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USC TRANSFER- CINEMA- experienced faculty, dedicated students, and an inspiring city [6]
Ali, believe me there will be thousands of essays on middle east and war in Iraq. This does not mean you did not face hardships but you need to stand out. Your matter lacks a presentation of organized ideas.
Your father was being tortured. What a experience to mention here... Your first para can be that. Let that become the platform to the decision to move to America along with other murders. This is a dark period of our life that shows you became a man in small age forced by circumstances and how America was new life to you.
I love the uncertainty when you say,
There were people of different colors, speaking different languages, praying to different gods, and yet they were all living in the same area. It was hard for me to understand at the time
This is like a child like curiosity that brings a shade of your character. Good.
I have met people from all walks of life. They all came from different places, left for different reasons, and heading to different destinations. One thing they all have in common is that each person has a story of their own. I have spent my life so far talking to people.
Although, I think that first line is not completely right but the feel of these lines is good.
Now, your film career. You need to mention some more things such as
1) What inspired you?
2) What extra activity have you done apart from mobile videos? You see, you need to provide some base for the college to believe that you have talent and you should be on their campus.
Whatever the question maybe, we need to show everything possible in nice and subtle manner.
Hope this helps. :)