lcturn87
May 21, 2015
Graduate / 'Since my early days as a child I was fond of exploring how things work' - Applying for Master Study [7]
There are only slight changes that I have suggested. These are only minor grammar changes that will help your essay. Read it once more. I feel these are the last changes that need to be made. In the third paragraph and third sentence place a comma after environment. The 4th paragraph and 3rd sentence change to, "warn him about". The 5th paragraph and 1st sentence: "made me become actively". The 6th paragraph: Don't capitalize quest. The 7th paragraph and 2nd sentence change to: cooperation with the industry. Also, change last sentence to: "high level of energy"
There are only slight changes that I have suggested. These are only minor grammar changes that will help your essay. Read it once more. I feel these are the last changes that need to be made. In the third paragraph and third sentence place a comma after environment. The 4th paragraph and 3rd sentence change to, "warn him about". The 5th paragraph and 1st sentence: "made me become actively". The 6th paragraph: Don't capitalize quest. The 7th paragraph and 2nd sentence change to: cooperation with the industry. Also, change last sentence to: "high level of energy"