Writing Feedback / IELTS: women's work / historic buildings / equal numbers of male and female students [2]

In some countries, it is common for women to find a job when their children are young. What one of the advantages and disadvantages of this.

In today's world when human right is the same with others, mothers tend to be workers. Consequently, they will leave their children alone at home. Therefore, if mothers find a proper job in their life, what the advantages and disadvantages which are given ?

Nowadays, historic buildings are destroyed to build new constructions. Is this a positive development? Explain your point of view!

As we know that we cannot step back in time to the ancient century which built many of the historical buildings. Different from the old days, now some people are destroying the historical area and build a new structure because they do not care about old buildings. This essay will discuss about the positive impacts and state my opinion.

Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Every person has the same right to get proper education without seeing their gender and universities as the higher education have to accept the competence people without compare the number of students. In contrast, others think that universities should accept equal numbers for every gender in every subject, but I believe that universities have to accept the person who has good capability to get better education.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : The main function of a university [4]

Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skill needed in workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for it own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

University is the place to give specific knowledge for students. Meanwhile, some people think that university should prepare graduates for working. Personally, I agree that university's role is to prepare graduates in the workplace. However, I also believe that education process in university has a positive impact on individuals.

Obviously, now the higher education prepares students for working and university provide graduates with the activities which support their academic skill. These include people skills such as, communication skills, collaborative skills, analytical skills, and networking skills. For example, in university, student study about how to write properly in their task, such as thesis and report. Then, students understand how to write a great job application letter and curriculum vitae or represent their character and talent at a job interview. As we know that, many of companies need fresh graduate who competence in their specialization. Thus, this is why the argument that university has a role to prepare students for working after they graduate.

However, study about specific knowledge is an important to build intelligence of student and practical context. For example, study about Law and Political Sciences are commonly to understand about social problem and demand to solve all the potential crises. As such, the degree will provide with an understanding of the sources which are leading to the transformation to identify the new skills and competencies required for the learning consultant affected by these changes. Therefore, the knowledge which the students have truly become more benefit to their social life. Because of this the graduates have positive impact to show their intellectual to become better individual.

In conclusion, both sides of the argument have possibility to enhance the qualities of the graduates. It is clear that university has a role to produce the best graduates which can compete with others to get proper job in the future

Writing Feedback / IELTS: Art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students [4]

Some educationalists argue that non-exam, art-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some pupils are not confident to express their feeling about something, include their argument. The way to build their confident is a must have curriculum about art in the second-grade school. I would agree with this statement to some extent because I believe that it help students achieve good ability in soft skill.

Definitely, the secondary-school's subjects have advantages for improving student's creativity such as arts subjects, with the aim of balancing the student's intellectual beside study about exam subjects. One of them is to teach students about teamwork, for example drama. This may help students to enhance their leadership skill for managing their team. So, they can do the best in their performance. Otherwise, they will finish this task in a long-term. It seems, can have negative influence on students because their exam subject is overlooked.

Some may argue with non-exam subjects are not as important as exam-subjects. They think students have to study about Maths, Physics, Economics and etc to get properly job after they graduate. Then, they assume that study about art seen only as fun and spend much money to buy some propts. In any case, exam-subjects can improve student's soft skill too. For instance, communicating skill, they can explain about what problem surround them. They also have to learn to produce some researches which give benefit to the society in the future.

In the end, art subject can be accepted as compulsory subject if it brings positive role for students and make their parents proud with the achievement. Alternatively, exam subject as an important subject should be given attention for students because without this subject academic performance will be imbalance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS : Space Exploration - More to do with national pride than international effort? [3]

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

space exploration importance

In ancient century, fire-lighting has been found by the early man. It is kind of big invention which brings the huge impact throughout the world. But now, people who explore the space is a common in our life, it has been argued that people going outer space have had more to do with national pride than international effort. In my mind, people who explore the space have been made their nationality proud of them because they brought their country flag which fluttered in space. Now, let's discuss this essay.

Since people know about technology, they try to develop their knowledge about all of science without exception they are looking for something new in outer space. Neil Elden Armstrong was an American astronaut and the first person to walk on the Moon. In July 21th 1969, they landed on the Moon then he put the American flag in the surface of the Moon. From that moment, America has been well-known as the Superpower Country which has advance technology to send the man explore outside Earth. People who journey into outer space make their country really proud of them because they show to throughout the world how great their country. Then, it could be national prestige which is no other countries have it.

On the other hand, some may argue that space exploration has had international effort because the current practicality confirms that collaborative efforts are available and the efforts will contribute to the fulfillment of the purpose of the space exploration. Even if the United States alone is fully capable of going to Mars, it has no reason to make that ventures an isolated effort. The United States must be open enough to work with other nations not only for even higher efficiency but also for a share of excitement and benefits with everyone on the earth.

In the future, I think voyage to outside the Earth is becoming a necessity for human because many people use advance technology which can be developed on other planets. Travel to outside Earth will be common for ordinary people who do not have basic as a cosmonaut. Next generation, the situation in our Earth will be changing and there is new information about move the half of people on Earth to live on Mars. Thus, the scientists have prepared and enhance the knowledge how to survive in outer space.

To sum up, Astronaut who succeeded travel outer space will brings the prestigious impression about their country. Although, the nations of the world must move toward global unification and the cooperation in space will be an ideal approach since there exists no national border. Then, high technology will make easier people on Earth to have journey outer space and it will get well-known in the future.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Erosion of a headland [3]

The diagram below show the stages in the erosion of a headland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates a headland, the area of hard rock which juts into the sea, erode slowly in stages.
At the first time, a headland stood much further in the sea. Continuously, the waves attack the base of the cliff which has the weakest area. Then, the rock eroded into cracks and over the time it becomes larger and larger.

These cracks which created by erosion develop into a cave. The process erosion continuous widens the cave and it undercuts through the headland until shaping an arch. There is an impressive example of natural arch just Durdle Door in Dorset.

Next, the water continues to wipe the structure of an arch. Therefore, it makes the arch unstable and cannot support its roof. Further, it collapses into the sea when a mass of rock higher than the mainland so it becomes a stack.

Moreover, the stack continually eroded until it finally leaves behind a stump. As a result, it creates the headland retreating but stack standing independently besides the headland.

Overview, headland slowly disappear from the surface our planet, it is caused by erosion which waves against the cliff of coastal.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2 : Televisions are the most favorite media for comunicating [8]

Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider to be the most effective.

Human behavior has been changed throughout the years. This could be influenced by advance technology which is well-known around the world. That technology provides people to get information by media. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of visual and audio-visual media. My argument is tending to audio-visual media which many people preferable to use it. Now, let's discuss this issue.

The first media is radio which many people can hear news everywhere they are, like at home, in the office or in the car. But, radio has a limitation in seeing the visual. The second is film, which is very interactive media and it becomes favorite of many people. In contrast, the number of film that people can watch is very limited because they do not have much time for watching movie. The last media that give a huge impact a lot in human's life is television. But, sometimes the children can watch some inappropriate shows for children under age without guided from their parents.

While I have argue about the most effective media is television because it has thousands of advertisements showed up every day. Television can persuade the audience to be very consumptive. On the other hand, television could be a great media to get relax after working all day long and sometimes people spend their time to watch with their family. From television we will get a lot of information from all over the world so the people just sit and watch it calmly. Then, it provides a lot of job opportunities for many people to work in television stations officer.

To sum up, most of people prefer to choose television as their media communicating information because they can get more benefits from the advertisement which appeared every day. As a result, television and people make a good relation which interrelated between both of them.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 : Colour can affect human psychologist [4]

Psychologists have known for many years that colour can affect how people feel. For this reason, attention should be given to colour schemes when decorating places such as offices and hospitals. How true is this statement? How far does colour influence people's health and capacity for work?

Colour is important substances which can possibly fast caught by eyes. For that reason, since we were kindergarten, we acquired by many kinds of colours. Then when we grow up, the colour has been developed into many of the decorations and fashion style. The colour has an important role in our psychological behavior such as being part in a place where most of the people visit like in offices and hospitals.

Generally, the people who work or stay in a room where too much colour as decorating has, they will be hard to concentrate and their mood will be unstable. The people may focus on the colour around them when they are working. Room colour can influence our mood and our thoughts. Colours affect people in many ways, depending upon one's age, gender, ethnic background or local climate.

The interesting view is about the effect of colour to the performance of people when they are working. In the office usually use a different colour to represent their job like light colour or bold colour. For example, many of offices in Indonesia use light colour like in the bank, they use prominent colour light grey, peach and light blue. They use those colours because there are give effect to control their mood to do the best for their job. Light colours are expansive and airy, making rooms seem larger and brighter. On the other hand, there is a place of work using dark colour like creative room, they use dark colours such as red, yellow, orange, and green. Those colours give more passionate for person to be creative. Bright colour raises a room's energy level so it is a good choice to stir up excitement. In an entryway, it creates a strong first impression. Red has been shown to raise blood pressure, speed respiration and heart rate.

Furthermore, the important building like hospital painted in white for all over the room. The psychologist for the person's response to the colour of white is relaxation. White will be build the mood of patients to recover from their disease. That colour will give the best impression about calm so the patient will take a rest with quietness.

In conclusion, it is clearly that colour give effect for human changing psychology. Certain colours or groups of colours tend to get a similar reaction from most people and the overall difference being in the shade or tones used. So when it comes to decorating, it is important to choose wisely.

In conclusion, it is clearly that colour give effect for human changing psychology. Certain colours or groups of colours tend to get a similar reaction from most people and the overall difference being in the shade or tones used. So when it comes to decorating, it is important to choose wisely.

Writing Feedback / "Inventions vs doctors"; 'broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering' [NEW]

Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statements? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge

These days, the profession as a doctor is kind of an important job which many people really need in this society because as we know that much kind of diseases have appeared in around us and threat our life. Beside that, the inventor is the kind of job which many people need to get new things and improve their life. So, some may argue that inventors are more important than doctors. Now we will discuss about them in this passage.

It has been argued that a doctor is more important than an inventor although it's unsettling to have to argue inventors as less important than anyone. As we know, the population of human in the world getting more and more every year and a lot of people get many diseases because the environmental changing and their condition of people's living. Moreover, the citizen need a doctor for healing their diseases and confer some advices about how to survive in a healthy environment and decline the impact of unhealthy life. Doctors have the ability to improve a person's physical and mental well being, to eliminate pain, to prevent death.

My argument now is this. A person can live a full happy life with a less than adequate invention but a person cannot live a full and happy life if they have broken bones, diseases, pain and suffering. People with a medical condition do not have the ability to maintain a reasonable level of being without medical intervention.

Another argument against those inventors is as great as doctors. The inventor has an ability to produce new things which can improve human's life. They are not only finding good devices but also discover new enlightenment which support other subjects, like medical, biology and economics. For instance, they discover new diseases which are dangerous to our world and invent a new device which could generate easier our task, like cleaner stuff, tools of work and etc. And today, we realize that some countries are shortage of inventor because it is hard to become a tremendous inventor. They need a special ability to develop new things which can be accepted by other peoples.

In short, this theory has a downside because a doctor will initially need an inventor in order to develop their job and we should appreciate to both of those jobs because they can increase and bring a better life to us. As a result, every job has an important role and without both of them our life turns into imbalance.