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Draft Academic Statement of Purpose for School of Information Univ. of Michigan [4]
Wow! Let's take a giant step back. At over 1600 words, this essay is massive and extremely hard to read/understand in one go. I know that it appears as though they are asking you for a lot, but in reality they are not. You have jammed this essay with everything and the kitchen sink. Here is a better method: Make a list of everything that they ask of you to include in this essay. Then jot down the two top responses to each prompt. Just one sentence for each. Now here is the kicker, at least one response for each prompt must link to a response in the prompt below. So when you are done you will have something like this:
What are the critical issues in the field of information? (What do you see as the major issues in the industry right now?)
1. Point 1.....
2. Point 2....(somewhat related to point 1 of the next prompt)
What are your aspirations in the field of information? (How will you address those issues/ how will you add value to the industry to make it better?)
1.Point 1........(Related to Point 2 ^ of previous prompt)
2. Point 2....
What is your understanding of the University of Michigan School of Information (UMSI)? (Why this program? What makes it unique?)
How will an UMSI education help you reach your aspirations? (How will this program help you address the issues in the industry?)
What would you contribute to the UMSI community and to the field as a whole?
This way you will automatically streamline your essay and keep one topic flowing into the next. You have all the elements of a winning essay here, you just need to structure the ideas better and then at the end, fix the grammar. - Admissions Track