dumi
Jan 24, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: How color influence people's health and capacity for work [5]
.... Well, I get your idea , however, it does not flow smoothly;
Colors play an important role in our lives and every person has his or her own preferences when it comes to colors.
I dont find much contribution to your essay from the above line. Rather, its sounds a bit too complicated and it disturbs your flow too :(
This is kind of stereotype statement. There are many women who love black and red. Also you need to pay attention to grammar.
Color is the part of our soul that every person has a different favorite color.
.... Well, I get your idea , however, it does not flow smoothly;
Colors play an important role in our lives and every person has his or her own preferences when it comes to colors.
There are differences colors as a reflection of genre.
I dont find much contribution to your essay from the above line. Rather, its sounds a bit too complicated and it disturbs your flow too :(
Boys tend to choose black and red colors when they boughtbuy a t-shirt as represented that they are more bravely than women.
This is kind of stereotype statement. There are many women who love black and red. Also you need to pay attention to grammar.