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Feb 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / Do you like living in a city or countryside? [4]
This is too abrupt. Where do you find these things? You need to specify;
In the city, one has superior access to advanced technology, reliable transportation and convenience in contrast to what a person living in the countryside enjoys.
In the introduction, you said you prefer the city to town. Therefore no point in talking about the pluses of countryside in your body paras.
Advanced technology, reliable transportation and convenient as ever.
This is too abrupt. Where do you find these things? You need to specify;
In the city, one has superior access to advanced technology, reliable transportation and convenience in contrast to what a person living in the countryside enjoys.
Living in countryside is way different than living in cities. Witnessing breathtaking sceneries everyday as you wake up while inhaling the breeze of fresh crisp air will surely relax your day. Also, the friendly, hospitable and family-oriented people will always welcome you or help you anytime. Unlike in cities, countryside has less pollution since it has no lot of vehicles. The only problem is the transportation. Since only few vehicles are in the countryside, you will have a hard time waiting for a ride.
In the introduction, you said you prefer the city to town. Therefore no point in talking about the pluses of countryside in your body paras.