Holt Educational Consultant
Jan 6, 2017
Undergraduate / "How have you overcome an obstacle or challenge you have faced in your life ?" (250) [2]
Nanda, just as you had to translate the meaning of "bandha" for the reviewer to understand what it means and the relevance of the term to your narrative, so do you also have to explain what the Madhesi is all about. If the reviewer doesn't have any idea what that political forum or organization is all about, he will really be lost as to why the organization has such power in your country. Aside from that necessary explanation, the rest of your essay showcases a strength of character and strong sense of determination that is uncommon in most teenagers. This is truly an impressive essay. However, I don't feel like the last sentence about the Nepalese proverb is necessary in the end. It feels like you need to explain it further in relation to the previous statements that you made. However, I think the word limitation will prevent you from doing that.
Nanda, just as you had to translate the meaning of "bandha" for the reviewer to understand what it means and the relevance of the term to your narrative, so do you also have to explain what the Madhesi is all about. If the reviewer doesn't have any idea what that political forum or organization is all about, he will really be lost as to why the organization has such power in your country. Aside from that necessary explanation, the rest of your essay showcases a strength of character and strong sense of determination that is uncommon in most teenagers. This is truly an impressive essay. However, I don't feel like the last sentence about the Nepalese proverb is necessary in the end. It feels like you need to explain it further in relation to the previous statements that you made. However, I think the word limitation will prevent you from doing that.