Writing Feedback / For over years, people always been paid attention on their look while working. [3]

Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quantity of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

For over years, people always been paid attention on their look while working. When you search on youtube, there are many tutorial for using a good suit in the company. However, should they dressed smartly?

Some people say the quality of employers based on their look. That's why many people dressed conventionally as part of their work especially when they work in the bank or a large multinational company based on service. Their look can improve their performance and confidence. Consumers will attracted to them and decided to buy/ ger service from their enterprise. As example, customer service in Permata Bank should wear formal suit with green tie and smile nicely, so customer will pleased with them.

In contrast, the recent research conduct by Harvard University about "Happy Workers" found out that when employers work in their comfort zone such as using casual clothes, it will reduce their stress and boost their performance. Let's take a look at the secret of e-commerce industry which booming right now. Networking company in Indonesia such as Go-Jek, Tokopedia and Bukalapak can grow so fast because they create their workplace as cozy as home. They believe the quality of people is not based on their cover, but it come from their behavior and the way of thinking.

In my opinion, I think the question is depends on how important fashion for their company. For an enterprise based on service area which the workers should dress nicely in front of other people, so it is a must. However, I concern that look can be created but our quality can't be created.

Writing Feedback / Land Degradation The pie chart provides an information about the main cause of unproductive farmland [2]

The pie chat below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons relevant.

The pie chart provides an information about the main caused by unproductive farmland. Closerly look, the table another explanation based on their region. Overall, raising animals in the openland caused the highest number of degradation and the region who did it the most is Europe.

Based on the data, there are three major factor which divided the chart more than one per quarter. The highest percentage among the others was using land for animals in wide area so they can easily eat grass. The second factor was illegal lodging about 30 percent . However, other factor got the smallest percentage in under ten percent.

Dividing area of how the land degradated, the table put three regions. With the total farmland lost, Europe ranked the first position with 23 percent and still became number one for cutting the tress from the forest and over cultivation. The shocking result came from Oceania which this region had zero percent cultivation although the last position of degradation land was secured by North America.

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Writing Feedback / Many countries has agreed to welcome different habits of people around the world. [2]

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

Recent year, tourism increased more popularity among countries. Many people can easily find an advertising to visit beautiful country and enjoy their nature and hospitality. These hospitality sometime has a meaning that the host country should accept the international culture.

Right now, people live in the global era, which mean that there are no boundaries to on country an another. Many country has agreed to welcome different habits of people around the world. So did in the tourism area, the host country can't put aside this matter. The tourist already paid to go to their country. They hope that they can fully enjoy the hospitality of local people by understanding what they needed including the differences. The local citizens should pay attention and understand that people created different each other.

The strong counterattack come from the other side. Some said local custom is a traditional asset for a country. Tourism based on traditional culture can increased more people to come to their country. Nevertheless, if the culture mixed with other, it will affect the uniqueness of the culture. Visiting a place to have holiday does not mean that tourist can get all they want. However, if they learn about local culture They will get unforgettable moment. As example, Bali got its reputation because they believe in their tradition and put aside other customs.

In conclusion, I believe that local customs should be protected. However, to increase the hospitality , learn to accept different customs is does not matter as long as they do not put it as the main factor, and they still protect their culture.

Writing Feedback / The least reproductive energy come from electronic devices, the major cause of cold is the ceiling. [2]

The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house. Summarise the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where appropriate

An air circulation of a house presented in the following picture. The heat and energy loss because of air movement into and out from the house. Clearly, the least reproductive energy come from electronic devices and the biggest caused coldness temperature is the ceiling. Both of them connected each other.

According to the diagram, there are connectivity from the equipment including electronics which create heat and sent out to the ceiling and attic, then fresh air come in from the window and the door. The highest lost of power created in the second floor where many equipments such as room heater and kitchen stove. However, fan ventilation was placed beside the kitchen stove, so the heat reduce a lot.

Third floor was attic where the energy from the light hidden. The hatch in the attic is quite big so it make an excellent ventilation. The above it, in the rooftop, there are three ventilation from plumbing, bathroom and living room. All of them release the waste out of the house.

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Writing Feedback / Reasons to start a business. Entrepreneurs concentrate only on making money - IELTS Task 2 [2]

The purpose of businesses is to make money and they should concentrate only on this. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people have their own reason to start a business. Some of them say that business is the fastest way to boost their money, other believe if business is not only about get a high profit but also learning about life and improve the capabilities.

Money could make people happy, so individuals want to get money faster. One of the ways is becoming an entrepreneur. Many people always think this way because there are many public figure used to be rich man and they want to follow this path. As example, I ever see a seminar about " How to Become Rich!" and the result is they have a tendention to open a restaurant or small factory because they can get more money in a short time than when they work at the office.

In contrast, the process to become a successful entrepreneur is the hardest path. On this process, people neither always get much profit nor many consumers, so they should struggle how to attrack people that they would buy the product. The learn to manage employers (although it just one or two), build leadership skills and interact to consumers or investors. I have a friend who ever talked to me about this matter. He run a restaurant. He said than the journey of business is not about money. Money is a bonus, but he learn to understand himself as if he is the one who get a huge problem and he should solve it. So, he learn to manage everything.

In conclusion, I believe that there other reason in business world than just making money. Our capasity as people who always thirst of knowledge make us learn better in the enterpeneurship.

Writing Feedback / If a contractor wants to build an apartment or housing area, the first he needs is cement [2]

IELTS WRITING TASK 1 CEMENT AND CONCRETE PRODUCTION

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

As we can see, there are two types of diagrams. The first one is about cement making and the other one is the next stage is how produce a concrete - after the cement is created. Both of them is an important features to make a building like an apartment.

If a contractor want to build an apartment or housing area, the first they need is cement. To produce cement, there are two raw materials such as limestone and clay. They are being crushed until become powder before being mixed. As the mixed compound enters the next step, it flows into rotating heater and the heat burns the materials. The last stage is finishing by put it into bags after the grinder turns the materials into cement.

The second stage after cement production is concrete making. Containing 15 percent of cement and 10 percent of water, concrete mixer is being shook by adding the others materials such as one in quarter of sand and a half of gravel which the ingredients is small stones. Those concrete mixed will move around util all of the components are become strong liquid as we call it concrete.

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Writing Feedback / Some of countries have a strict regulation about petroleum by adding the price into the maximum [2]

WRITING TASK 2

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?

Some of countries have a strict regulation about petroleum by adding the price into the maximum so it can reduce the environment problems created on the road such as congestion and pollution. I argue that is not the best solution, I believe there are more thing that the government can do by creating more public transportation with the cheap tickets and merge both of the solutions.

When the petrol price is on its highest level, citizens have a tendency to reduce using private vehicles. Some of them will think about the expenditure they should spend if they push themselves to used it. In 2013, professor Murphy Mc Gonagal from University of California conduct a research in Singapore by collaborating with Nan yang Technology University has a predicable result as the number of car usage decrease to 25 percent in a five-year period. Despite this, increasing the price only affect a small change. If a country want to move bigger on changing people behavior to solve road problems they should follow lecturer from Ohio University, Mr. Brian Chen, who suggests high risk pollution countries to integrate at least two policies and not only focus on one policy.

The government need to produce policies which can support each other so the traffic and pollution can taking a nosedive. If a country have integrated policies, such arrange more mass public transportation in which the ticket price is easy to catch up by the mid-lower family income then increasing petrol price will success to move people from the road. So, congestion and gas emission from vehicles can be solved. London is a great example for city where the policies are success to reduce emission and traffic jam to under 15 percent as the city won the Global Green Policies Initiative in 2015.

To sum up , I claim that rising the petroleum price is not the best way, but if it being combined with other policy, in this case is building more transportation which can be used by all range group of citizens - classified by income.