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GRE Essay on "skepticism in student's learning"

6 - Your essay mainly seems to be arguing in favor of the idea, rather than against it as your introduction...

Writing Feedbacknatz - Aug 9, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
"Questioning authority" - GRE topic.

4 - You need to elaborate more on your examples. At the moment, you are not using them to actually prove...

Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 16, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
Caltech Essay Prompt - Interest in math, science, or engineering

4 - Mayada I read your essay and only after seeing your reply to Liebe did I actually see your attempt...

UndergraduateMayada - Aug 16, 2009Llamapoop123 - Aug 16, 2009
Travel Versus Saving Money (IELTS test prep essay)

4 - Thanks guys for the corrections....

Writing Feedbackorlando - Aug 16, 2009orlando - Aug 16, 2009
During my life I learnt a wealthy amount of things, things that have come to define me.

6 - Try condensing the rest of your essay a bit too, making everything more concise and using stronger verbs wherever...

Undergraduatevaizardx - Aug 16, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
Hospice Volunteering - Common App Essay

6 - Do you have any more specific suggestions on how to do that? Another draft of mine had more detail...

Undergraduate2010nbailey - Aug 13, 20092010nbailey - Aug 16, 2009
"Justice can only exist when people obey laws that are not to their liking."

3 - Simone is right -- you need to start by defining what you mean by "justice". Virtually any definition you...

Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 12, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
UT austin personal essay A, but to write about family is little cliche..

8 - Bear in mind, too, that your choice of topic will also show how deeply aware you are of your...

Undergraduateskay - Aug 15, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
We are blessed with modern tools; Modern technology

8 - I have checked : be aware of is correct :)...

Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Aug 7, 2009arsdtbk - Aug 16, 2009
"to have clear & consistent values" - FSU "Vires, Artes, Mores"

3 - And if you could then show how Mores leads to or supports Vires and Artes, then your essay would...

Undergraduatekks - Aug 13, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
Musical audition - common app 1

4 - Thanks everyone! This obviously is very helpful to me. also where it says "Bishop Hendricken" in the first...

Undergraduatemikedaman9892 - Aug 14, 2009mikedaman9892 - Aug 15, 2009
'working in teams' - admission to a PhD program - cover letter

5 - Right, either you want a pure cover letter that says nothing other than "here are my materials" or you...

Letterszawash - Aug 14, 2009EF_Simone - Aug 15, 2009
"Difference challenges assumption" - UMich admission eassy

7 - I don't have any more to say. This is a very strong essay. Probably, you're not getting many comments...

Undergraduatefat_b - Aug 12, 2009EF_Simone - Aug 15, 2009
Frankenstein Essay: Critiques?

3 - A thesis needs to be debatable. Your isn't. Say something about the message of the book, preferably something that...

Writing Feedbackkenziii - Aug 14, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
Failing in school - Significant experience

10 - This is probably too negative for an application essay on this topic. You were a lazy student who did...

Undergraduateeect13 - Aug 12, 2009EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
"We the People" - Undergrad Admissions Essay for Ivies? Critique =)

29 - How are the other paragraphs? Do I focus too much on the setting of the competition (in the first...

Undergraduatezam614 - Jul 13, 2009zam614 - Aug 15, 2009
Analytical Assignment: use the images in the picture to show our culture

6 - Simone and Sean, thank you very much!^^ This is a great forum!...

Essayskplusy - Aug 15, 2009kplusy - Aug 15, 2009
Common App - Topic of Your Choice (Willie Jack)

4 - Well if this is a topic of your choice, and the essay is titled after your dog, you do...

Undergraduateshelby_l - Aug 14, 2009Liebe - Aug 15, 2009
"Good morning, visitors!"

10 - I wonder about gender. Starting in puberty, girls start to downplay their skills and achievements while boys tend to...

Undergraduatezay - Aug 13, 2009EF_Simone - Aug 14, 2009
Essay about important characteristics of a co-worker.

5 - ok, right, when I compare with the past, this characteristic is as vital as now. thanks...

Writing Feedbackarsdtbk - Aug 13, 2009arsdtbk - Aug 14, 2009
Values & Theroretical Perspectives In Society

5 - Thanks for the tips...

EssaysElleStar - Aug 13, 2009ElleStar - Aug 14, 2009
My dad has sensitive skin; Casa Grande High School, UC Essay #2

15 - I have to turn this in later today. I feel confident with this draft. Any last comments? Loud...

Undergraduatehawaii2010 - Aug 13, 2009hawaii2010 - Aug 14, 2009
an internship in the surgery department - common app short answer.

8 - Haha... The first two sentences take up valuable space that can be used to introduce your actual volunteer...

Undergraduatetal105 - Aug 13, 2009Llamapoop123 - Aug 14, 2009
Essay for U-Chicago - it's a little childish..

32 - You are right! Thank you very much! Right now I am considering of using the idea of "Are we...

Undergraduatetiantian12 - Jul 12, 2009kangnahua - Aug 14, 2009
Common Application Essay #1/Skating

6 - Thanks for the input. I realize that the essay needs a title. Any thoughts on this: ...

Undergraduatezeb1234 - Aug 12, 2009zeb1234 - Aug 14, 2009
"Swim coach Marks" - Admission essay 2 for UT

8 - I agree with the other comments-I think the essay is very well-written. Your voice really comes through in your...

UndergraduateMoreJosh - Aug 13, 20092010nbailey - Aug 14, 2009
"Running away"; "I'm sorry for all that is happening, but..." - rate my essay

7 - You need to clarify much more. The entire work is interesting but makes very little sense and threatens to...

Writing Feedbackkennethfatty - Jul 29, 2009kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
Our lives abound with examples of the importance of remaining creative

4 - Give the reader some examples about creativity in the modern world.....

Writing FeedbackDiddy - Aug 3, 2009kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
Should I include names in my essay?

7 - i like it! butt heres some things you may want to consider if your doing the common app online,...

Undergraduateppthecat - Aug 13, 2009tal105 - Aug 14, 2009
"Wildfires in Texas" - admission essay for UT

6 - this essay is very good. at first i thought o boyy, heres another essay beginning with descrpition, but then...

UndergraduateMoreJosh - Aug 13, 2009tal105 - Aug 13, 2009
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