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Dec 5, 2015
Writing Feedback / 'Night at the castle' - gothic descriptive piece [15]
The introduction will depend upon what it is that you want to convey to your reader. Do you just want to set up the scene? Or just offer a description? What kind of reaction do you want to illicit from the reader? For example, you can set up the scene by saying:
I knew I wasn't supposed to pass anywhere near Twilight Castle after midnight. I grew up on the bloody tales of corpses found just outside its gates, or blood curdling cries for help emanating from its towers. Fact or fiction, nobody in our community would be caught dead there at this hour. I didn't have a choice. The bridge was being repaired and this was the fastest way home. The smell of fresh blood crept up my nose as I...
or you could say:
The Twilight Castle was one of those areas in our town where the horrorific folklore of people gone missing or vampires coming out at night were usually based on. I can't fault the people for making up those crazy stories. After all, the castle did look like it jumped out of a Dracula novel. Then one night, I had to pass down it's way after midnight. The hour when everyone in town would bolt their doors and barricade their windows. I couldn't help but wonder if the stories were more than folklore..."
I know it does not sound like the way you would write it. You should give it a try though. It is important to set up your story from the first paragraph. So get at engaging and creative as you can.
The introduction will depend upon what it is that you want to convey to your reader. Do you just want to set up the scene? Or just offer a description? What kind of reaction do you want to illicit from the reader? For example, you can set up the scene by saying:
I knew I wasn't supposed to pass anywhere near Twilight Castle after midnight. I grew up on the bloody tales of corpses found just outside its gates, or blood curdling cries for help emanating from its towers. Fact or fiction, nobody in our community would be caught dead there at this hour. I didn't have a choice. The bridge was being repaired and this was the fastest way home. The smell of fresh blood crept up my nose as I...
or you could say:
The Twilight Castle was one of those areas in our town where the horrorific folklore of people gone missing or vampires coming out at night were usually based on. I can't fault the people for making up those crazy stories. After all, the castle did look like it jumped out of a Dracula novel. Then one night, I had to pass down it's way after midnight. The hour when everyone in town would bolt their doors and barricade their windows. I couldn't help but wonder if the stories were more than folklore..."
I know it does not sound like the way you would write it. You should give it a try though. It is important to set up your story from the first paragraph. So get at engaging and creative as you can.