Writing Feedback / Bulgarian citizens who lived outside their country, based on school level [5]

The chart below give information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about Bulgarian residents who wanted to move from Bulgaria in 2002, 2006, and 2008 based on three types of education degree. Overall, the secondary education was the highest number of people who planned to go abroad during three years. In general, it was a downward trend. The higher education was the lowest quantity. However, primary and lower educations were an upward trend even though they did not reach a high number.

To begin with, Bulgarian people who was from higher education stood at 17 percent in 2002. In the following year, it increased gradually to 20%. Two years later, it decreased dramatically to 9 percent. The percentage of secondary education during the periods was decreased fourfold from 65 to 61. In 2008, middle education degree that planned to go overseas declined to 59 percent. Meanwhile, primary and lower educations were a slight rise from 18 to 19 percent. Next, it reached a peak at 32%. 160w

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Writing Feedback / Nowadays it is very difficult to stay healthy in this modern world [3]

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

In globalization period, everything has changed and transformed easier. It affects how people live their life. Most of them think that is hard to have a healthy lifestyle because of instant life. However, it should not be difficult if people struggle to be healthy. I think both of these situations can be chosen by people in recent life.

Anything that people desire has provided in recent life because of development era. Nevertheless, sometimes it spoils people to follow the accessibility. I focus to explain in food as an example. Inhabitants now are easy to find any kinds of fast food shops. They can buy or eat at fast food stores when they are hungry. However, we have known that junk food has less nutrition and sometimes cause serious illness. It may be an instant food that people can choose when they do not have any options to eat, busy, and lazy to cook. Residents have a dependence with that and make it as a daily food. It makes people difficult to live healthily after getting dependence.

However, it is not only a single case. People can keep their life to be healthy by struggling to live healthily, if they want to be. For instance, people can take some exercise every day with only 20 minutes a day, or put it on weekend with an hour or more. Inhabitant also can control what kinds of food they eat. Cook food by themselves and eat organic food, not junk food. Therefore, it will make their life healthy because of high nutrition food and lifestyle pattern. Nevertheless, it takes much time and high cost value that do not all people can spend their time and money.

To sum up, modern life brings easy access to people, but sometimes it become a boomerang for people to get easy on eat food too, which their life will change less fit. However, people can be health by controlling their life that I think take much time and rather expensive for some people to do. Like an unknown quote, "health is expensive". 337w

Writing Feedback / Responsiblity of Parents and School Toward Children to be a Good Member of Society [2]

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Children can learn to be a good member of community from their parents. Some people trust that school is a good place to gain knowledge to behave. I think both school and parents are the best source to learn attitude.

Almost all side of children's life, there are parents who have responsibility. It includes that parents should teach their children about attitudes as a supplier that supports children to be a good member of society. It is caused by position of parents as the first educator for children. Parents are the first persons who children meet in their life. Many things or kinds of behaviour, children get from their mother and father than anyone. For example, parents teach their daughter and son thank to somebody who has given them pleasant gift or anything they need. Parents also teach their heredities to share their food to their friends, and take apologize after doing something wrong. These attitudes mostly get from family's lead, especially both mother and father.

Besides, school also important source to gain knowledge to be a good community persons. Because children school can meet many people there. They can apply what have they been learned from home. School tends to the place to learn and to practice. Nevertheless, they also can get new knowledge from their teacher, which their teacher plays a role as their second parents. For example, a son shares their which their red candy to their friend, but their friend just wants the blue candy. Then, they fight each other. The teacher will come to separate them, and give some advices. From that case, both children can learn how to understand each other and do not fight about that problem. They get another lesson in school.

To sum up, it is important for parents to teach their children good attitudes. Afterwards, children can practice their good behaviour in school when they meet many friends, not only to practice, but also to gain any knowledge about behaviour from their teacher as their second parents. 335w

Writing Feedback / In 1990s the land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%. [4]

The pie chart shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s

The pie chart provides information about some factors that caused production of agricultural field. The table informs how the regions were influenced by those causes during the 1990s. Overall, over-gazing was the largest factor that caused land degradation, and Europe was the largest region where land degradation had happened.

Over-gazing was the main problem that made land degradation. It stood at 35%. The second factor was deforestation that contributed 30 percent. It had a slight different number with over-cultivation, which the percentage was 28. Other factors were mentioned that had degraded agricultural land.

Land in North America was most affected by over-cultivation factor with 3.3%. Deforestation was the main caused that had affected Europe region in agricultural land by 9.8%. However, the amount case of over-gazing had degraded 11.3 percent land area in Oceania. It carried Oceania as the second larger region that had been degraded in agricultural field than North America with 5%. Nevertheless, Europe got the percentage of land degradation with 23%. 164w

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  Causes of World Wide Land Degradation
  

Writing Feedback / It's not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without workers' competence [5]

Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sometimes, workers are obligated to wear particular uniform or formal apparel in work. Some people argue that quality of working is more important. However, I think both of these situations are important to do equally.

Some company provides uniform for employees based on work level and others do not, but they should dress smartly. It means that they must use formal, clean, and fresh clothes. For example, certain TV Company requires the camerapersons and broadcasting teams use the TV label uniform for denoting workers' identity. It benefits when they catch news with other TV station, residents will be easy to indicate where they are from. However, producers and managerial teams are freed to use other clothes by regulation that it should be formal look and suitable for work. Therefore, they can wear attire that makes them convenient. The company does this to brand good image while meet with clients and meet with other company.

In my view, wearing properly is not enough for company to achieve their goals. The workers also should have good grade in work. They must have brilliant idea and good resolution. Because fashion and work quality value, hold each other in one package. For instance, General Manager, HRD, and Director who clothed deluxe have been known that they have good degree for working. It is not good for them too, if their appearance looks unlike their job position.

Personally, I believe that all rules and regulations that have been fixed by company are good for company itself and for workers. Therefore, employees must comply it, even they dislike or unpleasant with it. Sometimes, it will motivate laborer to improve their grade to achieve the position where they can wear as convenient as they want.

In conclusion, it is not enough for company to provide uniform and to be good looking without best potential of workers. It is also hard to build good image with well appearance only. It should be supported with high working ability. Therefore, both of these are important to complete each other. 335w

Writing Feedback / The level of cheerfulness in life of spouses and singles based on age groups [2]

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts give information about the level of cheerfulness in life of spouses and singles based on age groups, and how heredities influence married people's life. Overall, wed people are happier than unwed. However, the happiness ratings both of groups are not more than a half of entire survey numbers. Blissful levels of spouses who have or do not have children are almost same. However, having children more satisfy their life.

Teen married couples satisfy their life with 45% of happiness level. In 30-49 years old, it decreases slightly to 44 percent. Then, in adult phase, their cheerfulness level experience a bottom at 40%. However, it increases again in over 65 years old to 44 percent. The percentage of singles' happiness ratings in 18-64 years old stands between 21 and 22. Then in old un-married persons' satisfaction reach a top at 34%.

The percentages of happiness level of spouses who have teen children exist at 44. Then, it fall to 40 percent in wed people who have children aged more than 18. However, it goes up to 43% in couples who do not have heredities. 185w

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  Happiness Level Married and unmarried people
  
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Writing Feedback / It\s hard for some people to build their first business enterprise instead of working as an employee [2]

Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages?

It may be hard for some people to build their first business enterprise instead of working as employee in a particular place. Since they think, it needs a lot of materials and necessary things. However, managing company that has been running will make them realize many things that they never think before.

To begin some work such as trading goods or merits trading will be hard for people since it needs a self-endurance and ability to manage their work. People who succeed to build start up but do not have strategy to manage their work and enough mental skills will be getting stress. For example, in the capital city, there is a man who had stressed and had become a beggar after he failed to manage his business and had been fraud. He owed much money in bank and he could not pay it. He did not know what to do next. It means that negligence of mental gives drawback to him.

On the other hand, becoming an entrepreneur will bring many benefits, not only for entrepreneurs themselves, but also for anyone. For instance, I have a friend that had started his business since he was in college. He got monetary asset by joining challenge. After build the education institute, he opened the opportunity to college students for being a tutors and get salary. By developing his own enterprise, he had gone umrah and had brought his special employees too. Now, he can earn much money from that course without sit several hours a day in office. He can enjoy his life while manage his business conveniently. It has proved that set up career by business will bring advantages, include happiness.

All in all, I think starting a business brings many advantages to owners and somebody else. Since become an entrepreneur means people must ready to be a boss who will get much money without someone's pressure and exactly it helps residents. However, to reduce demerits, the beginner should have a strong mental skill and a managerial ability to avoid frustration. 341w

Writing Feedback / The illustrations shows the process of generating electricity by using wind rotary motor [5]

The diagrams below show the design for a wind turbine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant!

The illustrations show the process of generating electricity by using wind rotary motor that locate in the three different places. Overall, domestic turbine uses slower wind strength than two other turbines where it is located in the sea and in the hill. The fastest wind blows, the highest energy produces.

The first wind turbine is placed in the land with some equipment on it, such as steel tower, blade fiberglass, wind sensor, generator, and computer. Firstly, wind blows over the particular part of turbine on the blades. The strength of wind blowing is medium. Afterwards, it is responded by wind sensors, in which computer is used to get information from sensor to adjust the position of blades. Wind sensor manages speed and direction of the wind. Then, wind will be generated by generator to produce 100 kilowatts of current.

The second location of other turbine is in the sea. It has the same process with the turbine that is located in the mainland. It uses the maximum wind strength. The electricity that is released by the turbine is 1.5 Megawatts. Using the complex steel tower brings benefit, which it does not disturb the scenery view. The turbine tower three is in the hill. Wind come upon to the tower and pass the same process like other towers. It uses the same level of wind strength as turbine two. Both of these turbines produce larger current than domestic turbine. 250w

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Writing Feedback / A slight increase in the recruitment of French language teachers in Ontario between 2001 and 2007 [3]

The graph below shows information about the recruitment of teachers in Ontarion between 2001 and 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the percentage of people who recruited new English teachers and new French teachers based on year graduation in Ontario from 2001 to 2007. Overall, there was a slight increase in the recruitment of French language teachers. Meanwhile, English teachers got a downward trend in generally. Recruitment of French educator is larger than English during the period.

Based on graph, the number of French language teacher that graduated in 2001 stood at 70 percent of recruiting. The percentage of the following graduation year of teacher fell to around 50. However, graduation year from 2003 to 2005 went up by around just under 60 - 70. In the following year, it declined slightly by just fewer than 70. However, it rocketed at about 80 percent later.

The recruitment of English teacher was dramatic decrease between graduation years of 2001 - 2003 by 70 - 40 percent. Then it rose from 40 to just around 50 in 2004 and 2005 of graduation years. Two years later, it dipped at approximately 20 percent.

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Writing Feedback / The mass media are fulfilled with different news about celebrities - actors, singers, footballers... [2]

The media pay too much attention to the lives and relationships of celebrities such as actors, singers, or footballers. They should spend more time reporting the lives of ordinary people instead.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The media report and show much news about people who appear in the visual screen, like actors, singers, and footballers. As a result, mass media fulfill with their news. Even, it is good or bad. I tend to agree that media also should inform about common people's life that sometimes inspire and affect the others' life.

People, news watchers, or TV audiences may do not know who has won gold medal in mathematics olympiad in overseas, if media never report it. That is why I think media should record the news about ordinary people, because they are more important as well as celebrities. Many ordinary people are inspirational persons. For instance, a girl who comes from poor family has gotten full scholarship in abroad. When media show this news to public, it will inspire many young people for struggling to get scholarship. In fact, it really has happened in my country. It has resulted that many fresh graduates are getting confident for hunting scholarship in overseas too. It can be seen that media affect the life of some people through the good news from common persons.

Even though, media also still provide the news about famous persons who always perform in TV. Because audiences will always be waiting for their idol, in which they are actors, singers, or footballers. People will not get boring when they notice their idol's news. Even it had repeated many times or had shown for a long time. For example, Raffi Ahmad and Nagita Slavina's wedding had showed for 2 days in several hours a day. Some people say that it was not important to watch and to display in TV, but the rating and share rose and hit other TV shows. Therefore, media have prove their affection how people are getting happy by just watching their favorite celebrities on TV and media will get many benefits from this case.

To sum up, media can spend more time to report celebrities' lives, but they also should provide much news about ordinary people's lives. Since, ordinary people frequently give inspiration for people's life and it can change how people stand out. Good news from ordinary people can balance the negative issue from celebrities. Media can do the way. 364w

Writing Feedback / Writing Task 1 - Three Problems When Move to Overseas [6]

The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the difficulties that people face when they move to overseas based on the group of age. Overall, in the middle age, people have more severe problems than the other ages. Pursuing education for children are the smallest problems for all age. In the last two groups of age, most people get health life as hardest.

Based on the graph, financial problems is slight increase from young people to middle people by just under 35 percent - 35 percent exactly. However, it fell to under 30% in old people.

Healthy as the most problems people get in the middle age with just under 40%. It is also difficult to old residents with just above 35 percent. However, the percentage of the young residents is 30.

Education for children is easy for old people to face with only just under 5 percent. It is also not hard for young people with just above 5%. However, in the middle age find that it is a big problem with the percentage is more than 35. 176w

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Writing Feedback / Health attitude refers to food consumption and behaviour toward healthy life [3]

Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem.
To what extend do you agree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience!

Nowadays, many children show bad behaviour to health lifestyle. In this case, I concern to explain health attitude refers to food consumption and behaviour towards healthy life, in which parents have to be responsible. Not only parents, but also school where it mentions as second home and teacher as a second parents for children.

Mother and father have to know what their children do at school, including what children eat at school. School also watches over what students eat. In this case, teachers who involve in the school area sometimes supervise their pupils' food during free time. Since, home and school are the most place children stay in their daily life. What children eat, including to their healthy lifestyle. If they eat some unhygienic food, it will disrupt their health. For example, one form of awareness, parents can supply food for their children eating at school. Parents can guarantee that food is hygiene and safe for their children. Parents can also ask teacher in the school to control their children's snack. My mother as example always notices what kinds of food their pupils eat while free time. Because when the students eat bad food, they will be getting stomachache or health problems. It will disturb their study. Teachers remind students to not to eat particular snack that they know badly for children. School also has to filter what kinds of food that appropriate to stock in the canteen. Therefore, parents and school play important roles towards students' nutrition.

Besides food, students' attitudes towards health also have to parents and teachers concern to. Since, it also affect to students' lives. School usually provides many events to instruct student good behave and then student are asked to practice it at home. For example, it is important for children to wash their hand before and after eating food. In the school, teacher can teach student how to wash their hand as well. After they know it, parents usually ask their children about what they do at school. Parents have responsibility to habituate children do what they have learnt. As a result, children will accustom to their good habits. It reflects how important school teach student and parents supervise their children.

In conclusion, children can behave based on healthy life pattern after they are taught and are given example by school. Then they are familiarized and supervised by parents. So, that is why schools and parents have important role in children lifestyle. 408w