Writing Feedback / In the chart the population distribution in age, of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050 [4]

populations of Yemen and Italy

The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the population distribution in age, of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Various changes can be seen in these figures. In this essay, I will distill the key points to make informative comparisons.

Overall, Yemen was much younger than Italia in 2000, and will be all the more so in 2050. In any given year, the overwhelming majority of population in Yemen was, or will be younger than 60. By comparison, a significant proportion of Italians were already 60 or older in 2000, and the figure will be even higher in 2050.

In 2000, people under 14 made up a bare majority - 50.1% - of population in Yemen, a larger share than 46.3% for those aged 15 to 59, and 3.6% for those 60 or older. In 2050, youths and middle-aged citizens will constitute the largest population group. They are forecast to account for 57.3% of the total, compared with 37.0% for babies and teenagers, and 5.7% for elders.

The spread of population across each age bracket is quite different in Italy. Only 11.5% of Italians will be under 14 in 2050 - even lower than 14.3% in 2000. The share of people age 15 to 59 is also projected to plummet from 61.6% in 2000, to 46.2% to 2050. By contrast, the share of older people will nearly double from 24.1% in 2000, to 42.3% in 2050, strengthening its position as the second largest age group.

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Writing Feedback / Reasons for land degradation - what impair the productive capacity of agricultural land? [2]

why agricultural land becomes less productive?

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart is provided for analysis of what impair the productive capacity of agricultural land. The table details these damages in three regions over the last decade of the 20th century. In this essay, I will distill key points to make informative comparisons.

Overall, on a global scale, deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing are the primary culprits, each accounting for approximately three tenth of land degradation. Among these regions listed, Europe was hit most severely during 1990s, with 23% of its land degraded. By contrast, the comparable proportions were 13% and just 5% for North America and Oceania respectively.

Globally, overgrazing-induced land degradation makes up 35% of the total. Deforestation and excessive cultivation take a close second and third place in harmfulness, leading to 30% and 28% of land degradation each. On the contrary, only 7% of land degradation is attributed to other reasons.

Regionally, over-grazing bore the most blame in Oceania, where it reduced 11.3% of soil to barren fields, compared with 5.5% in Europe and 1.5% in North America. With regard to deforestation, 9.8% of land in Europe became infertile for this reason, while the percentage was down to 0.2% in North America and 1.7% in Oceania. Likewise, though Europe saw 7.7% of its land damaged by excessive cultivation, only 3.3% of land in North America and o% in Oceania suffered the same problem.

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This time I practiced pie chart writing. I would more appreciate it if you score my essay.

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Writing Feedback / [task 1] map writing: arrangements in an American town between 1948 and the present year [3]

The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and the present.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

transformation of an American town

The map illustrates different arrangements of an American town between 1948 and the present year. Here can be found diverse changes. They will be summarized in this essay by making appropriate comparisons.

Overall, the transport system goes unchanged whereas the buildings beside have largely been transformed. Almost all of the redevelopments occur north of the canal. The sole exception is in the southwestern corner, where a church has been repurposed.

In 1948, there was a petrol station in the north of the town, across from a park. Along the road to the southwest, there were a residential area and a local supermarket beyond; to the northeast lies an industrial zone. On the other side of the canal was situated a larger housing estate, away from a church in the southwest.

Currently, while the petrol station still stands, the park has been replaced with a supermarket and other commercial buildings. Furthermore, the factories have been converted to an airport, and both the smaller residential section and the local supermarket has given way to commercial structures. The church has vanished, with a sport stadium constructed instead. For all these transformations, the housing complex in the southeast of the town remains intact. It is also notable to mention that the grid of roads and the canal are untouched.

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I am trying to improve my English proficiency by keeping writing. My current focus is on map analysis. I would more appreciate it if you score my essay.

I have a question: if the prompt goes that "The map below shows the changes in an American town between 1948 and2010", is it appropriate to assume 2010 is the present year? Or should I use the simple past tense to describe 2010? (such as ...the housing complex... remained intact)

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Writing Feedback / [task 1] bar chart writing - where people live in the Northwest region [7]

population in rural, suburban and urban areas

The graph below shows the figures for population distribution in the Northwest region for 1900-2050.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figure provided for analysis is a bar chart. It illustrates the population spread across rural, suburban and urban areas, in the Northwest region from 1990 to 2050. In this essay, I will outline the key information and draw comparisons when appropriate.

Initially, the countryside dwarfed the others in the share of the population, but its edge eroded over time. It became the least populous area in 2000 when suburbs and urban districts both topped the ranking. In 2050, rural population is forecast to shrink further, whereas the majority of people will live in suburbs.

While in 1900, rural residents composed 65% of the population, the proportion plummeted to 45% in 1950 and 20% in 2000. By contrast, the share of suburb dwellers went in the opposite direction, up from 10% in 1900 to 20% in 1950, and 40% in 2000. Based on projections, the disparity will widen in 2050, with just 10% of people living in villages but 55% of those in suburbs.

For urban areas, the comparable share has seen and will witness minimum fluctuation. It stayed at 35% in 1900 and 1950, the same percentage as expected in 2050. The only change occurred in 2000, when the figure inched to 40%.

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I tried to make a concise report. I am trying to improve my English proficiency by keeping writing.

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Writing Feedback / [task1] map writing: the evolution of a villege [4]

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

analysis of the Ryemouth village

A map is presented for analysis of how the village of Ryemouth has developed since 1995. Immense differences can be found between 1995 and this year. They will be summarized in this essay by making relevant comparisons.

Overall, the coastal village has been always crisscrossed with two roads, along which facilities were and are built. While some of them remain intact, the others are totally converted. In addition, an expense of land to the northwest has been brought into entertainment use.

In 1995, Ryemouth had a fishing port in the south and fish markets nearby, across the road from a series of shops. To their east sat a hotel and a café. To the northwest of the village were built rows of housing units, whereas to the northeast lay an undeveloped farmland, bordered with a forest park is its south.

Currently, the landscape has seen tremendous changes. The port is demolished, and the fishing markets are replaced with apartments, opposite to the shop-turned restaurants. The housing estate expands south, with a branch road constructed to the west. A car park emerges next to the hotel, which is preserved along with the café. The most striking transformation occurs in the northeast, where the vast land reserved for crops and trees is developed into a golf course, containing a tennis court in its south.

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I tried to make a concise and matter of fact report. Hope it works. I would more appreciate it if you score my essay.

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Writing Feedback / [task1] Three possible sites for a new hypermarket, which will be built in the city of Pellington [7]

The map below shows three proposed sites for a new hypermarket (A, B and C) in the city of Pellington. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

hypermarket location proposition

The map given illustrates where a new hypermarket will be built in the city of Pellington. Three sites, A, B and C, have been brought forward for consideration. There difference will be summarized in this essay by making appropriate comparisons.

Prior to a closer examination of each proposal, I will provide readers a panorama of the city with a population of 120,000. From the south a railway meanders west to Hampford 15 kilometers away, where 30,000 people live. It cuts through a large stretch of residential area, at the heart of which lie a traffic-free zone and an adjacent park. In the east there is a motorway that runs north, separating the residential area and the countryside.

A is sited just west of the pedestrian zone, abutting the railway. Its position is favorable to residents, who can take a ride on train to do shopping, and even more so for people strolling around in the zone or the park, as they can walk here with ease to relish a dazzling collection of merchandises and services. The residents of Hampford will also stand to benefit, since it is just 15 kilometers train ride away. For all these advantages, there are drawbacks to A. It is not in the neighborhood of the airport to the southwestern corner, thus inconvenient to flyers, and situated opposite to an industrial belt, where smoke billowing from the chimneys will spoil shopping mood.

These problems are even more pronounced for C. It is located in the southern end, at a distance from the airport and close to a larger industrial complex. Albeit in the countryside, it is fairly accessible, thanks to its proximity to the railway, allowing shoppers coming here by train.

However, B does not have the redeeming feature. Situated in the northeastern corner, B is far from the residential area, let along the airport on the opposite side. Moreover, as no traffic line extends here, shoppers will have to make a trek. Perhaps the only advantage is that they will enjoy blue sky and fresh air, if a hypermarket is constructed in the countryside, distant from industrial areas.

Please feel free to give me advice. I would more appreciate it if you score my essay. I am trying to improve my English proficiency by keeping writing. My current focus is on map analysis.

The essay contains 350 words. I think I've presented a comprehensive analysis of the sites and the practice is good to improve my writing. However, it's quite hard to do such a work in 20 minutes in an actual test (45 minutes was used here). So I'm considering compressing it into 250 words. Some details may be safely omitted and a question arises:

Is it OK to delete the second paragraph to directly discuss the differences between A, B and C?

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Writing Feedback / [task 1] Below is a map of the city of Brandfield - investments plan [3]

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

investments plan for brandfield

The map given illustrates the city of Brandfield where a new shopping mall is planned. Two sites, S1 and S2, have been put forward for consideration. In this essay, I will summarize their advantages and disadvantages by making appropriate comparisons.

In advance of a closer look at each option, it is sensible to present an overview of the city. There is a river meandering through the city center to the north, where is situated the housing estate on a road and a railway. To the east is built the industrial estate, whose edges are touched by the railway and the other road.

S1 is immediately north of the city center, within the narrow belt between the residential area and the river. Transportation is convenient to S1, as it is on the same traffic lines as the housing complex. Such a situation makes it readily accessible to urban dwellers or people working downtown. Customers can also go to the banks of the river to enjoy its murmurs when they have done their shopping.

In contrast, S2 lies to the southeastern end of the city. Despite its proximity to the roads and the railway, the location proves unfriendly to the residents because it is far from where they live. Moreover, the industrial complex just to its north will render it even more unfavorable, since the rumbles of machines are always a torture to shoppers. Yet there is still an advantage for S2: workers can take a brief break to buy what they want.

For all these differences, S1 and S2 are similar in one aspect. They suffer from a common disadvantage that they are both at a great distance from the golf course and park to the west of the city. Golfers will have to take a long ride on bus or train for shopping, be the mall constructed on S1 or S2.

Please feel free to give me advice. I am trying to improve my English proficiency by keeping writing. My current focus is on map analysis.

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Writing Feedback / The maps illustrate how Meadowside village and Fonton, which is a neighboring town - development [4]

The maps illustrate how Meadowside village and Fonton, which is a neighboring town, have developed over three different time periods (1962, 1985 and the present).
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

transformation of Meadowside - analisys

Three maps are provided for analysis of the transformation in Meadowside village and the nearby town of Fonton. The time points chosen for the purpose are 1962, 1985 and the present. In this essay, I will summarize their developments in size and infrastructure, and make comparisons wherever relevant.

Overall, Meadowside and Fonton alike have undergone immense changes. They used to be completely separate but merge together as they both expand far beyond their original size. Initially as a village, Meadowside is converted to a suburb where a range of facilities are created.

In 1962, Meadowside was a small village in the west, located on a narrow road curving north to west. In contrast, Fonton was a town of modest size in the east end, situated on a railway winding north to east. This year, there was no transport route connecting Meadowside and Fonton, nor did any other facility exist.

In 1985, there was considerable growth in the size of Meadowside and Fonton. The road intersecting Meadowside was upgraded to a broader one, from which a new road branched off east to communicate it with Fonton. Around the convergence of these roads sprung up a leisure complex, a housing estate and a supermarket.

Currently, Meadowside, which is now a suburb, and Fonton have united as a result of further expansions. A new railway extends to the west where a station comes into existence. To its north is established a hotel; across the east-west road from the station lies a newly-built business park.

Though map comparison tasks are not common, I have to prepare for them that do appear the test. I try to develop my own style of map comparison writing.

I would more appreciate it if you score my essay.

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