Undergraduate / Psychology and research- Why University of Michigan [NEW]

I have always considered myself an explorer. Even as a toddler I wanted to see and experience everything around me. Unfortunately, most of my explorations ended with me being lost. While my navigational skills have greatly improved since then, my passion for exploration persists.

As I embark on my college journey, my curiosity of the world around me continues to develop and will only be heightened at the University of Michigan. With well equipped professors, laboratories, and medical research opportunities, I look forward to exploring all U-M has to offer. In pursuit of a degree in Behavioral and Cognitive Neuroscience or Development, Psychopathology and Mental Health, I will explore the inner workings of the human mind to better understand how people think. During my four years at the University of Michigan, I plan to take part in many psychology research projects such as the Family Relationships project, Judgment and Decision Lab, and the Evolution of Social behavior Laboratory. By taking part in psychology research, I would receive hands on education of the material I am learning in class and see actual studies taking place.

For me, The University of Michigan is the start of something new, something exhilarating, something that can't be experienced elsewhere. As a member of the University of Michigan community, I will consistently be learning both inside and outside of my classes. Here I can concentrate on receiving my major in psychology, while using my autonomy to start my own organization. In addition, I can join existing organizations such as the Black Premedical Association Student Society, Reach Out, and EnAct.

At U-M, I know that I can accomplish anything and everything no matter how minuscule. With a student body that hails from many states and various countries, I would be able to explore my love of learning, while stepping outside of my usual surroundings to learn about other cultures first hand. With University of Michigan's study abroad programs, I would be able to broaden my knowledge of foreign countries and languages, while still receiving the excellent education that U-M has to offer. Through the University of Michigan's Global Academic program, I can choose to study anywhere from Florence to Dublin or Italy to Spain.

Of the many things I hope to accomplish during my four years as an undergraduate, my experience would not be the same if not at the University of Michigan. At U Mich, the world is my playing field. Wherever my explorations take me, whether to the Diag or to another country, I will always remember my binoculars and follow the trail I left behind, to find my way home to U-M.

I recycled a bit of this essay from my BU essay but it still works. As always please read and edit and I will edit your essay in return.

Undergraduate / "My passion for tennis, My Community" - communities you belong to [2]

This if due today. I WILL EDIT YOUR ESSAY IN RETURN. Thanks.
Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approximately 250 words)

The sound of pounding feet, ragged breathing, hammering hearts, and whistling balls remind me that I am home. Green clay and the distinctive sounds of an ongoing tennis match are my solace, providing me with an arena to vent my clouded thoughts. From the first time I picked up a racquet at nine years old, tennis has served as my outlet and second family. In the tennis community, I am a leader, an athlete, but most of all I am me.

Throughout the past few years, tennis has acted as a second parent to me; whenever I was going through a particularly rough situation, I would turn to my pack of balls and racquet for advice. Tennis hahas lead to my development of confidence and patience both on and off the court. The competitive aspects of tennis increased my drive to achieve my personal best, and ultimately, as I pushed myself to achieve more in the sport I began to also accomplish more in my daily and academic career. Today, before I begin a match, I try to embody the confidence I had as a child taking my first steps on a tennis court. While on the court, I feel unstoppable; as if no serve can get past me and that I can take on any obstacle. My most challenging matches have taught me to push past hardships and continue to participate in tennis, even at the risk of underachievement or failure. Moreover, my setbacks have shown me that not everything in life comes easily, and the harder I work to achieve success, the greater the victory of that success appears.

My passion for tennis has afforded me opportunities and work experience with the Atlanta Tennis Championships that I never would have received otherwise, but most importantly, tennis has assisted in shaping the person I am today. Although I am a member of a community larger than I could ever perceive, I will always find my niche within the tennis community.

Please help me cut down by about 70 words. Thanks. I will read your essay in return.

Undergraduate / "the bottom feeder in my high school ecological community" - WHY Oxford [NEW]

Please read I will read your essay in return. This si due today. Describe your specific interest in beginning your Emory career at Oxford College and how you think our liberal arts intensive education is a good match for you.

I was the bottom feeder in my high school ecological community- I was a freshman. As one of the youngest students on campus, I had to work diligently to be heard. To be recognized as the leader of a club I had to expend twice the effort that an upperclassman expended, and I spent more time dedicated to my individual cause. Unlike in high school, at Oxford, I can take on leadership roles, beginning my freshman year in college instead of having to wait for a position that is generally reserved for an upperclassman. The smaller campus setting will allow my voice to always be heard and provide me with the Emory experience on a much smaller scale.

Beginning my Emory career at Oxford College, would present me with a smaller teacher to student ratio, and the ability to have one on one conversation with a professor. The smaller class sizes will provide a setting where I can thoroughly contribute to my classes and an environment where I can grow both as a student and as a person. Whether I spend the day studying for a psychology test or mentoring freshman as a member of PALs, spending my first two years at the Oxford campus of Emory will help shape me into a successful adult.

Additionally, Oxfords liberal arts intensive education is a good match for me because I have a variety of academic interest that I would like to pursue. The college's liberal arts education would allow me to explore every facet of my imagination, and open my mind up to alternative fields of study that I may not have uncovered otherwise. No matter where my Oxford College journey takes me, I will be constantly learning both inside and outside of the classroom. The world is my playing field at Oxford College, where I look forward to exploring all subjects of academia.

Undergraduate / "The beeping of an EKG machine" - Why Emory [8]

Prompt: Many students decide to apply to Emory College based on our size, location, reputation, and yes, the weather. Besides these valid reasons for making Emory College a possible college choice, why is Emory College a particularly good match for you?

The incessant beeping of an EKG machine was one of my first memories at Emory. That high pitch beeping was the symbol that my step father was alive; it was my hope that he would get better, but it was also the start of my Emory College dreams. For months, I became acquainted with the bustling students on campus. I would envision myself amongst the student body, rushing to freshman seminar about Doctors and Doctoring or Intro to Psychology. I saw myself sitting in an auditorium, sufficiently enthralled with what my professor had to say. I dreamed that I was as a volunteer EMT- I, writing a quirky limerick during Dooley's Week.I don't know that these sentences fit together I could see myself as an Emory student.

Emory embodied everything I wanted in a college. With small class sizes and educational advisors, my Emory education would be tailored to an environment in which I could thrive. At Emory, I would have access to renowned educators, and a plethora of research opportunities. Emory would provide me with a specialized education that could not be experienced elsewhere. Here, I would find myself pursuing my academic goals in psychology, while studying abroad and still making it home for Sunday night dinner. With numerous clubs, organizations and programs to choose from, there is always something new and exhilarating to learn on campus. All those years ago, Emory became my other twin, linked forever by common myinterests and future dreams. From the age of twelve, Emory College became my future.

Attatched is my first poem to Lord Dooley:
Sincerely Lord Dooley of Misrule
Please grant me admission to your school.
Rapt by your traditions
I ask your chief permission,
To be part of the acceptance pool.

I need a way to better link the poem to the rest of the essay any help will be appreciated. I will read back. I also need to cut out a little bit to fit within the word count so any suggestions of unnecessary parts that can be removed will be greatly appreciated. Thanks for reading.

Undergraduate / Sisterhood - WHY Wellesley [10]

Wellesley
Sisterhood. Up until this point in my life, sisterhood has signified the blood relation between me and my siblings; however, at Wellesley, sisterhood defines the connection between every girl on campus.

As I embark on my college journey, my curiosity about the world continues to develop and will only be heightened at Wellesley. With a student body that hails from all fifty states and many countries, Wellesley will allow me to explore my love for learning, while stepping outside of my usual surroundings to learn about other cultures first hand. Wellesley College is not just about being a member of the Psychology Department community; it is about being a member of the larger, Wellesley family. With small class sizes and educational advisors, Wellesley College appeals to me both academically and socially. Here I will pursue my goal of becoming a doctor, while forging the greatest friendships of my life. A Wellesley education will allow me to explore my passion for science and math, as well as grant me access to renowned educators, the latest technological advances, and a plethora of research opportunities. At Wellesley, I could use my autonomy to take advantage of the unique classes offered at several different colleges and to explore my love for knowledge.

From the Hogwarts like buildings to the liberal arts curriculum, Wellesley is the right college for me. On campus, I look forward to grabbing a quick snack at El Table, jumping in Lake Waban at the beginning of freshman year, listening to WZLY, and eating midnight breakfast during exams. Whether I spend the day studying for a psychology test or running around campus on Lake Day, four years at Wellesley College will help shape me into a successful adult. For me, Wellesley is the start of something new, something exhilarating, something that cannot be experienced elsewhere. No matter where my Wellesley journey takes me, I will be constantly learning inside and outside of the classroom. The world is my playing field at Wellesley College, where I look forward to exploring all subjects of academia. I am ready to put on my blue and white; I am ready to join the Wellesley sisterhood.