justivy03
May 24, 2015
Writing Feedback / People in Five Different Occupations Sleeping Patterns according to a Canadian study [2]
Trias this is yet another great article, you leaned on the facts and figures and you brought analytical finding just as great.
- However, they are usually awake for two hours between their sleeping times at night, and then have a nap at noon from 1-2 pm until 3-4 pm.
Indeed this is a detailed analysis but I think you can elaborate more. I think you can further analyze the graph or the study to differentiate sleeping patterns.
Besides, the nature of the occupation one has, greatly affects their sleeping pattern. Not only that, the age also matters to the sleeping pattern of a person.
I suggest that you inject your own opinion at the end of every analysis that you make in order to add a personal touch to the analysis but this always depend on you.
Also, always check the flow of your analysis, from left to right or from top to bottom.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!
Trias this is yet another great article, you leaned on the facts and figures and you brought analytical finding just as great.
- However, they are usually awake for two hours between their sleeping times at night, and then have a nap at noon from 1-2 pm until 3-4 pm.
Indeed this is a detailed analysis but I think you can elaborate more. I think you can further analyze the graph or the study to differentiate sleeping patterns.
Besides, the nature of the occupation one has, greatly affects their sleeping pattern. Not only that, the age also matters to the sleeping pattern of a person.
I suggest that you inject your own opinion at the end of every analysis that you make in order to add a personal touch to the analysis but this always depend on you.
Also, always check the flow of your analysis, from left to right or from top to bottom.
Keep writing
Cheers!!!