Writing Feedback / Healthy lifestyle is possible for people [2]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Over time, a healthy lifestyle has become impossible to do because of the modernization. Some people argue that it is hard to do this lifestyle, while others say that if people tend to do this lifestyle, it still could be possible to realize it.

Some supporters think that they cannot do this healthy lifestyle because they have sort of time. For example, a large number of workers tend to have busy lifestyle which sometimes they have to do overwork and most of their time they spend it in front of the computers. This kind of activity will cause many diseases to them, such as blur-vision because of computer's radiation. In addition, they will not have time to spend on doing some exercises since they are busy in their office. Also they consume fast food which they think can minimize of the time used. This all can establish diseases in the future, but still they always think they do not have time.

However, others think that it is possible and easy to do healthy lifestyle, if they really want to do this way of life. In my point of view, as long as people really want to have healthy lifestyle, there is nothing impossible. They can arrange their schedule to have an easy exercise, such as twice a week go to gym or fitness center. They also start managing their diet food and calculating the nutrition that they consume. Furthermore, they are able to do some easy stretching while they are in office or they prefer to choose stairs rather than escalator or lift, using cycle or walk rather than using car if their office is nearby their house. I would argue that all people can have healthy lifestyle if they have desire of it.

To sum up, even some people are very busy because of their job, but I would like to suggest them to try spending at least 10 minutes of their busy life as healthy lifestyle because it will bring many positive impacts to their life.

Writing Feedback / The Diagram of Precipitation Flows [NEW]

The diagram illustrates regarding to reuse of precipitation which are maintaining to hold in two different places. Although it is started from separated places, it can be seen that the rainwater is applied in same location which is domestic house for serving people water needs. Also the reused of this water is ended up in river flowing from the mountain.

The process starts when precipitation is fallen down to river where it has a dam to storage it. Then, it is entered to water treatment plant for reducing and removing small substances so humans can drink this water. As the water can be drunk, it is passed to domestic house for fulfil people water needs. After it is used, wastewater is processed in plant and produced recycle water which is stored in household. The production is reused in residence and the rest which contains harmful material is thrown into the river.

When the first process starts saved in dam, at the same time rainwater is also poured down up of residence's rooftop and it is flown into rainwater tank which is connected to private house. This water is used for same purpose to complete human needs. Next, rainwater which is stored in stormwater treatment because it cannot be saved in rainwater tank and it is surpassed surface run off is released to the river which is flowed from mountain.

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Writing Feedback / Method of losing heat and wasting energy by transferring air [2]

The diagram presents the method of losing heat and wasting energy in a domestic house which are caused by transferring of air. The air from outside to inside covers both in basement and first floor which creates heat lost. While in attic and because of the light in ground floor, the gas releases outside of the house and creates energy waste.

First, in the basement the air comes from outdoor faucet which is filled the crawl space. Following this, it also passes through dryer vent to laundry room. Meanwhile, in the ground floor, gasses enter from electrical outlet and kitchen fan vent which causes the whole rooms in this area covered by air and reduced heat inside the house.

On the other hand, the energy wasted is happened because of recessing lights in the kitchen and bathroom in first floor and at the same time, the transferring of leaking air in the ground floor has been chased, especially in kitchen room, because this room is full of air so the energy goes straight to the attic hatch. At this place, the energy and the air go out from plumbing stack vent and bathroom fan vent which is connected with bathroom in ground floor.

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Writing Feedback / The Alterations Occured on West Side of Junior High School [4]

The map illustrates the alterations that have occurred in west side of Junior High School during six decades period beginning in 1950 and ending in 2010. The most noticeable change was the replacement of green areas with car park projects. The residential also altered on the west side of school, where large car park stood out in place of the house.

To begin, from 1950 to 1980 there were several changes in the school's facility. Science block had been built next to school as the main building and it replaced the residential. In addition to this, car park was constructed beside science block. Also sports field was placed behind science block and car park which it used to a farmland.

Between 1980 and 2010, car park had been enlarged and it replaced the place of sports field. While sports field was moved to south side of the school, it took almost half of playground area.

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Writing Feedback / The most recognizable changes visible in Stokeford were farmland and roads during the period. [2]

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps illustrate the changes that have been occurred in countryside of Stokeford over 8-decade period beginning in 1930 and ending in 2010. The most noticeable alterations were green areas on north and west side of the village.

To begin, from 1930 to 2010 the major changes at this countryside was infrastructure and residential. On the north east, farmland had been replaced with residential while primary school was enlarged. Meanwhile, large house that was placed on the east in 1930 was constructed as retirement home in 2010. Also, at the same time the houses were built in front of the retirement home and it was replaced an open area.

In addition, there was big difference between 1930 and 2010 which the number of its population was increasing. On the south west, green area which used to a farmland had been constructed as a residential landscape and there was a new pavement road in the middle of the village. The domestic houses were located along through this road while there was also a new road beside post office to replace shops building in 1930 on the north west. The most recognizable changes were farmland and roads during the period.

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Writing Feedback / The increase of population causes humanity problem [3]

The continued rise in the world's population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time.
What are the causes of this continued rise?
Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

A few years ago, the government especially the developing countries government has already set a social program for birth control which its purpose is to suggest their citizens to have children in small numbers for preventing the increase of population. These days, the most concern issue of humanity in the world is the incline of population. The lack of education and some conventional tradition in rural areas has become triggers to this problem. I totally agree that this case gives influence on lack of food and water supply of human's needs and poverty which affect humanity.

In particular some outskirt areas in developing country which usually has the biggest number of population have unfair spread of information with cities. These things occur the communities of villages do not know about how essential the government program regarding to child's number. In addition, they also do not know about the impact of mass population which will affect them in the future. Furthermore, there is also an old believe that they believe which if they have many children, they will get many luck. This perception has already established since ancient time, which sometimes it makes social program of the government becoming hard to be happened.

On the other hand, I strongly believe that the continue increase of global inhabitants can brings many drawbacks to the humanity. For example, this case creates the rapidly demand of human basic needs, especially food and water which based on some search that in 2050 the agricultural land just can support about half of population needs in the world. This affects not only to human's health but also in the incline number of global poverty.

To sum up, the cause of this issue can be handled if the government gives education and knowledge properly to its citizens especially its villagers.

Writing Feedback / Bad behavior of students creates issues in schools [3]

In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

A large number of education systems in some countries have to deal with a plenty of scholars' issues, such as the way they act. This thing happens because of the modernization of social life which presented on television and environment where they live. I would suggest that there are two methods to solve this problem which are consultation and providing some social punishments in school.

On my point of view, there are 2 triggers which occurs this case. Firstly, over a decade some broadcasts yield drama of teenagers or children life which is including their social life in school. However, these shows give too much visualization of modern and popular students which mislead learners who watch this show because in these programs, the students who are popular have bad behaviour. For example, Korean drama called as "The Heirs", this drama tells story about rich senior high school students who have problems in their social life. They always bully scholars who have lower status than them and fight with other students. In addition, this drama makes the trouble maker as a cool person. This sort of drama creates wrong perception that established students in reality act like the lead actor just for gaining popularity.

Then the neighbourhood where the students live and interact affect their character. If they live in uneducated environment, such as they live with people who smoke, use bad language or beat others, the scholar will also follow this kind of behaviour. There is a statement that children do whatever they see and hear because they are good copycat. They will feel that it is not a fault, if they are naughty because they have a supporting role in their environment. But, I strongly believe that this issue can still be tackled.

Undoubtedly, the best place to learn and improve knowledge of children is school. So I would give my advice to institutions for encouraging their scholars turning into polite person by using soft method like counselling. If there is a student who shows some problem attitudes in school, teacher especially the homeroom teacher has to take plenty of particular actions like try to communicate with the kid about what make them act like that or what problem that they have. I believe if the teachers give affection to their learners, the misbehaviour will be reducing.

But, if this method does not work, I think schools have to create a policy like social punishment which can handle the student behaviour. For example, if the student is still caught up smoke in school environment after the counselling program has been established, the student will be given punishment to clean their class in a period of time.

To sum up, I would suggest that beside schools, parents also have to take responsibility to teach and give better example of good attitude.

Writing Feedback / Data shows about the relation of workers with their bosses and associates in office [2]

The charts below show the results of surveys in 2005 and 2009 asking workers about their relationships with their supervisors and their co-workers.
Summarise the information by reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the percentage of employees' relationships data with their board and their associates between 2005 and 2009 and it was divided in several levels of relationship. Overall, it can be seen that very good level took the first place in all kind of relations in both period. While there were under very small numbers in poor and do not have supervisors or co-workers' bond over 4-year period.

According to the data, in 2005 the results of both type relations showed the biggest proportion in very good level, which were just over three-fifths. Good bond categories also had similar proportion at just above a quarter in the relation between workers and not only their managers also their colleagues. On the other hand, fair level stood far less than good relation over both bond categories at small number while there were also under one in twenty in the percentages of poor and work alone categories. Interestingly, employees had no answer the survey about their relationship with their bosses which was 2%.

Meanwhile, over 4-year following the very good bond level still placed in first place at 65% (connection with their managers) and 70% (interaction between their partners in office) which were following by good relation in second place in both types of relations at 22% and 25% each for interaction of bosses and associates respectively. Whereas, there was proportion that got just under 10% in fair, do not have supervisor and friends in company and poor connection categories.

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Writing Feedback / Electronic devices have not only negative also positive impact to people relations [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationships between people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

The advent of technology has given many influences to human's life. This causes drawback to people's bond. I partly agree with this thing has negative impact on community's relationship because on my point of view this electronic still has benefit for human's interaction.

It is true that gadgets make inhabitants busy with their own world in cyberspace. In some cases, if they are gathering with their friends in restaurant, they will tend to update their activity in social media by using internet rather. This sort of activity affects them ignoring their friend around them. Also it is reducing purpose of the reunion which to have deep conversation with each other. However, I still believe that electronic media can improve humans' bond.

Undoubtedly, smart devices such as laptop or smartphone combines with internet can help society who has to life separated away from their family like study abroad or work in other region. They are still connected by using application like skype on their gadget. They are able to meet and communicate with their family member every time they want without paying for airplane's ticket. These things make people's life easier.

To sum up, therefore I would suggest that people have to be wise on using technology devices because it will bring positive or negative things depends on how humans use it for.

Writing Feedback / People personalities are showed by their style [3]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

People appearance has become the foremost factor for several people to judge others characteristic. While the rest think human personality should not be decided by their cover because it is just about their sense which gets influence by fashion style that happening during a period. In my view, people characteristic should be judged based on not only from their look but also from their behavior.

Several people states that someone characteristic can be judged by their sense of fashion such as feminine or simple person. Feminine girls tend to wear long skirt or dress as their fashion sense. They also use some accessories to support their style. In contrary, the easy-going person types choose casual clothes for their daily activity. They like to feel comfort with their clothes. As a result, their appearance reflects their personality which useful for people to know what kind of humans they are.

Meanwhile, it also cannot be denied that fashion is just about people taste which can be changed by the development of style so people should not group someone personality by their cover since it is not approximately measurement. In 2009, a large number of teenagers all over the world got influence by emo style which this fashion related to broken home image and followed this fashion sense even though they did not have broken family background. While over 4-year later, vintage style had become a trendsetter fashion. At that time, young generations left emo style and started to apply vintage fashion in their daily life. This cycle of fashion proves that people appearance should not be judged as the visual of human type.

To sum up, it is indeed that plenty of people shows their personality in how they wear their clothes, but I would suggest people to do more deep judgment on how someone behave rather than just on how their appearance look.

Writing Feedback / The importance of workers appearance in organisations [3]

Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Employees' appearance factor is the foremost point in other offices while large number of organisations think good standard of their workers as the ultimate thing. I strongly believe that both of these perspectives are essentials role which have to be combined for creating trust from their bidders.

Undoubtedly, it cannot be denied that the importance of good appearance is a valuable thing to receive faith from companies' customers because how their client trust their organisations if their employees look like drinkers. In credit card business, sales marketing dresses stylish and neat since they have to attract candidate client attention. Their appearance is their valuable asset as in reality people will judge someone who they have just met for the first time by their look. Also their style make applicant wanting to spend their time and listen on their explanation about their product.

However, looking good is not the only factor to persuade people to join as member. They also have to show their best outcome and force to establish faith of their customer for achieving their goal which is set by their office. They effort to study and improve much knowledge about their workplace since the candidate client will ask much information such as the company's background before give their trust and enroll as an applicant in their credit card company. So the marketing officers should have better work standard to complete their aims and receive trust from bidders.

To sum up, even though well-dress can make consumer paying attention to the workers, but I would suggest that both of work caliber and appearance should be applied and combined in companies to yield the most effective method which can gain faith from their applicants.

Writing Feedback / Sales of banana and coffee in five diverse countries [2]

The tables give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables illustrate the number sales of two products Fairtrade-labelled in five development countries between 1999 and 2004. Overall, it can be seen that the highest sale of banana and coffee was at Switzerland in both periods, except in 2004 UK sold the highest of coffee. While in Sweden, Denmark and Belgium these products were not too popular.

According to the data, in 1999 Switzerland had sold the most in both products, which was following by Denmark. The number sales of coffee and banana in Denmark were 1,8 and 2 million respectively while there were small number in both products sales over three European countries which were UK, Belgium and Sweden.

On the other hand, over 5-year following, Banana sold in Switzerland was still the biggest and there was dramatic increase in this product sales from 15 million (1999) to 47 million (2004) whereas UK overtook Switzerland for selling the most coffee by 14 million. The rest countries remained stable at their positioned as the lowest seller.

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Writing Feedback / Students choose their own major studies in university [2]

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Several people argue that subjects like science and technology should be learnt in University since those have the continue rise of demand in the future. While others suggest students to choose diverse subjects based on their desire of helping their society. On my point of view, university students should be given freedom to decide their own major study.

Undoubtedly, science and technology have many benefits for scholars' prospect careers if they tend to study these subjects. Some research has proven that in the future the demand of engineer will increase. In particular, civil engineer will be needed in the society for improving their infrastructure. As a result, many students from developing countries order to study abroad in Japan because it has well-known for its public transportation technology and yielded mass population of engineers. Besides they will fulfill the importance needs of engineers in their own country, they also will get bright future life.

However, it is cannot be denied that a lot of major studies have their own pivotal role which deal with the learners to help their environment. If they learn social subjects like law, they will be able to defend the innocent. These days, there are a plenty of case about community who has done nothing wrong but mislead as a criminal. In this kind of situation, University student learning law and turning into a lawyer can help those victims. I personally believe that there are still many other essentials subjects that can be learnt by student for helping inhabitants.

To sum up, even though useful subjects have critical benefit in the future, but I would suggest that citizens should give all the decision to the students about what sorts of subjects that they want to learn.

Writing Feedback / Two main dishes are separated before fish pie is wrapped. The process of their production. [2]

The diagrams give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

The diagrams illustrate the production of frozen food consisting of 4 ingredients. Two main dishes are separated before fish pie is wrapped. There is big difference time between delivery raw potatoes and fresh salmon.

The process starts when potatoes from field are arrived to production plant after they are delivered up to a month. They are cleaned before entering the peel process. Then, potatoes are sliced while the waste in peel section is thrown away to waste disposal. The slice potatoes are chilled. Following this, they are boiled and the cooked dishes are stored. At the end, they are delivered to join the next process.

At the same time as the potatoes process begins, the ultimate production of fish pie establishes when fresh salmon is carried and sprayed by lemon juice and salt less than 12 hours is enrolled steam oven. The skin and bones are removed by labours which inspects by the inspector. While the waste goes through waste disposal, peas and sauce have been prepared. Next, the cook potatoes are joint the other ingredients and wrapped together. It is brought to freeze step before it is kept in storage.

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Writing Feedback / The proper age of children to enrol formal education [2]

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at your years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight.

How far do you agree with either of these views?

Some people think wisely that kids should enroll formal education at early age because it is the perfect stage to develop their knowledge. However, others argue children are supposed to be ready on facing competition at more mature age before entering formal institution. I personally agree young generations should enroll school at the stage when their mental-ability are well-prepare.

Undoubtedly, children aged four show they have excellent skills to learn and copy everything just by looking and listening. A great deal of research also has proven this age is the best timing for kids to receive lessons easily because their brain productivity is at the excellent condition. They show ability to speak in complete sentence at this age group and even they can memorize many vocabularies. In some case, a large number of parents teach their children to learn other language beside their mother tongue and kids have successfully gaining these linguistic skills without any difficulties. So many people think this is the best condition to develop their child skill by studying at school.

However, in some countries their citizens consider if they enroll their children on early age group at school, it will create many problems such as they make children feel under pressure and stress because of competitive environment which occur at school. Since they cannot follow their schoolmate achievement, this case may lead them leaving school or getting serious mental health issue. As a result, parents feel worried about their children and decide to delay their children's time to enter formal education until they reach proper age such as 7 or 8 years old to prevent them from the effect of school competition.

To sum up, even though the importance of enrollment formal school at earlier age can handle with more development on young generation knowledge, but I strongly suggest community to rethink critically about the impact which could occur if the children age are not ready enough to join formal institution.

Writing Feedback / The consideration of entrance fee in some museums [2]

Many museums charge for admission while others are free.
Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Several historical buildings consider for not requiring any admission payment. On the reverse of this, a large numbers of museums request an entering cost from their visitors. On my point of view, this action causes the building gaining its funding independently and more maintenance in facilities and building. In spite of the continue decline of visitors is affected because of high charges.

Undoubtedly, the expensive price of entrance ticket at museum establishes community's hesitation, especially people with low income to visit this place. Its irrationally high price leads society to ignore this place, and they tend to choose other place which is cheaper. This action causes a dramatic fall in the number of museum's visitors. If this still continues in the future, the historical building will turn into unpopular place, albeit it will create the close of this kind of structures. However, I personally believe the advantages of admission charge can tackle the drawback.

The function of entrance fee is pivotal to preserve its building to attract attendance's attention and make it as independent building to gather its own funding. Ultimately, the collected money from admission charge, uses for maintaining broken structure in the part of museum. Beside it handles with decoration cost to yield a beautiful and fascinating museums, the staff of museum also improves facilities of museum needed by attendances so they feel convenient at the same time as they enjoy the exhibition at this building. In addition, the fabulous and comfortable museums receive more attention from tourists and make them want to visit again in the future.

Then, the museum does not have to rely on the government for their funding. It can be rebuilt or repair immediately without have to be waiting for donation from its people around. I think these all benefits create long existence for sorts of this place.

To sum up, I would suggest to museum's staff to make entrance fee at reduced price.

Writing Feedback / The cycle of the salmon in diverse habitats and stages [2]

The diagrams below the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagrams illustrate the cycle life of the salmon. Overall, it can be seen that there are 3 stages of this cycle. Also the salmon's habitats consist of three different places.

The cycle starts when fry salmon which has size about 3-8 cm lives in the lower river. It is fasted flowing here approximately 4 years. After 4 years, the fry salmon grows up as smolt salmon. Its size reaches up 15 cm. It changes its habitat turn into open sea. It spends 5 years in this area.

Following this, the smolt fish has become bigger. It is known as adult salmon. Adult salmon has a very large appearance and long trait which is reaching of 70-76 cm. Next, it emigrates from open sea to Upper River in breeding seasons. In Upper River which has slow moves, the adult salmon places its eggs below reeds surrounded by stones. It has to wait over 6 months until salmon eggs hatch fry salmon. Finally, the cycle will be started back to the first stage.

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Writing Feedback / Films in diverse formats at store 2002-2011 - rentals figure had the highest number at the beginning [3]

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The bar chart illustrates the number of diverse type of movies rented and sold in store over a decade. Overall, it can be seen that rentals figure had the highest numbers at the beginning. While between 2004 and 2011 DVD sales produced the biggest income, in the middle of period VHS sales figure replaced by Blu-ray sales.

According to the data, most of the customers tended to rent movies rather than to buy in 2002 which reached of 180.000 rentals and followed by VHS sales placed as second in sales number at just under 100,000 while DVD sales stood at 50,000. However, from 2002 to 2007 experienced a gradual drop in rental's numbers whereas the number of DVD sales peaked at 210,000. At the end of period, these two figures remained stable at their position as the first (DVD sales) and the second (rentals).

Interestingly, VHS sales number decreased dramatically between 2002 and 2005 from 50,000 to 10,000 and in 2006 this figures disappeared from the chart. Then, over a following year, there was a new format movies sale replacing VHS which was Blu-ray. There was a slight increase in the number of Blu-ray sales over 5 years and it was the least popular on consumers at store.

Writing Feedback / Shopping habit turns people into some financial troubles [2]

Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.
What are the reasons for this behavior?
What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

It is commonly that populations do everything to fulfill their desire for expensive goods or support their high class society. It is proven by their actions on purchase unnecessary expensive goods and turning them into debt. I personally believe this bad behavior can be prevented by reducing the limit of credit card.

These days, citizens tend to buy useless items at extremely high price because they cannot handle with their desire called as shopaholic and their environment forces them to purchase those things since they do not want felt left behind. Shopaholic is actually a health problem related with over limit of human's shopping habit. In a book about shopaholic life written by Sophie Kinsella tells about every time these people buy branded products, they will make excuses such as investment reason for their action. This establishes them buy and store goods until over the restriction of their credit card amount. At the end, they have to face debt in bank.

Another reason is the environment where they make friends. Recently years, people have pretended from high class society just for enrolling the expatriate community. They force themselves to buy luxurious goods to support their lifestyle. They ignore of the possibility of financial trouble which might occurs in the future as long as they enroll this sorts of community.

On my point of view, if bank wants to corporate creating low restriction of its credit card for its consumer, this can help people to avoid bad shopping habit. Since they have limit to purchase some products in a large amount, it will not lead them to debt. It leads them buying good that they can pay and rethink about its use for them.

To sum up, I would suggest people who live with someone who has this shopaholic problem that they have to support and not to leave them so the shopaholic people feel brave to leave their old habit.

Writing Feedback / A comparison between online shopping in New Zealand [2]

The pie charts show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of online shopping retail areas during a decade period in developed country. Overall, it can be seen that film/music figures had the highest sales amount in 2013. While travel had fallen from first position to second position, others were the least popular among consumers.

According to the data, there was a dramatic rise in the percentage of film/music from 21% to 33% over 10 year following as the highest proportion of sales. On the other hand, in 2013 travel figures sold few less than film/music by under a very small number which was 4 %, causing film/music overtook its previous place in 2003.

Meanwhile, between 2003 and 2013 witnessed gradual decline by just under a minority in the amount of clothes sales. It replaced position of book as the least popular retail of online shopping in New Zealand over past a decade whereas book figures inclined slightly to 22% in 2013.

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Writing Feedback / The monitoring features of technology supports humans' role [3]

Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what peopleare saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

The advance of technology these days provides easiness for humans to monitor someone else's activity by tracking features and hidden cameras which this action is unknown by the citizens who are being tracked. On my point of view, this advance brings more advantages for police officers and parents to supervise person related to their roles than drawback because of misuse by criminals.

The drawback of this technology function is caused by danger people who misuse it as a tool to deceive their victims. For example, they install hidden camera in their victims' environment and track their daily activity through cellphone. After they observe and conduct useful personal information from their victim such as their identity and bank account, they begin their mission and camouflage themselves as a representative of bank company. They send message to their victims saying they win a jackpot of luxurious car because they are loyal customers in their office. However, consumers have to pay the downpayment for its tax before get this car. Next, targets who already believe them because they know about their identity transfer a large amount number to them. At the end, they will disappear and leave drawback for people who have been fooled. However, I believe this technology provides more benefits for officers to arrest criminals.

Undoubtedly, policemen use CCTV and smart devices tracking to collect evidence of their cases. These sorts of technology are pivotal for them since these make their job easier. For example, a few months ago FBI asked Apple company for tracking a terorirst's phone data. This case needed a coorporation from the phone company since the criminal locked his smartphone and the officers could not handle with its password. The policeman wanted to gather evidence in his phone regarding to his connections, motive and possibility of another attack in the future. As a result, the police can solve this problem by tracking his cellphone.

Another merit is parents monitoring their children's daily activity by using these technologies such as CCTV. In particular, they supervises their children using internet at their house eventhough they are in their office. This method is pivotal because it helps parents to prevent their child from becoming addictive consumer of internet. They still control their children's schedule which if kids spend too much time for online, they can observe it directly through their house CCTV. Then, they will immediately call their children to stop that activity and focus on their study such as do their homework despite of they are not in the same place with their kids.

To sum up, I personally agree that the technology consumption for monitoring populations' activity makes other people's job much easier than in the past.