Angela629
Dec 27, 2008
Undergraduate / "My vacation of 2007" - Princeton Supplemental Essay [8]
Thanks for pointing out my mistakes. When I read my essay, I knew there were something that has to be wrong, but I can't really find it.
How about my structure? I mean does this essay not saying what I want it to say? I saw others' princeton essays. They're much better than mine, but honestly, I don't know how to improve it? can someone suggest some advice?
Thanks so much,
Angela629
Thanks for pointing out my mistakes. When I read my essay, I knew there were something that has to be wrong, but I can't really find it.
How about my structure? I mean does this essay not saying what I want it to say? I saw others' princeton essays. They're much better than mine, but honestly, I don't know how to improve it? can someone suggest some advice?
Thanks so much,
Angela629