first one better then the second one. It draws you in, unlike the second response which...

Undergraduatefbs801 - Sep 19, 2009vip747 - Sep 27, 2009
Rambo Verses the Boar; Descriptive Narrative Assignment

8 - This is more like it. You may not want to mention this, though: Few people are concerned...

Writing Feedbackneuromancer - Sep 18, 2009EF_Sean - Sep 27, 2009
Leaving Kabul for Chicago (U of Illinois Champaign Essay)

3 - Ok thank you for your help I will definitely look into those changes....

Undergraduatesuperrambo - Sep 26, 2009superrambo - Sep 27, 2009
Big Shoes- Personal Statement

4 - We are applying for the same scholarship haha. "But I could not rely on my parents as mentors...

Undergraduatetkkt1 - Sep 26, 2009rubeethursday - Sep 27, 2009
Statement of Purpose to KENT STATE MSFE

2 - It's awfully long, given the relative paucity of content. Try to cut down on the verbiage by eliminating...

Graduatemrchildchild - Sep 26, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
Stereotypes of Middle Eastern People - Michigan Diversity Essay

3 - Your essay is really good. The only constructive criticism I have is that perhaps you want to be a...

Undergraduatefatalist - Sep 26, 2009sherbert - Sep 26, 2009
how can school help new students get accustomed to new environment?

6 - thanks mrchildchil! ielts 8 band, it means that your english is excellent. in your opinion, with this essay, how...

Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009thinhtvdhtm - Sep 26, 2009
'Patient interaction' - University of Chicago Medical school Secondary essay

5 - More likely, the pressure is making you try to write in fancy prose rather than simply saying what...

Graduatereader2011 - Sep 23, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
Improving the Legal System in Azerbaijan (law school statement of purpose)

4 - Use an actual subject and an action verb rather than "it is..." For example: To promote Azerbaijan's...

GraduateEminK - Sep 18, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
Descriptive Essay -my next move in terms of education

4 - Begin by brainstorming what you would say if somebody -- perhaps a younger member of your family -- said...

Undergraduatekielu84 - Sep 14, 2008EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
Biased Metaphors in the Science of Reproduction

2 - You ought to get a good grade for this essay. You accurately summarize Martin's overall point, illustrating the idea...

Writing Feedbackjason123 - Sep 26, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
"As we outgrow..." - UChicago essay

4 - jajaja thanks :) the thing is that my sats are nowhere close to the ones they ask for i...

Undergraduaterimafadlallah - Sep 22, 2009acat6332 - Sep 26, 2009
Some thoughts on my "Obstacle" essay"

2 - i like it although i agree, the topic is rather cliche but i think that if you expand on...

UndergraduatewannabePA - Sep 26, 2009acat6332 - Sep 26, 2009
'How I adapted to fit in' - Meaningful experience

10 - i really like how you worded your essay it flows and it also describes your personaly like when i...

Writing Feedbacksly634 - Sep 25, 2009acat6332 - Sep 26, 2009
Comparison essay with subject on tolerance and power.

11 - To EF_Sean Hmm, I better be more careful with how I word things next time. Actually it wasn't until...

Writing Feedbackdanielh - Sep 12, 2009danielh - Sep 26, 2009
"Language is the soul of a race" - Umich essay on issue of local concern

NEW - This is my response to UMich's long essay prompt. Any help on content and grammar is greatly appreciated. Not...

Undergraduatefat_b - Sep 26, 2009 -
"the hospital room" - Common app short answer critique?

5 - Anyone?...

Undergraduatefreshed2def - Sep 24, 2009freshed2def - Sep 26, 2009
Personal statement "The fear."

5 - thank you for all opinons! Really helpful! This is my revised version. Is it getting better? It may...

Undergraduatelinhexi - Sep 10, 2009linhexi - Sep 26, 2009
Reading habits of Leeville citizens - Analyse An Argument. Rate on a scale of 6

2 - No, the argument does not state this. One study found that Leeville citizens reported this. In light of...

Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Sep 26, 2009EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
'the harsh reality of my injury' - Michigan Setback Essay

3 - Thanks Sean. I wasn't sure about the apologizing part as well...

Undergraduatelonelysnakr - Sep 26, 2009lonelysnakr - Sep 26, 2009
Good parents influence their children essay

5 - I think your introduction essay is too long. Why don't you make it shorter and divide you essay in...

Writing Feedbackkokidpham - Sep 20, 2009essay0405 - Sep 26, 2009
A paragraph about Dreams

9 - It is a paragraph not an essay....

Writing FeedbackMermaid1 - Sep 25, 2009designingsally - Sep 26, 2009
Common App about Calligraphy

3 - Thank you a lot.I will work on it....

Undergraduatepulp - Sep 26, 2009pulp - Sep 26, 2009
The image of the young boy; Scholarship/ Lancaster

2 - Pretty good. Some minor stuff: This drew me to study economics because e conomists are able to explain...

Scholarshiptawostar - Sep 26, 2009EF_Sean - Sep 26, 2009
UT admissions personal essay "alcoholism"

4 - you should explain how alcohal greatly affected you and what ways are great to prevent alcoholism. so far so...

Undergraduateandrew4038 - Sep 24, 2009asianbaybay - Sep 26, 2009
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