Actually I have difficulty brainstorming for this topic. Can you give me feedback on the above essay and some ideas? Thank you.

It hurts to leave a home. It hurts to love and to lose. To leave something you have planted in the soil with love, hate, and happiness flowing the roots. A home is also protection, a bond between a human and their home. A bond between a human and something they love.

Most people agree with this statement that children have to eat a healthy food.

It will be a problem for children when they are not getting enough nutritiousnutrients from healthy food.

there are many entertainments

Obviously, movie is among them, and it does have a great popularity.

Also it makes people more accurately and disciplined as well as physically stronger and healthier.

Thank you very much for your advices. As I understand, from point of your view in this kind of essays (to what extent) I need to expand only the point which I'm agreeing or disagree and why? Is it right?

In just 19 hours, the other interns and I would present our work in a board meeting to the company's executives.

As my partners took leave for the night, I could not help but stay a little longer just to make sure our app was running smoothly

introducing myself to as many employees that had not left work yet to ask for their advice.

In the world of academia, I've never felt like I completely fit under any one category or label.

When asked what I do for fun, I would mention taking entrepreneurial classes and watching interviews of successful entrepreneurs every night before bed.

Last January 11, 2014, I saw the results of the __________ online and ascertained that I was in the waitlisted status.

Though I'm downcast upon seeing my status, I am still writing to inform you of my unceasing hopes of being accepted in ______________ as it remains my top choice.

I've done my very best to be a deserving applicant.

The map depicts a town named Garlsdon in which has a population of 65,000.

First of all it is important to know where do you need this writing essay?

EMA2 give me a good opportunity to participate with European countries by give me a chance to apply for scholarship to cover my study, travel, and living expense in European universities which partnership with EMA2.

Many centuries ago people used to build their buildings utilizing the materials available in their own land. Few decades ago, people have started to import materials from other countries in order to build their own buildings. This change of building materials has impacted in many people's opinion and views. Travelers who visit different cities around the world today found that famous buildings are similar to each other as if they have visited this city before.

I have got one question though, based on the structure you provided, does it mean I only need two arguments to support my position? Is it enough?

How I can express my opinion and follow a further discussion?
If I stated a strong opinion in favour of one side in intro, than it might be inappropriate to analyze another side in a following paragraph.
Could you please give me an example.

studied at the architecture

she thinks that our goals in live can change us )).

In a world where customers always rights,the controlling own needs can be necessary.

Yes,you are right, howeverIi cannot find a way to express my opinion in the intro and at the same time save a further discussion for both sides.
Could you please give me an example?

To begin with, there appears to be an argument over the people' notion that it is their right to spent as much water as they wish.

College and university are playing in an important role toin providingprovide academic skills to people in order to pursue their goal.

There are an issue

First of all, many people think that college and university should consider students to study with them only if they are good students

Pension, which is paid by the government,

To begin with, the major argument why people believe in the modern dependence of humankind is an ever-increasing rate of globalization.

To begin with, the major argument why people believe in the modern dependence of humankind is an ever-increasing rate of globalization. As long as costumers opt for international items, they have been forced to depend on alternative countries' supplies. A perfect example of this would be the cinema industry, where people around the globe have anticipated the Hollywood productions.
In addition, the emerging of the Internet and allied connection devices has enabled people in one country work on international corporations in another. These devices have certainly put mankind in dependent position in term of the global employment. Hence, the dependence of people on each other can be clearly seen, as they expedite the level of globalization between cultures through contemporary devices.

The importance of petroleum in the society is undeniable, and since the oil industry is one of the most important sectors and main resourcessource of wealthrevenue of my country, I want to contribute to its development.

To the extent of my observation, the former view holds water.

In the past, adults completely dominated the social activities , while adolescents were not allowed to strongly show their opinions.

Clearly, their voices were valueless.

First of all, increasingly majority of people tend to focus on becoming wealthy rather than being healthy.

First of all, increasingly majority of people tend to focus on becoming wealthy rather than being healthy. In the process of earning huge sum, people often fail to pay attention to their family life, in particular, children's unhealthy eating habits. Secondly, technology plays a vital role in encouraging adolescents to adopt sedentary life style. In addition, recent days schools emphasize more on academic curriculum and highly reluctant in motivating students to participate in physical educations and sports events.

What are its causes

Which line exactly do you mean that doesn't fit the rest?

The words of encouragement coming from my peers and advisor did nothing for me.

If I added something like At first, I thought the change from my normal style to this type of rappelling was beyond my abilities, but once I experienced it, I knew I could handle unforeseen challenges. would that help clarify how I feared the change but I surpassed it?

Music has always been a part of me, most of my life I have been raised in a mostly musician family.As far as I can remember I have always had a strong passion for music. Growing up I remember our family gatherings seemed as if they where music festivals, I would always play the bongos and the congas and I would always try to match the rhythm.

Communication across countries is now fast, effective and private, as opposed to letters and telegrams that took long and could often be intercepted and read by a third party.

When I saw how my classmates crossed the graduation stage, it felt like I was nearly the only one who didn't know which way toI should proceed with my education.