EF_Sean
Dec 20, 2008
Graduate / Essay on Reason of choosing career - Law school [4]
Edit for conciseness. I'd say you could probably reduce the word count by a third and still make all of the same points you currently do. As an example, consider the following sentence: "It was my parents who recommended that I study law as according to them I have the natural talent of speaking and influencing people which is dated way back to my childhood." This could be rewritten as "My parents recommended that I study law, as I have always been persuasive and good at public speaking." The revised version says exactly the same thing as the original, only in 18 words instead of 32. I'd do something similar for the entire thing.
Edit for conciseness. I'd say you could probably reduce the word count by a third and still make all of the same points you currently do. As an example, consider the following sentence: "It was my parents who recommended that I study law as according to them I have the natural talent of speaking and influencing people which is dated way back to my childhood." This could be rewritten as "My parents recommended that I study law, as I have always been persuasive and good at public speaking." The revised version says exactly the same thing as the original, only in 18 words instead of 32. I'd do something similar for the entire thing.