justivy03
Mar 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Original writing (ą 25 minutes): Bulgarian expatriates' education levels [3]
Hi Shinta, first of all, I hope you don't mind me addressing you in your second bame, it just remind me of an Indonesian friend who is very dear to me.
Moving on, I love the fact that you posted the graph in the essay, most essays don't have them. Now, what I notice as well in your essay is the choice of words that you used in your, some are missing an 's' and some are missing, the form of some words needs to be taken into consideration too, make sure that when your analysis is done in a present tense, regardless of the time the data is taken, the verb form should take the present tense.
When you do the revision keep your numbers and symbols in a uniform approach, this means you can keep the same form that you have written in the original essay.
I hope this helps!
Hi Shinta, first of all, I hope you don't mind me addressing you in your second bame, it just remind me of an Indonesian friend who is very dear to me.
Moving on, I love the fact that you posted the graph in the essay, most essays don't have them. Now, what I notice as well in your essay is the choice of words that you used in your, some are missing an 's' and some are missing, the form of some words needs to be taken into consideration too, make sure that when your analysis is done in a present tense, regardless of the time the data is taken, the verb form should take the present tense.
When you do the revision keep your numbers and symbols in a uniform approach, this means you can keep the same form that you have written in the original essay.
I hope this helps!