justivy03
Dec 5, 2015
Undergraduate / Students have a background, talent or passion that they feel they must write about. [4]
Hui, I read through your essay, it's very creative and true to the purpose of the prompt,
however, I suggest that you compress the paragraphs and keep it to at least 2 if you can.
When compressing, make sure that you don't delete anything that is relevant to the essay.
Overall, I must say that you have a detailed essay, it's also written to answer the prompt
properly and have the relevant information to create a good flow of the essay.
That's it for me, there not much to criticize, you have grown to love the English language and it
shows on your writing, I wish you the best of luck and do let us know what comes out of your application.
Hui, I read through your essay, it's very creative and true to the purpose of the prompt,
however, I suggest that you compress the paragraphs and keep it to at least 2 if you can.
When compressing, make sure that you don't delete anything that is relevant to the essay.
Overall, I must say that you have a detailed essay, it's also written to answer the prompt
properly and have the relevant information to create a good flow of the essay.
That's it for me, there not much to criticize, you have grown to love the English language and it
shows on your writing, I wish you the best of luck and do let us know what comes out of your application.