EF_Team5
Nov 21, 2008
Undergraduate / Grandparents had spent great portion of their hard earned saving to buy house and car for their son [3]
Good afternoon :)
I think this is a good response to the prompt. You are very organized, with a clean and definite introduction, body, and conclusion. Your content acknowledges and responds to the prompt very clearly. Make sure you are using spaces properly between your punctuation and your words; for instance, "...uncle,hoping to..." should be "...uncle, hoping to..."
Also, make sure your subjects and verbs agree, and they are in the same tense. For instance, "...are looking after them as they aged." should be "...are looking after them as they age."
"emphasis" should be "emphasize"
Make sure you are using proper linking and transitory words. For instance, "..who able to inspire..." should be "...who are able to inspire..."
Go back through your piece and look for other instances such as these; with a little polishing you'll be ready to submit in no time!
Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com
Good afternoon :)
I think this is a good response to the prompt. You are very organized, with a clean and definite introduction, body, and conclusion. Your content acknowledges and responds to the prompt very clearly. Make sure you are using spaces properly between your punctuation and your words; for instance, "...uncle,hoping to..." should be "...uncle, hoping to..."
Also, make sure your subjects and verbs agree, and they are in the same tense. For instance, "...are looking after them as they aged." should be "...are looking after them as they age."
"emphasis" should be "emphasize"
Make sure you are using proper linking and transitory words. For instance, "..who able to inspire..." should be "...who are able to inspire..."
Go back through your piece and look for other instances such as these; with a little polishing you'll be ready to submit in no time!
Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com