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'Passing storm' - MY FSU APPLICATION ESSAY [9]
First of all...did you run this through spell check at least? cause
xpiercnces
is is rather comical spelling choice...there are also many other misspellings.
Not until I went to my brace avsior seeking help did it hit me, Vires artes Mortes, or strengths of all kinds is something only learned through life xpiercnces.
Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
^What is a "brace" advisor? Also, as you can see, it is quite obvious that the question is asking you for life experiences so it is kind of odd that you needed an advisor to inform you of this.
You need not relive your entire thought process in your introduction.
It was demoralizing trees all over the street roofs destroyed
^Hmmm...demoralized trees.
The only thing to do was pray because you knew that was only half of the damage we still had to take the other half of the hirrucance.
^Well technically you did not see "half" of the damage.
It was hard work, tyou had the sun beating down on your back and evrytime you swung the axe you felt as if your body was going to give in ( physical vires).
^You don't need to point this out especially.
Due to my slefconfiedence(moral vires) I came out of this disaster a stronger person.
^Same here. And self confidence is not moral vires.
The aftermath of hurricane Wilma is something I will never forget and is something that taught me great streenths. Strengths that Ifeel preparre me to be a Florida State Seminole.
^Huhhhhhh????? Hurricane Wilma? I thought you were talking about Katrina???