Undergraduate / Chasing Pavement- UC personal statement [3]

Here is another way to write this sentence (with a dash):
My legs were aching and limp, and my body was drenched in sweat -- but I still ran and ran...

At That summer, I made a researched about living conditions of migrant workers in my city. I found they had quite empty lives and...

:-) This essay is very poetic and inspirational!

I have a suggestion:

I had also have another dream. In my dream, I was am standing at the top of the world. Opened Opening my eyes, I could can see every piece of the landscape, more brilliant than anything one could never expect to see. ( I feel like adding one more sentence to explain the significance might be a good idea, but I'm not sure.)

Scholarship / "I love to learn, education is my passion" - Why you for this scholarship? [7]

For me education isn't just a requirement for the career I will pursue. Education is a passion. I simply love to learn and if I could spend the rest of my life in classroom pursuing some new form of knowledge, I promise you, I would. ---talk is cheap. I don't think this part helps.

The way to answer a question about why you should get a scholarship is to explain your detailed action plan for achieving your specific goals. A person with a plan deserves respect and opportunity.

:-)

This would be a good first sentence of the essay, because it is interesting:
Obviously I can't spend my life in a classroom, but I can still work in a research facility and search for those missing links and learning about things that haven't even been discovered yet.

Graduate / Muskie SOP "MBA in Supply Chain Management" [4]


I like Susan's suggestion to include "It's" at the beginning of the sentence. I think this sentence should be immediately followed by a sentence that gives a good reason why it is no wonder.

Actually, I believe that problem could be solved just by getting rid of "and"
And When it comes to the...------If you get rid of "and" the sentence becomes evidence to support what you just wrote in the first sentence.

This is good writing. You should feel confident. But whenever you want to check the quality of your writing, ask yourself what the main idea of the essay is and see if you can express that idea in a single sentence. Put that sentence somewhere in the essay.

:-)

Undergraduate / "a health care management degree" - why i want to attend Uconn essay [6]

If you work on improving efficiency, you can give the reader a more interesting experience. For example, you can say this in half the amount of words:

Out of all the colleges in Connecticut, I knew my first choice would be t The University of Connecticut It fit all of my criteria; I want a school that is close to my family, offers a health care management degree, and boasts a great college experience.

It is always better to make the reader's job easier. So... get rid of unnecessary words when you can.

This whole paragraph does not really say anything:
The University of Connecticut offers everything i could ask for in a school. With more than 100 majors to choose from, an on-campus library and gym, studying abroad ...dreams of becoming a successful business woman.---Instead of telling them all this that they already know, write a paragraph that compares their school to your second choice school. Be specific; why is this your first choice rather than the other school?

Show that you have a carefully designed plan. :-)

Undergraduate / "An incomparable education in business" - NYU (anticipated academic area of study) [3]

The facts fact that I can be able to interact with different various countries, export and import different things, learn new languages, and create my own business are all the things opportunities that I ever wanted.

What is the most interesting sentence you have ever ready? One of the most interesting sentence I have read it this:
Writing bites like a fish.

Some fish bite. Some sentences make you have a certain sensation. It is just like when you have flowers and weeds in a garden; you pull out the weeds so attention can be given to the flowers.

This is a weed:
There are many places in the world.

This is a flower:
At that moment, my research for my career was over. ---This is a good sentence, because it gives the reader a nice feeling.

Most of your writing gives a nice feeling, and it is refreshing to hear from someone so sure about how to put his talents to work. But go a step further, and discuss more about the different kinds of specialties of business and International Business. Talk about specific plans you have. Imagine you just graduated and need to take action. What will you do after graduation? What will you do now to prepare for what you will do after graduation?

What kind of business will you go into? Will you be socially and environmentally responsible?

I think you should write about some articles you have read.

:-)

Undergraduate / "Born and raised in Iceland; The crispy apple to the riches." - my life as a journey [4]

Here is a place where you can remove some unnecessary words that clutter up the sentence: I still remember to this day when I came home crying on the first day of school because I felt like I was in a land of aliens. ----I like this sentence a lot, so I wanted to cross out those distracting, unnecessary words. the notion of feeling like you are in a land of aliens is very intriguing!!

Believing one day I will speak just like my friends, I started learning English by reading baby books and progressed from there.----This sentence is structured very well!! I guess reading the baby books worked really well!!

In this sentence, use 2 commas or none:
I felt so relieved that, after all the troubles of being made fun of, I was able to achieve one of my dream goals.
or
I felt so relieved that after all the troubles of being made fun of I was able to achieve one of my dream goals.
Either is okay!

I think you could make this better by switching to the "active voice" instead of the "passive voice"...
Now with the opportunity that is given to me I earned by excelling at school, I'm even more motivated to ...

Great job! I think you have a great future waiting for you!

Undergraduate / "International student, Girl Scouts" - me and my qualities personal statement [3]

One accomplishment that makes me I am most proud is my ability to lead people that was ...

If you say 'people that was' it is confusing. We should change it:

is my ability to lead; I learned to lead durin g Girl Scouts activities.

The activity as the Being a leader in Girl Scouts gave me opportunities ...

I joined the Girl Scouts because of having interest their activities like volunteers in volunteering.

Being leader in Girl Scouts also encouraged my life positively.---I think you could find a more creative way to write this TOPIC SENTENCE for the paragraph. Can you find some imagery words to replace the word "positively"...

...persuaded them patiently and came to the United States for going to the for education. university .

:-)

Undergraduate / "Sticks and Stones" - Common Application Essay for New York University. [7]


You are a lifesaver, too. Thanks for all the great work you are doing at EF lately!

I think you should not include the sing song poem about sticks and stones. It is not an original idea! You write very well, and I think you ... well, one option is to include the idiom, but then ADD to it!! Add a new line to the poem. "Sticks and stones can break my bones, but _________________..." That will be wicked cool.

:-)

Undergraduate / "List of hardships of an immigrant family" - My daily struggle and how I overcome it [3]


I don't think screams is the right word, because it confuses the reader into thinking the essay is about something horrifying.

You did not do enough in the first para to show that you are up against special adversity. Everybody's parents are divorced, and many live in bad neighborhoods. It is okay to use this as the theme, but do not jump from saying this to saying it is evidence of your perseverance.

I guess I think divorce is too common to be used as evidence of triumph over adversity. I definitely do not mean to suggest you have had no adversity,... I just think the essay needs to be strengthened by a secondary theme.

And eliminate unnecessary words:
Coming from a family that has bee n torn in a divorce is something that has definitely made me open my eyes to what happens in the real world. Seeing my mother struggle, something that she still does to this day as a matter of fact, trying her hardest to provide for my sisters and I in order to make ends meet

I plan on making something out of myself ------If so, tell us about the plan. What are your goals? What is your action plan? That is a good secondary theme for the essay.

:-)

Undergraduate / Why Stanford "California Girls" [4]

The Perry thing is just a joke. It is not strong enough to be included unless you can make it meaningful somehow. It should somehow be related to your MAIN theme for the essay. What is the main theme?

If you tell a bunch of weak ideas, they do not add up to a strong idea. Talking about the quarter system, the weather, and looking forward to having views challenged... these do not help.

This is the good part: At Stanford, I hope to take advantage of the "History and Law" interdisciplinary track. It perfectly melds my currrent current interests, allowing ....sound engaging, most of all "History of European Law."---I would like to see more about specific goals and intentions pertaining to your plan regarding law and what you want to do in the near and distant future. Impress the reader with your tenacious focus on academic and professional goals! :-)

Writing Feedback / "The attraction of New York City" - A meaningful Place [7]

My most favorite place has ...

In order to stay on topic, you need to establish a topic in the first place. You assert that it is your favorite place, but that topic is not good enough. If you write a perfect sentence to tell WHAT characteristic makes it your favorite place, it will be a better essay!

Write that sentence about what makes it so special (write that sentence at the end of the first paragraph), and that way the rest of the essay will be supporting that point about WHY it is so significant.

:-)

Undergraduate / "a jumbled mix of Canadian, Afro-Cuban, and German" - my family, community, school [5]

Two ideas for this sentence:
It seems as if the majority of my peers have a certain racial or ethnic niche into which they fit whi le I struggle to determine where I belong. in this respect.

I think that makes it stronger! :-)

Since my infancy, the mesh of my various cultural backgrounds, along with the help and support of my parents, have has provided...---I know this is a strange grammatical call to make... but it is correct with "has."

:-)

sufficiently well-off to aid my family in Cuba, so that they may live the lives that they deserve: I want to reimburse them for shaping my world.----awesome! A noble aspiration... :-) you are great.

Undergraduate / Work of inspiring literature - Le Petit Prince - UVA [4]

Unnecessarily complex:
Last year Madame Fields, my then French 4 teacher, announced ...

...see things "out of the box" ------The expression usually refers to "thinking" outside a box. Seeing things outside a box is good too, though! :-)

This allows enables us to ...

Nice! It is not surprising that the prompt was not obvious to a reader... but now that you disclosed the prompt, the essay seems like a great response.

Undergraduate / "My world" - how can I distinguish myself from other applicants.. [3]

Hey, your teacher is right, and you are right. You have a great idea. Write about what you intend to do so that the reader can draw inspiration from sharing in your vision for the future.

But do not include all the stuff about fiction and film unless you want to professionally create fiction or film.

My dream and aspiration is to become a detective or something of the sort. I grew up reading the cases of Encyclopedia Brown, Nancy Drew and The Hardy Boys. My grandpa exposed me to Dicky Tracy,....choosing Agatha Christie novels featuring Miss Marple and Hercule Poirot all the time.

To become a detective with specializations in ______what? Read some PROFESSIONAL journal articles to learn about your options in the fields that interest you. Do you actually want to be in law enforcement, or do you actually enjoy the storytelling? Figure out what you want to do, and then read journal articles written by experts in your chosen field. Cite good articles, and the reader will be impressed.

:-)

Undergraduate / The Death of My Parents into a Bright Light. [2]

Sickened with vomits and vomiting, I was rushed ...

This is a strong essay! You can improve it by trying out the suggestions in this thread, but I think the essay already convinces the reader of your sincerity and seriousness. Write more about your specific goals for the NEAR future, and it will get even better. Write about your current action plan.

:-)

Undergraduate / Tennis Rhythm, extracurricular activity [3]

Yes, excellent stuff here. I can't make any suggestions because it is already so impressive and complete!

Even "corner of the court" is wicked cool, poetic writing.

I hope you (Skaterchick and firstchoiceu) check out the EssayForum Contributor Page.

Grammar, Usage / "The name of the product ..." - Revising a sentence in essay? [4]

Hm... it seems like a strange thing to do... are you trying to stick the name of the product in the memory of potential consumers?

When I first saw this post, I thought you were talking about a dic-dic, which I think is a kind of bird, ha ha....

Why can't it be "double the word 'diction'" or something??

Hmmmm...

How about "double the first half of the word dictionary.

Research Papers / Survey on whether or not homosexual couples should be allowed to adopt children [9]


Great argument, Rich! Did you come up with the idea of likening the institution of marriage to the KKK on your own, or did somebody help you with that?

Rick, if you are reading this and wondering if your hateful remarks in this thread represent the reason I suspended your account, you can be sure that they indeed do. Free expression is great, but hateful expression has no place here.

I am not even going to bother dismantling your ridiculous arguments in this thread. The kids can handle that easily on their own.

Rich, I have been wanting for a long time to rid EssayForum of your awful influence, but I hesitated out of interest in discourse that represents multiple views. But when you start saying things that could hurt young EssayForum members by making them feel badly about themselves for their sexual orientation, I have to cut you off despite how much I've enjoyed debunking your stupid arguments.

Good riddance.

And to offset any damage done to young minds in this thread, I'll share a link to a new project intended to show that most of us do NOT think the way Rich Monte does mashable.com/2010/09/21/dan-savage-youtube/

Undergraduate / Grandpa's Pills- Why I Want to Be a Pharmacist -Common App Essay [3]

You have a wrongly capitalized letter here...
and said, " What Soup?

And look at where I add a comma here: I'm not hungry," and toddled out of the kitchen.

I'll make a lot of small changes here, especially so that it does not sound like the hair started falling out while he left the kitchen:

I noticed the way his hair had begun to fall out and that he stumbled without a cane. Watching this happen was heartbreaking; there was nothing I or anyone could do to help. He was the strongest, most independent person in my family; I prayed that he would overcome the tumor like he did before.---Notice all the little changes above...

Use a comma after quoted text: They helped sustain his life, giving me the chance to spend more time with him. I wiped my tears, whispered, "Bye, Grandpa," and ...

This essay is very well written. I hope you have some careers during your life that enable you to use your skill with language! Being a pharmacist is a profession in which communication is very important, so I think you will do very well!

One more idea: They had helped sustain his life, giving me the chance...

Undergraduate / Library Volunteer - Common App [3]

This is great. As I try to think of suggestions to make, I find little room for improvement. One idea might be to "extend the implications" of this so that they indicate your longer-term purpose. Right now it is a great little piece of writing about the great work you do and award you contributed, but you can add a sentence at the end to suggest something about your careers of interest or your goals for the future. That would make it so that the whole anecdote is evidence of a larger process as you do the things you will do in this life.

:-)

Undergraduate / "going to prom-a Zombie Prom" - Tulane Personal Statement, experience [10]

Zombie prom is a very cool theme for an essay...
I wish you could talk at the beginning of the essay about how life was like a zombie prom when you moved back to California from South Korea.

Then, when you participate in the play, it takes on new significance.

vibrant poodle skirt--- I don't know how a skirt would be vibrant... it could be, but I think you would have to tell something about what was vibrant about it; otherwise the word vibrant does not have clear meaning.

Also, I think the repetition is too much here:
I am not afraid of expressing myself anymore. I am not afraid.

:-)

Undergraduate / "A Hidden Blessing": UC Prompt 1 [3]

You have a great writing style, not pedantic!

"not-so-Gentle Giant "---I think those Gs should not be capitalized: "not-so-gentle giant"

I think this is the thing to change: What has passed, however, is time: It is so uninteresting! It takes the reader's attention away and makes the reader miss the point about autism in the previous sentence. I think you should replace this sentence about time passing... replace it with a sentence that uses the word autism again and expresses a message that is the single most important thing for the reader to remember after finishing your essay.

Also...
Look at each point you make in this essay, and ask yourself what it means. Ask yourself if it is what you really want to say. What are the most important ideas to share with the reader?

When I read this...Rachel would be the one to push me forward-- the one to be both my inspiration and my motivation, leading me to discover my dreams and shaping me to be the person- the better person- I am today....it is impressively written, but its basic meaning is generic: she inspired me to discover my dreams and be a better person. It's like something someone might say to end an essay if they could not come up with any creative theme.

But I think you can make a great theme associated with the excavation of your identity -- use a word the reader might not expect, and make it an unforgettable theme!

:-)

Undergraduate / "balance; my father did not die in a car accident" - Personal Information Essay [7]

When you put 2 sentences together as a compound sentence, use a comma before the conjunction:
My grades started to pick up, and helping my mother became less of an issue.

This essay has very well structured sentences, and it makes me want to know about the significance of this act of denying that he had left and pretending that he had died in an accident... dies by accident instead of leaving on purpose. I think you should write more about that at the end!

:-)

Also, at the beginning of the essay I think you should introduce the idea of learning to balance your emotions in a way that has benefited you many times -- and knowing that the balance came from having to cope with the sad situation.

That way, when you talk about balancing your emotions at the end, it will complete the idea you introduced at the beginning.

Research Papers / HUMAN RESOURCE MANAGEMENT: ethics, hiring process; Research paper [57]

Hi Joyce,

I think you mean to say you are taking a class about Research Methods. Is that right? Maybe you are studying about quantitative and qualitative methods.

I have an idea that might make it easy for you. Think of a HRM article that interests you, and identify the topic. For example, "employee motivation" or "absenteeism" and search your library database for:

HRM, survey, [name of topic]

So if you want to read about absenteeism search for:
HRM, survey, absenteeism

That way, you will find a lot of research studies that use survey designs. Read them, and then read online about survey designs. Become an expert on survey research, and use it, because it is a good approach and easy to use.

:-)

Essays / The physical details of Heaven, Hell, and Paradise in Paradise Lost. (thesis help) [2]

Just check out sparknotes for this sort of thing:
sparknotes.com/poetry/paradiselost/themes.html
Spend 10 minutes skimming around, and you will be able to appreciate any work of literature so much better! I know a lot of kids use sparknotes to avoid having to read the reading, but actually sparknotes is such high quality that it makes me WANT to get the book/poem and read it.

So, anyway, look there to find the main idea.

Then, you need to relate the physical details to the main idea. EASY!! :-)

Let me know what happens! Follow that link, identify the main idea, and talk about what those physical details have to do with it.

Research Papers / 'The Masque of the Red Death' and 'Hop Frog' - Ideas on Starting a Research Essay [2]

You can show me some of the essay, and I'll help you find a way to insert them! Or if you tell me about some of them, I can give you some ideas about themes they might share!

Google the titles with the word "analysis" and you will find great articles about them. Include the word fairy tale and you will probably find exactly what you need.

What do you think is the significance of a fairy tale motif in a story like this?

;-)

Research Papers / Literature Review Format questions (for my pharmacy college's writing class) [2]


I think an abstract should contain the guide questions. The abstract should give all the basic information about what the paper is all about, so if the paper is organized around those questions they belong in the abstract.

The thesis statement should go in the introduction, but its focus will probably be mentioned in the abstract. The thesis is the main idea of the paper, so the abstract is incomplete without it.

Those long article titles make the paper hard to read. It should rely on the reference list to give the titles. Just do this:
Abdulghani (2008) examines how widespread academically-related stress ...

:-)

Graduate / "Being a leader in carbon capture" - my SOP (PhD Chemical Engineering) [5]

Hi, I'm really sorry you have been waiting so long for a reply. We have a lot of essays lately!

I still remember that day.----There is a moment when this sentence is all the reader has seen. It is not an interesting sentence. You should add an imagery word or an action verb. :-)

Another way to improve the intro is to make these questions more specialized: "What do I really want? And who do I want to be?" Instead, ask what academic discipline will enable you to _____________________ (fill in the blank with the goal you feel is important to accomplish through chem engineering).

I was enthusiastic abou t exploring things ...

For my bachelors degree, I have chosen chemical engineering because..

You should probably capitalize the I in Internship because it is the name of the course: the "internship" course...

During my masters degree program, I tried to...

:-)

Undergraduate / Let's go to America! (my knowledge of the American culture began to expand) [3]

People say that experience is the best teacher, and I believe this is true.

I remember the first time I came to America; I was only 8 years old and very shy.

Although I had to change some of my customs of daily living, I was very excited to go to a new country.---great sentence!

...and became more proficient in English than I could have become in my home countr y.

:-) It is so impressive that you can write this well even though you were an ESL student in primary school. You have a nice writing style. Please visit essayforum.com/ef-contributor-page/.

Undergraduate / OVER POPULATION: Georgetown Global issue essay [2]

Do not use more words than necessary:
If the planet earth continues on the its current path, that it is headed for , it is predicted that between 2020 and 2029 that we will reach our maximum carrying capability for humans.

The US United States and Germany are both

Do not use more words than necessary:
If overpopulation continues, it will have damaging effects to damage everything on this earth. Over population is the basis of most problems we face world wide today; such as global climate change and World famine.

There is are millions of starving people in the world, and this will only increase if there aren't any drastic changes.

:-)

Undergraduate / "No beach but hard work" - Georgetown: Significant summer/school activity [3]

hyphens:
part-time
fast-food
year-old

Use a colon in a situation like this:
After that first summer I realized something: I am developing traits and skills that otherwise I would not have learned. ---yeah, but if you did not have to work making shakes you could have been learning how to do something more meaningful, like nutrition science or how to give cognitive therapy or acupuncture, or how to play the banjo!

So, stay on the lookout for ways to learn what you like... :-)

I like the theme of your essay, though! Can you tell a little about how this might influence the careers you choose?

Undergraduate / UC Prompt 2: "I thought I was in hell" [5]

Though I was forced to do things I was never not familiar with, ...
or
Though I was forced to do things I had never become familiar with, I derived ...

I learned that the each experience benefits me, even though I may be scared at first. ---This sentence did not make sense to me until I changed that word...

Okay, this has a cool theme. I think it is pretty strong. You do SHOW the reader your insight about perseverance, because the story demonstrates that you have had an experience that makes you aware of the way you can benefit if you do not quit. Also, you have great imagery words, like sour and sweaty and "sun softened its glare.." Good stuff here...

:-)

Essays / "Purpose of University- money or education?" - stuck on a research essay [4]

If you cannot find evidence to support the idea, why do you believe the idea is correct. I want to write a paper that says people named Kevin are smarter than average, but I cannot find any evidence to support it!

So, I should look at the articles and books BEFORE I make an argument.
Write your body paragraphs about the articles you find and THEN give a thesis statement.

the three parts of the thesis will probably come from articles you read.

Search your article database for these words: "reasons for attending college"
And these words: "reasons for attending university"
And: motives, "college students" employment, learning, reasons

When you search, those are good words to use!
:-)

Undergraduate / USC School of Cinematic Arts ---Animation Personal Statement [5]

If it's not too late, I'll give some feedback about the beginning...

One afternoon, I was portraying still objects in the school art studio. ---This has no imagery words, so it is like a painting without a picture.

I heard a wind, and a ginko leaf was brought in and fell on a liquor can at the edge of the still scene.---This is very cool, but I would like to have active voice instead of passive voice, like this:

I was portraying still objects (name the object) in the school art studio when I heard a wind, and a ginko leaf was brought in and wafted in and fell on a liquor can at the edge of the still scene.

I think the part about the old lady is brilliant, and you expressed some very wise ideas. I especially like this part: It did have showed her complex smile in sunset, yet it couldn't tell the story of her who realized her life was also in sunset. I like it, BUT it is not correct until you use the advice rheyneysherway gave... it is excellent advice!

:-)

Undergraduate / "Art Accomplishment" - UC Application Personal Statement Prompt [3]

But I struggled to achieve this goal because their disapprovement disapproval

use a hyphen:The self-doubt

comma: fooled me into believing that I had no purpose in art, which
missing a word: After seventeen years of my dedication to art I received

This is a great sentence, but you need a z in terrorized: So when my parents terrorized me with their criticism I was in shock---maybe I am wronge and you were using a UK English version of the word? I dunno...

:-) This essay is great, very enjoyable to read and very impressive. I recommend Berdyaev, because his way of discussing creativity is something you probably can appreciate a lot.

Graduate / SOP-Computer Science (why Masters, Projects, Current State, Why U of IL) [2]


It seems strange, (and almost offensive) to capitalize technology and not the other things listed. :-)
It is better to just not capitalize any of it.


"An able" is not as good as "a capable" but that is just my opinion.

Is this supposed to be plural? "parents"
I carried teachings of my parents to my engineering days.

My first year had involved subjects from various field and I observed ...

My Electronics course required me to...----here, it is okay to capitalize because the name of the course is a proper noun. so this is good.

You did a great job with this essay. I look forward to seeing a few threads where you help younger essayists to write professionally, like you do! Welcome to EssayForum! :-) I want to mention also that it will be great if you give the reader a clear goal to keep in mind and associate with you. It does not have to be a major life goal, but it has to be specific. Something to help the reader know you. In 2 or 3 parts of this, it would be good to mention the same interesting goal. And ... look at the end here:

my will to succeed in (name of interesting goal) will be ...

You are already impressive! So, all you have to do is attend to interestingness. :-)

Writing Feedback / People are starving, but money is spent on pets [4]

This is a great thread! Thanks, everyone.

Undergraduate / "She was willing to actually speak out" - someone who has had an impact on you [5]

This is beautiful stuff. In music, we do this sort of thing, too... leave a track just the way it is, because it has that raw realness. We don't want to alter it.

But if you are going to package this inspired writing nicely for the AO reader, just add some nuts to the snickers bar. Add 2 or 3 specific goals for the next year that you can relate back to her influence.

Another way to add nuts to the snickers bar is to cite a research study or journal article. It's easy to do, and it does not take up much room in the essay.

It's kind of like putting armor on your precious offspring.

:-)

Undergraduate / "intrinsic motivation" uc prompt 2 [3]

hyphen: self-criticism

The primary aspect of my personal nature this does not really mean anything, so it makes the sentence unnecessarily complicated, and that is never good. And you can't have all those things be the primary aspect.

I think you should do a little more to share insight into intrinsic motivation... what is it that drives you? Something you hope to accomplish as soon as possible in this world full of suffering people? :-)

And here is a sentence I would like to change:
In addition, when I do score poorly on a test, I do not try to punish myself with an excessive amount of the "end of the world" feeling;(that part is awesome)

I just analyze the mistakes that I made and correct them for the next occasion. (Right here, you leave the reader hanging a little... the first paragraph should have one more sentence added to it so that you can leave the reader thinking about the main idea the essay intends to convey.

Research Papers / Battle of Stalingrad Research Paper Help. [3]

Think of this as a scavenger hunt. Or if you don't like scavenger hunts, think of it as a kind of art that is made up of a lot of things thrown together.

It's easy to find journal articles. Your school library database probably has a ton, and Google scholar has a ton.

If you mix 5 kinds of paint, you get something completely unique. So, get five articles. Write five paragraphs to tell the main idea of each article, and when you see what you have written, you will know what theme you will use!!!

Google the word theme right now as an exercise, and look at how it is defined and discussed.
:-)
If your paper has a memorable theme, the reader will really be impressed.