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joythblessy   
Jan 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) important decision of a teenager by himself or by parents [5]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other relatives should make important decisions for their (15-18yrs) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Teenage is a crucial period in everybody's life. So many people argue that teenage children are capable of taking their own decisions. However, I am not completely agree with it. In my opinion, it should be the collective effort by giving equal importance to both parents and children.

To begin with, there are so many reasons why the advice from a relative or parents is not always helpful. People enjoy doing things the way they like it. Undoubtedly, the success of a teenager achieves in his chosen decisions is proportional to their individual interests. Therefore, teenagers should give freedom to fix final word in an important matter of his life. Besides, parents necessarily do not have adequate knowledge about everything in this ever-changing world. Most importantly, parents try to impose their interests in their children, which are sometimes opposite to the desire of their children. This may jeopardize the teenagers' dreams and spoils their future. For instance, a father who is a doctor will never allow his son to become a motor mechanic instead of a doctor or an engineer.

However, the involvement of parents or a relative in taking important decisions will bring wonderful results in the future life of the teenager. As they are more experienced, they can point out the merits and demerits of an important decision. It will help them to make right choice and avoid mistakes. Parents, in most cases are the first friend and teacher and have right to interfere for their childrens' better life. They know their children in a better way than others. As they realize the strength and weakness of their child, they can better foresee the possible difficulties to be encountered in his future associated with the choice. For instance, a child who have severe problem with extreme climate cannot adapt with a job in country with extreme climatic conditions. The outstanding benefits may attracts the teenager to select it, but, the objection of the parents may save the life of the child. In short, teenagers are influenced by fantasies while adults beware of the difficulties.

To conclude, the important decisions of a teenager should be taken together by the parents and teenagers. Parents should consider the desire of teenager and children must understand the concern of their parents. The mutual respect and understanding of each other will bring wonderful results, both for the teenager and their parents.
joythblessy   
Jan 7, 2013
Writing Feedback / Which matters more for the personality development?Born characteristics or Experience [6]

hai Arun...

Concentrate little bit...

It is an opinion essay..
One side you should tell support and write clear reasons..o.k..

So in my opinion the para starting with
In contrast....?
Here you are agreeing the talents are heriditory and important...
In the starting you agreed with environmental impacts more..then telling important talent...
stay on one opinion develop it..
You can read the essay on the same topic

In this page with my name (gene or environment i think) you may get some more points.
Tessy..
joythblessy   
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) universities should give importance in theoretical or practical educat [5]

Some people think that universities should not provide so much theoretical knowledge but give practical training throughout their courses. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

Universities are places where pupil learns subjects in depth. For achieving complete knowledge, theoretical knowledge and practical experiences are essential. To succeed in this competitive world, I feel universities should provide a well balanced education giving equal importance to both theory and practical training.

To begin with, theory is the basic of practical training. Student acquires knowledge more easily when given relative theoretical examples to build upon. For instance, studying subjects like history or sociology, textbook examples allows students to unravel complex academic theories, which they could expand on. Moreover, through theories it is to pass the acquired knowledge of the past to the younger generation. Nevertheless, not all subjects can be taught by practical experience such as wildlife and aquatic life studies.

On the other hand, there is no doubt that students could find tedious and monotonous themselves in reading and learning academic papers. Human brain learns better by doing. For instance, university degree involving the evaluation of numerous long-winded academic lessons provides little inspiration for the students. On the other hand, interest can be stimulated through empirical research in the class. Thus, learning will be more interesting and memorable. Although, it is time consuming, there is no substitute for learning from making mistakes. Furthermore, job market seeks people with experiences and thus they can enjoy the fruits of gainful employment.

In conclusion, both methods have benefits and drawbacks if implementing alone. I feel that if the curriculum is mixing these two approaches in a right way, then the learning process will be more understandable, enjoyable and useful for their future.
joythblessy   
Jan 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / University education or Work experience? Uni is more helpful in getting a job; IELTS [10]

Hai Arun...

Agree/disagree questions...
:Agree/ disagree completely : write arguments and its reasons with examle..
:agree/disagree partialy : write both sides arguments and exampls..

If you feel you have enough ideas in the 1st catogery, well write it in paras..
You have not enough points some points both sides, then agree partialy..but be careful.

If you feel your essay is not reaching the sufficient word strength, write laborate example.

If you feel you are running out of time and enough word strength chose example in short sentances.

I am completely agreeing with dev's comments.

All the best..
Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS )Why student find it hard to study at university: Reasons and Solutions [9]

Nowadays, students find it hard to study at universities compared to school studies. Why this is happening. What is the solution to this problem?

Universities are places where students learn subjects in depth. People are facing lots of hardships to complete their higher education and dropouts became common. In this essay, I will explore some reasons behind this trend and look into the measures to diminish it.

To begin with, there are a number of issues making today's student's university education tough. Most importantly, the curriculum harder and new courses are introduced into higher studies. Though, youngsters are attracted towards these new courses, the limited seats became a hurdle for them. The very tough competition for seats leaves them in physical and mental agony. Another point is that, the high cost of education. Younger generation try to meet the educational expenses through educational loans and part time jobs. The hard jobs, heavy curriculum and lack of time management flattened them under pressure. Sometimes they feel, the degree holders remain unemployed and it is better to continue part time jobs as full time jobs and they leave their education. The assignments and projects sometimes hard to finish on time. All these problems make the student's university study harder than their school days.

Apparently, though these problems are seems to be high, with proper management and support they can manage it and enjoy their studies as before. Firstly, parents and students should realize their strengths and limitations, and the skills needed to finish a course before choosing a course. Dedication and time management should be learn by the students from their early life itself, which help them to mold their future life without mixing jobs with life or study. parent support to their children in financial and academic problems like assisting them in a project work or assignment to be encouraged. As government is a powerful institute, they can make guidelines for curriculum in higher education and avoid overburden on these young minds. The grand or scholarships and in campus jobs will provide financial support for them. Governments must either increase the seats of popular courses or approve new universities in both public and private sectors, to start the course.

In conclusion, it is undeniably true that, the university education is harder than school studies, with personal, parental and government support and co-operation one can overcome this. Let's hope university students can enjoy their studies as their school days by these approaches.
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS )Why student find it hard to study at university: Reasons and Solutions [9]

hai Arun...

Thanks for the comments...
Parents should start in capital letter is new to me...):
all my essays are interconnected. Some sentances full as it is i am using in many essays according to the situation..): that is habital...

Thanks for you time wich is much precious..
This is the answer of the lateast essay question from a site..
children...? I feel so....
Thanks..
Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS )Why student find it hard to study at university: Reasons and Solutions [9]

Hai...

dumi...
Your sentances...simply....su...per
Thanks..

Aai Dev...
Thanks for fulfiling my demand..
I want the names of a tough new courses...only names..

Hai Arun...

Sorry now i realize you pointed out capital letter after ful stop...take it esay...): we are using pen to write know...

Thanks to all
Tessy.
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) Brain drain: wealthy nations should compensate poor countries? [5]

More and more professionals are moving from developing countries to rich countries to fill the vacancies of specialist. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are cheating poor countries. Others feel that it is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you think rich countries should compensate poor countries for the people they encourage to come?

Brain drain refers to the movement of highly skilled or qualified manpower from one nation to other, probably from poor to rich nation through immigration. This exodus of people in search of greener pastures has been a phenomenon since time immemorial. Though these rich countries are stealing skilled professionals from poor countries, I do not fell it should be compensated by developed nations.

To begin with, in poor countries, many of the highly skilled professionals are continuing unemployed or underemployed. Some people argue that the developed countries are getting skilled and qualified professionals without making any investment for their education or training. It is true that, professionals from poor countries must save their own countries as they their native societies spend resources for educating and training them. Besides, these people need the expert service for the progress of their economy and people. The other side of the coin is that, individual have the right to decide where to live and work. Apparently, the developed countries find themselves without enough workers to feed their development, try to attract skilled labors by giving higher salaries and other facilities.

Nevertheless, poor nations asking compensations from rich countries for the skilled workforce is irrational. The foreign exchange by these people contributes a lot to support the economic progress of their mother country. After acquiring advanced skills and qualifications from other nation, some people returns home. There are others who, invest a portion of their income in their own countries. Moreover, lots of people help their relatives back home in meeting their livelihood. All these measures boost the living status of native people. Thus, these people return their gratitude for spending the resources for their education and training. Allowing emigration can prevent social unrest due to unemployment.

In summary, it is a natural process, that skilled professionals are leaving their poor countries for rich nations to get the job of their choice. It should not be taken an issue between governments. In this process, developed nations have no obligation to pay poor nations for their professionals.
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Hardships of university studies than schools: IELTS prepartion essay [11]

hai Arun ...

Overall good attempt...
third para..
All the above..
Cut for example: put one idea or point and then for ex..
This para all sentances contain 'should' it is my problem too...
Put the sentaces in other ways...
Good improvement..are you following time...?
good luck..
Let us know your result and center name..
Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / Hardships of university studies than schools: IELTS prepartion essay [11]

hai..
Arun..

I am Mrs. Tessy James, from India, kerala, kottayam..
Employed in K.S.A..

Time should not be in your mind 40 mint. Task always try to do in 30minits..

I asked your...b4. Bt now so late...
Mine somewhere in the forum..after exam search it if you want...)Ř›

Hope you got it...
Thanks
All the best
Tessy

Thanks
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY, Private companies spending more than government in scientific research [5]

Hai Dev...
>1000...thanks for giving me the thread which i demanded..
overall good essay...i will try it till eve...):
Some flaws...

Help and enable together...?
It enables the infertile couples to fet theirown babies from their genes...
Anti human sentific...?
: anthrax, a highly infectious disease, which Americans are believed as a n atttack by bio- terrirists in the last decade.

:for instance...which is illegaly mad....===> something here wrong..(:

overall good attempt...
Tessy.
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / Working from home or offcices? _ Ielts [12]

hai ..

Ielts test has its own format for writting essays...
If you write an essay with your own format the result will not be favorable for you...(.
So ...
Introduction ...
Body para...1-3
Conclusion
Is must if want to achieve a good score...
So... Be careful...):
Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / First letter to my pen pal; IELTS TASK 1 [6]

hai Arun...

As dev told you overall good attempt..
But i feel..
The last para ...your interest and hobbies is little bit less...only one sentance, in one para is not good. Write little bit more...

Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) universities should give importance in theoretical or practical educat [5]

hai..Cuong...

Thank you so .... Much for your valuable comments...

I am agreeing that my essays are not excellent...):
I am always in tension with vocabularies...):
The other problem is the length of my essays..
The speed i hope some what i can manage...
Please ... Notifiy my incorrect vocabularies..
I like harsh comments and you are appreciated...

i will try to follow it..
Please cont ...in (harsh..):...) comments on my essay and wellcome to my circle of friends...):
Tessy...
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / EILTS task 2 - causes and solutions for overweight [3]

hai..

the growing number of ....many countries. ====>this much o.k..balance sentance is not in a good flow..
your introduction is not so catchy...):
you can make it little bit better...):
You have good points...

(Some problem with my mobile...
Catch you later...
Tessy

Read more essays

House work...>house hold chores.
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) scientific researches in public sector..? [6]

Private companies that support and carry out scientific researches are spending more than governments in these days. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages. Explain and give reasons

Scientific researches are inevitable part of inventions in all fields. Both public and private sectors carry it out. The money spend by private companies are sometimes become greater than that of the government's researches. Some people feel it is a positive trend, while others oppose. I believe that, if experiments are carried out by strict norms and conditions by private companies, it will be beneficial.

To begin with, new discoveries such as new medicines, gadgets, instruments and so on make our lives more easy and comfortable. The researches, which are done by private sectors gives public more choice. If it is limited to only public sectors, very less people get an opportunity to participate in the researches and thereby few suggestions and discoveries. Besides, the infrastructure and expense needed to run a research institute is high. By promoting the private sector researches, the best results may get because their primary aim is to make more profits. For that, they will update it and trying to modify it in a better way. For instance, vaccines for deadly diseases developed by the private sectors are always try to face the competition in the market by renewing it's efficiency by proper follow up and further research.

On the other hand, private research may leads to detrimental impacts to the human kind. Lots of researches are done to release energy through nuclear technology. If technology is used for destroying human kind by making an atom bomb, the after effect will be drastic. The patency of any new invention is limited to the public company they can sell it to any body and make more profit. However, through proper norms and conditions from governments we can tackle it.

Apparently, researches in the public sector give more security and freedom to the scientists. They are free to do their research without any deadline. Their discoveries are assured to be applied for uplifting the living standard of people. The authority is not limited to a single person but can be used for the public benefit. The other side of the coin is that, governments cannot allocate more money for this sector such as good infrastructure, machineries and so on, as they have to fulfill the basic public needs. Consequently, the quality of the research may trim down and further researches may freeze to improve the quality.

To conclude, though there are some disadvantages in private scientific researches, it gives more variety of inventions. Hence, I personally think that the advantages overweigh the disadvantages and should be encouraged.
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / Working from home or offcices? _ Ielts [12]

hai..
before trusting me or your teacher go to the british councils official web site, with example there is written about the 4 steps...):
This is my humble request...

Thanks for replay..
Tessy

:To avoid misleading others i wrote it, otherwise no problem for me...):
joythblessy   
Jan 10, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) who is valued more: young or old [6]

In some countries, old age is valued, while, in others, youth is emphasized. Which view point do you agree with?
The greater or lesser importance is given to some groups in the society are prevalent in different parts of the world. It is believed that, in Asian countries older people are more respected but in western countries, significance is given to youths. In my opinion, it can be unhealthy to place too much worth on any group, simply because of age, since, both groups have their own part to play.

Old age is often associated with wisdom. Experiences come with age. They acquired this wisdom by hard work and overcoming thousands of problems, which is useful for younger generation. For instance, in many societies, younger family members consult older ones for advice on hardships or relationships. These people worked their whole life to make the family or society better. Moreover, some are extremely wise and experienced to take the responsibility to govern an important institution or even a country. If we look around, we can find that, politicians and company managers are in their sixties or seventies enjoy their position, despite of strong businesses competitions. In addition, as life expectancy is increased, older people are becoming more vital as consumers and voters.

On the other hand, youths are considered as the asset of any country because they can determine the future of the country. Millions of young graduates and skilled professionals are the workforce of the country, brings economical progress. Young generation is always the pioneers of innovation, revolution, new ideas and creativity. Government gives significance to younger people in various ways. Compulsory education is giving to children. As a result, as they grow older, they could become valuable citizens with proper knowledge and useful skills. Fees concessions, scholarships, unemployment benefits and so on, are also allocating to support the youth.

In conclusion, an ideal society would have the balance. We should appreciate the beauty and potential of the youth and the advice and experience of the old. At the same time, we should be careful to understand the reality of each. Although, the society seems to be obsessed with the youth, older people still have power and wealth.
joythblessy   
Jan 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should children spend their free time on school work? IELTS [9]

hai..Arun...

Additional ideas...
:participating sorts enables them co-ordination of mind and body, keep them healthy, good sports man spirit...
In term sprts..
Co-operation, follow rules, ...
All these are necessary in future..
If free time is the mere extention of academics children may lose interest to studies
Dance, painting, mus....etc help them to express their ideas and can realice the talents
Relives children from monotonous studied , relaxation and with fresh mind they can concentrate more on studies...

I prepaired the essay on this topic but no way to post, because today's essay i posted already..):

Best of luck..

Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 11, 2013
Writing Feedback / Should children spend their free time on school work? IELTS [9]

Hai..

Sorry if anything, anyway i hurt you..
I was intented to sent you the 100 essays which i prepared ...just to read ...may be not all excellent..
Moreover, last two years essay and speaking questions...
I am not interested in any personal talks...
My friends know that...

it really hurt me to realize that you misunderstand me....(:

Bye...
Allthe best..
Tessy
joythblessy   
Jan 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) education is a life long task; agree/disagree [4]

Education is a lifelong task. In what extent do you agree or disagree?

Human life is progressing every day with observation and learning. Some people feel that education is for a certain period of life, but others oppose. However, I would argue that education is a lifelong process because of some reasons, which I would try to explore in my essay.

Education is not limited to bookish knowledge, attending exams or acquiring degrees. We can learn so many things through our own experiences, observing others, following media reports and so forth. As experience is the best teacher, we are learning lots more thing from our own deeds. Though we are making mistakes, crossing the borders, these all are much beneficial for us to discover more things that are new. The wisdom, which we gained like this way will be with us probably in all our lifetime. This will show as the right way and enable us to be wise in our activities. For instance, the bad experience during a journey, allow us to learn the problems, which leads to that issue. We will be more wise next time by correcting that mistakes and it will remain in our mind whenever we are planning an another trip.

Moreover, the skill of others also contribute in increasing our awareness about something. This enlightens our minds to avoid making the same mistake in our life. For instance, the critical medical condition of a lung cancer person, who was a chronic chain smoker, vigilant you from indulging in smoking. Media stories and detailed reports make us informative in all fields. They are providing genuine details of whatever we need. For example, through media we can learn about the features of a newly introduced gadgets or even the catalogue to know completely about it even before we buy a new one.

Apparently, our career also is adapting new technologies. Revolutionary changes are taken place in every walks of life. Though people in their third decades of life or even before stop the academic learning, they are still learning new ways of life, either in their family life or in their career. People feel the true learning when they learn and do something new. Big firms are allocating huge money on training sections for their employees.

To conclude, it is clear from the discussion that, education is a lifelong task. From womb to tomb, people are learning something through observation, experience, and training.
joythblessy   
Jan 13, 2013
Writing Feedback / ( IELTS essay) scientific researches in public sector..? [6]

Hai Dumi...

Thanks for your clarification...
I was realy wondered what it did...

exam will be according to my leave. now i am in K.S.A.

Thanks for your support....

THANKS...
Tessy.

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