Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Money spent for in.national sports events /sports training to children [5]

Many COUNTRIES SPEND LARGE AMOUNTS OF MONEY ON WORLD SPORTING EVENTS SUCH AS OLYMPICS GAMES AND FOOTBALL WORLD CUP. instead these money can spent on encouraging young children to take part in sports at young stage. Do you agree or disagree

Victories in international sports and games bring recognition and fame to countries. Since, a huge amount of money needed to spend for organizing these events, it raise a question whether government should use the money for lavish international sporting events or bringing up young talents. However, I feel, it is wise to keep a balance between these two, which will be more beneficial for the country.

International sports competitions like football world cup, demands a drastic amount of money, for arranging all necessary facilities like, galleries, tracks, and so on. As it is a prestigious issue, countries try to make it in a best way they can. These sports events are excellent opportunities for the local people to see their favorite sport stars performing lively. It gives a chance to exhibit their tradition, encourages tourism and boosts all associated service industries, such as hotel industry, that help in the economic progress. Another point is that, the favorable climatic conditions and support of local people contribute motivation and inspiration to home country's team to win the game.

Nevertheless, government cannot keep a blind eye on the sprouting athletes. If there are no trained and talented athletes, the country cannot become the winner of the game. If government is using these heavy amount of money, in the basic levels such as providing facilities for molding the young children as real sports personals, it will be useful for future too. These children will be the shining stars of the country for not only one season, but also longer periods. This money will be an investment in this field. It is undeniable that enormous money is needed to create a successful sports team. Athletes' special requirements such as financial assistance, good coaches, tracks and so on, take away a good amount of money.

To conclude, it is important to develop a good team of athletes for the country, which should be started from children. The organization of international sports events helps in the economical development indirectly. Hence, I feel, government should keep equilibrium between the two.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Younger generation neglect the advices of older people? [3]

It is believed that young people have too much freedom and they don't pay much attention to the older people's advice. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

It is true that today's young generation is enjoying more freedom than previous generations. Some people hold the view that, as an impact of increased freedom, young people are not following older people's instructions, but others oppose. However, I feel, the given notion is true.

To begin with, there are so many reasons for this attitude such as generation gap, influence of advanced technology, peer pressure and so on. Presently, new generation can collect the information about anything from internet with the clicks of buttons. Different views related to an issue or a topic including it's pros and cons from different people, enable better analysis of these issues from different angles. Moreover, social network systems such as facebook, twitter and so on, provide an excellent medium for imparting and sharing information between people. Another advantage is mobile net work and internet calls. These are one of the cheapest ways to connect people and ask about the detail. Hence, people are depending more on technology than older people.

Additionally, in young generations' decisions, the influence of the peer group also is detrimental. It is stronger than other pressures. As a result, they trust more on the suggestions of their peer group. Young people believe that their friends faced the same situations, succeeded in it and it is better to follow their advises. For instance, enjoying fast foods are today's trend. Even if elder people are warned them about its consequences, they may follow the guidance of a friend who have the same routine.

Admittedly, generation gap also plays an important role in neglecting older people's advice. Younger generation feels that the skills and methods of older generation are not practical or rather slow in this fast modern world. To illustrate, younger people will not listen the recommendation of a grown-up person about the importance of an early morning walk, but are interested in joining a Gymnasium for exercise with friends.

To conclude, people mostly think that, change is inevitable in this fast world. Consequently, due to technological impacts, peer pressure and generation gap I feel, nowadays people are not inclined to older peoples' advises.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Weekly allowance for children: Agree/disagree [7]

Some people think giving a weekly allowance to children will help them to face less problems when they are adults. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays children like to live independently. Parents are allowing pocket money for them weekly or monthly. Some people consider it as a good idea while others oppose. However, I feel, if we are giving money with supervision and proper supervision, then only it will be beneficial otherwise it will spoil the children's lives.

Children are not even mature enough to handle the money particularly, in their childhood. If they get money freely, they spend it lavishly. These tender minded young children can easy praying to bad habits like smoking, drug addiction, craze for latest fashions and so on and attract towards outer beauty. Since it is the sweats less money, they have no hesitation to spend it plentifully. Moreover, if the habit of lavish life style became habitual, they may resort any illegal means to get money to fulfill their needs. This in turn led to produce a number of criminals in the society.

Undoubtedly, financial manage is one of the key factors of success. If children can learn how to manage their small amount of money wisely, this will be asset to their personality. This experience boosts their money management efficiency in their future lives. Children may face emergency conditions, that time these pocket money will be a blessing for them. For instance, they can effectively manage the unexpected bus strikes with this money. Besides, the habits of saving can be cultivated by giving weekly allowances. Since they are purchasing their own small things with the money, they can learn how to use money effectively according to their needs. For instance, a child needs to buy a book and pen with this allowance, either he can adjust the cost of both thing and can take both, or can take one item and postponed other. Adjusting both may boost their skill of money management. Parent should be careful to observe what children are doing with this money.

To conclude, children should learn how to use money wisely. With proper direction and control, if giving weekly allowance to children, it will be favorable for them. Otherwise, it will spoil their lives.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) computer games good or bad for children? [8]

Nowadays, children play computer games for long hours and they do not play old traditional games. What do you think is the reason? Do you think this influences children in a good or a bad way?

Computer games became a passion among people, particularly the children of the new generation. Although there are so many reasons behind this trend, I strongly believe that it will adversely influence people in numerous ways.

People are indulged in computer games, because of various reasons. Chief among these is addition to these games. These programs motivate pupils to involve in this more time by giving them new targets and scores. The competitive spirit in the younger generation like to break each level and gain more points faster than their peer group. Therefore, parents should keep an eye on them. Lack of sufficient outdoor space is another reason. Those who are living in cities, especially in flats are facing this problem. Ignorance of rules to follow a game and absence of enough friends to participate in a game, further keep them on computer games. In the virtual world of computer games, they can satisfy their suppressed emotions such as beating or killing and burst out their anger safely. Lastly, parental restrictions to go outside home due to the absence of supervision and security reasons block children from engaging outdoor games.

Admittedly, whatever are the reasons of engaging in computer games, I feel it bring lot of disadvantages. Their participation in outdoor games will diminish which are excellent opportunities of mingling with peer group in the outer real world; enhance their communication skills, and a good chance for exercises. These may pave way to isolation and behavioral problems. Hence, the games take away long hours, they may have issues like bad academic performances, lack of concentration and so on. Computer games are increasingly leads to obesity since these children are lacking exercises. Health problems such as back pain, eyestrain, problems in fingers and so forth, may give rise to drastic impacts in their future life too.

To conclude computer games are now gaining ground among children. One should choose the computer game, especially the time spend for it wisely by considering it's cons in their lives and the parents should supervise them.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) education can reduce the number of criminals? [13]

In most countries, prison is the most common solution when people commit a crime. However, if they were to receive better education, it could prevent them from becoming criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Prisons are places where offenders are treated. The increasing number of criminals behind the bars raises the question whether we can reduce the number of them by proper education or not. However, I am completely agree that proper education can decrease the number of crimes.

Education molds the character and shapes the individual. Good morals from early childhood, from family and society, help the people to grow as good citizens. These moral values enable them to distinguish the right from the wrong. If one understands the situation with patience, he can avoid many problems. For instance, if one believes that it is his right to injure a person who hurts him, it may leads to serious consequences. If he thinks, the one who hurt him may be because of his misunderstanding it is better to forgive him, a big problem may solve. Furthermore, if a person became criminal, with moral education and vocational training we can bring him back to the normal life. These training provide him with proper livelihood to find money for his expenses.

Apparently, good education is the key to success in their future life. Poverty and financial crisis have a pivotal role in raising the crime rates. Successful education provides one with gainful employment and there by financial security. He can enjoy a good living standard to himself and his dependents. As a result, crimes for the need of money may diminish. He knows his rights and responsibilities towards the society and this mentality itself lead him to work in a better way and it attracts success. Besides, the willingness to do any work by knowing the dignity of each work that he had got from education, prepare him to take part in any job and live with contentment. Hence, crazy for more things and need of more money for them, will trim down.

To conclude, I strongly believe that, through proper education and guidance from childhood itself we can mold the mindset of an individual. This may helps to block the shooting crime rates.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) television has a great impact on our lives..? [6]

Television has the biggest impact on our life because it is the most popular way of getting information. Do you agree or disagree?

Television is one of the miracles of science. If has a great impact on all walks of life, as it is an easy tool of information. I agree that, television bring insurmountable changes in the day-to-day lives of people.

To begin with, as television is an audio visual media it has a great impact on it's viewers. Latest information relating the fields of education and entertainment are available through television. Students can broaden their knowledge by watching documentaries and news updates. Channels like animal geographic and B.B.C are excellent tools to learn more and their academic performance will improve. Besides, the advertisements in television provide the details and the entry of a new product, which enables people to make a better choice and selection of price and quality. This eventually, gives them financial benefit and satisfaction.

Apparently, since 'seeing is believing', it is an effective way to educate people about teaching desirable behaviors like following rules, abolishing a bad habit such as smoking and so forth. Through breaking news, news around the globe is easily accessible to members of the society. It enlighten them about the latest developments in every field. For instance, the news about economic crisis makes people to be more vigilant in share market and move on to more secure investments. Moreover, the talk shows and live discussions broaden the horizons of their knowledge and remove their doubts related to that subject. To illustrate, the discussion with a doctor about AIDS, provides mode of transmission, sign and symptoms in detail and they are able to removing their doubts and protect themselves. Political leaders can publish their policies and public can discuss and think about the pros and cons of these policies. These are capable of molding public opinions and desirable changes. Therefore, television can make differences in people' lives.

On the other hand, not all impacts are positive. The fast way of getting information and entertainment make people lazy and trim down outdoor games. It invites drastic physical and psychological problems like obesity, isolation and so on. Craze for more things, distraction in studies spoil the lives of people.

To conclude, television is a powerful medium of imparting information. It is able to create drastic changes in our lives and our decisions. Therefore, I believe that the information from these 'idiot boxes' has a great impact on the society.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Stay in hostel or at home during university studies? [4]

Many university students live with their families while others need to live to live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations?

To begin with, university students are no longer children or mature adults. These young adults sometimes decided to stay in hostel for university studies, while others continue to stay with their parents. There are pros and cons in both of these conditions.

To begin with, staying with family during higher studies gives more flexibility for students in their daily activities. For instance, one can eat, sleep and play at any time he desires. The warmth of protection of his family members helps him to face problems and the assistance of well experienced family members is a blessing for them to overcome it effectively. The financial benefit of saving hostel fee is another advantage. Nevertheless, his studies may be distracted as he is attached to the affairs of the family. Since his relatives support him, it will be increasingly difficult for him to meet any emergency conditions alone and decision-making capacity may not develop properly.

On the other hand, if one decided to join the company of the peer group in the hostel, he can share and discuss each other about their similar academic subjects. It will help him to clear doubts and study well. Most importantly, as he is staying alone, he will be able to learn the lessons of independency such as time management decision-making capacity, look after personal needs and so on. Mingling with people of different cultures broaden his outlook and knowledge about how to behave in a community. The power of toleration and communication skills will boost up. Respect to others rights, sharing common things, helping mentality and so forth will enrich their personality and enhance self-confidence. Moreover, these skills are essential for the success in their future lives. At the same time, they may indulge in bad company, practice bad habits like smoking, drug addiction and so on, which may spoil their future. Besides, living independently may sometimes create issues in decision-making and bad decisions may put them into insurmountable problems.

The period of higher education is a period of preparation of future life. Young adults should learn how to learn in the society. Staying in the home and hostel has its own benefits and drawbacks. One should be wise before choosing one among them.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) prevention of crimes makes no difference [4]

Crime rate is a problem all over the world. Some believe that crime prevent ion will make no difference. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The ever increasing rate of crimes became a puzzling issue for governments in so many countries. Some people believe that these preventive measures are a waste of time, money and efforts. However, I will argue that preventive measures will be favorable to the family and society if proper measures are taken effectively.

To begin with, there are so many reasons behind committing crimes. Poverty, unemployment, perverted value system and so on are some among them. All these causes are unable to wipe away from the community completely and thus the crime rate will increase. Even after strong regulation and education, the offenders are increasing in number. Therefore, so many people hold the belief that the prevention of crime is useless.

Nevertheless, I feel, if we took stringent measures in three different levels, family, society and government, with proper follow ups we can reduce crime to an extent. Firstly, the family should be supportive and inspirational to cultivate good values to bring up the children as a valuable member of the society. Vigilant parental actions in their children's friendships and activities outside the home enables them to prevent the misdeeds and bad company which make them criminals later. The knowledge of good values help them to distinguish the right from the wrong in a better way. Consequently, the offences will reduce. Secondly, society can do much more to convert an individual into a good person. Prevention of child labor, support to poor families, acceptance of a criminal when he came back as a good person and forth, are the good contributions from the part of society.

Finally, the government as a public institution, has a powerful role in reducing crime. New developmental programs, vocational trainings and practical education will offer job opportunities and reduce poverty. Offenders in the jail should be given good moral education and vocational training to meet their expenses after release. Stringent rules, empowerment of police force, regular follow up and suitable punishments may help to trim down the crime rates. For instance, proper continuous patrolling in problematic places may reduce crime rates due to the supervision of strict police forces.

In short, I still believe that, with determination, dedication and follow-ups from family, society and government can make a great difference. It is foolish to dream a crimeless world and is unrealistic to believe that preventive measures are not fruitful at all.

Writing Feedback / IELTS; Shopping is an unavoidable worrying necessity for many people [7]

Nowadays many people go shopping in their free time. Shopping has replaced many other activities that people choose as their hobby. What are the reasons for this? Is this is a positive or negative development?

Shopping is an unavoidable worrying necessity for many people, whilst for some others it is an opportunity to show their effluence. So many people even consider shopping as an activity to pass time. Though there are various reasons for this attitude, I strongly believe that, this is a negative trend and it will pave way to insurmountable issues.

Presently, shopping became a leisure time activity for many people especially young. They usually go for shopping when they feel boring or free, which they can use wisely for different activities like participating in sports and games. These people often do window shopping which may leads to unnecessary rush in the shops and employees of the shops also are also supposed to spent their time and energy for them. Thus, they are not only wasting the time and energy of themselves, but also others. Dangerously, the interests in outdoor games trim down.

Apparently, today's younger generation are getting more pocket money so that they can afford costly items. Those things, which are optional before became a necessity now. For instance, mobile phones for young children gaining ground presently. Besides, people are interested to follow the latest fashion trends. The luxuries life style of youngsters may lead to undesirable social impacts. To meet money for a costive item, they may indulge in anti social activities such as drug transactions, black marketing and so on. This produces a number of criminals in the society, which may become fetal to the peace and prosperity of the society.

Furthermore, the latest fashion of clothes and accessories, and its display in the shops itself is a fest to eyes sometimes. This attracts people to spend their time in the supermarkets instead of watching boring programs in the T.V or continuing a monotonous work. The easy system of availability of loans and credit cards shoot up the rate of spending money in shopping especially for unnecessary things. The difficulty of pay back with interest to the bank creates insurmountable issues in their personal, family and social lives.

To conclude, turning shopping as a leisure activity may results in drastic problems in the personal and social lives and valuable habits like sports may vanish. Therefore, I consider it as a negative trend.

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Ignoring national celebrations and enjoying themselves? [10]

Nowadays people are forgetting national celebrations and enjoying themselves on other days that are important to them personally. Discuss and give your opinion.

Celebrations became an integral part of our social life. Though people are celebrating public and private important days, I feel they are more specific in personal day's celebration. In my essay I will explore why I think so.

To begin with, public celebrations are the occasions which people are getting a chance to know their national heroes, respect them, pass the knowledge about the knowledge of their great contributions to younger generation. However, today's generation though they are celebrating it nobody is taking it as a serious event. The time they are using as a opportunity to finish their pending works or enjoy an outing. In short, people are engaged in deeds, which are not related to the public day. For instance, in children's day the celebrations are limited in speeches about Jawaharlal Nehru or some stage performances. The remaining hours of the day all are engaged in their own personal works such as, cleaning the house, shopping or even finishing the home works. Besides, some people save this leaves and take it in another day to fulfill their personal needs.

On the other hand, private celebrations like birthdays or wedding anniversary celebrations bring more happiness and togetherness. People mostly apply for a leave and try to be with near and dear ones. The celebrations no matter big or small, people are often enjoying the whole day. Special foods, new clothes and exchanging gifts multiply the joy of these great occasions. These days are considered as the milestones of their personal life. People in these great days obliged to look back and realize and remind the happy moments once happened. It provides wonderful moments of get together. Family members and friends who are living apart are coming together. For instance, for the celebration of the wedding anniversary of old parents, sons and daughters from different continents even gather. This personal important moments paved way to another beautiful events. Public celebrations are not able to give this type of enjoyment. However, people nowadays chose these days to show their effluent to other people.

To conclude, though people are celebrating public and private celebrations, I feel, private celebrations have an upper hand and hold more depth. Personal celebrations are increasingly important because they are great occasions of get togetherness, sharing, enjoyment and reminders of good old days.

Can anybody give me synonyms for celebration...Thank you

Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) education is a life long task; agree/disagree [4]

Education is a lifelong task. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

Human life is progressing every day with observation and learning. Some people feel that education is for a certain period of life, but others oppose. However, I would argue that education is a lifelong process because of some reasons, which I would try to explore in my essay.

Education is not limited to bookish knowledge, attending exams or acquiring degrees. We can learn so many things through our own experiences, observing others, following media reports and so forth. As experience is the best teacher, we are learning lots more thing from our own deeds. Though we are making mistakes, crossing the borders, these all are much beneficial for us to discover more things that are new. The wisdom, which we gained like this way will be with us probably in all our lifetime. This will show as the right way and enable us to be wise in our activities. For instance, the bad experience during a journey, allow us to learn the problems, which leads to that issue. We will be more wise next time by correcting that mistakes and it will remain in our mind whenever we are planning an another trip.

Moreover, the skill of others also contribute in increasing our awareness about something. This enlightens our minds to avoid making the same mistake in our life. For instance, the critical medical condition of a lung cancer person, who was a chronic chain smoker, vigilant you from indulging in smoking. Media stories and detailed reports make us informative in all fields. They are providing genuine details of whatever we need. For example, through media we can learn about the features of a newly introduced gadgets or even the catalogue to know completely about it even before we buy a new one.

Apparently, our career also is adapting new technologies. Revolutionary changes are taken place in every walks of life. Though people in their third decades of life or even before stop the academic learning, they are still learning new ways of life, either in their family life or in their career. People feel the true learning when they learn and do something new. Big firms are allocating huge money on training sections for their employees.

To conclude, it is clear from the discussion that, education is a lifelong task. From womb to tomb, people are learning something through observation, experience, and training.