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Name: Jhonies Saysi
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niesaysi   
Jun 24, 2013
Grammar, Usage / 'Class who is absent..' - Which is more appropriate to say? [14]

The second one is anyway wrong.

Yes..the second one is grammatically wrong. Actually, it is supposed to be, " Do we have absentees today?" I overlooked it.. Thank you very much.

Dumi,
May I ask a certain question?
Why is the word "class" has a different meaning in writing?
niesaysi   
Jun 19, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Leisure time is for improving mind or resting mind? [4]

Another great activity that can be done in spare time is learning programming languages because it has useful capabilities to convert a simple code into a working program capable in doing different functions like word processing programs that can interpret, correct and organize your essays and letters.

Note: As I read your essay, I just observed that you focused only on your point of interest upon spending your leisure time. It is indicated in your topic the other stand of resting mind during spare time. Although you have mentioned a bit in your intro supporting such ( .... to recover from the stress of everyday life ), I think you still need to give more details about it.

Hope my feedback will help you a lot:)
niesaysi   
Jun 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / parents are the first people who show the children what they should or shouldnt [7]

Children spend most of their time at school and in their homes , where not only do they study for certain subjects but also they learn to be cizvilizied and good people .

Children spend most of their time at school and in their homes , where they do not only study for certain subjects but also they learn to be cizvilizied and good people . Evade writing first the simple verb "do" on that clause since you are not asking a question ( do they..; instead they do..)
niesaysi   
Jun 1, 2013
Grammar, Usage / 'Class who is absent..' - Which is more appropriate to say? [14]

Hi,

I am now enrolled in this subject, Methods and Strategies of Teaching. Our professor reminded us that when we are in the field of teaching, we need to be careful in constructing sentences. He added also that it MUST conform the rule of appropriateness. This is my concern, which is more appropriate to say: " Class, who is absent today?" or " Class, do we have absent today?"

It seems both of them are grammatically right, but Im so confused which I will utilize in my demonstration teaching with regards to checking of absentees. If I commit error of appropriateness, the evaluators will retrench me with points on that criterion.

Please let me know. Thank you.:))
niesaysi   
May 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Narrate how did you overcome the challenges to achieve your goal(s) in life [6]

Well.... I cannot find a connection of these lines. They don't give any clue about what you are going to write about :(

Yes, it is a bit ambiguous.. Sorry for that. However, what I'm trying to say is that despite of all the challenges in my life I have felt that my goal to become excellent in speaking English is continuously going to be realistic. This is an overwhelming achievement for me as if I'm holding the peak of my success... Anyway, I

understand your point. The lines are not directly implied, which for readers are quite unclear.. Thank you for that. If you wouldn't mind, can you suggest a much better introduction for it ? I'll really highly appreciate it, Dumi.:))
niesaysi   
May 6, 2013
Writing Feedback / Narrate how did you overcome the challenges to achieve your goal(s) in life [6]

Please do comment and suggest about my essay. It is a preliminary assessment for my creative writing subject.. Thanks in advance:)

Time really flies so fast. I was just dreaming it before, but yet I am almost holding the peak of my success. Everything flows accordingly, and I owe that much to God who gives me always hope to pursue my aspiration in life.

English is part of the curriculum that is why it is vital to learn it. When I was younger, I did not know how certain words be combined appropriately and form into a grammatically correct sentence. I knew some words but when I tried to use them in a sentence, problem took place. It was pretty confusing to be heard and understood. During my first year in high school, our English teacher reprimanded me; for I was a slow learner. Likewise, my classmates mocked me as "BOBO" ( incompetent). It was hurtful though it is indeed true. Similar situations occurred when I confidently took part in a certain writing contest. Gossipers involved me in their discourse, and undoubtedly it again became a controversial issue in the classroom. I knew it was stupid to level myself along with those aspiring writers, but to win was not my genuine intention. What I wanted was to grab such opportunity which might greatly enhance my English writing ability. Additionally,prior to my high school graduation, I had planned to memorize the rules in subject-verb agreement. I feel shy to say that I still did not master it that time. We had been studying it since first year, but I always forgot. I graduated high school with a lower grade in English.

All those experiences have been my inspirations to stand firm and make a good change. Instead of taking them pessimistically, I have rather served them as valuable things to prosper and develop my incompetent part. Challenges are not all times bane. They are intended to make us inspired and go on with everything. It is true that they hurt us and hinder our plans, but it is up to us if we will let ourselves get affected. Remember, regret is always in the end. If we became weak at the time trials have faced us along the way, regret will only be the consequence. We commonly utter this, " If only I became strong, I would not be failed ". A man with full of hope is a man who is unbeatable.

With my perseverance, I found Essay Forum as an online site which impressed me with one reason. I witnessed that there are a lot of the members who have been striving for improvement. I just thought I finally found the best place to develop my writing skills using the second language, without any insecurity and degradation. All are working, not just for themselves but also to help everyone.

I was very determined. This was what I felt in compelling myself to be excellent in English both in speaking and writing aspect. I was driven by my determination to study college taking up a bachelor degree in secondary education major in English. I planned to teach nowadays, and it has been my will to urge my future students to not dread committing mistakes in learning English. Most of all, teach them in an easy mode with love of the language that great learning has something to do with the so-called " help"- do not belittle those who are incompetent, but rather "help" them to be great as you are.

Filipinos are very conscious with the correct grammar usage; ideas are quite put aside. This is because of the belief that ideas cannot be put across effectively if the sentence is constructed confusing. Having this environment is a big challenge for me. Nevertheless, it would be plain if we challenge ourselves instead of the challenge does it to us.

Yet, it only takes a year for me to graduate in my chosen field of specialization. With all these challenges, one philosophy is made. Whatever environment we have, no matter how perfectionist people are, and even we have committed with so many failures, be optimist all the time. This is my philosophy in life - my technique to overcome any challenge and achieve my goal.
niesaysi   
Apr 26, 2013
Undergraduate / Throughout my past, I was not heading in the right direction; Texas State U [8]

For my own opinion, you have discussed the topic well. . You have also achieved good organization of the ideas. With regards to grammar, you're good. There is clarity of what you are trying to explain. You know, as I read your essay, I was picturing out the character of your sister, and that is for me the most essential-- the capability to influence the readers. For me, it is already ok.
niesaysi   
Apr 25, 2013
Undergraduate / Throughout my past, I was not heading in the right direction; Texas State U [8]

I was not heading in the right direction, nor had very many influential people to look up to.--remove the comma..
She has always encouraged me to do my best; always pushed me to reach my goals.-- put an appropriate conjuction
She has always encouraged me to do my best and always pushed..
She's been emotionally and physically supported me for years..
Sarah isn't just my sister; she is the one person I will owe all of my future success to.
She whipped me into shape, explained to me that in order to have a successful future I had to get my head on straight and, start working towards my goals,and push myself to my limit...

Seeing that she iswas usually right, I picked my grades up..

Without her I would be on the same path that I was following after my first year of high school, I would still be the same ignorant person wanting everything handed to me on a silver platter.

This is a run-on sentence. Leave out a necessary conjunction in combining independent clauses. "Without her I would be on the same path that I was following after my first year of high school, and I would still...

She has shaped my life in endless ways, forced me to scale the unmovable obstacles in my path, and taught me to not worry about the past and focus..

Don't ignore the importance of conjunctions so that you will not lead to common sentence faults. I like how you describe "Sarah as an epitome of your being".. Just be careful in using pronouns because that may sometimes bring you to ambiguity. I appreciate it actually:)
niesaysi   
Apr 24, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Strict Punishment for driving offences is a must to curtail traffic accidents [8]

Undoubtedly yes! There should be strict punishments to be imposed for such matter. Prime reason is that we should think the welfare of the passengers. We all know how essential for them to assure security that is why the government should enact policies impeding the usual occurrence of road accidents. Companies as well as drivers must be required to follow all the policies and regulations; otherwise, they will be punished.
niesaysi   
Apr 22, 2013
Writing Feedback / Parents always have efficient and vital impact on a child's success in school [2]

No one can deny the benefits and positive effects..
Opponents of this position may say thatClassmates can affect the way a child learns. To some extent, there is some truth in this-- you need to support this argument 'cause this is a sort of generalization.

Parents know exactly what is the most effective and successful way to acquire knowledge and put this knowledgeit into practice.
Therefore, it would be simple for childrenare easie r to get high marks in tasks..
Parents' experiences and advices can be anin valuable guidance for kids to overcome difficulties and get success in their learning, children's relationships too. .

This is an argumentative essay. Therefore, I encourage you to defend your stand by presenting evidences. Likewise, it needs a little bit of refinement in terms of the organization of your ideas. Use transitional devices appropriately to connect every sentence and to put effectively what it intends across.

As instance,

Therefore, children are easier to get high marks in tasks or exams by means of parents' support.
and thoughts with classmates than parents because parents are unable to understand them.

I would suggest that you should add supporting detail prior to this sentence, "Some people also argue thachildren can share their joys..."Because of this, you have committed sentence irrelevancy.

All in all, you've discussed the topic well nman. Great try.. just need a minor revision. I like your conclusion to be honest.
niesaysi   
Apr 17, 2013
Undergraduate / List and discuss your most significant leadership/service activities/award [2]

.. but also had to start learning about the way the educational system was structured
but also influenced me to work hard and persistently in school.
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When regards to grammar usage, you're excellent! Nevertheless, your essay needs to consider which you will discuss first. Since your topic is all about "most significant leadership/service activities/award", therefore your introduction should not be too long discussing your experience when you transferred to your father. Three or five sentences will do. When I reflect on the word leadership, I think about my family and the way we adjusted ourselves to the American culture. When I left Peru almost three years ago, my life changed drastically. -- this is quite good. The only problem is that the supporting details. You better reduce them and then directly focus on your main topic. Likewise, supplement your ideas regarding your leadership experiences. Undoubtedly, you've gone through a lot on that aspect. What I just mean is that your opinions dealing on how meaningful it is to be a leader. Though you have mentioned it there somehow , it still needs additional details.
niesaysi   
Feb 2, 2013
Undergraduate / Nurses make a difference every day!; Personal Statement (NURSING) [3]

1.My passion for nursing was sparked early in my high school years, during which .( You better cut your sentence here 'cause it is too long and tiring to read.)... This was when I made frequent visits to the hospital...

2. Staying in the hospital for numerousmany(or specify it how many weeks, days or months..numerous is seemed inappropriate) days...
3. Over the course of four years, I saw the dedication andof hardworking nurses in the hospital environment ...
4.Not only did these magnificent people take care of my family members, they also did an outstanding job in assuring my family and Ime ( rather use "me", since the usage is in objective type) ..

5. Spirits were lifted, fears were eased, and our hope were increased ( apply parallelism).
6. I knew from them that this experience..
7. Being a first-generation college student, not only willby becoming a nurse will give my family a sense of pride,..
8. I have motivated and shown my school and myself that I have achieved academicallyalso academic achievements, ..

-Studying nursing will be a new chapter in my life that I will strive to succeed at in every way possible.-- I commend this sentence. Great!

I like how you have organized your ideas. Good luck !
niesaysi   
Jan 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS IMPORTANT OR NOT? [3]

not uncommon -- common

As an ordinary person, we would be well-advised to attend university to gain knowledge and skills as well as the degree and certificate that are still very essential for us to get a good job.--- I think this sentence should not be included in the third paragraph since you are discussing about the other view. I suggest to incorporate it in the second para to achieve good organization of ideas:)

I agree with Dumi that you should omit the last sentence in your introduction unless you will support it with a relevant detail.
niesaysi   
Nov 20, 2012
Book Reports / What are Mary Mebane's implied points for Blacks in "Shades of Black"? [2]

There was a lot of Segregation between white-skinned and black-skinned men. However, Mebane's essay explains deeper about black-men's lives; social classes in college, unfair-accomplishments, segregation among black people, and old fate for black-black skinned women--let's omit this 'cause it is already understood as segregation of the black people . Mary Mebane explains all these topics clearly throughout his essay.

Lastly, Third class were students of working class(;)to who were just filling up the population.

Darker the students, the harder to they achieved fair judgementfor accomplishments . One of the reasonsAs instance,was thatthe faculty expected lighter-skinned students to being more intelligent than black students.

Segregation didn't stop with just ruining school-lives and working lives of black-skinned people, but also social lives. Since most of the people arewere favoring light skins, black-skinned people had started hating their own skins. And this resulted another segregation among black people: They did not accept black-black-skinned women. They considered black-black skins as ugly, and this caused black-black women to take refuge inwith makeup to hide their black skins.

All of these discrimination of black-back skins leadledto the result of black-black skinned women having only three gates to be accepted by the congregations. One was to attach herself to a light-skinned women expecting someone to look at her. Another was to make herself sexually available. Maybe this is why there are so many black holes in current periods. AnotherLikewise,(try to make use of other transitional device) was to resign herself to a more caste life-style; domestic work or churches. Black women participated in religiosity often were the ones who accepted their worthlessness. Like this, many black men, especially black-black skinned women had have to reject themselves and treat themselves as worthless.

When there was a great amount of numbers of black people giving up their worthiness, there were also the ones who didn't give up to achieve real human rights. Often, they didn't give up when there were protests of black people ; which helped them to realize that they have powers- powers to deny something, power to strike anyone who can't strike back, and power to ride someone down.

The topic you've chosen to criticize is undoubtedly interesting. I remembered my Afro-Asian Literature subject which we tackled about apartheid or a political practice of segregating black and white people.
niesaysi   
Oct 31, 2012
Writing Feedback / His life has been unusual; The Spectacular For Me [2]

The sentences italicized below are factual statements form a particular person who has made this essay feasible. I dedicate this to him. Feel free to comment as to grammar usage, paragraph development, transition of ideas etc.THANK YOU.

He is the spectacular individual I met- the spectacular person ...

Having an "ambiguous" sexuality makes him unwelcome in the society where he lives in. It really came to a point he did not mingle to anybody else most of the time; for he does not want to feel being discriminated especially if it is public. For him, it is a sort of humiliation which he actually the thing he feels afraid of.

His life has been unusual. It is very challenging for him to live according what his nature wants to be. " I takes more time before I could make certain adjustments that they may feel glad of me." I once heard this statement form him. The sorrow, solitude, regret and hopelessness he is usually experiencing have turned him numb. Every word that comes out his mouth seems only he who could hear. It is such residing in an island full of sadness, whispering at his self instead calling others to listen up.

The man I met is not talkative; he is quite shy- the way he talks, moves, and acts. I could see in his eyes the notion of perseverance to overcome "it" though he looks so down. The way he was telling his experiences sounds not lively. In fact, anyone would try to listen to him may make his tears fall down. Obviously, it is dimness that covers him. The gleaming sun that will give him with excessive light might have been behind that darkness waiting for his call of reinforcement. Emotionally, problem is difficult to remedy unless heart finds already the thing that will relieve its pain. Our feelings may get hurt if we also let our hearts in pain. Therein begins an emotionally extreme problem which engages us in distress.

There are people who cannot accept homosexuals. They are insisting that there are only two sexuality- male and female. How about the renown homosexuality, gay and lesbian? I remember when one says this: " Homosexuals are not creations of God. There is no such "term" as stated in the Bible, merely men and women." Although it is somewhat true biblically, the reality that they are here living with us cannot hide the truth. Whatever may happen even if we will invert the world, gay is still man, also lesbian a woman in terms of the physical aspect. But internally, they are "they" who like to be men and women. They are genuinely not sinful unless they commit things that are not pertinent to the laws imposed by human and laws created by God.

One time I just thought , "Is this man deliberately rendered by our almighty God with such sexuality or he who has chosen it?" We are all disgorged in this world with just rights in all of the things He has created. No one has more,likewise no one has less. Every thing is given with equal rights. However, what is supposed to occur becomes opposite of what is ought for us to have now.

Why do homosexuals, particularly gays, disrespect, by others? Respect is not complex to solicit from people; just respect them, too, will do. The experience of being disrespected typically happens depending on certain factors that others may be able to respond insultively either through verbal or non- verbal means. It could be gays are happened to be tactless and looked disrespectful. In effect, their impression is pessimistically established.

He added also. " I want to create a new image, a good image that will uplift the stage of recognizing gays to the peak of satisfaction. I know that there are organizations promoting the rights and welfare of the gays and it is really good!" Then, I asked him a follow-up question: " What is your message for those gays who are building a disrespectful impression, thus creating a bad image?" Unexpectedly, he did not answer what I thought he might do say. " I will not ask for their change. If they are happy with their doings, I think there is no reason for them to be compelled to change for the better. Let them realize what things are good and let be learned how to rectify the mistakes they have done. Like we believe, be true to ourselves and to other people. It is the only way to achieve happiness which is the ultimate satisfaction in life.
niesaysi   
Aug 12, 2012
Writing Feedback / (teacher salaries / being unique for success?) - TOEFL Essays [4]

Since there are inadequate experiment facilities, few students can participate in science lab classes.

It is obvious that facility investments would provide students with practical and hands-on experiences during a wide range of classes, and eventually would bring advantage to sustain good education quality .

Thus, investing in (let's try to make this a little bit specific) investing for educational facilities rather than raising teachers' salaries would be more effective..

this is an argumentative essay. your topic is about the salaries of teachers as a factor to have a good quality of education. In my point of view, it would be more better if you defend your topic,which is teachers' salaries, highlighting that it has really an impact to the quality of education. To stick with your topic, you have to broaden and support it. In your essay, you've chosen to discuss facility investments and teachers' motivations that is why you fail to achieve relevancy .
niesaysi   
Aug 2, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'family, school, and state' - CAUSES OF DROUPOUTS [3]

I am happy that you have corrected my mistakes. I really like your revisions!! Thank you a lot, for the effort, concern,and clean edits. I will immediately rectify the introductory part by considering your points..
niesaysi   
Aug 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'family, school, and state' - CAUSES OF DROUPOUTS [3]

Actually, this is the introduction for my undergraduate thesis. Please do comment. I'll highly appreciate it!!

The study focuses on causes of dropouts within the university. Variables such as socio-economic status, environment, chosen discipline, unexpected occurrence, performance of the students as well as performance of the school can link this research study to ascertain the remedy of the problem.

Dropout carries different negative notions to us. This occurrence has distinct effects that may connote deprivation of choice and of right to study, feeling rejection or disqualification, and failure by which are caused by various factors.

Data as cited by Mario B. Casayuran of Manila Bulletin issued on last June 4, 2011, according to the Commission on Higher Education (CHED), it shows that the dropout rate is at alarming 83.7 percent, meaning the country is producing 2.13-million college dropouts annually. However, causes of it appear unclear resulting to existence of several researches to verify the standard factors evident among dropout college students.

Poverty is the common root of the infinity of educational problems. Even how much lower the tuition fee is, students cannot evade disregarding the value of education because of the incapacity to finance other basic needs in life aside from educational expenses. In that sense, socio-economic status is undoubtedly affected them vastly. Parents cannot support them. They disengage themselves from the school to prioritize self-working in order to survive.

There are likewise students tend to drop out due on disliking the chosen discipline. This may be preceded through parents' choice and substandard grades to take the course interested. Although they accept it, it is bitter for them that, as they are taking it, they choose to drop out in the latter. A situation like this impels to develop sense of enthusiasm beyond learning, instead inclines on the growing lists of dropout students.

In teaching-learning process, motivation is very vital, along other positive environmental factors affecting the students' willingness and the completion of their studies. Of all variables, environment is really a big thing. Students are needed to be highly motivated by the environment, either be influenced intrinsically or extrinsically. Intrinsic as well as extrinsic factors affect widely the students' performance. Certain results such as poor grades, untoward behaviors, boredom, and consistent absences are impacts that may be brought by inappropriate offering of classroom environment. Facilities, methods and strategies of teaching, classroom management and setups provide important effects for students be motivated and discouraged the causes of dropouts to take place over themselves.

Students' performance upon getting unqualified grades to move on through the next level may be of cause by the result achieved during the assessment or by untoward behavior. In this case, possibility of dropout may be the effect. There is somehow prerogative to retake the subject if ever got failed, but most cases they let them be dragged by feeling of being exhausted and just accept the occurrence.

Classroom environment is a place where the teachers must have a high teaching devotion in motivating their students. Boredom begins because there is lack of motivation usage. As a result, students rather spend most of their time mingling with friends and colleagues. This is also makes them fond of doing trifling things that ignore substantially valuing education.

Services that the school can fully give is somewhat that the students' reason of dropping out. Practicality exists upon them just to benefit good and high quality of education, coziness, and assurance to have a fulfilling job ahead.

As an addition, factors that are "unexpected", for instance, pregnancy among women, penetration of married world, transfer of place farther enough from the institution, and severe injury, may end to an abrupt defer of studying or rather may leave the school.

To conclude, with all these causes, mere finding them out is not enough to impede students be disengaged from school. In fact, there is no accurate solution that is tested already. But the family, the school, and the state can end up this predicament. They have significant roles to secure the welfare and future of the students. However, all these recommendations would be useless if there is no expected adequate budget. As an alternative way, parents must acquire determination and in spite of poverty, students need their invigorations and encouragement, their moral guidance toward taking the right path. Moreover, teachers, having different roles, can influence the missions and visions of the students. They must be inspiring, considered the negative effects of boredom, and built a strong relationship to them. Most of all make effective motivations by giving to them reasons to strive and to succeed.
niesaysi   
Jul 7, 2012
Research Papers / Looking for research titles in line with the field of teaching [6]

yes.I just thought there are lot of approaches that can be effective enough upon learning it...

Hi deepakbaniya! If you wouldn't mind, can you give me idea regarding this matter?Our final submission "will" be this coming tuesday, july 10. I am afraid with the title i've passed. What if my professor would be disapproved it?.. I need alternatives. And that is also why I'm collecting more topics to assure the approval..

Hope there are helpful people will be posting different topics. ANY topics..

Thanks a lot!!! I love you all...
niesaysi   
Jul 6, 2012
Research Papers / Looking for research titles in line with the field of teaching [6]

It could be general education or much better if about English(e.g grammar,literature..)

Actually, I have passed already a topic to my professor entitled "EFFECTIVE APPROACHES TO BOREDOM OF STUDENTS IN LEARNING THE ENGLISH GRAMMAR"..
however, I need more to assure the approval of my title.

thanks..i'll highly appreciate any topic related ...

please help me
niesaysi   
Jun 28, 2012
Writing Feedback / 'selecting a city as my favorite place' - TOEFL:Where to Visit [2]

Hi! I just edited some of your errors.

Others are more courageous andtowards undertaking the risk of traveling to new and unforeseen places and cities. I belong to the second group whom dreams were always travelling to a far beautiful city which is located in another continent. If I would have a chance to visit every city in the world, i would like to go to New York. It's based on the reasons explained below.

First factor influencing my decision to choose a city is the beauty of the citythat of its beauty-- you have to eliminate the use of the word 'city' to evade redundancy.You can use pronoun to replace it.

In a beautiful city i can not ( what you might mean is that you "can") enjoy the view of streets and buildings ,i also will be able to have a good time and calm my mind.--This is a sort of faulty sentence 'cause it lacks with certain conjunction to connect the two clauses..You may revise it as this : I can enjoy the view of streets and buildings in a beautiful city and also it will provide me good time to calm my mind/ I can enjoy the view of streets and buildings in a beautiful city because it can provide good time for me to calm my mind. .
niesaysi   
Jun 22, 2012
Writing Feedback / PROSTITUTION: WHAT CAN BRING IF IT IS BEING LEGALIZED? [5]

The outburst of prostitution here in our country is obviously unstoppable and it is the matter that I am truly concerned. For the government, this is something they must be taken seriously at this moment. Its vast effects toward the people and the entire nation are so so breakneck, but it's so disappointing to know that the issue about it doesn't still become prudent. Rather, it turns more controversial.

Prostitution is known as the oldest profession in the world. But in our country, Filipinos remain unrecognized it. In short, prostitution is an unconstitutional act. However, it has already legalized is some corners of the world believing this is the very best pace to reduce crimes like rape, battery, robbery as well as to prevent the swift widespread of sexually transmitted disease (STD). Likewise, it even becomes beneficial economically knowing prostitutes have been one of the big burdens in our country.

Today, most crimes reported were commonly with prostitution involvement. It would be of great ease if this will be eradicated readily. However, although the government has enforced laws punishing off prostitutes, it is sad to say that prostitution still ongoing and unobstructed. Many people, yet, have STD which is really so risky because the cure for it has not been found until now. There were also reported prostitutes killed due of rape and battery,even clients become victims. Different crimes that prostitution can bring in our country. It is certainly a big burden. Furthermore, the practice of this is quite detrimental beyond preserving morality, especially in this case of most children. No parents like to hear their children saying, " I dream to be a prostitute!". Just for morality preservation, parents look down prostitution. Christians consider it a sin for monogamy; the act of sex is ought to be done only when a man and a woman are in love and married.

Prostitution is now rampant mostly in some urban places so that is so interesting for lots of Filipinos debating such thing. I actually see its cons in our society like what most means of communication broadcasted and posted. The fast growing number of prostitutes is continuous and this something alarming because the country is already full with much serious predicaments.

I'm wondering if the government tends thinking effective tactics to impede crimes prostitution has brought. In an article I've read, it depicts that legalizing the decriminalization of prostitution can be a more peaceful and less effort way to impel problems like STD, crimes, and as an economic burden. This could provide health security for STD's avoidance. Applicants may then be requiring by the government to undergo screening process before they can able to penetrate the world of prostitution and also they will be compelling to utilize sexual protection on their daily basis sexual contacts. In this way, sexually transmitted disease rate can be reduced. Legal prostitution can assure safe working environment for the prostitutes. By government intervention, both the client and the prostitute will be on safe, thus crime can be avoided. Additionally, abusive pimps can be eliminated, More than that, legalized prostitution can be economically beneficial. Once this is being legalized , it will become taxable. Thereby, the country can benefit it. Prostitutes, like other workers, are taxpayers.

Moreover, Philippines is a Christian-centered country and Filipinos value much morals, values, and ethics. So, the legalization of prostitution may be probably so difficult to impose for a certain reason- people will definitely oppose it. More Filipinos see it as a picture of lewdness, sinfully influenced their views upon moral and ethical aspect of life. If in case that the government will ratify prostitution, I do not know what it accompanies to influence children's insights. When they grow up, I can't even imagine the contingency to happen over them in a sense this is acceptable.

To sum up all, every man knows what is right and wrong. It is over people's decision to engage themselves to prostitution. Whatever may happen, this is unavoidable because it is natural when tackling human's pleasure. But still, there is nothing more important than taking the path of righteousness and goodness. Prostitution violates the principle of monogamy. In Philippines, it is highly unaccepted and therefore punishable. What is good to do is that remain it unconstitutional for the welfare of everyone's morale. Socrates connoted that to do wrong is an act of ignorance. So why dares to promote prostitution?
niesaysi   
Jun 20, 2012
Writing Feedback / MY ANXIETY BEYOND THE QUEST (and Philippines) [2]

Facing up your fear is said to be the better way rather than escaping it. This ideology is something that influenced myself to conquer one of my anxieties- to speak and write using the English language.

In our country, Philippines, the utilization of English as a second language has come into point that every Filipino is yet fond patronizing much it knowing its benefits towards them are greatly encouraging and worth spending effort for. But learning it is quite hard especially when there is extremely no interest to merely urge ourselves to be diligent and patient upon attaining the highest level of learning-COMPREHENSION- as well as using the language pertinent to the grammar's rules. For me, it is still not enough that I've just mastered it in terms of writing without understanding during discourse. Speaking English is complex and it is my weak point. Sometimes there comes to a scenario while I was watching English movies,it really happened that some of its occurrences were confusing due the characters spoke the language differently as in so difficult to comprehend. I just thought what if one time I meet an American citizen and eventually we are having a conversation, does he/she could understand my way of speaking or could I able to get easily whatever he/she would put across?

Genuinely, this is my fear. Nevertheless, I have to face it up courageously. Another reason why I am so awkward to speak English is that in our nation, grammar is vehemently prioritized than understanding, particularly when studying at school. So, either of the two macro skills, speaking and writing, use the language grammatically correct because if not someone will definitely notice it though there is fluency of language usage. I am afraid to be corrected(it feels like a sort of humiliation). I do not want to see anyone, mostly those who are educated, smiling, not known to me, I was already committed mistakes. This truly hinders me to be fluently an English speaker.

Getting my fear goes, I am now taking up a degree in education mastering English language. Even gradual, I can come up well just by continue striving to gain more improvements. Of all types of quest, this is the one which has taught me to bear in mind and make as one of my educational philosophy this line, "Nothing is complicated when you are determined to do your will." My will is plain but I initially took it not. It is positive but I made it not, too. Just grateful when I sternly fronted it, made me realized the error I've done. Fearing it is totally my wrong. This is my anxiety beyond my quest!!
niesaysi   
Mar 1, 2012
Writing Feedback / ACCOMPLISHMENT REPORT: ENCOUNTERS UPON OUR OUTREACH PROGRAM WE CONDUCTED [2]

Please help me! I profoundly welcome whoever would post ...

To eradicate illiteracy and promote functional literacy for the out of school children; this is our main goal which the Alternative Learning System (ALS), as part of the school curriculum, has given us a privilege to somehow fulfill one of the country's worst predicaments- high illiteracy rate. Those children, age ranging 5 to 16, who have also been never gone to school or dropped out of school, have made our program undoubtedly purposeful because not only them the specific learners are but also ourselves who have significantly learned. They helped us to equip our self's development and sense of community as well as our critical thinking and problem solving- these two are belonged on the five learning strands of Alternative Learning System curriculum.

December 3, 2011, when we started to conduct the program entitled I Love Sabado ( Saturday) in a certain barangay in our city. First, we divided our class into six groups and assigned to do teaching every Saturday around 2:00 pm to 4:pm. Then, every group selected three teams to teach reading, writing, and arithmetic. These are the teaching categories that each group has to teach. From these categories, I was assigned to teach reading. Being in this sort of teaching, our general objective is to teach the students how to read correctly and properly. Learning to read was not easy for them most especially if they had no background idea about how to read. However, we taught them in a simpler way for them to be able to relate well.

To take this activity more successfully, I have observed that it is imperative to exercise good intrapersonal and interpersonal relationship to evade social conflicts which absolutely the primary hindrances toward achievements. Self-discipline is one important value that I have learned also to communicate better with my co-Als workers and students,and with the barangay staff as well. My fellow Als workers have taught me how to be patient. In addition, I learned, too, the significance of teamwork towards a common goal. Despite of the students' mischief, I could still receive from them a reward and that was an unmeasurable happiness every time they could understand what I was trying them to teach. But all of these would not be contingently happened without the noble barangay staff, particularly the barangay captain and the president of the village, who fully extended their cooperation by providing us with a convinient place for the betterment of our program.

Despite such positive accomplishments, problems did not truly let us free doing every thing without a corresponding conflicts. As instance, when we began seeking for our learners. There, we got a problem like the group who would lift the task to gather qualified learners (mapping). Though there were some who had volunteered, they had more complains rather than the number of the learners they had gathered. Unity was missing at our first action. That was also the time I started to be reactive which only contributed a worst output. We likewise met problem upon our venue that the barangay captain was initially recommended on us wherein is actually an open wall one. This type of place structure might only contribute problems to be brought by other children and other forces which may be devastating to execute teaching through the students. Due this encouter, we did quick action by sending another letter to the barangay captain requesting to shift to a covered place. Somehow, it was swiftly granted, therefore a place protected even from the natural forces was rendered finally. On the other side, some problems were brought commonly by our students like inevitable mischief. They also spoke harsh words and doing things their own which they hated whoever would try them to disturb. Nevertheless, we kept them to understand and maintained our strong patience. Generally, the main reason why all of these dilemmas happened is because of our being reactive that merely blocked our mind off what the best to do.

I could say that the result of our conducted program is successful. It is because we were able to immediately fix problems although blaming each other is unavoidable from us. Group stability is also a great factor that helped us get out over problems. This activity is really worthy because it catered challenges accompanied with various lessons that have taught us morally and intellectually. However, it would just be more worthy if we became proactive most of the time as well as if we focused on the specific needs of the learners like teaching them the proper hygienes, moral aspects, and importance of numbers in daily lives, instead of just teaching what a certain topic is all about. In short, there is still indication of teaching reading, writing, and artihmetic but these must be integrated upon the needs of the learners.
niesaysi   
Oct 8, 2011
Undergraduate / 'Media influencing people in negative way' issue of personal, local, national [2]

Even though media like magazines, television, or internet is to broad our mind and gain new information for our advantage, but the present media has gone too far. This sentence must be consisted of affirmative and negative sides.If the first clause is introduced with a conjunction even though, it must be answered by an opposing idea.Therefore, it should be:

Even though media like magazines, television, or internet is to broad our mind and gain new information for our advantage, but the present media has gone too far. It must be deleted and changed such the present media has brought disadvantages to us.

Media, which suppose to communicate people with influence, havehas controlled our mind in negative ways that affect people's life majorly.
Oneself can stop the impact of media has to their life, but the society seemsto forceforcing them to act.
By one's transformation in tointo what others think as attractive, he or she may continue to be more influenced.

Good!!
niesaysi   
Aug 18, 2011
Grammar, Usage / Adverbs are the worst - too many adverbs spoil the soup [9]

ADVERBS:CAN BE PLACED BETWEEN LINKING AND MAIN VERB?

PLEASE help me to understand if an adverb can be in a position between a linking verb and a main verb. It is quite confusing for me in times I will construct a sentence.

There was someone told me that placing adverb in that manner might be evaded.
To be more explicit, there are some examples below.

1.I was usually tried to oppose him.
2.Shewas early became an orphan.
3.My motherwasfrequentlyscolding me.

Is it one of the standard rule in sentence pattern?
niesaysi   
Mar 31, 2011
Writing Feedback / What motivates people to change?Any change is accompanied by drawbacks and discomfots [4]

.People change because of pain , want to be better person , bad conditions ofin life , bad habits , want to start again their life , people change to coexist with their future.You may write it shortly like this...People change because they want to start a new life, to ease pain, and to coexist with their future.

Like the Egyptian revolution ofon 25th ofJanuary--what year?... , it motivatedto change the whole people motivates them to work , to build their country , to become the best people in the whole world. Many people after this revolution changedabout 360 degree. However, even it doesn't reached the bottom degree, there is at least 10 % change in the way they think, live, and dream for tomorrow to have the best life ever ..

I think you have a lot of practice...
there are lot of grammatical errors...just practice,my dear.
niesaysi   
Mar 30, 2011
Writing Feedback / Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS [3]

thank you.
I am really flattered from all your comments sir Kevin!
You know, your CORRECTIONS serve as my inspiration in writing an essay. I really bear it to my mind while I'm writing....
I hope someday I can write a perfect essay. And I believe that this website is a best tool towards it..
niesaysi   
Mar 25, 2011
Writing Feedback / Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS [3]

Philippine country is one of my inspiration why I am continue to take care and enrich natures. I have seen how beautiful and abundant the country when it comes to the world of nature. I could say that Filipinos are a nature lovers. They acquire good qualities on how to keep nature rich. They become a good steward and do the best what God is wanted for it; God stated in the bible that man should take care of all His creations, and one of them is nature.

With 7,100 islands and islets in the Philippines, some are currently no names and probably contain 99% of various kind of undiscovered animals, trees, flowers, and plants. However, the country still let these islands or islets to live away from people to secure welfare. Additionally, these certain places said too far and in the middle of the seas find really find hard to go. Philippines is contented of the nature it has; the same as the people who serve as the motivator and responsible in implementing security laws for it.

But yet, I am much challenged. I noticed how nature is gradually destroyed. How green turns into silver. What I mean is the decreasing of trees in aiming to build buildings and other infrastructures. That's Philippines now. While years up, there are big changes happened in the economy and whole society. Many things are existed because of science and it affects nature.Filipinos become quite observant with the reality and they have found that Philippines is late in the level of modernization. It is the reason why the government abruptly conducted possible ways to come up with discovering and inventing through the important uses of nature. That, perhaps, the mistake they have decided. Consequently, they used it in wrong way and as a result, many are lost-their lives and their jobs.

Philippines suffered from flood, landslide, earthquakes, and other natural disaster. Although the country is rich in natural resources, it also rich in producing a catastrophe. The country, even it has a modern living, still incapable on how to prevent wrath of the nature. Nature is a great source of man's necessities. But man becomes abusive resulting into having of nature crisis.

I know that Philippines has enough time to preserve nature. I will not stop protecting it and promoting program to regain what is gone. The way of preserving nature is formerly Filipinos goal in life. But now, it also gradually disregarded and they are much focused with their forthcoming future. In short, they become a practical thinkers. Maybe they changed because of economic factors.

The country, although laws in nature are implemented, doesn't avoid to use it improperly. Meaning, some people still can evaded government upon opposing a particular law. They must know how nature is powerful. The disasters it may provide can affect a thousands of people. In case it will happens, it might be a remarkable moment because many will expected to lose like their families and assets. Nature's vengeance signifies that people should stop doing things against it. Deforestation is usually people do. They cut trees for building infrastructures illegally, meaning, it is not permitted by the government. Kaingin, a Tagalog term, or burning of trees before to do planting such as vegetables and fruits,is also great in the Philippines. It is a form of agriculture which, on the other hand, provides negative effect to the environment like global warming. However, the government increase securities concerning to trees, wild plants and animals by designating educated people who will serve to guide and protect it from illegal loggers and hunters.In that way, the government will preserve nature and maintain its abundance. Many concerned Filipinos donated either material or immaterial things ,which used in promoting environmental programs like planting trees for the beautification of the streets, and implementing reforestation to make trees still beneficial to people. Moreover, with the valuable use of modern technologies, Philippine government become easier for them to protect nature. It is also a big factor that helps natural resources more progressive and become an infinite source of needs.

Philippines has rich natural resources which ought to be preserved. And that is my aim. I will not let it gone. As a matter of fact, I am much challenged of what is happening- a sort of challenge that measures myself as a certified Filipino nature lover.
niesaysi   
Mar 16, 2011
Writing Feedback / TOEFL-"forest is disappearing but needs to be saved." [8]

hello...

I hope you will provide your opinions about my eaasyessay which helps me a lot!

These distinguishing aspects can be implemented into our lives..

you know, there is paragraph emphasis. I like your paragraph writing. Your central idea is written consistently...great!
niesaysi   
Mar 15, 2011
Undergraduate / "Why I want to teach English abroad" -Essay for Teaching Assistantship in Spain [2]

After graduating from University I knew I wanted to work abroad, to gain an understanding of international travel ,andto see the world from my own eyes, and tomove beyond college textbooks and stories from professors.

For me, it is good to apply parallelism for that sentence...

Teaching English abroad would , of course be the opportunity of a lifetime, but more than thatwould give me the opportunity to see the world from another perspective, and broaden my view of the situations I come across and the people I meet. While in college, I had the chance to meet people from all over the world..

Being that Spain is the mother tongue of the Spanish language, I want the opportunity to learn Spanish from which it began.
..and I havehad all of them to thank for my growing interest...
share it with the world and have an open mind with those I've come across..
...a rewarding experience in helping someone achieves their goals

Not only I am passionate about teaching, but also I am passionate about traveling and experiencing as much as I can--i like this sentence! you've made the third paragraph ,for me, absolutely great....
niesaysi   
Mar 13, 2011
Writing Feedback / Being Perfect not only in school [5]

I'm kind of a perfectionists ...
I think the situations is much worse when I get to work..

Time out and I endedit up having not yet finished..
I keepkept yawning in class the next days and teachers noticed it. Such perfectionism didn't do me any good..
I believed that my perfectionism willwould get me going to do my best...

Your essay is lack with supporting details for your topic. I think you will make it more better if you concluded explicitly what is the pros and cons of perfectionism...However, i see a little bit of it but I, as the reader, wanted more...

And the most important is the right shift of tenses...that a writer commonly get mistakes.


---Nobody is perfect. Butpracticemakes perfect --
niesaysi   
Mar 8, 2011
Writing Feedback / Admired characteristic to understand ourselves [6]

Don't say that you're a bad writer. We are committed to have mistakes. Later...or right now, you will become not just a nice but a great writer, okay? So, pls. don't worry. Just practice and make writing as a habit.
niesaysi   
Mar 7, 2011
Writing Feedback / Admired characteristic to understand ourselves [6]

hello!
he or she can also achieve achieve from life experiences...

I really love your essay although I have little correction..

KathyLala
..just not only admire those characteristics but acquire as possible... ^^

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