Writing Feedback / In the past, people lived in the same places since they just born until died. [5]

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

In the past, people lived in the same places since they are born until died. For this reason, those people were always more likely to get close to their relative and their friends, but this trend would lead them to have a monotonous lifestyle and to face many difficulties in finding a job. On the other hand, people often move around they live for their lifetime where people can learn more about the different habits and get new experiences, but this can causes people live in long distance with their families and is difficult to make new friends. Therefore, I argue that living in different places is most useful for people.

People staying in the same place have benefits such as they are always close to their relatives and their colleagues. In small communities, people know who will give them a hand when they need a help. This is because everyone knows everyone else, so it can be easy to communicate with others. However, this trend also has drawbacks. It is evident that people probably not enjoyable because they live in the area monotonously, and certainly they will hard to seek for a job without communication with larger societies.

On the other hand, people today always move to other places for living. This is the best way for people to live in the different places because they can learn more about other habits. Beside that, people also can meet more people around where they live. Nevertheless, when people often move around, it can be complicated to find new friends, and also people can lose touch with their relatives.

To sum up, it seems that people living in permanent and different places have advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, I would argue that staying in the many places is better than staying in one place like people in the past as it can improve the quality of people lives.

Writing Feedback / There are many ways to know about other countries - neither only by watching TV programmes nor films [5]

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

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In this day and age, there are many ways to know about other countries. For this reason, several people argue that one of the best ways to learn about other countries are watching television programmes and films without visiting it. This is because they just stay at home to do it. However, others think that people should visit to other countries to learn more about native habit of foreign countries. Therefore, I would argue that learning about other countries by visiting is rather than just learn by watching television shows and movies.

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Writing Feedback / In today's world the high class buildings become a landmark for each town and city. [2]

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays high class buildings as a landmark for each city. As such, several people argue that having an impressive building around the city is becoming attracted and amazed, this is because the magnificent buildings in cities can anticipate economical problems. However, others believe that having it makes cities unhealthy, and this can cause flood and air pollution. Therefore, I would argue that have imposing buildings can make cities look more different than usual and also give income for the government.

On the one hand, people argue that magnificent buildings make cities unhealthy because many green areas have altered by tall buildings. This action can cause flood and air pollution around the areas. Taking Jakarta as an example, many tall buildings have constructed, and this trend causes reducing absorption and green areas that could lead to flooding and air pollution. As a result, flooding in Jakarta always occurs seasonally in every year and automatically the air will contaminated.

On the other hand, certainly impressive buildings have a meaning for each city, especially in develop areas. First, it is making easy for. Also, it makes cities more beautiful and wonderful. Besides that, imposing buildings can help economical per capita in every city because can attract people to travel in the place.

In conclusion, it seems to me that there are many positive effects for cities and towns have impressive buildings. Thus, it is imperative that the government should support this trend and also must control magnificent buildings.

Writing Feedback / The amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams - the line graph [3]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph illustrates the amount of spreads consumed from 1981 to 2007, in grams.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the consumption of Spreads, including Margarine and Butter from 1981 to 2007. The quantity is measured in grams. At first glance it is evident that there was a significant fall in the consumption of Margarine and Butter, but the consumption of Low fat and reduced spreads saw a dramatic increase.

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Writing Feedback / Knowledge about some country lifestyle and culture helps to learn a language of this area [2]

In order to learn a language well, we should also learn about the country as well as the cultures and lifestyles of the people who speak it.

It is important for people to learn about other languages, at least a common language such as English, Mandarin, and Japanese. As such, several people believe that learning a language has to put all themselves on it. Nevertheless, others argue that people should study more about country's culture and lifestyle to help them to gain a better understanding. Therefore, I would agree that this trend is needed to learn a language well.

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Writing Feedback / You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words. Write about the following [3]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.
Write about the following topic:

"Life now is better than it was 100 years ago."

Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In this day and age, development of technology has a big progress improvement, especially for people's lives. Several people believe that people lived in the past have more knowledge about the world base on their experiences. However, others argue that people's lives today are better than the past. Therefore, I would agree that life in these days is better than it was 100 years ago.

People who life it was 100 years ago have a characteristic itself because they know several histories from the past and certainly their lifestyle are different from people nowadays. Take mobile phone as an example. In the past people used their mobile phone only for keep in touch with other people by calling. As a result, people should update about all news around they life.

On the other hand, others think that life in modern era has more benefits than people lived in 100 years ago. First, people can encourage their abilities or talents because these days there are many ways to explore it. Also, technology in this era more increasing than before, it means people easy to do some activities in their life such as surfing the internet, social networking and so on. Not only this, there are many modern facilities that able to help people work.

To sum up, it seems that people lived in these days is better than one hundred years ago. I personally argue that people are living in this era has more effectively and efficiently than people lived in the past.

Writing Feedback / The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities [2]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the cost-of-living averages in two different cities as compared to the national cost-of-living average.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates about the information of cost-living average in different towns as compared to the National average, including Riverdale and Cape Alicia. At first glance it is evident that the cost-of-living in Riverdale is more expensive than Cape Alicia for all facilities.

To begin with the cost-of-living in Riverdale for Housing, Health care, and Clothing are higher than other activities with the percentage at 19 %, 7 %, and 5.5 % respectively. The percentage of the other activities such as Groceries (4.7 %), Utilities (4.5 %), and Transportation (4 %) are lower than other living cost.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that the percentage of cost-living in Cape Alicia is lower than Riverdale, where some facilities like Utilities (1.2 per cent), clothing (1 per cent), and Groceries (0.5 per cent). While there are facilities that under average, including 0.8 per cent for Health care, -3.8 per cent for Transportation, and the lowest one is Housing by only -12.5 %.

Writing Feedback / 'computer science is higher than other majors over the period' - National University fields degrees [2]

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the information about the degrees granted at the National University in different majors in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010. At the first glance it is evident that computer science is higher than other majors over the period. Medicine and law experienced fluctuation, and Business is lower than other subjects in the end of period.

To begin, in 1990. The percentage of degrees granted for computer science was at less than a third, then increased significantly in 2000 at two-fifths, and the next ten years this major becomes most popular at more than two fifths at the end of period. However, the degrees granted of business saw significant fall at 30 per cent, 20 per cent, and 15 per cent respectively over the timeframe.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the pie chart reveals that medicine and law had the same pattern of the degrees granted. In 1990, the degrees granted of medicine at a quarter, and the next ten years became less than a third, but the third period in 2010 slight fall at a quarter again. The degrees granted of law was the lower that other majors only at 15 % in 1990, then decreased significantly at 10 %, and the end of period was significant rise at 15 %.

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Writing Feedback / Parents have an important role to choose their children profession but kids are more independent now [NEW]

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write at least 250 words.
Write about the following topic:

In your opinion, should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them?

Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Parents are very influential on a child's future. As such, parents tend to choose their children's careers or professions. However, young people today are becoming more and more independent to choose their own decision like their education or job. Therefore, I personally believe that parents should give freedom to their children to choose their professions.

In this era, there is a lot of information coming from all directions to young people who want to make a good decision for their professions. First, children's thinking nowadays is more radical than the thought of parents and this is why young people should be permitted to decide for themselves. Also, children know what they need, so they can take action for their life with some reasonable ideas for their education or job. Not only this, young people can adapt to changes more easily than their parents because there many varying developments happening in this day and age.

However, some parents want their children to follow their actions, especially in regards to their children's professions. Thus, parents believe that they know more about life and the best careers for their children so there is no doubt that parents want to choose their children's professions.

To sum up, it seems to me that parents have an important power to choose their children's professions, but just a tradition because young people these days tend to more independent to choose their professions. It is imperative that parents and children should collaborate to make good decisions for the children's career.

Writing Feedback / The diagram below explain the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building. [3]

The diagram below explain the process of making wood pellets, used to heat building.

The diagram reveals the information of the process about how the wood pellets made. At first glance, it is evident that there are seven steps to make wood pellets used to head buildings.

First of all, sawdust arrives from sawmill and put this into fibers of inform length in a hammer mill. Then, the next process is that fibers are dampened with steam, and they are forced through holes in a pellet machine, forming into pellets.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the diagrams shows that the next stages is cooking pellets to the machine, and then lost dust is vacuumed off, thus resulting wood pellets. Before the wood pellets are ready for sale, wood pellets are packed into 18 kilo (40 pound bags), after this step, the product is ready for seal and wood pellets manufactured by this process are suitable for use to heat buildings such as pellet stoves and pellet furnaces.

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Writing Feedback / The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problem [3]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think the governments should spend money for the development of public transportation system in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric types of cars that many cause less pollution.

The number of private cars today increases significantly, and this can cause pollution everywhere which contributes to global warming. As such, many people recommended that governments should spend much money to improve the quality of public transportation for reducing pollution. However, others believe that it is better to allocate money for developing electric cars that may cause less pollution. Therefore, I personally argue that the government should spend money to develop better public transportation.

To begin, evolving or producing electric cars does not provide the best solution to minimize air pollution around the world. First, this action will cause other problems because the government must invest more much money to produce electric cars. Furthermore, this way also is not effective and efficient to solve the problem since electric cars is not guarantee to protect pollution. This is as the cause of the pollution is not because of types of transportation including electric cars but due to how many people are using it.

However, it is important for the government to spend a significant amount budget for improving the quality of public transportation. For instance, when government develops better public transportation system, automatically there is no doubt for people to use public transportation as much as safe. Thus, people can use public transportation for their activities.

To sum up, it seems to me that the government should spend more money for the development of public transportation than producing electric cars to reduce air pollution around the world. It is imperative that the government should keep control of the use of public transportation and make a good allocation for this action.

Writing Feedback / The best way for children to learn a new language is when they start in an earliest grade [3]

All children should study a foreign language in school, starting in the earliest grades.

Language is one of the communication tools in all country in the world. Several people believe that student must study different languages in primary school because this the best time for put knowledge for them. However, others think that children in primary school need to explore their wish like because this age golden for them. Therefore, I personally argue that the best way to children for learning second language when they in earliest grades.

The best way for children to learn a new language when they in earliest grade. First, children have the most gain from this adventure because children at primary school able to a more understand what subject that enters in their brain. Also, in this age, children easy to imitate what they heard and what they see without understand more about the structure. Not only this, this action can make easy for them to learn about speaking especially in the case of spoken other language.

However, learning foreign language able to disturb students activities who are studying in primary school. For instance, students have a target to learn many lessons in their schools as main subject and students automatically must focus to their subjects, and this can cause students are very hard to learn other languages because leaning language needs a long process and time to understand. As a result, children should only study primary subjects in their schools.

To sum up, it seems to me that the government and multiple stakeholders should use curriculums including new language to primary schools, and students will be easier to learn second language. It is evident that parents also should give to support for their children to improve new knowledge.

Writing Feedback / The marital status of adult Americans between 1970 and 2000 [2]

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult American in two of the years.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts illustrate about the number of marriages and divorces in USA from 1970 to 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in1970 and 2000. At first glance, it is evident that the number of marriages in USA is higher than divorces over frimetime. Then, for marital status of adult Americans, married resulting the higher position than other marital status.

To begin with, in 19970 until 1980, the number of marriages was stable at 2,5 million while divorce was increased slightly at 1 million to around 1,4 millions in two of years next two decades the number of marriages saw decreased significantly at approximately 2.4 millions and 2 million respectively.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar charts reveals that the percentage of adults for never married status stood at around 11 per cent, and reaching a peak at 70 per cent for married status, it decreased slightly at some 5 per cent to widowed, approximately 2 per cent for divorced in 1970.

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Writing Feedback / The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items [3]

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table illustrates the information about the percentage of national consumer expenditure in five different countries, including Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey by different categories in 2002. At first glance, it can be seen that Turkey resulting the highest percentage of two categories (food/drinks/tobacco and leisure/education). Noted, Sweden results the lowest percentage of national consumer on two items (food/ drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear).

To begin with, the percentage of national consumer expenditure in Turkey was noticeably higher in consumer spending on food/drinks/tobacco at 32.14 %, and Ireland at 28.91 %. The proportion of expenditure on leisure/education was also highest in Turkey at 4.35 %, but expenditure on clothing/footwear experienced under in Italy at 9 %.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the table reveals that Sweden had the lowest percentages of national consumer expenditure for two items (food/drinks/tobacco and clothing/footwear), at 15.77 % and 5.40% respectively. Spain had few higher than Sweden for these categories, but results the lowest items for leisure/education at 1.98 %.

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Writing Feedback / What influence people's personality more - born-characteristics or their experience? [3]

Research indicates that the characteristic we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in life.

Which do you consider to be the major influence?

Each person has their own characteristics in their lives. As such, born-characteristics in people, as per some experts, influence people's personality more than their experiences. However, I personally argue that people who have any experiences are more influenced for people's personality because people can achieve some information by surrounding they live in.

People's first characteristics have much more influences on their personalities because they have genes which are stronger in their soul, when they are born. For instance, talkative born children definitely will grow up with that image which has been known by people around them. This is because their characteristics seen from their behavior. As a result, they think that personality is part of their lives which makes them hard to change their born habits.

However, some people believe that experiences build many of people's personality. First, people tend to imitate what others do because sometimes they need to develop a personality they like. Also, people might have no other choice but to build up a new characteristic. It can be caused by a strong pain that they could not handle. Not only this, experiences become one of important thing that can affect people's personality since they can value more about the meaning of life.

To sum up, it seems to me that even though people's first characteristics have affect for people's personality, people's experience is becoming the major affect which develop people's personality and development. It is imperative that people should know what experience that can improve their personality.

Writing Feedback / Report on the main features of the electricity production [4]

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate abour the unit of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 19980 and 2000. At first glance, it is evident that coal is the biggest total production than other units in Australia, while in France, nuclear power is the biggest production units over the year.

To begin with, in 1980, the total production of electricity by fuel in Australia is 100 units with qualification coal (50 units), oil (10 units), natural gs (20 units), and hydro power (20 units), except nuclear power.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of boy and girl students at schools [3]

University should accept equal numbers of male or female students in every subject.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

University development can be seen by their student's qualification. As such, several people think that the equal numbers of boy and girl students at university should accept in each major. However, others believe that it is not compulsory for university to accept students based on people's sex. Therefore, I would argue that there is no rule for university which must accept equal numbers of male and female in each major.

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In this day and age, student's qualification is an essential purpose for university. As such, many universities create huge opportunities offering majors for all items of students. Whereas, general people argue that universities should provide equal numbers of boy and girl students in each major. Therefore, I would argue that this trend is not key factor in requirement as more attention to academic qualification should be paid by university.

With regard to this problem, promote equality of boy and girl will open up opportunity for student balance. For instance, engineer faculties have male students more dominant than female students, even in some conditions girls just tend to follow what male students do any majors. As a result, this action is possible manner can attract woman to follow in this major to improve female's ability in different majors.

However, even though university makes balance number of boy and girl provides positive effect, this trend also has negative effect. First, it is better to accept student in especially major according their academic qualification, this is because student has a high quality value before they enter in university. In addition, the population of female is bigger nine times than males in 2015. Thus, university should not possible to make the same rule for accepting student base on their sexes, because women has right to continue their studies according their academic qualification, and this can reduce women unemployment rate.

To sum up, although it seems to me that receiving equal numbers is a good system to attract prospective student, it is not essential one to increase the competitive behavior by university. I strongly believe that university should pay more attention to create well alumni.

Writing Feedback / How much the number of older people in Sweden, USA and Japan is growing? Graph. [3]

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of population for elderly people between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries, including Japan, Sweden, and USA. At first glance, it is evident that Japan is predicted to have the higher population of elderly people in 2040 than other countries. Note, USA has lower population than other two countries in 2040.

To begin with, in 1940, the percentage of population for elderly people in Japan stood at 5 per cent and was flattened out at around 3 per cent over 20 years. In 21th century it increased significantly at 10 per cent, and will be predicted to increase dramatically at 25 per cent and reach a peak at approximately 27 per cent in 2040.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the line graph reveals that USA and Sweden have similar trends. Both countries stood at less than ten per cent in 1940. During 20th century, the proportion of elderly people in two countries saw at fewer than fifteen per cent, but will be predicted in 2040, both countries increase dramatically at approximately twenty-six per cent and twenty-eight per cent respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 to 2007 - the graph. [2]

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontario between 2001 to 2007

The line graph gives information with regard to the percentage of teacher's recruitment according to year of graduation from 2001 to 2007 in Ontario. At first glance, it is evident that the recruitment of English-language teacher saw a high level at the first year, while at the end of period it decreased significantly. Note, the proportion of French-language recruited teachers experienced a fluctuation over a 6-year period.

According to the line graph, it reveals that the percentage of both teacher recruitments had a fairly similar level of between 70 per cent and 75 per cent in 2001, while the teacher's recruitment for English-language decreased gradually at 40 per cent. However, France teacher's recruitment experienced a significant rise to around 52 per cent and then rose again at approximately 78 per cent over two years.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the line graph shows that the recruitment of French teacher was fluctuated and reached a peak at approximately 75 per cent in the end of period. In 2003, the percentage of English teacher's recruitment saw at 40 per cent and then fell significantly at around 25 per cent in 2007.

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Writing Feedback / Specified design and proper location of the wind turbines make the electrical system more efficient [2]

The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons were relevant.

The first diagram gives information with regard to the construction of a wind turbine and the second picture shows how the wind turbines work in the optimum locations. At first glance, it is evident that a wind turbine can be constructed by four important components. In sharp contrast, the strategic locations establish the output of electricity. Note, the higher of a wind turbine location is, the bigger of the electricity will be produced.

To begin with, the way of a wind turbine constructed is to complete all the tools which consist of blades, wind sensor, generator, and steel tower. First, when the wind blows the blades, automatically the blades will rotate. At the same time, the wind sensor will operate the speed and direction, and the specific information can be seen in computer which is located beside the steel tower. Then, the generator produces 1.5 megawatts electricity from a wind turbine.

The tower can be placed on the hill, under the sea and near by domestic turbine. The tower on the hill, get maximum wind strength, and it means more electricity can be generated. Afterwards, when a wind turbine is located under the sea, it will result less electricity even this way do not disturb the landscape, Otherwise, wind turbine tends to have less wind strengths by only 100 kilowatts at domestic area than in other locations.

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