Writing Feedback / Foreign language should be mastered by children since the earliest level of their education. [2]

All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grade. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Foreign language is becoming more essential in this age of globalization. Due to such a fact, over recent years all parents believe that a foreign language should be mastered by children since in the earliest level of their education. However, every children has different abilities to learn foreign language. Whereas it is reasonable, I have taken up against the perception as studying a foreign language has more benefits for children later development.

Multilingual skill has been believed by some people have positive effect for children. Result shows that semilingualism is one of biggest problem for young people because they learn one language which is not fully mastered. Taking students who are learned Mandarin, English, Hindi language as example, those are awesome language with largest population in the world with active user approximately 100 million to 1.04 billion. A lot of school in Indonesia use those language as ones language subject in school with multilingual purpose. As a consequence for this case children can face difficulties in social relationship with other people for the reason children learn foreign language to neglect their mother language indirectly.

The aforementioned evidence raises multifaceted perspective. The earlier children learn about foreign language, the easier for them to master it. Linguistic program study released data that children since 6 years until 12 years old are bests ages "golden age" for children learning about foreign language since they still have brain bending and plastic. As straight example gayatri one of children from Indonesia since seven years old had an ability to master fourteen languages, it could help gayatri to be child Asian ambassador since 2012 until 2013. Therefore, thinking global, sharpening cognitive abilities, having largest possibilities working in foreign country are positive result with children getting bright future.

As a final point, although study a foreign language can educate and give more benefit for children's life, giving opportunities for children playing with each other friends should be notice by parent that children also must have a time to themselves. Furthermore, looking children's ability should be one considered parent without compelling children to be master a lot of foreign language.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-Writing Task2: Renewable Energy and Public Transportation as one of responsible to environment [3]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think that governments should spend money for the developments of public transportation systems in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution.

In the age of modern era, the proliferation of private transportation particularly cars on the roads in a lot of parts of countries in the world has led to extremely problems of pollution and possible to be main source of global warming. Many people think that public transportation systems should be concerned by governments with using their budget to tackle this problem. In contrast, others believe that electrical development and many kinds of cars must be one priority from governments to solve pollution and global warming problems. As a result, it is reasonable that public transportation and developing new types of cars with zero emission have two perspectives.

On the one hand, developing of new type cars with zero waste can help human and environment having better life. Based on recent update for new technology in cars, many countries in Europe such as Germany, Finland, England and French have developed new technology with sorghum plant native from Africa for bio ethanol. It has ability with zero waste for cars in the future. Therefore, governments should gave more attention to participate tackling with using governments budget to developing idea.

On the other hand, public transportation as one of straight solutions to help alleviate those problems. It is because public transportation has more capacities to mobilize with largest capacities such as train, bus, MRT and air plane. Taking MRT (Mass Rapid Transport) as an example. MRT unit is one of mass modern transport in development countries such as Germany, Japan, Russia and French. MRT can carry on many passengers approximately 700 people one times out. If one city has five MRT units, it can be mass transportation which is carry on passengers about 3200 passengers/hours. As a consequent, vehicle on the road will be decreased significantly if this idea can appear in real action.

As a final result, although development electric cars in the future will be one of alternative solutions, public transportation has more opportunity to tackle those problems to lead better life for human an environment. Furthermore, governments as main stakeholders should spend their budget for the development of public transportation on and renewable energy as one of responsible to environment.

Writing Feedback / Choosing profession for a young people - IELTS-Writing task 2 [NEW]

In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose choose for them.

Some people assume that it is acceptable for young people to choose their profession in the future. Whereas others believe that parents have strongest right to choose a right option for their children, there is no doubt in my mind that young people have opportunity to lead the best way for their life even though parents also have considered to give consideration.

To begin with, talking about profession, happiness in profession should be a part of young people decision. Result shows that 80 percent of success people starts to choose their profession with what make them happier when they were young people. As young people have opportunity to reach success in the future, they are more likely to find a way for themselves.

Another reason of this is that to success in profession begin with what young people choose. Steve jobs and Bill gates, for example, who are people to start their decision creating Apple and Microsoft companies when they were young. As they choose to begin a profession that make them were creative they get a success in their life.

On the other hand, parents also have considered to decide the best way for their children. This because every parent need their children getting success and happy with children's profession. As straight forward example, when young people will joint to university parents can give some appropriate suggestion before studying at university. Consequently, This can affect young people to think it back before they find the best way for young people.

As a final point, it seems to me that choosing profession for young people is appropriate values parents even though parents also have considered to give decision right and not right decision for themselves.

Writing Feedback / IELTS-Writing task - work for unemployed individuals outbalances the lack of jobs [3]

Some people believe that unemployed people should be made to work for their welfare/benefit payments. Others, however, see this as cheap labour.
Discuss the possible advantages and disadvantages of making unemployed people take any job.

Do you believe that making unemployed people work is a good idea.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS-Writing task 2: Accepting an equal proportion of degree students is looked at by the gender [2]

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.

To what extent do you agree and disagree ?

These days, some people believe that universities have accepted the proportion of student looking at their gender particularly between male and female with an equal percentage. Whereas, that will be acceptable in some situation, I firmly believe that in this case universities are better to place it in the different number.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 : Paying attention to children's future should be one priority! [2]

Some people suggest school should pay more attention to academic subjects because they are useful for children's future career and the subjects such as music and sports are not useful.

Do you agree or disagree?

Knowledge in every subject matter is arguably one of the earliest things that we have as a gift of nature. Due to such a fact, a great number of people assume that paying much attention to subject matters should be done by school as the greatest values for pupils' in their development time than other specific subjects such music and sports. I think this is true in certain areas, while in other areas, a balance subject can be more useful for pupils.

As a matter of fact, specific major can help pupils having more possible with good career in the future. The general view has been what that if pupils learn a great number of specific subject so as to their enormous skill, 70 percent of pupils ability can be used as useful devices to rich success out for themselves such business or professional worker in particular work. As it can be seen from the data, specific subject can develop themselves how they analyze one problem and get the solution to rich be successful.

Another factor that can be seen is that one major will bring a lot of opportunities for children's future to get internationally recognize. An international research, conducted by United Nations for youth generation, shows many children from developing countries have ability in language skill over average acceleration learning. As a great number of pupils are becoming good learner in specific subject, that will be better if school can provide a well teaching system to support every children's ability to rich success.

On the other hand, multi-subject matters will be useful values such combination between science and music or sports to help children having a wide opportunist in the future. This because pupils brain are still in development process. Result shows that 80 percent of figure in science or success people has a strong memories so as to pass their hectic schedule with calm and quiet mind due to habitual subject combination. Consequently, omitting one major can affect children having less possibility better job in the future.

Writing Feedback / Two charts, one result in the survey of adult education; Writing task 1 [2]

The two of the charts below present publishing a survey youngster education with the first chart examine the percentage of the reason why they are more likely to continue study, and the pie illustrates people opinion about how costs sharing on education should be one priority. Overall, it can be seen that interest in subject and gain qualifications had the highest percentage, and that individual opinion showed the most percentage should be shared.

The first, the proportion of interest in subject was much greater than the other reasons. 40 percent of students interest in subject compared to 38 percent of gain qualifications, both of these reasons had the largest number than others. However, to improve prospects of promotion remained stable the same level as enjoy learning/studying for adult's reason to study about 20 percent, helpful for current job's reason witnessed a steady growth only 0.2 percent over both two reasons. In contrast, youngster that chose to able to change jobs had a smaller 12 percent than to meet people only 9 percent.

On the other hand, 40 percent of individual are believed that the costs of each course should be shared while taxpayer experienced the smallest percentage from the three parts of people about 25 percent. Moreover, the percentage of employer had the second larger proportion just about 35 percent.

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Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 : Advertising leads people to purchase unnecessary products [2]

In the modern era, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, advertising Is key part of modern business with the largest influence to popular consumer goods, and it usually leads people to purchase unnecessary products. While, it plays an enormous role in people's life, I would argue that the power of advertising reflect the largest proportion of popular people's needs.

The first, some people's goods use media such as television and website on the Internet encouraging citizen to purchase things. Media Indonesia research shows that 85 per cent of people in the modern era buys their needs using media online. As they use the media to answer their demand in goods, it cannot be true advertising too popular.

Another factor that can be seen is that free market economies can leave without advertising. An global marketer research, conducted by Indonesian local market organization, shows a great number of local market can advertise their products without advertising on the media. As media are becoming a popular value, it is evidence advertising unessential in people's lifestyle.

On the other hand, the advertising inform people the choices we have. Firstly, some product are important for many people. With the advertising they can choose variant option from several media as comparison before making decision. Second of all, the advertising educates people to be more careful to select needs. Product consumers become smart users to separate the products whether they are good or bad. In addition, people are more easily to become victims of advertising.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that although some advertising may become useful value for people, people should be selective finding basic or not basic needs for them. Furthermore, it will be better if we can look deeply the products before buying needs.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 : Encouraging young people to work or travel [3]

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, a great number of pupils have decided to find a job or go to travel as long as a year after graduated from junior high school before going to university. Therefore, this essay will examine the drawbacks and benefits from this argument.

As a matter of fact, young people may feel more tired so as to continue their education through university due to traveling. A survey conducted at Traveler magazine in 2012 revealed that 85 % of people who travel to other places face a hard day to undergo their schedule after traveling. As pupils are facing difficult situation, studying at university should be considered by young people to get better life.

Furthermore, pupils' ability have decreased gradually as they do not have properly preparation to continue their study. National research, conducted by Ministry of education in Indonesia shows that 70 % of pupils' ability experienced a slow decrease when they spend more time to travel without reviewing their subjects. As young students spend a lot of their time to go sightseeing, young people's ability may be faced with learning process in university.

However, some disadvantages will be faced pupils, a great number of benefits in traveling encourage to develop their mind. Firstly, they learn about new environment. It can affect them to have new knowledge and can educate them indirectly. Take traveling to wildlife in Africa as an example, when they visit it pupils will learn about endangered species such as lion and rhinoceros. Second of all, it is possible way for them to become volunteers in volunteers organizations. They have more experiences and new skills before studying at university. In addition, working in holiday time becomes the best way to earn much money.

In conclusion, it seems to me that although in a year pupils may spend their time in a work or go to travel with some drawbacks that influence themselves, working or traveling on postponing time will be more and more important for pupils to obtain much information before they continue their studies. Where possible, they will use this time to find more experiences as much as they can.

Writing Feedback / Outers influence native culture - foreigners may face difficulties to pick local customs up. [2]

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, learning other cultures is important for people. For this reason, a great number of people assume that people from other countries have responsible to follow local culture particularly customs and behavior when it comes to visiting other places. While other people cannot accept this statement and think that native people should appreciate with the differences, this essay will examine about the perspective.

To begin with, learning and following the differences of culture can cope misunderstanding between out-land and native people. Cultural study of Indonesian University shows that 80 % of people who master foreign culture can easily meet the demand with cultural shock from local customs and native behavior. As mastering cultures is becoming more and more important for people, they should respect to the differences of culture.

Furthermore, some customs and behavior are mirror of the societies. Result shows that almost societies in developing countries have local culture with a wide range structures each other. As visitors should know all of the culture in this country to reduce misunderstanding, local people also have considered to respect with out-land people.

On the other hand, common people should aware that we live in multiculturalism. The first, host of country cannot despite cultural differences with not welcome to visitors. Open minded as local people can educate themselves about new culture of other people. Second of all, cultural differences will make a fast assimilation. It can affect changing environment from close minded to open minded. In addition, making possibilities to increase local economy which will lead to better life.

As a final point, it seems to me that although visitors have more responsible to study other cultures on how other people's customs and behavior, native people should respect that sometimes out-land people may face difficulties to pick culture up.

Writing Feedback / Natural talents 'available' for every person? IELTS [2]

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person of musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Every person has a unique ability since they were born to the earth. For this reason, some people believe that a great number of people are born with natural talents such as master in sport or music. While that will be acceptable by some people to claim it as sport players or musician can be mastered by teaching them, there is no doubt in my mind that all of people have given a special talent in themselves. Thus, this essay will examine both points of view.

To begin with, individuals with unspecific talent can master one skill if they do not underestimate themselves. Physiology for talent in Harvard University shows that 85 % of societies in the world only uses 30 % of the total their abilities. As a result, to appear people with unspecific talent they should encourage themselves without give themselves up with limitation.

Furthermore, a specific talent can be taught by people. An international talented research, conducted by Colorado physiologist Institute in America shows that almost specific talents can be learned by using technology such as 3D biomorphic which is educated football players uses 3Dvisual on a screen. As it can be seen from the instance, using sophisticated technology people can develop themselves to be better.

On the other hand, having natural talent makes people more easily to undergo professional talents such golfers or football players. First of all, their abilities are better than common people. It can make them to have more opportunities becoming master at some talents such as Leonel Messi with natural born skill in football. Secondly, mastering specific talent makes people have more responsible to teach other people. Natural skill will lead people with natural skill to give a spirit to their environment particularly people with unspecific talent.

In conclusion, although some people might not have well ability like people with natural talents, people should pay attention to others without specific skill with educating them that they also have better abilities.

Writing Feedback / Writing task 2 : Traffic congestion and pollution on atmosphere [2]

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

what other measures do you think might be effective?

Increasing traffic on the road and pollution on the atmosphere become enormous problems. For this reason, a straight solution should be taken to deal with those problems such controlling the amount of petrol. While as far as I am concerned, it will be viable solution, I firmly believe that other solutions may become priory solution for those cases.

As a matter of fact, controlling the amount of gasoline in societies consumption exerts an influence decreasing both of the problems.
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