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Name: Russell
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Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / 10 things we need to apply in the way we talk to other people without feeling bored [2]

Ten ways to have a better conversation by Calste Headlee (TEDsummary)

What the amazing performance by Caleste Headlee, a girl who taught us 10 things we need to apply in the way we talking to other people without feeling bored and wasting our time, even if those people are the one we do not like and attract us.

Let me point them up :
1. Be focus. When we talk to other people, do not playing your smartphone or everything else that will disturb your concentration.
2. Do not talk too much about yourself. The big reason is, you talk to someone else to learn something from them since everybody is master of different field.

3. Begin with 5W+1H question. It is to make the gradual conversation.
4. Let it flow. We just need to talk all the things that come out your brain.
5. Be honest. When you talk to someone, then you do not know something, say it truly that you do not know.
6. Do not talk the experience that makes you focus on talking all about you.
7. Try not to repeat yourself as it will make people you talk is getting bored.
8. Forget the details about you because do not care about the details of you such as when were you born, when was the last time you got a present, or something else.

9. This is the most important one that many people always ignore it, listen. The problem that people never realize is, they listen to reply not to understand.

10. Be brief and be interesting.

Through her presentation, she told us to go out and find someone to be talked with as talking is not that hard.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Key to Family Happiness is Really Simple [3]

Hi Mem77

Here some suggestions for you :)

This article iswasmade (written is much better by Amanda MacMilan and it talked about how to get happiness in your family.

... family members can increase (tighten) your personal relationship each otherone another ( each other for two people only, while one another for more than two people)

also makes (it refers to going somewhere, so it should be singular) you feel happier as

... makes you feel more happinesshappier and it is more effective ...

new study which was shown by researcherit is found (...) their leisure time by staying at home is happier (...) traveled with theytheir own families

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / "Mentor is not always those one who still alive" - TED Summary by Tai Lopez (The law of 33%) [2]

TED Summary by Tai Lopez (The law of 33%)

Tai Lopez told us on his TED show about how important our life is and gave us the law of 33 %.
Make our life more useful by servicing people; all we have to do is socialize with other people. Associate with 33 % of people who were younger than us, hence we can mentor them about the things that we know. Next 33 % with our peers, the same age with us, thus we can share about anything. The last but not least was 33% with elderly people or people older than us.

It is all about getting the master to mentor us. If we want to know how to have a million dollar company, we need to find someone who had 10 million dollar company to learn with. "Mentor is not always those one who still alive, even if they had passed away, they still can mentor you, by guiding you through their biography, all of them are in my library" said Tai.

Reading book is something that people ignore since it makes them boring. Tai suggests treating our books like friends.

I would like to write down Tai's statement that really amazed me. "If we want a good life, we need to follow the rules, be humble, persevere, read more, and tough enough to get a good life".

Surely it would be that hard, but 'hard' will make it 'great'
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / Give me some advice about How to introduce yourself? [4]

Hi Bams

Here some suggestion to improv your writing :)

when he was primary school they introduce their self with stranger
they do the same style when he was junior high ...
(it is quite confusing when you directly mention 'they', it is difficult to find where it refers to)

almost everyonedoes it
In fact, everyonehavehas same pattern (everyone is singular)

... the speaker iswas popular man when he was in collagecollege (Focus on your tenses)

most of people called him

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 12, 2016
Writing Feedback / PTE - Essay writing practise : Parents should be held legally responsible for their children's acts. [6]

Hi Venkat-v
Here some suggestions for you :)

... opinions with regard to the who have to take the responsibility (The is used when "THE" is clear where it refers to}

... not to use So in the first sentence, ...
So, parents are responsible for their children's actions (you have mentioned it above, if you want to restate it, much better to use other way by using synonym of paraphrase)

In early states of children's life ( do you mean stages?)

if the kid ( try to avoid kid in writing, it is informal word)

Best wisher
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 4, 2016
Writing Feedback / The comparison of relations between workers and their supervisor, and workers among their colleagues [3]

Relationship in workplace (Writing task II)

The presented pie charts give information about the comparison of relationship between workers and their supervisor, and workers among their colleagues from 2005 to 2009. It is clarly seen that the most of the employees feel the exellent relationship with their co-workers than their career leader over four years.

Between 2005 and 2009, employees who stated had a very good relation with their fellow workers increased from 63% to 70 %. Good relationship that was felt by them decresed 3 % from it's percentage in 2005. Next, fair connection showed 7 % in 2005, but it declined to 3 % in 2009. The workers who had no colleagues rose 1 % and who associated poorly with their work partners was not found in 2009.

On the other hand, the relation between workers and their supervisor showed an absolutely great relation was 61 % in 2005 and it had risen 4 % by 2009. Good relation that was experienced by only 26 % of employees in 2005, and it dipped to 22 % in 2009. Then, fair connection with the executive had decreased 2 % by the end of 2009, and poor relationship was remain unchanged. The last, the workers who did not have supervisor jumped from 1 % to 4 % over four years.



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Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 3, 2016
Writing Feedback / The benefits and drawbacks pertaining to experience a workplace before continuing study [4]

WRITING TASK II

Some suggest that young people should take a jo for few years between school and university.
Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might for people who do this.
Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge of experience.


It is become apparent in recent years that many people recommend the teenagers to have a job before they enter in university. This essay aims to elaborate the benefits and drawbacks pertaining to experience the workplace before continuing study in the college.

Young people who decide to work before come in university because they want to stand alone. The revenue that they got in their job can lighten their parent's financial to pay the university fund. The other advantage is improving skills, students will be independence and assertiveness, it supports them to learn about time management. In addition, skills that they have will lead them to get a better career in the years of come.

On the other hand, teenagers should focus on studying in their age. Taking a part in a particular job, whether in voluntary or business that interests them will make them feel the comfort zone, a personal satisfaction of getting financial support, hence to make them not to continue their study anymore. The next downside is different sense of study. A student who keeps studying after senior high school to university is used to with the condition and situation of campus than a student who had postponed their education for a few years to work, they will need time to restart the feeling of being student. In addition, student who had felt a greater career before become a collegian enable them to think that education is not a priority anymore.

In conclusion, teenager will be much better to continue their education in university than find a job. Due to the fact that they need the same sense of studying and avoid personal satisfaction if they had had a job before. Hence, make them believe that education is always number one.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Oct 3, 2016
Writing Feedback / The speaker, James Oliver, talked about the importances of children to learn about healthy food. [2]

Hi, Aris05
I love to read your review
here some advice to improve your writing

In that video, Thethe speaker, James Oliver, ...
First of all, Hehe said that in recent years many ...

strict diet = poor diet

Nowadays, Fastfast food is also commonly consumed

For instance, the number of children bought bring pizza for breakfast, ...

:: focus on the capitalization

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / Electronic media has changed the way people relate one another [2]

WRITING TASK II
The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship between people.
To what extent do you agree / disagree ?
Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge of experience.


Electronic media had influenced people's daily life in doing many things. Nowdays, media of electronic such as facebook, instagram, messenger, and twitter had changed the way people do communication and it is the bad thing for some people. However, I convince that communication through electronic media will not give any unbeneficial effects on personal relationship between people.

The significant improvement of utilizing electronic media gives a sense of worry for some people. They believe that since social media boomed some years ago, people preferred rely on their smartphone or other electronic devices to connect with other people. In other cases, a group of people that hang out together but still hold their mobile phone will focus on their cyber world than real world that clearly seen in front of their eyes. Talking or texting through electronic media are looked more modern than talking face to face. In addition, the other bad effect of electronic media is forgetting responsibility, to illustrate, an employee who has to finish his job in time, but because he enjoys his life on social media too much, it makes his leader disappointed.

On the other hand, the growing of internet that supports the better quality in using electronic media becomes a positive side that should be thankful by some people. Communicate through media of electronic makes people easier to be connected one another. The cost is the first reason people like to use social media, it is affordable that they need to spend much more money to meet. It can be a way to use the time more effective.

The power of social media also can be the solution for the users who life far away from the other users. They can be connected by skype or line and doing life chat, hence the feeling is like meet the person directly with the family or friend they talk to. Additionally, people can keep in touch regularly by many kinds of features in their smartphone such as sharing picture, video, and voice note. The opponents believe that bad effect of social media can occur if the users misuse the function of electronic media. Electronic media will be so much helpful if we use it in the right way and the right time. It depends on the particular person itself.

To sum up, social media is medium that helps us to connect with other people. By becoming a wise user, we can prevent and decreas the negative effects made by misleading of the using of electronic media.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / Proposition of Adolescents Attendeing Four Secondary Schools [3]

HI Alfa7

you have a good writing but I would like to tell you some things to improve your writing skill

it is much better if your opening is changed to be more attractive to be read, such us the presented table gives information about ......
next, you may avoid some repetitions and replace it by synonym word or collocation. such as, decreasing and increasing that you always repeat. it will be better you use, rise, rocket, bomb, decline, etc

in addition, as far as I concern, writing 1 must consist of 150 words, it mush much better to write at least 170 words to avoid the words that may be did not count by examiner

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 29, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary- China wants its nuclear industry to grow dauntingly fast [2]

HI Fuziyahtami
your summary is intersting, But here some suggestion to improve your writing

China has had 36 reactors in operation
Four have had been approved and the others ... (it is much better if you merge it into one sentence, hence the reader will understand it easily)

By 2030, China targeted will have targeted to ... ( time signal BY to describe plan in the future must use simple future perfect)

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary_article 'recommended anti-aging' [2]

This summary is extracted from an article published by cosmopolitan.com, on September 2016. The original title is "Would You Spend Rp495 ribu To Look 15 Years Younger? This Shocking New Wrinkle Remover Does Exactly That - Botox Doctors Are Outraged By Her Breakthrough!".

Many anti-aging treatments had been tried by a billion women in the world. They had spent much time and much money to be looked younger in their ages. Many products from many brands just sounded the same result from the reviewer and it made some other women thought that it just a kind of impossible thing to be true. In fact, it was not like that, a story came from Lauren di Flores, a 71 years old grandmother form Bandung, Indonesia. She gave a review about the most tiring period she felt to erase the wrinkles and fine lines on her face and the product that she used was ridiculously expensive. Until the day she found Bellavei, a kind of anti-aging product which the price can be reached by many women, furthermore it gave the amazing and undoubtedly results in 14 days. In addition, Bellavei gave her 100 % guarantee and will return her money if the treatment did not work, Lauren said.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Dealing with people is the most important aspect in a job, comparing to other communications skills [2]

communication skills which essential are in the job is dealing ... ---------- communication skills which are essential in the job are dealing with people that comes from external and listening carefully to colleagues that comes from internal part.

After six nine years the percentage ...

On the other hand, in 1997, [...] percentage decrease by 3%. ( Much better you make it in one sentence, so it is not too confusing)

Finally, in 2006 the percentage risedrose by 3%
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / The percentages of two different surveys outcome about the essential communication skills [2]

The presented table provides the percentages of two different surveys outcome about the essential communication skills in internal and external area over 9 years. As it can be seen that mostly all the communication aspects was slightly increased, only selling a product or service went down than all the items of communication skills.

Knowledge and particular products or services was the highest enhancement in external communication. Followed by dealing with people that rose 5 % from its result before. Advising or caring for customers or clients showed its percentage in 1997 was 36 percent and by 2006 it had peaked into 39 %. 24 percent was displayed in 1997 by selling a product or service, although by 2006 it had gone down 3 % and made its position was the lowest improvement in external communication skill.

Internal communication which consisted of six items showed a dramatic enhancement from 1997 to 2006. Listening carefully to peers rocketed to 47 % in 2006. Next, analyzing problems together with others was 26 %, instructing or training people was 30 % and persuading or influencing others was 21 percent in 2006. Continued by making speeches and presentations rose 4 % than in 1997 and planning the activities of others was the lowest item with 1 % improvement that had showed by the end of 2006.



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Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 28, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary --- How Exercise Helps You Age Better [4]

HI Fox 19...
here some corrections for you :)

''such as walking and strength and balance ( too many 'And', besides you may use 'and' for the same word classes, such us ((noun AND noun / book and pencil))

study, the results are were clear:

who exercised have a faster recovery time

This exercise can work to make them fitter more fit and stronger

anyway, you can replace Older people with elderly people to be looked more polite

Best wishes
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / Dating with schizophrenia - an experience about living with this condition [2]

This summary is extracted from an article published on the New york time, on June 2015. The original title is " Dating with schizophrenia".

Michael Hedrick shared his experience about living with woman who suffer schizophrenia. Hedrick is a writer in Boulder, Colo. His love story began through the soul mate website called match.com. He made a long conversation with the girl he finally loved after they meet. Actually Hedrick is a kind of man who is easily to fall in love. Although this memorable relationship should be ended due to the fact that Hedrick was paranoid of being insulted by other people. He states that the biggest difficulty living with schizophrenia is a rather crazy feeling that comes from his paranoia, moreover when he also gets too much pressure about his job, it supports him feel more stressful. Now, Hedrick prefer to be 'mantra', a kind of person who do not chase any girl but just stay cool to impress the right girl.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / Some people believe that healthy life implementation is easy to be started [2]

WRITING TASK 2
Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Discuss both those views and give your own opinion.


Maintaining health for everybody has been realized as paramount important thing to be applied, even now it has done by some people, and the other people still think that healthy lifestyle is not that easy to be implemented. There are arguments on both sides of this issue and I will discuss them now.

Some people believe that healthy life implementation is easy to be started. It depends on people intention in changing it into habitual. Controlling daily intake, keeping fit by taking an exercise everyday are easy things if it had been a kind of habit. Even though they may face some difficulties at the beginning they intent to start it, due to their big ambition in applying active lifestyle, they will enjoy it. People who doing healthy diet believes that by having healthy life many advantages that they get, such as prevent obesity, food addictive, and food poisoning.

Conversely, those who think that in this globalization era, so hard to have a healthy life. It refers to some factors, such as many kinds of fast food are available everywhere. It makes them prefer to consume substantial meal because of the rush hours they have, hence no time to waste think about food. Additional factor is people's difficulties to find the right time to take an excise. It encourages them to have unhealthy and sedentary lifestyle which is bad for their physical and psychological condition in the years of come.

Overall, I feel that there is no undoubtedly reason states that healthy lifestyle is not important. Each person has their own way to enjoy healthy lifestyle. Things we need to do are be patient of what we had decided and enjoy the process step by step until it becomes a beneficial habit.
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / 'sleep well at night and do yoga at midnight': it's hard to keep a healthy lifestyle in modern world [3]

Hi Eve01.
It is my pleasure to give you some correction

It is true that citizens have unfit (Put noun because fit is adjective, example, unfit condition) the way of life in modern era

Some people believe that advanced technology givegivesan easy way

And (it is better not to use AND in the first of sentence. it will be great if you write in addition or furthermore ) some people think that (...) eat fresh food or to do physical movement in new world (it is too wide. much better you replace it by their daily activity .

Best regard
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 27, 2016
Writing Feedback / Think about something you want to add and try in the next 30 days [3]

Hi, Kiev
Here I give some suggestions for you

... in your daily routine and wantedwanting to try something new?

Matt shareshares his joyful experiences

Matt's 30 days challenges hashave been ranging

... you want to add in your life or things you want to tryand try in the next 30 days in your life
focus on a more smallsmallerchangeschange
Cachaaaaaaaa   
Sep 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / The percentages of Bulgarian people who wished to live abroad [3]

Level of education of Bulgarian planning to leave Bulgaria (Task 1)

The given bar chart gives the information about the percentages of Bulgarian people who wished to live abroad through three different education stages over six years. It is clearly seen that mostly secondary education wanted to live in other countries, and the least on the level of higher education.

In 2002, secondary education reached 65 % of people who obsessed in studying abroad in Bulgarian. The next four years, it looked decrease 4 % than its percentages before then became 59 percent at the end of 2008. Although this second education level decline gradually, it remain the highest level of education of Bulgarian people intended to stay abroad.

On the other hand, higher education and primary and lower education were the lower percentage of condition Bulgarian people wanted to live outside Bulgaria. 17 % of Bulgarian people in higher education tended to love to other countries in 2002. Unfortunately, it decline significantly to 9 % in 2009. Primary and lower education showed only 18 % of Bulgarian planned to leave Bulgaria, however it rocketed into 32% at the end of 2008.

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