Writing Feedback / Essay For Toefl: With the help of technology student can learn more information [4]

Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? With the help of technology, students nowadays can learn more information and learn it more quickly. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays, technology is an important part of our life. We cannot even think a single day without technology. However, some people believe that technology helps students to learn more information in a short time and other think the opposite. In my view, technology makes it possible to learn about different things and get more information quicker than ever for two reasons.

The main reason is that, technology has made it easy to learn different things. Nowadays, information is very handy to everyone than it was 50 years earlier. With the help of internet, we can learn about anything through few mouse clicks of our computer. For example, last month I have learned 'Java', a well-known programming language, through Youtube videos. When I thought myself how to program in java, I took help of Google. I searched 'learn java' in Google search box and it gave me lot of options where I can learn it. I browsed some websites and learned Youtube is the best source to learn Java quickly. I searched again in Google to find Youtube links and it gave me the exact link of learning java from Youtube. On Youtube, I found a huge number of tutorials and those tutorials were made by a person name Bukey. In the first tutorial, he taught how to install the require software and some basic thing about java. As the tutorial processed I gradually learned how to program in java. As you can see, without the help of advance technology my java learning could never been as easy.

Another reason is that, technology has made learning almost free of cost. As science and technology advances, we are getting more and more advance devices and features. Now, almost all information is open to access for everyone and it is free; you just need to pay for your internet connection but not for the information. For instance, last week I had an appointment with my boss outside of my city. As I did not go there ever in my life, i had no clue about the place except the address that my boss gave to me. Therefore, I took help of Google Map, an application made by Google. I put the address that my boss gave me in Google Map and bingo. I found the exact direction from my home to that particular place. This whole process took at best 5 seconds and most important thing to mention here, it was free of cost. If I did not have that technology, i had to face more problems and there was a possibility that I had to miss that appointment. This experience taught me that, technology helps us to get information more easily and quickly.

In sum, though many people will disagree with the idea that technology helps us to learn more and more, however, I believe technology has made a big difference in learning. This is not only because technology has made it easy to access information; it also makes the information free of cost. Everyone should learn how to use technology if he/she wants to learn different things more quickly and easily.

Writing Feedback / Essay For Toefl: how can schools help new students with their problems? [9]

i am facing serious problem on time management. This whole writing and editing process took around 40-45 minutes. :'( Some of you have suggested me to reduce the content in the writing. However, i feel that if I reduce the content from my body paragraph it makes the whole thing vague. In other words, i can't express my thought clearly... please give me some suggestion on that. anyway, here is my new essay, feel free to comment.

Question: When students move to a new school, they sometimes face problems. How can schools help these students with their problems? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

Answer:

School is the most important place for our academic life. This is where we learn new things and prepare ourselves for a successful life. When students move to a new school, sometimes they face problems with lot of things such as language, making new friends, weather of the campus etc. I think school can help new students by several ways. Here I will discuss about two of them that i have faced in my life.

The main way that school can help new students is, providing sufficient information about the campus. When new students arrive in their new school, they have no idea about the campus of that particular school. They have no idea about the placement of several important places such as canteen, library, academic building, teacher's room, common room, play ground etc. School can provide some books or can arrange a guide for their new students by which students can get familiar with the campus. For example, last year, I enrolled at a new school outside of my city. When I got the admission package; in the package, it contained a book provided by the school where the map of whole campus was given. Therefore, before reaching there I had an idea about the placement of different building of the campus. Furthermore, when I reached there, there was a guide for the new students and he guided me to my dorm. This made my arrival easy and hassle free. As you can see, with the help of book and guide school can help new students.

Another way is school can provide a counseling group or office where new students can share their problems. By doing so, authority can know about the ongoing problems of new students and can take proper actions to eliminate those problems. For instance, when I moved to the new school last year and as i mentioned earlier it was outside of my city, therefore, i had to stay out of my family and home. As I never been without my family, it was a bitter experience at first. I was homesick and could not concentrate on my study. Then, I heard about the counseling office from one of my seniors and I went there to share my problem. The counselor was really helpful, he heard my problem with deep attention and suggested me to talk to my parent every night over phone. He told me that, the problem of mine is a temporary thing. He also told me that, when I will finish my study and be a successful person I could spend more time with my family. Moreover, He suggested me to make new friends in the school to reduce my homesickness. The conversation helped me to recover from my homesickness. This experience taught me that, school can help new students with better counseling.

In sum, school can help new students various way. However, I think providing sufficient information about the campus and proper counseling is the most important among others. Every school should implement those to help new students.

Writing Feedback / Eassy For Toefl: computer for students vs books for library [6]

Question: Your school has enough money to purchase either computers for students or books for the library. Which should your school choose to buy - computers or books? Use specific reasons and examples to support your recommendation.

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As technology advances capability of computer has also improved. Now, most probably the widely used electronics device in the world is computer and it's not because for its low cost but also for its diverse usages. If my school has money to purchase either computer or books i will definitely suggest to buy the computer and this is for two reasons.

The main reason is we can now read different books in computer. At present, we have different word processing software as well as reading software. With the help of those software we can easily read any book. For example, last year I was looking for a biology book for my homework. However, I did not buy that at the beginning of the year, as my teacher did not focus on that particular book. Anyway, at the end of the year, he gave us an assignment from that particular book and he gave us only 2 days to submit that assignment. As the bookstores were far from my home and i had other course work to do, therefore, it was not feasible for me to go to the bookstores and buy my book. I took help of computer and internet, from internet i downloaded the book and finished my assignment on time. As you can see, buying new computer will be more helpful to the student than buying new books for library.

The another reason is we can use computer for many other purpose beside reading. A book only talk about on one thing, however, computer can teach us different things. For instance, l learned Java - a popular computer programming language, last year with the help of computer. There are many books on Java in the market, however, without practicing the code you will not have a good understanding of that subject. And to do your practice you need a computer where java is install. Moreover, we can learn java without books. I learned Java programming without any help of book. There are lots of tutorials on java in internet. I watched them and practiced in my computer and that's it. I learned java in one month. This experience taught me that we can use computer as a replacement of books.

In sum, some people will oppose the idea, buying new computer instead of books. However, I believe with the help of computer we can read the books and can do many other things, so it will be a better option for us to buy new computer than books.

Writing Feedback / Essay For Toefl: taking risk vs careful planning [7]

Question: Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Everyone in this world wants to be a successful person. However, success in life is not that easy. Different people prefer to follow different way on their way to success. Some believe that taking risk or chances is the best way to get to their desire goal, however, other think that proper and careful planning is the key to success. In my view, careful planning can lead people to success easily than taking risk or chances, and this is for two reasons.

The main reason is that, we do know what will be out next move if we have a proper plan and this will make us more focus to our job. For example, last year when i started my toefl preparation, I took a full length test at first and realized that i have to improve my writing ability. In this regard, i made a plan and started my work based on that. I planned to write an essay everyday. According to my plan after the writing was finished i shared that essay with one of my friends. As he was good in English, he gave me some important advice to improve my writing. He also checked my essay and gave me good feedback. Based on that feedback, I prepared my next essay. In this way, I became more focus on my silly mistakes and became a better writer in a few months. As you can see, without a proper planning it was never been possible for me to improve my writing.

The another reason is that with proper planning we can predict if something bad is coming and can take necessary steps to protect ourselves for those bad things. For instance, last year garment industry had faced a bad time. As my uncle is in this business and he always plans his business strategy early, he did not face any problem to run his business. As more and more people were engaging themselves in garment industry, he predicted that their will be more competition in near future. He planned his strategy to overcome this problem. He maintained a good relation with his buyers. He provided with best quality goods as they deserved and started making more business relations with more buyers. Therefore, when the actual crisis had arrived he was in a comfortable position because he had a good number of buyers in his hand. This example taught me, careful planning always helps us to realize what is coming and make us prepare for that.

In sum, many people will say that taking risk is better than careful planning, however, i believe, as careful planning gives us the opportunity to plan for our next move and alert us for the upcoming problems, therefore proper and careful planning is better. Those who want to be a successful person in life should take careful plan before implementing any idea.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: part time job for teenage students [5]

Question: In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

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When we talk about student, we generally mean a boy or a girl who study in school or college. In some country, teenage students have the opportunity to do some part time job beside their study. However, some people do not support the concept of teenagers doing job beside study. In my view, it is good for a teenager to do a part time job while he/she is still a student and this is for two reasons.

The main reason is that students can learn lots of things from part time job, before starting their real job. Students can learn about time management, money management and convince people by their words. For example, when I was in my high school I worked as a sales-man in a shop for a year. As i had to spend some of my time in my job, therefore, i had to manage my time efficiently. I had to manage my boss as well as had to prepare my homework. This taught me how to manage time efficiently and do any job quickly and effectively. Moreover, I learn money management. When my boss was out of the shop, i had to manage the accounts section of the shop. From this i learned, how to manage money correctly. This experience taught me, doing part time job can help students to learn many things.

Another reason is that from part time jobs students can earn money, which can help their parents. For instance, when i was in high school I worked as a home tutor. I taught math to two kids of my neighbor. I helped them to understand the difficult topics of the books. By tutoring them, i earned some money and bought me books with it. Moreover, after taking that part time job i stopped taking my pocket money form my parents. As you can see, part time job can help students earn money and which can help their parents financially.

In sum, I am sure; some people will oppose the idea of part time job for students. They will argue, it can destruct students from their study. However, as i did part time job in my high school and it did not hurt my academic result; therefore, i believe part time job will be good for students. Every Student should do part time job beside their study if they want to prepare more efficiently for their future.

Writing Feedback / "Pohela Falgun" - The custom of my country that I like most and will encourage to follow TOEFL essay [10]

This is the most devilish toefl essay prompt that I have encountered ever. Even I had to modify my essay structure to write this. The problem I faced here is, there is no suitable supporting materials to support my claim. My country has many customs that I love to share, however, i could not find good supporting detail to write a good body paras for any of them. It is hard when you have to write an essay in a time constrain manner and you could not find any supporting material to support your essay in your brainstorming session. anyway here it is. feel free to comment and give me some advice how to tackle this kind of unusual questions.

Question: Describe a custom from your country that you would like people from other countries to adopt. Explain your choice, using specific reasons and examples.

Answer:

Different countries have different customs and traditions. On the same note, my country also has some customs. The custom of my country that I like most and will encourage people from other countries to adopt is celebrating "Pohela Falgun". "Pohela Falgun" is the 1st day of the Falgun month- a month of Bangla calendar. There are several reasons why I encourage people of different countries to follow this particular custom, however, I will discuss about two here.

First reason is, this custom is very colorful. We celebrate "Pohela Falgun" on February 13th -according to Gregorian calendar, therefore, the weather is really good. At the time of the year, in February, trees have passed the harsh winter and spring just arrived. Therefore, most of the trees have new green leaves and flowers. As a result, nature itself looks more fresh and colorful. Moreover, on that particular day, people of my country take a festive look. Girls wear green 'Shari'- traditional dress for girl's of my country. They also use flowers to ornate themselves. On the other hand, boys wear green or yellow 'Panjabi'- a popular man's wear of my country. Boys and girls of different ages hang out with their friends. Moreover, some cultural organizations arrange cultural programs around the city as well as in village. As this is so colorful, therefore, i like to expand this culture to different people of different countries.

Another reason is that, this is a special day for us. We spend this day with our family and friends. For instance, this year I celebrated the "Pohela Falgun" with my friends. We all wore the traditional dress and at the morning, we went to the "rabindra sarbar" where cultural program was arranged by a leading cultural organization name "kristi". We enjoyed their performance so much. After the cultural program had ended, we took some photos of our own. When the photo session was over, we went to a nearby restaurant and took traditional food. As you can see, I had lots of fun with my friends on this day.

In sum, as "Pohela Falgun" is colorful and a fun day to spend with friends, therefore, I believe it will be a good addition to the people of different countries.

Writing Feedback / Toefl essay: which is better learning from the advice of fnf or from personal experience [5]

Question: Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.

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Learning new things is important. To make our life more comfortable and to be a successful person we learn many things everyday. Some people think the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends and other think that personal experience is better. In my view, personal experience is the best way to learn about life.

First, it is important to get the life experience by oneself not from others. If we listen to our family and friends experience and try to learn from it, i believe, as we have not face that experience in person, therefore, we cannot get the whole scenario perfectly. Moreover, everybody deals with problems differently. We cannot simple believe, something is impossible just because our family or friends could not do it. For instance, last year some of my friends started preparation for Graduate Record Examinations (GRE) and after one month of preparation, they took the test and got a low score. After that, they all discouraged me to take the test. They told me that it could not be feasible for me to get a good score in GRE from one month preparation. However, I was determined and had decided to take my chance. I started my preparation and after one month of diligent study i took the test and got my desire score. As you can see, if I listened to my friends, i would never sit for the exam as well as never would get a good score.

Another reason is that, personal life experiences give us the opportunity to learn from our mistakes. I believe everyone's life is different from others. We do not have the same facility as well as we do not face the exact same problem in life. For instance, few years earlier, i decided to learn java and some of my friends suggested me to admit in a computer center to learn it. So, i admitted in a java learning course in a computer center. However, i learn only a few things there because the instructor was not that good and his method of teaching was so complex. It was just waste of my money and after a month, i left that course. Nevertheless, i did not give up my dream of learning java. I started searching and found a lot of online tutorials. With the help of those tutorials, i learned how to do program in java. This experience taught me, personal life experience is better than listening advice of friends.

In conclusion, as personal experience gives us the opportunity to learn from our mistakes and it is hardly possible to get the exact scenario from other life experience; therefore, I believe, it is better to learn from personal experience.

Writing Feedback / toefl essay: large company vs small company - which one is better? [3]

Not 100% satisfy with it. but i maintained time strictly. i hope, i will write better essay in near future within the allocated time. :)
feel free to comment...

Question: Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Answer:

Workplace is important for both employee and employer. This is because, if employees are happy with their workplace then the company will be more productive and business will be profitable. However, people have different opinions about workplace. Some people think it is better to work for a large company and others prefer to work in a small company. In my view, work in a large company is better than work in a small company for two reasons.

First, work for a large company is prestigious. Everybody in the country knows that company very well and people treat employees of big companies more respectfully. For example, I work in a leading telecom company of my country as an Assistant Engineer. Last month I went my village and one of my uncles asked me what I do for leaving. I told him about my job. After listening the name of my company, he said it is not a piece of cake to join in this kind of company. He also said that, this kind of company always take hard exam to select their employees. According to him, as I am one of their employees, therefore, I already defeated many candidates and proved myself as a strong candidate. This made me proud. As you can see, working in a large company is prestigious.

Another reason is large company can provide more facilities that small company could not. For instance, my company provides lunch facilities, transportation facilities besides a handsome salary. On the other hand, some of my friends work in a small company and they don't get this kind of facilities. Moreover, the environment of the large company is better than small company. For example, the company, where I work, has different section and many employees. However, we all work in a cooperative mood.

In conclusion, large companies provide more facilities and bring prestige to employee, therefore, I believe large companies are better than small companies and everyone should try to join in large companies.