ivyeyesediting
Nov 10, 2010
Undergraduate / Personal and academically related reasons: Transfer Application Essay [4]
Hi Jennifer!
My big recommendation to you is this: focus on what Roger Williams has vs what La Salle does not. If you criticize your current program, you'll portray yourself as a less than gracious applicant and really miss your target audience. The focus of this essay should be how Roger Williams will enable you to reach your academic (and even career) goals.
I'd also say you should commit to a major and course of study at Roger Williams, something specific to their offerings. You write:
"At the time of sending college applications I was also undecided on my major. With time I have been able to reduce my list to Psychology, Media Communications or Historical Preservation. They are majors offered in Roger Williams University that really interest me and I can see myself accomplishing many things in."
Transfer applicants have it a little harder because they're expected to have really persuasive, firm reasons for transferring. They need to know where they're going and what they need to get there.
This is a good start...keep going! Focus your goals and elaborate more on why Roger Williams is the ideal fit.
Best,
Brooke
Ivy Eyes Editing
Hi Jennifer!
My big recommendation to you is this: focus on what Roger Williams has vs what La Salle does not. If you criticize your current program, you'll portray yourself as a less than gracious applicant and really miss your target audience. The focus of this essay should be how Roger Williams will enable you to reach your academic (and even career) goals.
I'd also say you should commit to a major and course of study at Roger Williams, something specific to their offerings. You write:
"At the time of sending college applications I was also undecided on my major. With time I have been able to reduce my list to Psychology, Media Communications or Historical Preservation. They are majors offered in Roger Williams University that really interest me and I can see myself accomplishing many things in."
Transfer applicants have it a little harder because they're expected to have really persuasive, firm reasons for transferring. They need to know where they're going and what they need to get there.
This is a good start...keep going! Focus your goals and elaborate more on why Roger Williams is the ideal fit.
Best,
Brooke
Ivy Eyes Editing