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Name: Fitria Astuti Danial
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thutyedaniel   
Apr 23, 2015
Writing Feedback / The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items [3]

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table illustrates the information about the percentage of national consumer expenditure in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey by different categories in 2002. At first glance, it can be seen that Turkey resulting the highest percentage of two categories (food/drinks/tobacco and leisure/education). Noted, Sweden results the lowest percentage of national consumer on two items (food/ drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear).

To begin with, the percentage of national consumer expenditure in Turkey was noticeably higher in consumer spending on food/drinks/tobacco at 32.14 %, and Ireland at 28.91 %. The proportion of expenditure on leisure/education was also highest in Turkey at 4.35 %, but expenditure on clothing/footwear experienced under in Italy at 9 %.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that Sweden had the lowest percentages of national consumer expenditure for two items (food/drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear), at 15.77 % and 5.40% respectively. Spain had few higher than Sweden for these categories, but results the lowest items for leisure/education at 1.98 %.




thutyedaniel   
Apr 23, 2015
Poetry / Analysis on the poem: Road Not Taken [3]

Hi @amy_sensei

Robert Frost's poem The Road Nn ot Tt aken endeavours into the choices amongst life decisions that all humans eventually have to make thatbetter you use "which" can change their lives forever and the human tendency to reflect whether their decision was the right on or regret that they didn't choose other paths.

make sure your spelling such as endeavours (endeavors), symbolising (symbolizing), and emphasise (emphasize)
thutyedaniel   
Apr 21, 2015
Writing Feedback / The marital status of adult Americans between 1970 and 2000 [3]

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult American in two of the years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The bar charts illustrate about the number of marriages and divorces in USA from 1970 to 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in1970 and 2000. At first glance, it is evident that the number of marriages in USA is higher than divorces over frimetime. Then, for marital status of adult Americans, married resulting the higher position than other marital status.

To begin with, in 19970 until 1980, the number of marriages was stable at 2,5 million while divorce was increased slightly at 1 million to around 1,4 millions in two of years next two decades the number of marriages saw decreased significantly at approximately 2.4 millions and 2 million respectively.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar charts reveals that the percentage of adults for never married status stood at around 11 per cent, and reaching a peak at 70 per cent for married status, it decreased slightly at some 5 per cent to widowed, approximately 2 per cent for divorced in 1970.




thutyedaniel   
Apr 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / The best way for children to learn a new language is when they start in an earliest grade [3]

All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earliest grades.

Language is one of the communication tools in all country in the world. Several people believe that student must study different languages in primary school because this the best time for put knowledge for them. However, others think that children in primary school need to explore their wish like because this age golden for them. Therefore, I personally argue that the best way to children for learning second language when they in earliest grades.

The best way for children to learn a new language when they in earliest grade. First, children have the most gain from this adventure because children at primary school able to a more understand what subject that enters in their brain. Also, in this age, children easy to imitate what they heard and what they see without understand more about the structure. Not only this, this action can make easy for them to learn about speaking especially in the case of spoken other language.

However, learning foreign language able to disturb students activities who are studying in primary school. For instance, students have a target to learn many lessons in their schools as main subject and students automatically must focus to their subjects, and this can cause students are very hard to learn other languages because leaning language needs a long process and time to understand. As a result, children should only study primary subjects in their schools.

To sum up, it seems to me that the government and multiple stakeholders should use curriculums including new language to primary schools, and students will be easier to learn second language. It is evident that parents also should give to support for their children to improve new knowledge.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 19, 2015
Research Papers / The Expansion of the Biodefense Field is Necessary [3]

Hi, @aly2120655

Despite the strides that have already been made in the biodefense (bio defense/bio-defense) industry, more work is needed, which means more money, more employees, and more facilities to complete the research and development in .
thutyedaniel   
Apr 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / Continuous development in medical care is a must to provide a better help for people [4]

Hi @cldales :)

In conclusion, there must be a continuous development in medical care to help people, and the rise in life expectancy related to this must be viewed as progress. (it's to sort to be conclusion)

you should paraphrase your introduction, your own opinion, and your recommendation)

thutyedaniel   
Apr 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problem [3]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think the governments should spend money for the development of public transportation system in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric types of cars that many cause less pollution.

The number of private cars today increases significantly, and this can cause pollution everywhere which contributes to global warming. As such, many people recommended that governments should spend much money to improve the quality of public transportation for reducing pollution. However, others believe that it is better to allocate money for developing electric cars that may cause less pollution. Therefore, I personally argue that the government should spend money to develop better public transportation.

To begin, evolving or producing electric cars does not provide the best solution to minimize air pollution around the world. First, this action will cause other problems because the government must invest more much money to produce electric cars. Furthermore, this way also is not effective and efficient to solve the problem since electric cars is not guarantee to protect pollution. This is as the cause of the pollution is not because of types of transportation including electric cars but due to how many people are using it.

However, it is important for the government to spend a significant amount budget for improving the quality of public transportation. For instance, when government develops better public transportation system, automatically there is no doubt for people to use public transportation as much as safe. Thus, people can use public transportation for their activities.

To sum up, it seems to me that the government should spend more money for the development of public transportation than producing electric cars to reduce air pollution around the world. It is imperative that the government should keep control of the use of public transportation and make a good allocation for this action.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 19, 2015
Scholarship / Scholarship: How I improve my skills and knowledge through academic plan (Int'l Development) [4]

Hi @naritoshi :)

I was workeding as an assistant for 2 years to support forto Korean government-invited international students. My latest work was voluntary work at the alternative school. The schoolwhich was built for international students who suffered at local schools from racism, lack of language communication skills.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / The diagram below explain the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building. [3]

The diagram below explain the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building.

The diagram reveals the information of the process about how the wood pellets made. At first glance, it is evident that there are seven steps to make wood pellets used to head buildings.

First of all, sawdust arrives from sawmill and put this into fibers of inform length in a hammer mill. Then, the next process is that fibers are dampened with steam, and they are forced through holes in a pellet machine, forming into pellets.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the diagrams shows that the next stages is cooking pellets to the machine, and then lost dust is vacuumed off, thus resulting wood pellets. Before the wood pellets are ready for sale, wood pellets are packed into 18 kilo (40 pound bags), after this step, the product is ready for seal and wood pellets manufactured by this process are suitable for use to heat buildings such as pellet stoves and pellet furnaces.




thutyedaniel   
Apr 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / The need to combine rules with changes - fixed punishment dilemma [4]

Hi @summer_k :)

However, if the punishment is unchangeable, then it is highly likely that it will also lead to over-punishment, which is why judges should be allowed to make small changes to the final sentences when it is needed. For example, the punishment for first time offenders ought to be smaller than that of repeat offenders. Also, if an individual drives over the speed limit out of an emergency, then it is only appropriate that he should receive a smaller fine than those who simply break the rule for fun. (better if you use one idea paragraph in your writing because you give an example, so you need to give the result)
thutyedaniel   
Apr 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / Parents have an important role to choose their children profession but kids are more independent now [NEW]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.
Write about the following topic:

In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them?

Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


Parents are very influential on a child's future. As such, parents tend to choose their children's careers or professions. However, young people today are becoming more and more independent to choose their own decision like their education or job. Therefore, I personally believe that parents should give freedom to their children to choose their professions.

In this era, there is a lot of information coming from all directions to young people who want to make a good decision for their professions. First, children's thinking nowadays is more radical than the thought of parents and this is why young people should be permitted to decide for themselves. Also, children know what they need, so they can take action for their life with some reasonable ideas for their education or job. Not only this, young people can adapt to changes more easily than their parents because there many varying developments happening in this day and age.

However, some parents want their children to follow their actions, especially in regards to their children's professions. Thus, parents believe that they know more about life and the best careers for their children so there is no doubt that parents want to choose their children's professions.

To sum up, it seems to me that parents have an important power to choose their children's professions, but just a tradition because young people these days tend to more independent to choose their professions. It is imperative that parents and children should collaborate to make good decisions for the children's career.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / Scholar-leavers tend to be less focus on their subject - work or travel for a year between studying? [3]

In addition, traveling can improve students' language skills. As an obvious example, students who travel to foreign country can learn other language such as English. It is thus clear that this trend improves students' knowledge in some language. (I think this sentence around the circle), better for you if you should make strong your idea in this sentence, example you can use scientific fact)
thutyedaniel   
Apr 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / 'computer science is higher than other majors over the period' - National University fields degrees [2]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the information about the degrees granted at the National University in different majors in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. At the first glance it is evident that computer science is higher than other majors over the period. Medicine and law experienced fluctuation, and Business is lower than other subjects in the end of period.

To begin, in 1990. The percentage of degrees granted for computer science was at less than a third, then increased significantly in 2000 at two-fifths, and the next ten years this major becomes most popular at more than two fifths at the end of period. However, the degrees granted of business saw significant fall at 30 per cent, 20 per cent, and 15 per cent respectively over the timeframe.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the pie chart reveals that medicine and law had the same pattern of the degrees granted. In 1990, the degrees granted of medicine at a quarter, and the next ten years became less than a third, but the third period in 2010 slight fall at a quarter again. The degrees granted of law was the lower that other majors only at 15 % in 1990, then decreased significantly at 10 %, and the end of period was significant rise at 15 %.




thutyedaniel   
Apr 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / Nowadays nothing is private: our culture has become too confessional and self-expressive. [6]

Hi Anuskha,

better that use connector in your sentence :)

I had that bad habit of using Facebook a lot. I opened my account several times a day just to check up on what was happening and all that there was on my news feed were my so called Facebook friends sharing one thing or the other. Some of them expressing their love for someone, a guy updating a status of how his heart was broken, a girl who always updated statuses #dedicated better that you do not used[/i] to her "someone". I would prefer they were kept private.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities [2]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities as compared to the national cost-of-living average.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates about the information of cost-living average in different towns as compared to the National average, including Riverdale and Cape Alicia. At first glance it is evident that the cost-of-living in Riverdale is more expensive than Cape Alicia for all facilities.

To begin with the cost-of-living in Riverdale for Housing, Health care, and Clothing are higher than other activities with the percentage at 19 %, 7 %, and 5.5 % respectively. The percentage of the other activities such as Groceries (4.7 %), Utilities (4.5 %), and Transportation (4 %) are lower than other living cost.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that the percentage of cost-living in Cape Alicia is lower than Riverdale, where some facilities like Utilities (1.2 per cent), clothing (1 per cent), and Groceries (0.5 per cent). While there are facilities that under average, including 0.8 per cent for Health care, -3.8 per cent for Transportation, and the lowest one is Housing by only -12.5 %.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 14, 2015
Writing Feedback / You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following [3]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.
Write about the following topic:

"Life now is better than it was 100 years ago."

Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


In this day and age, development of technology has a big progress improvement, especially for people's lives. Several people believe that people lived in the past have more knowledge about the world base on their experiences. However, others argue that people's lives today are better than the past. Therefore, I would agree that life in these days is better than it was 100 years ago.

People who life it was 100 years ago have a characteristic itself because they know several histories from the past and certainly their lifestyle are different from people nowadays. Take mobile phone as an example. In the past people used their mobile phone only for keep in touch with other people by calling. As a result, people should update about all news around they life.

On the other hand, others think that life in modern era has more benefits than people lived in 100 years ago. First, people can encourage their abilities or talents because these days there are many ways to explore it. Also, technology in this era more increasing than before, it means people easy to do some activities in their life such as surfing the internet, social networking and so on. Not only this, there are many modern facilities that able to help people work.

To sum up, it seems that people lived in these days is better than one hundred years ago. I personally argue that people are living in this era has more effectively and efficiently than people lived in the past.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 12, 2015
Writing Feedback / Knowledge about some country lifestyle and culture helps to learn a language of this area [2]

In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about the country as well as the cultures and lifestyles of the people who speak it.

It is important for people to learn about other languages, at least a common language such as English, Mandarin, and Japanese. As such, several people believe that learning a language has to put all themselves on it. Nevertheless, others argue that people should study more about country's culture and lifestyle to help them to gain a better understanding. Therefore, I would agree that this trend is needed to learn a language well.

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thutyedaniel   
Apr 11, 2015
Writing Feedback / The amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams - the line graph [4]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the consumption of Spreads, including Margarine and Butter from 1981 to 2007. The quantity is measured in grams. At first glance it is evident that there was a significant fall in the consumption of Margarine and Butter, but the consumption of Low fat and reduced spreads saw a dramatic increase.

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thutyedaniel   
Apr 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Evaluation of sample introductions for some essay questions. [4]

Some people believe that watching movie and television programs (you should paraphrase) more effective to improve their knowledge about every country around the world. While others argued that statement and they said that being a visitor is one of the best ways to know all the customs immediately which is used by different countries. It is true that the journey to other regions gives us the real learning about anything (maybe you can make sure your hook)
thutyedaniel   
Apr 8, 2015
Writing Feedback / Alternative methods of the world exploring [3]

On the other hand, for some others, visiting other countries is better which people cannot obtain some information just by watching televisions you should use "television" channels and movies which have not covered yet all about those countries.

you should paraphrase "television programmes", like "reality shows"
thutyedaniel   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / In today's world the high class buildings become a landmark for each town and city. [2]

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays high class buildings as a landmark for each city. As such, several people argue that having an impressive building around the city is becoming attracted and amazed, this is because the magnificent buildings in cities can anticipate economical problems. However, others believe that having it makes cities unhealthy, and this can cause flood and air pollution. Therefore, I would argue that have imposing buildings can make cities look more different than usual and also give income for the government.

On the one hand, people argue that magnificent buildings make cities unhealthy because many green areas have altered by tall buildings. This action can cause flood and air pollution around the areas. Taking Jakarta as an example, many tall buildings have constructed, and this trend causes reducing absorption and green areas that could lead to flooding and air pollution. As a result, flooding in Jakarta always occurs seasonally in every year and automatically the air will contaminated.

On the other hand, certainly impressive buildings have a meaning for each city, especially in develop areas. First, it is making easy for. Also, it makes cities more beautiful and wonderful. Besides that, imposing buildings can help economical per capita in every city because can attract people to travel in the place.

In conclusion, it seems to me that there are many positive effects for cities and towns have impressive buildings. Thus, it is imperative that the government should support this trend and also must control magnificent buildings.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / The bad effects of deforestation on the environment [5]

First of all, deforestation is the causebetter than you use the predominant reason of the global warming.

We had better join you should use joined hands to protect forests the sooner the better.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / There are many ways to know about other countries - neither only by watching TV programmes nor films [5]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?


Introduction:

In this day and age, there are many ways to know about other countries. For this reason, several people argue that one of the best ways to learn about other countries are watching television programmes and films without visiting it. This is because they just stay at home to do it. However, others think that people should visit to other countries to learn more about native habit of foreign countries. Therefore, I would argue that learning about other countries by visiting is rather than just learn by watching television shows and movies.

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thutyedaniel   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Developing public transportation or making a new type of car? What should be goverment's priority? [7]

More attention should be paid on how to reduce the pollution releasedbetter than you write produced into the atmosphere by cars' emission. As such, many a person contends that to alleviate this multifarious problem is heavily relied on a new invention of car. However, I would personally argue that the governments involvement should not be completely disregarded.
thutyedaniel   
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / In the past, people lived in the same places since they just born until died. [5]

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?


In the past, people lived in the same places since they are born until died. For this reason, those people were always more likely to get close to their relative and their friends, but this trend would lead them to have a monotonous lifestyle and to face many difficulties in finding a job. On the other hand, people often move around they live for their lifetime where people can learn more about the different habits and get new experiences, but this can causes people live in long distance with their families and is difficult to make new friends. Therefore, I argue that living in different places is most useful for people.

People staying in the same place have benefits such as they are always close to their relatives and their colleagues. In small communities, people know who will give them a hand when they need a help. This is because everyone knows everyone else, so it can be easy to communicate with others. However, this trend also has drawbacks. It is evident that people probably not enjoyable because they live in the area monotonously, and certainly they will hard to seek for a job without communication with larger societies.

On the other hand, people today always move to other places for living. This is the best way for people to live in the different places because they can learn more about other habits. Beside that, people also can meet more people around where they live. Nevertheless, when people often move around, it can be complicated to find new friends, and also people can lose touch with their relatives.

To sum up, it seems that people living in permanent and different places have advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, I would argue that staying in the many places is better than staying in one place like people in the past as it can improve the quality of people lives.

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