EF_Susan
Sep 24, 2012
Graduate / 'Becomeing a university professor' - personal statement for PhD Economics [7]
Hello Victor,
I deleted your other post, while it was in a different thread it will still a duplicate post.
As for your writing, this is fantastic. I've gone over it a few times and nothing stands out to me. Your opening is engaging, none of the ideas you're trying to get across are to over complicated or dragged out, it's just really well done.
the only thing that you may to consider reviving ( and a minor thing at that) is the 5th paragraph starting with "Several key factors". Maybe lead into what those key factors are a differently, opening your next sentence with "such as" etc.
again just a small thing, everything looks really good otherwise.
good luck!
Hello Victor,
I deleted your other post, while it was in a different thread it will still a duplicate post.
As for your writing, this is fantastic. I've gone over it a few times and nothing stands out to me. Your opening is engaging, none of the ideas you're trying to get across are to over complicated or dragged out, it's just really well done.
the only thing that you may to consider reviving ( and a minor thing at that) is the 5th paragraph starting with "Several key factors". Maybe lead into what those key factors are a differently, opening your next sentence with "such as" etc.
again just a small thing, everything looks really good otherwise.
good luck!