lcturn87
Jun 30, 2015
Writing Feedback / Could alternative energy sources replace fossil-fuel energy? [2]
I can help you with some of your writing. First, I would like to know the meaning behind this statement because it is unclear. "This is because the one is valued to save heavy process." There is a minor error, you just need to replace motion with "notion".
-This sentence needs to be rearranged. Is this what you were trying to state: First of all, renewable natural resourcesof renewable are far hard to generate large quantities of energy. I would check your source too. You can look at your source for the next sentence and quote it, but remember to cite or give credit to that source in your paper. The next sentences give credit to your source by citing where you found the information (i.e., book, internet, etc). Change considerably to considerable.
-Change supply to supplying. Please cite your source again in this paragraph. I would help you correct more, but I don't know what is your original writing and what information is from a source. If you use quotation marks around sentences, then I can assist you more with your writing. This is good information!
-The first sentence in the last paragraph seems to be confusing. Do you mean that it is unlikely that there will be a change from fuel to renewable power because of the troubles with alternative natural resources? Do you want to end the essay with, "this won't occur immediately". It seems as if there is no immediate solution.
I can help you with some of your writing. First, I would like to know the meaning behind this statement because it is unclear. "This is because the one is valued to save heavy process." There is a minor error, you just need to replace motion with "notion".
-This sentence needs to be rearranged. Is this what you were trying to state: First of all, renewable natural resources
-Change supply to supplying. Please cite your source again in this paragraph. I would help you correct more, but I don't know what is your original writing and what information is from a source. If you use quotation marks around sentences, then I can assist you more with your writing. This is good information!
-The first sentence in the last paragraph seems to be confusing. Do you mean that it is unlikely that there will be a change from fuel to renewable power because of the troubles with alternative natural resources? Do you want to end the essay with, "this won't occur immediately". It seems as if there is no immediate solution.