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There is no doubt that human beings are not omniscient or omnipotent, authorities also make mistakes [2]
Hi Lin!
First, let me say that you obviously put a lot of thought into your essay, as it uses not one example, but two to demonstrate your thesis. However, Lin, I am not sure that this is the sort of authority that they were referring to -- I would think that the 'framers' of the question were thinking about those people in a position of authority, such as a policeman (or police officer), a cop, a magistrate, a judge, or even the President. I am not saying that you are wrong, as you apparently put a lot of thought into your thesis statement and you explained it throughout your essay; but I was under the impression (before reading your essay) that the 'framers' wanted something entirely different.
Nevertheless, I'd like to offer you some suggestive corrections with respect to your essay. Most of these are small. It might behoove you to incorporate the following errors in a re-write of the essay. I would also like to offer you a suggestion -- write another essay, and this time, focus on the authority vested in a position, such as a person in a uniform or something of that nature.
--Mark :)
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