putri22
Feb 20, 2016
Writing Feedback / Sending the drug users to rehabilitation will heal them - jailing such people is not a solution [2]
hi riska,
i like your idea but let me give you suggestion to make it better.
i think the first body is not really coherence since you did not support your topic sentence. it is better if you give supporting sentence or supporting idea about imprisonment for drug addicts rather than giving the opposite statement about national narcotics agency of indonesia. you can discuss another opinion is the next body as you made in the second body (your second body is very good).
hi riska,
i like your idea but let me give you suggestion to make it better.
i think the first body is not really coherence since you did not support your topic sentence. it is better if you give supporting sentence or supporting idea about imprisonment for drug addicts rather than giving the opposite statement about national narcotics agency of indonesia. you can discuss another opinion is the next body as you made in the second body (your second body is very good).