Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: THE CLOTHES PEOPLE WEAR ARE THE MOST IMPORTANT INDICATION OF WHAT THEY ARE LIKE [2]

Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Majority of public would mark others by what they are wearing, while some people argue that clothes is not general standard of judgement. However, I immensely agree that apparent attitudes describe someone's personality, not how they dress.

In some cases, it is justified for judging a person from his appearance. Many people did this and it is acceptable only in certain extent. A man who accustomed to wear a neat shirt wherever he goes, tend to be valued very concerned about performing, while those who wear T-Shirt tagged as 'easygoing'. Further more, gown gives a performance in feminine style instead women who present jeans. These reasons, allowing them to appear an assessment toward others based on how they dressed.

However, stated somebody as a good or people are improperly if it based on their clothes. There are no significant studies that proved this rationalisation and it is a human's subjectivity. Kindly men do not have to set up the coat and tie in their body, while bad guy are not always shabbily dressed. Both developed and developing countries have a neat criminals in their government, who corrupt the state fund for themselves.

Accretion toward this, I believe that the most properly way to define someone's characteristics is through their daily temperament among his surroundings, not by their fashion style. Clothes choosing may caused by taste or interest, not fully attitude. That is why, people are not allowed to prejudice someone by their look.

In conclusion, people tend to wear clothes which make them feel comfortable. However, other should not prejudge them through their appearance, since there are other factor influenced other decision toward style.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: SOME COUNTRIES IT IS THOUGHT ADVISABLE THAT CHILDREN BEGIN FORMAL EDUCATION AT FOUR [NEW]

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four year old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight.

How far do you agree with either of these views?

While some countries argue that it is justified for children to register to school when they are seven or eight, others believe that they have to begin their formal education at four years old. Both of age range have their own advantage to encourage children's learning process. However, I enormous believe that children have to get appropriate material which is suitable their age.

It is important to begin the learning process among children as soon as their brain able to receive slight complex information. This is because the human's brain experience the most immense improvement during young age. As an explanation, children who are taught simple calculate method in late period will be less able to do more complex counting process than others who receive such exercise in younger age. As a result, those who are late discovering certain skills are harder to learn rather than others who already know it. it proves that, it is important to let them start their learning process in a young age.

However, we have to ensure that the children have got ready to follow the instructional process in the formal school. Force them to get all the material and test at the school while they are not suitable yet, may lead to the increment of distress level and they will not able to follow the information transferring. A logic example toward this is the ordinary students in Junior high school do not have capability yet to follow the teaching-learning process in senior high school, since they have not study the prior knowledge yet. This would causes frustrating among the students. So students have to join the school in suitable age.

In addition, I think that children have to already learn about basic knowledge, which is able to be processed by their way of thinking, in order to encourage their brain growth. This prior learning will prepared them to face the higher material in next level of education. So, receive such a pra-school material in young age is essential to support student's learning process in some years ahead.

In conclusion, children begin their formal school in the older age around seven or eight-year-old to ensure that their brain is mature enough to receive complex information. However, I believe that, start their learning process in younger age will support their learning process in next period of their school. So it is a good point to have a prior learning for them.

Writing Feedback / The number of citizens who get ill from consuming unhealthy diet is increasing in some countries [2]

IN SOME COUNTRIES AN INCREASING NUMBER OF PEOPLE ARE SUFFERING FROM HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT OF EATING TOO MUCH FAST FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECESSARY FOR GOVERNMENTS TO IMPOSE A HIGHER TAX ON THIS KIND OF FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECESSARY FOR GOVERNMENTS TO IMPOSE A HIGHER TAX ON THIS KIND OF FOOD.

TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS OPINION?

The number of citizens who get ill from consuming unhealthy diet is increasing on some parts of the world. According to this, it is the government's duty to reduce the sale of fast food among the residents by put a higher tax on this meal. However, I believe that this is not the best way to repair people's behavior in eating.

Some parties argues that the rate of fast food buying should be decreased by the government with put extra cost on it, since it triggers many of its eaters suffer from sickness. More expensive something is, less people will buy it. for example when there is a cut off price on an item, more people will put it in their shopping list, and vice versa. This becomes critics' basic thinking.

In my opinion, even though that kind of dish is becoming more costly, the likers of it will probably find a way to keep it in their bill. This make imposing tax to rise the price is becoming ineffectively. It should be their own considering to create a limit on how much their body can receive the risk of fast food. Most of them actually, do not realise the dangerous of the menu eaten by themselves each day. that is why it is better to provide them information about how they have to arrange their meal to avoid them from consuming unhealthy diet in an unacceptable rate.

In conclusion, I disagree that extra cost on fast food should be applied in order to against the consuming behavior on this kind of dish. It is better - to make people consider the importance of the health meal and the impact of bad meal toward their body - as the alternative way to solve the issue.

Writing Feedback / Students can receive useful skills while working - but is a paid work really beneficial for a child? [2]

In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some would argue that children who are occupied is forbidden while others believe this will encourage precious experience. While children do not hold the main role to work, I immensely believe that student will receive useful skill while they are working.

Work is not the duty of children since they have to focus on their education and sharpen their skills for the future. Students have to develop their basic knowledge in school which will take majority of their time, while work will force them to spend extra energy and time, also risk their learning achievement. Most school in Japan, the 4th country which have the best education system in the world, allow their students to have a paid-work out of school time, due to the case study which show that there is no significant learning achievement difference between students who take a part-time job and those who do not.

Children will achieve work skill during their experience which is not taught in school, but needed to build independence personality. Work skill will support the maturity of the students and make them more prepared to face the work-world in the future. The students who work as a waitress in a restaurant, will more capable to speak in public rather than those who do not, this skill will provide them to have a good presentation in class.

In conclusion, although the children do not have to take a job, it is important to involve them in suitable kind of work to make them carry out certain abilities. It is recommended to implicate the adolescents in agreeable profession according to their age

Writing Feedback / Sending the drug users to rehabilitation will heal them - jailing such people is not a solution [2]

Should drug addicts be jailed or rehabilitated?
Discuss both views and give your opinions.

Some would argue that people who get addicted to heroin should be jailed, while other believe that they have to be rehabilited. In my opinion, send the drug user to rehabilitation will heal them completely from their high eagerness on using it, instead of jailed them to make detterent effect.

Drug using is illegal and based on the applicable law, the users have to be jailed. This is because imprison the narcotic users would limited them from the activities taking drugs and force them to stop addicted to it. In reverse, the National Narcotics Agency of Indonesia state that narcotics user have to be rehabilitated to build self consciousness in order to stay away from the drug to avoid the possibility of the reusing it.

Rehabilitation is the better way to reduce the number of the narcotic addicts. While the rehabilitation process, they will be given treatments which heal them from the addiction and receive the guidance to make them realise the dangerous of drug which are expected to stop the addiction for long-term period. The recent data of the heroin addicts around the world shows that there are 70% of them who reusing it after getting out of prison, while by far all of the rehabilitated user avoid to use that drug again. According to this, I believe that people who get addicted with narcotics have to be rehabilitated to make them leave the using behavior by themselves, not be jailed.

In conclusion, lock up the drug addicts into the prison is not the best way to heal them, in reverse they should be given the appropriate treatment to make a long-term curing.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: childcare centers or grandparents in taking care of the kids [NEW]

Some parents think that childcare centers provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better cares for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some parents who are engaged to their work believe that grandparents are better place to entrust their children, while others think that childcare center could provide the children to have a pre-school age instructional. While bring children to daycare will encourage them to learn pre-school subjects, I believe that it is better to give them to their own relation as their grandfather or grandmother who had raised their parent.

Childcare centers are believed as the best choice to take care of the children due to the fully-trained staff which is provided by the agencies. Most of the firms will prepare their staff with supported training to generate the professional workers to serve the best service to their clients. In America, most of the working mothers tend to register their children to daycare center or well-known as early learning center, since it will provide the licensed Nanny who will nurse the children and give them the academic basic knowledge as the preparation for the formal school.

Other busy parents prefer to leave their children to their own grandparents rather than put the children to others. This is because, the most trustful person to take care of the children are their grandmother and grandfather, so it would be safer and would build a better relationship among them. My sister who has 2 children prefer to entrust her children to my mother when she has to go to other city for working, since she want to avoid the possibility of abuse. I immensely believe that this is the better choice for those working parents who want to give a good care toward their children while they are working, since the grandparents are proven to be a good caretakers and educators.

In conclusion, although children need to be provided by the early learning in such place as children centers, their grandparents had been proven as a good nanny for their parents andit is justified to say that the children should be brought to there.

Writing Feedback / The main reason why workers tend to devote themselves in a company is the given wage. [2]

Do you agree that money is the only motivation at work why people prefer working in the same company for many years?

The main reason why a worker tend to devote to themselves in a company during some periods is the given wages. I immensely agree that, this is the only people's incentive.

Most people tend to bear from working in the same office for long time, due to the given salary which reckoned can support their life and their family's needs.

This is because, majority of workers would not risk their career by trying other indefinite job which may lead to the uncertainty and fail.
When someone is accepted in a well-paid position, he will work hard to keep the position and would not be replaced by new qualified laborer and may get he promotion to get higher position which had possibility of greater wages.

When people are offered new profession which has higher salary, it would affect their decision, whether they would stay in that position or leave and take a better chance in different place. The main reason why people work is making money, so majority of job seekers would take any possibility of opportunity they may get in order to receive high wages. For instance, an experienced finance officer will consider a new company if they are suggested to take another position in different community which have better salary.

In conclusion, money is the only motivation, why majority of labourer tend to keep working in the same company for years. The company should offer the appropriate payment toward their employee which have high potential to encourage them show better performance.

Writing Feedback / Kids should focus on subjects in which they have any interest instead of being forced to study art [2]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative and practical subjects which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children should focus on subject which they have interest it in instead of forced to learn artistic matter as painting and drawing in art class when they lack of the talent. I agree that encourage the adolescents improve their natural ability is better way to make them enjoy the learning process.

The capability in art is very determined by the birth-talent and children's desire, while work hard only the supporting factor to encourage the artistic ability among them. Painting and drawing talent not only need skills in rubbing the brush, emotional factor as inspiration which is naturally born by passion is the key to create a good painting. Toddlers who are forced to learn art will find it more difficult to find well idea to start their painting instead of others who have natural talent in painting.

It is important to encourage the adolescents to develop their interest based on their natural ability. They would be more enjoy when they are providing to focus expanding their aptitude in certain kind of subject, rather than exhort them to learn what they do not intend to. Recent survey of United Nations International Children's Emergency Fund (UNICEF) on the children's confession toward the course they take to develop their skills reveal that, the toddlers feel more fun when they learn about the creative or other practical subjects which they like.

In conclusion, making the toodlers to learn painting and drawing at school while they lack that talent is pointless instead of provide them to develop their natural aptitude.

Writing Feedback / A separate room for nicotine users may limit the bad effect of the cigarette smoke on non-smokers [3]

In some countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

Some countries have determined smoking in public areas as illegal and urge smokers to leave the area if they wish to smoke. While this is true to some extent, I also agree that construct certain smoking area in public place would be great to against the effect of smoking toward others who do not use it.

Some countries have decided smoking is forbidden in public area, even certain countries have been stated that it is not allowed inside the country. This prohibition based on the consciousness of smoking toward both the smoker and the people around them. Buthan, the country in the foot of Himalaya mountain restricts its citizens from growing, harvesting, producing and selling tobacco products activities throughout the Kingdom of Bhutan under the Tobacco Control Act of Bhutan, 2010.

In other countries which are allow the cigarette using, they put some limitation toward the users. There is a smoking area which is constructed in almost all of public infrastructure which facilitate the smokers and maintain other's pleasantness in the same place. The fact is, smoking area now have been settled as basic edifice which have to be constructed in public building as airports and hospitals in the countries around the world.

In conclusion, build a room for the smokers could limit the bad effect of the cigarette smoke toward those innocent people's lungs health. It is recommended that government take a long-term policy to reduce the using of cigarette which may lead to the improvement of the public's health.

Writing Feedback / Companies are encouraged to rebuild in the remote area, beyond big cities in many nations. [2]

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Companies are encouraged to rebuild in remote area, beyond big cities in many nations. This essay will argue that, even though this would bring advantage toward the metropolitan city, the drawback which may occur as the impact of the sustainable implication will outweigh any merits.

Companies are considering to build new factory in outskirt in order to find flexibility in designing and constructing. This is because, there are still more space there rather than in the city, so it may reduce the stress in local environment. When I went to my parents' home town, there was a new factory which was built there and it was wider than some companies which I had visited before in the city. It can be seen that, if this keep continuously, it might lead to other crowded and environmental destruction in a couple of decades ahead.

New industrial area construction in outskirts would reduce the remaining green area which is rarely found in other area. Clearing of the local forest is needed in order to expand construction area which would cause more deforestation in immense scale there. The Ministry of Industry in my country, Indonesia had stated that the minimum area of new industrial estate is around 1,000 hectares, which means that there will be forest destruction covering it number. This would increase the rate of climate change and brings destruction toward the surrounding in the remote.

In conclusion, move the construction of business and industries to outskirts will bring more harmful effect toward the environmental rather than the positive impact.

Writing Feedback / Colour is a special tool that is used to sell something [2]

Colour is a powerful tool that is used to great effect by manufacturers and retail companies when they try to sell something. In fact, many of the purchasing decisions we make are partly or largerly influenced by color. How true this statement and how much does colour influence us when we buy something?

Color is considered taking part in any buying decision, and reckoned affect immensely toward retail corporation selling. It its justified to say that color impact the number of trading in a company, yet it does not the main reason of vendible's demand among the buyers.

Color brings great influence toward the number of the demand of a product in retail business's marketing. This is because citizens would really consider their taste when they want to purchase a product in a market. For instance, when a girl want to buy new clothes, they tend to pick the one which colored by their favorite or missing from their collection.

In reverse, color is not the main priority of the consumers when they are deciding whether they will buy the product or not. Other factor as the quality is often more evaluated by the buyer to ensure that the product is enable to be used for long time. A case study experiment which is conducted by one of the most famous boutique in France toward their consumers shows that 85% of shops clients will consider the quality of the dress first over other factor as color, since sometimes the value of dress is more than a clothes so they want to keep it as long as possible.

In conclusion, even though color help the buyer to make decision when they want to buy a brand, mostly people will consider the quality of the offered commodity to make sure they able to use it for long time.

Writing Feedback / Interviewing candidates before hiring them as great method for choosing new employees [2]

Most employers interview candidates before hiring them. Do you think this is the best way to do it? In your opinion, what is the best method for choosing employees?

Majority of companies hold on a interview before recruiting new worker of certain profession. I immensely believe that this is not the best way to offering someone a job since some people are not able to show their full ability through the interview, it is better to give them an aptitude test to measure their capability on offered job.

Interviewing the candidate is not the best way to selecting the prospective worker, since it does not covering the ability of the applicant's ability in required position. The test as dialog would immensely analise the capability of someone in communication matter and general knowledge, it cannot involve any practical ability testing and may lead to misjudgement of talented candidate. A technician often lack of communication skill, but they still have required skill, so if they just through the interview, they would not have any chance to show their actual capabilities and the company miss the capable applicant.

The best way to measure candidate's skill is aptitude test. This test could heed the employer to find out the candidate's qualifications which are needed objectively, while the applicant could prove his self as the person who deserve the offered profession. For instance, the bank officer candidate should be tested on Intelligent Quotient (IQ) Test which include the Financial Administration and Trade Test to measures the basic required mathematics skill of the applicant.

In conclusion, the interview would lack of the some indicators of recruiting the applicants which will be filled by aptitude test.