Writing Feedback / Small society was the most favorite place for living but now inhabitants move to the vast cities [2]

In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people lives in large cities where they only knew a few people in their area.

What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

Time being changes the people habits. Although small society had become the most favorite place for living in the prior times, inhabitants tend to move to the vast cities for settle. This circumstance has brought several merit and demerit. As such, staying in a small group of people invent a close-knit community. However, fewer infrastructures create poor education and health problems.

Apparently mutual assistance between each human had helped them to survive until today. In by gone era, mankind competed with wild animal, rough weather, diseases, and others. Due to alive in a small groups, helped them to assist each other necessities. Repair the damaged road or construct the houses as a community project can be taken as examples. In short, social work is the best matter that you can get by staying in a close-knit society.

Secondly, insufficient health clinic makes certain issue. It is have deficient facilities to ensure all of the villager healthiness. This problem is aggravated with the distance of eligible hospital which locates in the town. Thus, the dweller who obtains critical injury would be late for the medication.

The aforementioned evidence shows that drawbacks of settle in small community outweigh the advantage one. If possible, the villagers move to the nearest city in order to increase their living.

Writing Feedback / The diagram shows the process of coffee production and preparation before packaging it for sale [NEW]

The diagram shows the process of coffee production and how to package it for sale to the market. What stands out from the picture is the process through 11 stages. This is interesting that twice grinding process in a row.

At the beginning, gardener harvest and collect the best coffee beans at basket. After that, these are dried under the sun for approximately 2 days. The manufacturers begin with roast the beans in a vacuum, between 60 and 75 degree Celsius in order to put out that coffee fragrant. Before those are grinded, the beans are chilled in the refrigerator for almost 10 hours. Next, mix and dipped that one on the hot water. Immediately, after strain the smooth coffee beans, it is placed again in the fridge and set up into frozen liquid.

Subsequently, for obtain powdered coffee, that smooth beans need to be crushed again with that grinder. Preceding the packing process, vacuum process is required to exhale the water or vapor water from them. Finally, that coffee ready being sells in the market. Pack that into jars, and wrap the jars with your own label.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The comparison of consumer spending in six different goods [2]

A breakdown of consumer spends in thousand pounds sterling in six different goods is presented in the bar chart. Overall, Britain lead the amount of spends among the other countries. In any case, Italy and Germany have the lowest pounds sterling expenditure one after another.

According to the data, the whole figure of Britain expend is leading and photographic film has the hugest expend among all. This is accounted more than 170,000 pounds sterling, while photographic film in Germany experience the least amount of money solely at 145,000 pounds sterling. Interestingly, all of Germany expenditure has similar figures between 140,000 pounds sterling and 150,000 pounds sterling.

The other nations, France experience the second highest for 3 products which is CDs, Toys, and Photographic film. However other goods (Personal Stereos, Tennis Racquets, and Perfumes) show the lowest expenditure in the time table. Move to Italy, this country spend more on toys rather than any other products.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - A comparison of house prices in five major cities [2]

The bar chart describe of an average house price in New York, Frankfurt, Madrid, London, and Tokyo in a 12-year period, in comparison with data in 1989. Overall, it can be seen that Frankfurt and Madrid houses price almost leveled off in the marginal percentages for over a decade. In any case, London home value experienced by far was the massive alteration from 1990 to 2002.

According to the data, this two big cities in Europe, Frankfurt and Madrid, has stable economic condition. It can be perceived from their house prices which were stable between 0% and 5 %. This is in stark contrast to the home value in Tokyo. They went down to around 7% in 1990-1995 and fell to 5% in the next years.

The most noticeable case was taken place in London city. This city experienced a considerable jump to approximately 12% in the late 2002. Following this, New York house costs also seen the same tone with London, it was accounted rising to 5% during the projection years.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The potential location of a new planned supermaket [NEW]

The map illustrates the two possible locations (S1 and S2) for a new supermarket building in Garlsdon city. Overall, the city has a population more than 65 thousand people. The most noticeable difference between two sites is that S1 in the countryside, S2 is in the town centre.

According to the picture, S1 location offers easy access and rather quite location since it located outside the town. These factors are good for supermarket business. People can use their vehicle or train to reach the supermarket, due to surrounding by railway and main roads. On the other hand, S2 location which is in town centre will attract many people purchasing in the supermarket. Although no traffic zone area is conducted, the railway system through pass this town centre. Moreover, S2 area is surrounded by residence living and industrial estate.

In conclusion, the second possibility (S2) hands over better opportunity to construct a new supermarket. Interestingly, S2 site is in the middle of other town location. This accounted 12 Km to Hindon, 16 Km to Brandon, and 25 Km to Cransdon. As seen, the arrival of people from other town will rise the income of this supermarket.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - Modern technology, make human more reliance on them [2]

Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn, or are forgetting, many basic skills.
To what extent is this true? Are people becoming so reliant on modern technology that they are to longer able to do some things without it?

The inventions of modern technologies are more likely make inhabitants neglect their basic skills. Although this extent is true in some cases, I would argue that people still have a great deal of willingness to learn and have strong fundamental proficiency. This essay also discusses the possibility of people reliance on technology.

Advancement of technology tends to make people reliance on them. They feel, without technology their life will uncomfortable. For instance, the invention of Calculator in 1642 by Blaise Pascal makes people lazy to do numeric calculation anymore. Almost all of people in the world use this invention in their daily life. From children to complete their task until a businessman and professor use the calculator. As a result, they forget using algorithm and simple equation like multiply and deduction. This is because Calculator indulges them with automation calculation. As seen, these modern technologies make people hesitant to do manual calculation and maybe failing to learn.

As a matter of fact, there are some counter-arguments against prior statement. Apparently, every school has a basic syllabus about calculus. They encourage their students to do complicated manual calculation. Algebra, sigma, and relativity theory are something that calculator cannot undergo without human intervention. That experience is strengthening the argument that human have more complicated skills of calculation rather than machine. In addition, the machine only can work if they obtain a command from their master which is human. In this circumstance, computer only help human to do remnant calculation, but the whole idea is from human brain. To exemplify, the banker use Excels to help them doing detail calculation as their responsibility. This is because computer can analyze longer and accurate number as human requested.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that even though modern technology simplify human task, human does not has no a tendency to rely on that matter. Where possible, utilize that technology with properly in order to gain more benefits.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Tables of comparison of people expenditure in five countries by [2]

A comparison of people expenditure on 3 different categories in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden, and Turkey in 2002 is presented in the table. Overall, it can be seen that the customer in all countries spend most on consuming products, such as food, drinks, and tobacco. On the other hand, leisure and education category was the least category among all.

In 2002, Turkey consumer experienced the highest country that spends on consuming products, solely at 32%. This is in stark contrast to Sweden people, they only took 15% on food, drinks, and tobacco. Interestingly, they spending on clothing/footwear and leisure/education was marginal, counts on 6% and 4% respectively. The leisure/education in both national customer countries also experienced the most supreme percentages among all.

Move to a detail analysis, Ireland dwellers has the second highest proportion for food/drinks/tobacco settle, while on the other hand, this country also seen a second lowest of leisure/education spending in the timetable. Although Spain took 18% for consuming products, it experienced the lowest portion in leisure/education expenditure. The rest country, Italy had 16% in food/drinks/tobacco, 9% on apparel products, and 3.20% in leisure/education.

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Writing Feedback / The line graph illustrates the percentages of automobile possessors in Great Britain [2]

The line graph illustrates the percentages of automobile possessor in Great Britain in a 36-year period. In general, the ownership of two or more cars experienced an upward trend. In any case a single car possessor have leveled off over than 3 decades. More detailed analysis about this circumstances follow below.

Between 1971 and 2007, people who have two cars saw a sharp increase by 16%, or begin at 9% in the beginning period and ending at 25% in 2007. Three or more cars possessor also has a same tone with that two cars ownership, this accounted rose from 2% to 8% in the same period. This is stark in contrast to the graph for people who do not have car at all. Although, it stood at approximately 48% in 1971 which is the highest proportion among all, the percentages plummeted sharply to 25% in the end of period.

The one-car ownership was the popular type of people household's properties in the late 1970. Interestingly, the proportion of this possession leveled off over than 36 years later. This calculated stable at more than two fifths from 1971 to 2007.

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Writing Feedback / According to the data, Sweden and USA have the same tone of population. (IELTS 1) [3]

A breakdown of the population proportion in Japan, Sweden, and USA from 1940 to 2015 and 2040 as projected years is shown in the line graph. Overall, all of the three countries experience an outward trend of population aged 65 and above in a 10 decade period. It is also noticeable that Japan experienced a lowest number of elderly people population between 1960 and 1985.

According to the data, Sweden and USA have the same tone of population. They stood at 8% in 1940 and ended to approximately 25% elderly people who aged 65 or more in 2040. The differences emerge from 2014 to 2015 when the percentages of Sweden elderly people peak at 20%, while USA see a gradual decrease from 15% to 13% in the same time.

The proportion in Japan shows the most astonishing figures, it is stood at 5% at the beginning of the period. Although it was accounted the lowest proportion in 1960 to 1980, Japan people aged 65 or over will be predicted rise dramatically to more than a quarter over 100 years.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - Space exploration is national pride or international effort [2]

Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort.
To what extent do you agree with this?
How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

Space exploration is becoming hot issue these days. It more reflects about country conceitedness rather than an International endeavor. While some people say this is true, it is agreed that an immense problem have encouraged International community to cooperate together. This essay also will discuss the possibility of advancement technology to alter space exploration in the future.

Superpower country tends to shows their power to the other nations, because they will obtain more respect and benefit from that. For instance, After World War 2, there is a cold war between Western and Eastern Bloc has a competition building a rocket which can land human to the Moon. The reason is simple, they want to show the world that they have a superior technology. Eventually, Western bloc wins that competition, when US has succeeded to send Armstrong land in the moon in July 21th 1969. As a consequence, US obtain respect from other nations and as we know they become the most powerful country until nowadays.

Apart from that national pride, human kind has faced plenty of problems these days. This needs the international collaboration for tackle the issues. One of the biggest issues we face today is the rising of human populations and over exhausted Earth. The numbers of humans are doubled in the last decade and our planet cannot any longer support us. It is led International community work together exploring Planet Mars in order to become the next Earth for human life. International space station has been built in outer earth atmospheres for support the mission. As seen, this exploration needs an enormous funding, so that if a nation only obsesses about their pride this exploration will fail.

The various inventions will changes the form of space exploration. It is predicted that human will begin to explore billion light-years when warp technology is founded. Voyages between planets in the galaxy become common matters although these inhabitants do not have basic cosmonauts. In the next following generation, the situation on earth will be changing, since the population has been separated in Earth and Mars.

In conclusion, even though a small portion of national pride will disrupt the collaboration, I would say that international effort is the biggest part leading space exploration to deal with several human kind problems. It is imperative to fund more in the research of space exploration technology.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - The information about species extinctions and threats to plan life [2]

The pie chart illustrate the number of flora and fauna extinction in the tropical forest from 2000 to 2015 and its prediction up to 2100, while the pie chart describe the breakdown of human influence and natural events to the life plant threat. It is noticeable that plant and animal species perished increase dramatically between 2000 and 2060. In any case, Human impacts dominate the causes of life plant menace.

According to the survey, the figure of flora and fauna vanished from the tropical forest was stood at approximately 5,000 million species. This was seen rising dramatically in a 6-decade period, dispute by 10,000 million species for each 2 decade. After a peak at 50,000 million species in 2060, the number of plant and animal extinct is forecasted a gradual drop to 27,000 million species in 2100. Interestingly, the most causes of this circumstance are human intervention with their agriculture sector.

A more detailed analysis in the pie chart, the proportion of natural incidents which bring about menace to the flora life is accounted 18.7% that natural disaster contribute 7%, and the rest is other natural events. This is in stark contrast to the percentages of human impact which is experiencing almost fivefold higher or solely at 81.3%. Eventually, harvesting and agriculture has the highest percentage of human impact at 18.7% and 14.4% respectively.

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Writing Feedback / Honey bee diagram - it takes 34-36 days for completing the life cycle of this type of insect [2]

The diagram illustrate the honey bee various phases in their life. As seen, it is takes 34-36 days for completing the cycle of this type of insect. This is also noticeable that there are six main stages of the honey bee growth, from egg to the adult insect.

To begin, the adult females honey bee lays one or two eggs every three days. After 9-10 days later, the oval shaped eggs are hatched and the immature insects appear. In 5 days later, the child bee are rely on their eggs and after 7-10 days the nymph moults are 3 times bigger as it grows in the beginning.

After a total 30 to 31 days from the beginning of the cycle, the young adult bee emerges. However, they need 4 days again to reach their full mature form. Finally, in the mature form the insect can produce eggs and this cycle recurring again to preserve the honey bee extension.

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Writing Feedback / Dwellers play their gadgets. Information technology has altered the way of people work. IELTS task 2 [4]

Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.)
Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

Information technology plays an important role of human life today. This discovery also has altered the way of people work. I would argue this invention has a wide range of advantages, such as flexible working places and help on children studying, although there has some demerits as well like sedentary lifestyle.

One of the biggest benefits of information technology is people can work everywhere as long as they connected with internet connection. For instance, people who works in the enormous city tend to face terrible traffic congestion. They lost much of time in their commuter time between work places and home. With the development of this technology, employee can open email, pdf documents, and others form of office task in their gadget. It is tremendously save their time and provides more moment to gather with their family which is good for their eagerness of working. In addition, information technology has help student to find beneficial references on their study. Wikipedia as one of the largest site in this century provides a billion of knowledge matter. From literature until science physics can be found on this website.

Despite of these advantages, this technology has made detrimental effects on human being. This is because people are more likely spend most of their time in front of screen. For example, we can see in everyday life that dwellers play with their gadget occasionally rather than have an outdoor activity. As a consequence, obesity becomes the most common phenomena these days. People also become more individualist and ignore other people existence. As seen, several demerits are appearing due to this discovery.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that despite, information technology carrying few disadvantages, it is agreed that preeminence has outweigh the drawbacks. Where possible, balancing your time to use this technology will resulting the best solution of this circumstance.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - Children should only concentrate on their aptitude subjects [2]

It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude.

To what extent to do you agree or disagree?

Children education is very important. They should only focus on the subjects which are competence to them, and abandoned art classes if they do not have any interest with it. Although this statement is true in some extent, it is believed that learn art such drawing and painting can increase your brain capability, and also this activity can help to reduce stress.

Apparently school syllabus has a wide range of subjects these days. This is not good for children development since each student has a different aptitude. They should only concentrate on the subject what they like. For example, pupils who have good skill in IT or mathematics can omit other subjects, such as painting and drawing. Doing merely practical subjects will make their time effective and resulting good remark in their exam. As seen, it is necessary to ignore other subject which is not related with their specialty.

On the other hand, studying art can increase our brain potency. In term of research, human brain is separated into two chambers. The right side is for exact matter likes mathematics and the left side is for abstract subject such art. A recent study done by Harvard University in 2012 reveals that children who do both things in art and exact science tend to have a better score. This is because we feed and activate both of our brains equally. In addition, drawing and painting activities can reduce pupils stress. They feel happy when draw their imagination in a sheet of paper. Meanwhile, this kind of activity also increases their creativity which is beneficial for helping them to solve the problem.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that dispute children lack of artistic talent, they should be given this art lesson for their merits. Where possible, balancing this both subjects will carry best result to them in young age.

Writing Feedback / There are four paces that can be seen. The erosion process in a headland - IELTS TASK 1 [2]

The diagrams illustrate the erosion process that take place in a headland. Overall, there are four paces that can be seen. Interestingly, the process has natural stepped without intervention of human being.

According to the picture, weak area can be found in the bottom of headland which is caused by abraded rock. As the time passes by, the erosion has extended and led to the arch cave, such as durdle, door, or door set. Eventually, the structure of headland becomes weaker, so that tide can easily beat against the roof.

As a consequence, the roof is fallen and stack is separated from the headland. Meanwhile, top of the stack is cracking and collapsing to the sea. Afterwards, the rock erosion continues to experience in the same area which retreat the headland and wore away the stump. This nature process is usually happened in the high cliff of seashore with powerful waves.

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Writing Feedback / The advertising world has an immense effect on the society - IELTS task 2 [4]

Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern advertisement has influenced people preferences. The power of massive advertising encourages the sales of goods. Although people have their own consideration to choose, it is agreed that good advertising has immense effect to persuade people.

Many companies have been produce similar goods this day. They want to sell as much as products in order to achieve higher income. One of the ways is they persuade people to create good advertisement. However, people have their own judgment, no matter how good the advertising is preferences of it.

Apart from this, commercial message has succeeded attracting people to purchase their products. The recent study conducted by CNN in 2007 has revealed good advertising will increase their sales by 30%. Especially, if they use the popular people like a football player or an artist. Coca cola and Pepsi companies should be taken as an example. Coca cola produces better drinking product that Pepsi does. However, Pepsi wins the consumer choice and sells more products than their rivals. This is because Pepsi has an invasive advertisement on all types of media. As it can be seen, people will be affected from that commercial message.

The aforementioned evidence reveals that advertisement has a significant effect on consumer choice. Interestingly, the consumer ignores their basic need when choosing that popular products. Where possible, invest more on advertising for the company which want to sell a lot of goods.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 1 - Sales of Fairtrade labelled coffe and bananas in 1999 and 2004 [NEW]

The tables illustrate the amount of fair-trade branded bananas and coffee in UK, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium, and Sweden from 1999 to 2004 and are measured in millions of euros. Overall, it can be seen that UK dominated the commerce in both commodities in 2004. In any case, almost all of the sales fair trade commodities had increased in the time main frame.

The amount of bananas commerce in United Kingdom rose dramatically from 1.5 million to 20 million in a 5-year period. Interestingly, bananas sales in United Kingdom witnessed twofold sales at the same time. This is in stark contrast to Belgium and Sweden which had the lowest quantity of bananas and coffee trading. There were accounted less than 2 million between 1999 and 2004.

As seen, Switzerland had the second highest fair-trade sales after United Kingdom. These commodities increased by 4.5 million for bananas and 3 million for coffee branded over than 5 years. This is followed by Denmark in bananas and coffee commerce which climbed to 2 and 4 million of euros respectively in in the question period.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2 - Experiences have the major influences of people characteristic [2]

Research indicates that the characteristic we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

None of the people in the world have same characteristic. Although some scientists argue birth characteristic is the major influence of our behavior, it is agreed that long experiences will affect most of our personality and should be taken into account. This essay will discuss some explanation about experiences related to environment, education, and parents foster.

A research reveals that characteristic we are born have an immense influence in our behavior. They describe that birth characteristic can explain much more about individual personality. For instance, people with slanted eyes tend to be grumpy. In contrast, a person with wider eye has a tolerant behavior. This term has also been applied in many companies. Especially, when they looking a new candidate to fulfill the position.

For some people, achieving good behavior means they had passed many obstacles in their lives. Those experiences have shaped their personality and development. As such, success people commonly come from an individual with thought life. He has a long hard journey and faced a bitter life. In addition, people which are lives in severe environment tend to imitate their surroundings. A recent survey from BBC in 2015 discovered that juvenile delinquency happened due to an influence of their friends. From that reason, characteristic is created by experiences and this is not a gift.

In conclusion, experiences have a greater effect on our development and personality. Where possible, take as much as problems to gain more experiences. Trying to break your comfortable zone, it will bring many advantages into your characteristic.

Writing Feedback / The graph compares the changes in the number of people using railways transportation in G.Britain [2]

The graph compares the changes in the number of people using railways transportation in Great Britain from 1950 to 2004/5 and measured in the millions people. Overall, those three types of railways transportation had an outward trend in a 54-year period. In any case, light rail and metro systems seen the lowest number of passenger in the time main frame.

National rail network stood at 1000 passenger in the beginning of the period. It accounted slightly decreased to around 650 passengers in 1983. Even though National rail network was the highest number of passenger more than 30 years, the London underground rocketed in 1984 and overtaken the dominating of National rail network in the end of 2004/05 with more than 1050 passenger.

In 1962, there was a slight decrease in a new type of railway transport, which is light rail and metro system, between 1963 and 1980. Although this form of transportation bottom out at 3 passengers in 1980, it marked increase by 50 people in each decade.

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