Writing Feedback / What person from the past would you like to meet? [4]

If I had ever get a chance to travel back in the time to meet a person from past, than it would undoubtedly MR Mahatma Gandhi. I would like to meet him for many reasons. In the following paragraphs I would try to explain the reason for my meeting.

Mahatma Gandhi was known as the " Father of our nation". Because of him our country has achieved the independence from the Britisher's. Gandhi selflessly fought for the independence, and for which he adopted the policies of Non violence. This new policy was initially criticized by people because one has never heard of a fight with no harm to anyone. But Gandhi convinced all the people about this new concept and make the British government forced to leave our country. I would like to meet him to learn about his patience and confidence about his decision.

Gandhi has also taught various good valves to the public. One of which represent the lesson, "Don't say bad, don't look at the bad things, and don't hear bad things". This lesson looks very simple but it has a great impact when followed. Because this teaches us to follow the path of truthness and to avoid getting involve in the bad things. Furthermore, this helps in maintaining love and peace in the country. Therefore, Gandhi has taught the human values for which he is still remembered in our nation with respect. Thus I would like to meet him to learn about his attitude of being calm and lovable to everyone in life.

In addition to this, Gandhi was not a very magnificent personality. He was very thin and always wear simple cotton clothes. Although he was graduate from an London university, he used to travel aroud the world in his same clothes. He believes that a person can be better judged by his heart not by his external appearance and, therefore in other country too he has got the same respect and dignity. And other countries also remember Gandhi as one of the important leader in the world.

Thus I would like to meet Gandhi to learn the patience, positive attitude and the confidence towards the life. If I would get the opportunity then I would myself grateful.

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Writing Feedback / TOEFL - Is it important to donate money to protect environment? New Era diseases [6]

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There are various way that a company can help in society as a whole. I strongly believe in the idea for the donation of money in protection of the environment. In the subsequent paragraphs I will explain the reasons for my preference of choice.

First of all, now a days, we all are living in highly polluted environment than our ancestors . Air, water and noise pollutions makes the environment difficult to live This result in many New Era diseases such as allergies, cancers and so on. Therefore, companies should help the society by making an effort to control this pollution. They should make use of the equipments for the purification of water or air. Moreover companies itself create and use of the machines which leads to less pollution in the air. In this manner they can create an easier environment to live in.

Secondly, this large organization groups must perform the activities that create more natural environment. Such as, more plantation, development of an areas with natural surroundings i.e gardens and so on. Furthermore, they can plan in development of the cities by creating an awareness in public about the natural surroundings.

Thirdly, big companies can also support the protection of environment by making the use equipments which causes the proper disposal of waste products from their factories. In addition to this they must hire the places for disposal of waste products from the society such as dumping stations. In this manner, they can help in protection of various air and water borne diseases and can contribute an healthy environment to live in the society.

In conclusion, companies can make individual life happy and healtier in the society by creating an environment free of pollution and diseases. As well as by enhancing the natural beauty by developing the greenery surrounding everywhere.

Writing Feedback / fun and entertainment; "Playing games is important for both adults and children" [4]

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Playing games is important for both adults and children. Agree or disagree.

In my opinion, I totally agree that playing games are important for both the children and the adults. Games proves to be beneficial for the adult and children. Games improves mental skill, physical strength of a person as well as it is best way for fun and entertainment. In the following paragraphs I will explain reasons to support my choice.

Games help the person to improve his mental skills. Many of the games allow the adult or a child to think conceptually while playing. For example, games which includes question and answer makes a person think about the particular question before giving answer thus it makes the person to think logically for the correct answer. Furthermore, this games also increase the observation and orientation of the child and adult. Many of the games involves to perform particular action or the task. For example, drum shiraz, is a game in which a person has to act without saying a single word, thus the other person observe the action performed in a more proper manner to get the correct answer. Therefore, mental games provide a mental exercise for the person.

Some games also helpful to keep oneself physically fit. Usually, a child or an adult get involve themselves in certain games which has physical activities. Such as, games with running, laughing, and so on. This games help a person to make use of physical labour along with the interesting activities, therefore a person perform his task and get a physical fitness without much stress.

The games are the best way for fun and entertainment. Every adult or a child get bored with their daily routine activities. While playing games they feel themselves in other world of entertainment with no worries and tension. Therefore, it is the best way to get relaxation. In addition to this, games also increases social skills, By playing games in group, helps to built up relationship with the group members and also better learning of collaborating nature.

In conclusion, I must say that playing games is very important for children and adult for developing their mental skills, physically fitness and to get interpersonal skills.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essay"Technologies has made people learning more quickly and efficiently. [4]

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Do you agree or disagree, "technologies has made people learning more quickly and efficiently".

I totally agree with the statement that technologies has made learning easier and efficient. I would put some reasons to support this statement in the following paragraphs.

With the help of technologies, students can gather information regarding any subject in a much easy manner. Previously, students have /has to search in the libraries or has to get information from the experienced or knowledgeable person about any topics. But now with the help of computers and the internet, a person can find accurate information within no time. By making the use of search engine in the computer, a student can learn and find information about anything. Furthermore, even the libraries are now dependent on computers. They provide an online catalogue facilities to the students to find the books and articles in an easier way without wasting time. Thus with this technology, learning will be interesting and easy.

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Writing Feedback / Think of a skill that a person should have in order to succeed in modern world. [3]

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Toefl Essay,"Think of a skill that a person should have in order to succeed in modern world."

In my opinion, the most important skill to be successful in today's world is to keep oneself updated in every field.

One of the advantage of keeping oneself updated is that, No body can misguide you. If a person is aware about the particular subject than he can present his view if someone is trying to mislead him. For instance, If a person is purchasing a home and he has information about the prices, than he can bargain about the price instead of just finalizing the deal with no arguments. Therefore, a person can make himself protected with other's wrong intention.

Another thing is, knowledge gives a confidence to a person to perform the action. With his knowledge a person can take the new decision by keeping him aware about the positive and negative aspects of particular decision. This make him confident about the action he has to performed. For example, a company manager whose is updated about the new marketing skill, make his decision accordingly and he will be confident about his idea.

Knowledge helps the person to think rationally and make him aware about the rapid changes taking place in the world. Thus a knowledgeable person change and adjust himself according to the new situations easily. This would be helpful for him to be successful. For example, If a advertising company make itself aware about the new methods of attractive launching then it would make this benefit the most in its advertisement for better impact on the public. Thus it make him a better competitor in the world.

In conclusion I must say if a person is updated then with his knowledge make him confident to take risk and easily adaptation in the field if competition. And also make him able to think rationally before taking any decision.

Writing Feedback / Toefl Essay "Do you like to eat out or eat at home?" [2]

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"Do you like to eat out or eat at home?"

As the people get more and more busy now a days, they prefer to eat at the restaurants or other food stall. But I would still prefer to eat at home for various reasons. In the following paragraphs I will explain reasons for my choice of preference.

Although the restaurants serves the food in an appealing garnishing manner but the major concern is the hygiene. The restaurant food may or may not be the fresh food, or may be prepared with unhygienic manner. But by seeing the decoration no one understands the bad aspest of that food. But if the food prepared at home, we will be sure about the cleanlinessof the utensil used. Moreover, some vegetables loose their nutritive value if overcooked, this can happened in the restaurant the most because they just concerned with the taste which can be better added by using artificial flavours.

In addition to this, now a days with the equipments like microwave, oven, mixer grinder makes the cooking much easier in less time. Infact, cooking with this equipments is fun. This helps you to experiments new varieties of delicious food in less time. Furthermore, homemade food during parties and get together gives appraisal from others which makes oneself happy about her effort.

Apart from this, eating at home gives you the choice to eat according to your health. Various restaurants cooked food with various artificial and spicy flavours which can cause harmful effect on health on a long run. For instance, heart patients, ulcers patients, eating frequently out will make their disease worst in nature. But at home , every one can eat and prepare choice of food recommend according to their health.

In addition to this, the most important reason for eating at home is to have a dinner together with my family. This is really a very important time, to talk with my children, husband at the time of food make myself happy and feeling of togetherness in the house.

In conclusion I must say that eating at home gives the opportunity to be with the family at the time of food. Also it gives the option to eat healthier and the hygiene food.

Writing Feedback / Good child should respect their parents, support, help them in their need time and make them proud [2]

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What are the qualities of good son or daughter?

The qualities of good son or a daughter should have depends upon the nature of the parents. But every parents have some common expectations from their children. Such as respect from their children, best achievement in life and their children must make them proud.

Parent wants that their children should respect them. They give their best effort to grown them up . Since birth of the child, parents try to fulfill every need of their children and for which they sometimes have to faces many problems, but they just do it because they have to see the smile on their child face. And when the child grow up, if they don't understand the struggle of their parents and don't respect them , they will hurt their parents. So good child should respect their parents.

Every parents want that their child should achieve their best in life and for this they guide their children accordingly. A good child must always listen them and should never be disobedient or rude to them. A child should never think that his parents is trying to make him follow their decision but rather he should understand about their feelings and respect that.

A good child must help their parents in their need time. Parents has done a lot for bringing up of their children. But when they need help of any manner such as financial or at time of illness, their expect their children should be with them and support them. So It is the responsibilities of a child to support their parents at the time of need.

Apart from this, one common expectation every parents have from their children that, their children make them proud with his achievements and behavior in the society. And thus they teach good things to their children. A good child must keep that teaching in mind and never perform the things in the life which make their parent disrespectful in the society.

All in all, a good child should respect their parents, support and help them in their need time and always make their parents proud on him.

Writing Feedback / Toefl; Who would you like to meet? Mr. Amitabh Bachachan [3]

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What famous athlete or entertainer from the present would you like to meet?

If I could meet a famous entertainer than, it would definitely be Mr. Amitabh Bachachan. He is the superstar of the Indian movies and has performed in more than 300 movies during his career. Meeting with him gives the pleasure to know about the him off screen.

Mr. Bachachan has a magnificent personality and the voice. But this qualities does not attract people to watch his movies, it is his acting which gives an appealing attitude to the public of various ages to bond with his movies. He has performed various different roles in the movies such as, in the lead role, as a father, grand father , comedian and so on. But in his each character he has shown the deepness of that character which makes him remembered in everyone's heart. For instance, in one of his movie he has played the character of the father who has four children, but in the later stages of life none of his child gave him support. In this movie he has given a lesson to the public that if someone has the confidence in himself than he would really get out of the troublesome situations. Therefore, meeting such a person would teach a lot .

Mr bachachan has been in the entertainment world since 40 years. But he had also face the downside graph in his career in means of finance. But he had never loose hope and tried a lot to overcome the situation. For this purpose he has started a television show, which has changed the manner of Indian television screen. The manner and the respect with which he talks to the general public in his game show makes him lovable to everyone. This is the another reason for me to meet him because this shows his optimistic nature towards the life which makes a person capable of handling the difficult nature.

Therefore, it would be very inspiring to meet such a versatile actor.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay For children it is better to grow at the country side or in th city [3]

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For children it is better to grow at the country side or in the city. Agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that selecting a proper place for growing up the children seems to be an important decision for the parents. Every parent wants their children to be successful in their life, and for this, they give their best effort to grow them up. Many parents argue that growing children at the country side is more beneficial because cities are polluted which results in bad health of the child. However in my opinion, city would be the best place for the growth of a child. Cities provide better education, better development and better facilities for the growth of a child.

Cities provide better education facilities to the children. There are varieties of school such as government schools, private schools, Montessori schools and so on. Therefore there would be various options for the parents to select the best school of their choice for their children. Moreover, transportation services are more proper in the city areas, so reaching towards particular place becomes easy. But as compared to this, countryside places give the only option of the school that too may be not located at the nearer distance. Hence many of the children have to face problems while studies.

Big cities do provide extra curricular activities to the children which would be helpful in the development of child. For instances, sports, art and other activities which give the opportunity to develop their hidden art along with the studies. In addition to this, there would be various competition for the exams and activities which make the child to utilize his/her art in a better way and to prove himself in the society.

Also, big cities has various facilities to make human life comfortable such as hospitals. If the child get sick then proper treatment at the proper time. Along with this various technologies, market places, were there and, this things would be helpful for the children to understand today's world. Anyhow a child has to grow up by gaining the knowledge from the surrounding and has to compete in the world to prove himself.

In conclusion, I must say that the children can be better grown up in the cities because of the facilities available for education, other creative activities and to get the knowledge about the various technologies development.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay What do you prefer, learning by yourself or learning with a teacher [4]

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What do you prefer, learning by yourself or learning with a teacher.

I support the view that teachers should be the part of learning. Many of the student feels that self studies provide a better learning experience. However, in my opinion, teacher helps you to get proper direction in studies. In short, teacher provides guidance for particular subject, give explanations and answers to our questions and, also teaches us the techniques of learning.

Firstly, teachers provide their guidance in particular subject field. They give a systematic and better approach for the subject. Teacher always teaches a subject in which he or she is expertise in. With their experience, they provide important information about the subject, ways to gather information, such as, suggestion regarding references books etc. In addition to this, they also make us aware about possible mistakes in a subject while learning. In this manner, a student can get the proper and accurate information about the field of his/her interest with the help of teacher.

Secondly, teacher provide answers to the questions while studying. As we all know that, learning new subjects would causes various doubts and questions. Therefore, at this moment, teacher gives an answers and avoid misinterpretation of any information. Furthermore, some students remain unaware about their mistake while learning. Teachers keep observation on each student and make them aware about their mistakes.

Finally, some subject requires practical learning or experiments. In such subjects, teacher's guidance becomes essential to get the proper results. For instance, chemistry subject requires various experiments, which would be difficult for student to perform independently. Slight variation in technique would cause different result. Thus, teacher provide a proper technique to perform practical in a proper way.

In the end, I must say that actual studying has to be done by an individual. However, learning can be made easier and interesting with teacher. Hence it is better to learn with the help of teacher than by yourself.

Writing Feedback / Toefl;Government should definitely spend money in improving transportation services [2]

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"Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation. Use specific reasons to support your details".

Government should definitely spend more money in improving transportation services. Although, many people argue that improving road conditions would reduce accident rates, but in my opinion improved transportation services would be advantageous to general public. Good transportation would provide better living condition, income to the government and more job options in the country.

First of all, improvement in transportation would lead to improved living condition in the country. Cars and other motor bikes make use of fuel energies like gas, diesel etc. This causes emission of carbon mono oxide in the atmosphere and results in air pollution. This would affect general health of the public. Furthermore, more traffic causes more traffic jam and noise pollution and more accidents. Improved transportation would encourage more people to make use of it, and thus reduces the risk of accidents and provide an healthy environment to live.

Second, transportation would increase income for the government. By improving roads government would spend money on it, and does not get anything in return. However, by increasing number of buses, trains and other services would allow government to raise its income by collecting fares. This income could be better utilized by the government in other development methods.

Third ,better transportation services leads to increase in job opportunities. Increased transportation services would provide services such as drivers, managers, maintenance jobs and so on. This would causes employment option for people in different areas. Thus more career option for general public. Therefore a general up liftment in the society.

All in all, improved transportation services would be beneficial to the general public by providing healthier environment, improve funds for the government as well as create more job option to the public.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay"What are the qualities of the good coworker?" [4]

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What are the qualities of the good coworker?"

I've have worked in several offices and met with different coworkers. Throughout, in my experience, I think good co worker should have certain qualities. He should work in a co operative manner with others. He should be helpful in nature and show understanding with others, and the most important he should be active in work.

A good coworker must work in a collaborating manner with team. In today's business, each company works on the principle of team effort. Each person in a team has to work in a coordinate manner so as to get proper completion of project. If a coworker does not work cooperate in the team, try to prove himself better in a team, than it would arise conflict situations at the work place. Furthermore, spoil the working atmosphere. Therefore, a coworker must understand other person opinion in a team, and represent himself as a team worker not as an individual.

A good coworker should be helpful and show understanding at work place. He should be comfortable with the changes in scheduling timings, show understanding between the group members such as ready to do extra work, exchange of work and no problems with new procedures in work. Moreover, take his responsibilities seriously because if he does not perform proper work then it would affect each member in the team.

In addition to this, the most important thing is that he should be active and have interesting attitude in working atmosphere. An inactive person would unable to finish his work on time and make excuses about his work. This would result delay in work completion . However, an interested person shows willingness about his work completion within duration period.

Therefore, we spend more time with our coworkers in a week than with our family. Thus, it is important for our coworker to be people we can get along with. When coworkers are cooperative, helpful and active than everyone can get their job done well.

Writing Feedback / Toefl- Do you think it is good for teenagers to work while schooling? [3]

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In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think is a good idea? Support your opinion with specific details.

In my opinion, it is not the good idea for teenagers to have job while they are still students. Although, many argue that it provide good working experience, but I think it can interfere with their life in various ways. Having jobs would affect the health of the student. It divert their mind from studies and would take away their childhood phase from their life.

A student has to do lots of studies in today's competitive world to prove himself. He has to spend his most of time in school to get a good grades. If the student get involved himself in job in rest of the time, then it would cause an extra burden on them. Furthermore, jobs has various responsibilities like attendance, sometimes extra work and so on. This would result in stress, tension and tiredness. They won't be able to get proper time for relaxation, sleep. Thus, would affect their mental and physical health.

Another reason, jobs can divert students from their studies. If students started earning in earlier age in their life, then they get attracted towards money. They feel themselves independent and would prefer to work more for money. This would affect their studies, they loose their interest from studies. Moreover, they drop out their studies so as to earn more money.

In addition to this, the main drawback of teenagers job is that, they miss out the fun of their childhood time. He would miss various childhood activities such as hang out with friends, clubs and fun activities and social interaction with others. They have whole life to do job and prove themselves, but the childhood phase will never return in their life. Therefore, they should take advantage of life as much possible they can.

Thus, for a teenager it is important to pay attention on their studies. Having job would affect their health, divert them from studies and take away one of the important phase from their life.

Writing Feedback / Toefl"A person you know is planning to move to your town. What do you think.. [2]

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A person you know is planning to move to your town. What do you think that person would like and dislike about your city.

I am very excited to learn that one of my childhood friend is planning to move to my city Indore. Having known her for past ten years I can enumerate few things which she would like and dislike about my city.

Being a career oriented in nature. My friend would prefer to live here. Indore has numerous colleges that provide variety of career option to students. Each college is highly reputed and provide the best education facilities to the students. Graduate students from these institute were highly in demand in the multinational companies. My friend is highly interested in getting higher education and proper job for her future. Therefore, she would like this place for her career opportunities.

Another exciting thing about my city is its Climate. Indore has warm climate through out the year. My friend would be more comfortable here. She like outdoor activities a lot. In my city she can continue with her all activities, such as sports, hanging out friends and so on around the year. Furthermore, she do not have to check for the weather before making any plan. Thus, this place would be best suitable for the one 's interested in outdoor activities as well as in making career.

However, in spite of all this facilities, Indore has some features that might upset my friend. This city do not have proper transportation system. The bus services are not at proper scheduling and make any person unable to reach on time. Moreover, overcrowded transportation sometimes result in stressed travelling hours. Poor transportation services encourages more people to use their own vechile, which causes traffic congestion, air and noise pollution. Thus, I hope that my friend may get adjusted with such traffic and transportation problem.

To sum up, my friend would take advantage of education facilities and good weather but she has also overcome with the traffic and transportation problems in my city.

Writing Feedback / Toefl - "not everything in life is according to our wish" [2]

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Do you agree or disagree? "It is sometimes important for people to do things that they do not enjoy doing".

I agree that people should sometimes do things that they don't enjoy doing. This is basic part of our life. There are many things in our life which are forced to do, but that are the part of our responsibilities. Moreover, sometimes doing such activities prove beneficial for us and we start learn to like them.

Most people personal and professional live are filled with various tasks which they really don't like to perform. For instance, visiting to a doctor, working with someone whom you don't like to work with at office and so on. But we do this because we know that it is our necessities and responsibilities in life. Furthermore, we understand the relationship of such work with other things in our life. If a person does not visit to a doctor, he might not get well, this would affect his professional life too. Thus, performing such activities would lessen other problems in their life.

On the other hand, sometimes doing such things prove beneficial for them. Suppose a student don't like to study, but if he/she does it then it would provide betterment in his/her life. Furthermore, sometimes people are forced to do certain things they don't like. For example, some don't like to eat certain vegetables , but if someone forced them to taste, then they might feel that they were wrong. This is good for health and add nutritious values to their health. Thus, they actually end up simply by liking it. Therefore, a person should sometimes perform such thing they don't prefer so as to get advantages in their life.

Thus, not everything in life is according to our wish. We have some responsibilities and necessities in life we could be fulfilled sometimes by doing such tasks. Also provide betterment to our lives.