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Oct 3, 2014
Writing Feedback / motives of people applying for work / forms of transport used for journey - IELTS Task 1 [4]
exercise 1 :
Overall, while there was a decrease in the number of people who seek pension and security in job, the number of others sectors experienced some enormous rise, especially in people with an aim for high status. the tenses do not make sense. You have some choices:
1. Overall, while according to the fraph, there is a decrese in the number of people seeking peoson and security in job, the other sectors experience some numerous rise, especially the sector where shows people aiming for higher status
2. Overal, while there has been a decrease in the number of people seeking pension and .. , the other sectors has experienced some enarmous rise, ..
secure job and pensionwaswere the most common motives
In the next five years, the gap between the three sectors was bridged, the same probelm as the first one:
1. has bridged
2. is bridged
This gap remained unchanged till 2005 again,
1. remains
2. has remaind
exercise 2 :
The bar chart also presents the reasons people
countries, especially in the USA,
work is no alternative - is the nonexistance of any other alternatives (you cannot use the graph lables in the writing. They are shorten than what they should be)
compared with others in UK, France and Netherlands, with
and walking - is walking a vehicle???
exercise 1 :
Overall, while there was a decrease in the number of people who seek pension and security in job, the number of others sectors experienced some enormous rise, especially in people with an aim for high status. the tenses do not make sense. You have some choices:
1. Overall, while according to the fraph, there is a decrese in the number of people seeking peoson and security in job, the other sectors experience some numerous rise, especially the sector where shows people aiming for higher status
2. Overal, while there has been a decrease in the number of people seeking pension and .. , the other sectors has experienced some enarmous rise, ..
secure job and pension
In the next five years, the gap between the three sectors was bridged, the same probelm as the first one:
1. has bridged
2. is bridged
This gap remained unchanged till 2005 again,
1. remains
2. has remaind
exercise 2 :
The bar chart also presents the reasons people
countries
work is no alternative - is the nonexistance of any other alternatives (you cannot use the graph lables in the writing. They are shorten than what they should be)
compared with others in UK, France and Netherlands, with
and walking - is walking a vehicle???